Text edits from Thereisnospoon and troqu

locations/Palatka

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if palrand = 0:gt 'Palatka', 'pal0'
 	if palrand = 1:gt 'Palatka', 'pal1'
 
-	'To your surprise quite spacious tent has a bed here, <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>, and even made improvizorovany <a href="exec:gt ''vann'', ''start''">shower</a>.'
+	'To your surprise, the tent is a quite spacious. It has a bed, a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>, and even has an improvised <a href="exec:gt ''vann'', ''start''">shower</a>.'
 
 	act 'Leave':palMir = 0 & gt 'Military', 'start'
 
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pal0':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/military/sex/pal0.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once you begin to change as the tent includes two soldiers and see you half-naked, running up to you with the members on the edge, you hvaete for their members, but what to do to squeeze harder and get them out of the tent or relax after a hard day.'
+	'Once you begin to change clothes, you notice that there are two soldiers in the tent. They see you half-naked, walking up to you with their erect cocks. You long for their cocks, wondering if you should get them off or ignore them and relax after a hard day instead.'
 
 	act 'Send':gt 'palatka', 'start'
 
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pal1':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/military/pal1.jpg"></center>'
-	'By accessing the tent you stumble and already flying nose to the ground, but suddenly you pick up strong hands, opening her eyes you see a hefty black.'
+	'Entering the tent, you stumble, you reflexively close your eyes, as you prepare to hit the floor face first. Much to your surprise you do not land on the floor. Instead you feel powerful, strong hands catching you. Opening your eyes in surprise, you look up and see that a well-built black soldier has caught you in his arms.'
 
 	act 'Say thank you':gt 'palatka', 'start'
 

locations/larek

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ if hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 minut+=3
 gt'larek','food'
 else
-'The department is closed'
+'The grocery department is closed'
 end
 }
 
@@ -36,23 +36,23 @@ if hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 	 *clr
 	 set minut = minut + 15
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/cafe/larek.jpg" ></center>' 
-	 portion = input ("How many servings you want to buy?")
+	 portion = input ("How many servings would you like to buy?")
 		 if portion<=0:portion=1
 		 if portion*50 > money:
-		 'You do not have enough money.'
+		 'You don''t have enough money.'
 		 end
 		 if portion*50 <= money:
 		 set eda = eda + portion
 		 set money = money - portion*50
 		
-		 'You bought food and paid the money in cash.'
+		 'You paid cash for the food.'
 		 end
 	 act 'Move away from the counter':gt'larek','food'
 	 else
-	 'You do not have enough money'
+	 'You don''t have enough money'
 	 end
 else
-'The department is closed'
+'The grocery department is closed'
 end
 }
 $buyfood2={
@@ -61,30 +61,30 @@ if hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 	 cla
 	 *clr
 	 set minut = minut + 15
-	 portion = input ("How many servings you want to buy?")
+	 portion = input ("How many servings would you like to buy?")
 		 if portion<=0:portion=1
 		 if portion*250 > money:
-		 'You do not have enough money.'
+		 'You don''t have enough money.'
 		 end
 		 if portion*250 <= money:
 		 set edaD = edaD + portion
 		 set money = money - portion*250
 		 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/cafe/larek.jpg" ></center>'
-		 'You bought food and paid the money in cash.'
+		 'You paid cash for the food.'
 		 end
 	 act 'Move away from the counter':gt'larek','food'
 	 else
-	 'You do not have enough money'
+	 'You don''t have enough money'
 	 end
 else
-'The department is closed'
+'The grocery department is closed'
 end
 }
 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 '<center><B><font color=maroon>Grocery department</font></B></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/cafe/larek.jpg" ></center>'
 '<a href="exec: dynamic $buyfood ">One serving food - 50 RUB</a>
-<a href="exec: dynamic $buyfood2 ">One serving of dietary food - 250 RUB</a>'
+<a href="exec: dynamic $buyfood2 ">One serving of diet friendly food - 250 RUB</a>'
 clr
 gs'stat'
 if night_mode = 1:
@@ -101,38 +101,38 @@ end
 act 'Exit Department':gt'larek','start'
 
      if money>=300:
-         act 'Buy tea biscuits (300 r)':
+         act 'Buy tea biscuits (300 RUB)':
          cls
          money-=300
          pranik+=10
-         'You bought a bag of cookies that will last you ten times.'
+         'You bought a bag of cookies that go well with tea. You figure there''s about ten servings inside.'
          act 'Exit Department':gt'larek','food'
          end
      end
      if money>=50 and bottle=0 and bag>0:
-         act 'Buy a bottle of water (50 r)':
+         act 'Buy a bottle of water (50 RUB)':
          cls
          money-=50
          bottle=1
-         'You bought a bottle of water and put it in her purse.'
+         'You bought a bottle of water and put it in your purse.'
          act 'Exit Department':gt'larek','food'
          end
      end
      if money>=100 and buterbrod=0 and bag>0:
-         act 'Buy a sandwich (100 r)':
+         act 'Buy a sandwich (100 RUB)':
          cls
          money-=100
          buterbrod=1
-         'You bought a sandwich and put it in her purse.'
+         'You bought a sandwich and put it in your purse.'
          act 'Exit Department':gt'larek','food'
          end
      end
      if money>=500 and wine=0 and bag>0:
-         act 'Buy a bottle of wine (500 r)':
+         act 'Buy a bottle of cheap wine (500 RUB)':
          cls
          money-=500
          wine=1
-         'You bought a bottle of wine and put it in her purse.'
+         'You bought a bottle of wine and put it in your purse.'
          act 'Exit Department':gt'larek','food'
          end
      end

locations/vipclub

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b>Vip-room</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/vipclub.jpg"></center>'
-	'The VIP area is divided into several separate rooms, with no doors. Passing by can see such scenes that would make even a porn director blush.'
+	'The VIP area is divided into several rooms without doors. As you pass by some, you see scenes so depraved that even a porn director would blush at the sight.'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'club', 'inside'
 
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			frost = 0
 			pcs_horny += rand(10, 20)
 			*nl
-			'You enjoy a lovely cocktail, for some reason you also feel like it''s gotten hotter in here.'
+			'You enjoy a tasty cocktail, for some reason you also feel like it''s gotten hot in here.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'vipclub', 'start'
 		end
 
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		end
 
 		if money >= 5000:
-			act 'Order a demonstration (5,000 <b>₽</b>)':
+			act 'Order one of each (5,000 <b>₽</b>)':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				girl += 1
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				dynamic $venerasiakOral
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You booked an idea and a couple of minutes you went into the room boy and a girl. Man undid his pants and sat on the couch, she began to make him a blowjob. You intiresom watched the scene.'
+				'You have a wonderful idea and a couple of minutes later find yourself in a room with two staff members, one man and one woman. You have them start on the couch, with the man stting while she knelt beside of him and gave him a blowjob. You raptly watched the two professional lovers, getting more and more excited by the display.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip2.jpg"></center>'
-					'The guy puts her cancer and fucks her vagina, you push the legs and hips push up to her face, realizing your desire girl lowered her head to your pussy and lick you nachila.'
+					'The guy turns the woman around and begins fucking her from behind. Deciding you''ve waited long enough you undress and slide your wet pussy in front of her face. She understands your unspoken commands, and immediately begins licking you in all the right places.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'dom'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip3.jpg"></center>'
-						'Then she takes a double dildo and inserting one end into your vagina, the second takes into his mouth and sucks it at the same time fucking you.'
+						'She pulls out a double-sided dildo and inserts it into your greedy hole. Then she begins sucking on it, and you are surprised by how good she is at pleasuring you this way.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'dom'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -83,7 +83,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							*clr
 							pcs_horny = 0
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip4.jpg"></center>'
-							'Then she turns around and puts it in her pussy, you begin to move actively trying to take the dildo as deep as possible and rub against her pussy, she sucks at this time with a guy. Soon you covers the wave of orgasm.'
+							'Then she turns around and puts it in her pussy, you both begin grinding in an attempt to get the most pleasure possible. At the same time, she goes back to giving a blowjbo to the man you hired. You have an explosive orgasm and can''t wait to see what these two will do next for you.'
 
 							$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'dom'
@@ -93,13 +93,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip5.jpg"></center>'
-								'When you end the guy turns her to him and lifted her ass in the upper part of her anus. You watch as she moans when healthy dildo fucks her in the ass.'
+								'The man, feeling a bit left out at this point, turns her around again. This time however, he seems to think her ass is as lonely as he felt, and begins to fuck her there. He was apparently right, because she''s moaning louder than she had before.'
 
 								act 'Further':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip6.jpg"></center>'
-									'When a guy sated her ass, he put her on the sofa and began to finish top standing. You tongue hanging out, watching the sperm off his cock filling her mouth and chest.'
+									'Soon enough you see her convulsing slightly in orgasmic bliss, and the man grunts to let her know he''s cumming as well. You lick the drool off the side of your lips as you watch him cum all over her chest and into her mouth.'
 
 									act 'Finish':gt 'vipclub', 'start'
 
@@ -109,7 +109,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 										spafinloc = 12
 										gs 'cum_manage'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip7.jpg"></center>'
-										'You began to lick the droplets of cum from her chest, trying not to miss an inch of her body.'
+										'You lick the delicious droplets of cum from her chest and face, trying not to miss any of the tasty treat.'
 										
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'