[textedit]Edited and proofed

locations/agentned.qsrc

@@ -17,18 +17,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Kirsanova Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'The head office of the largest real estate agency in the area.'
+	'This is the head office of the largest real estate agency in the Leningrad Oblast.'
 	*nl
-	'At the reception you notice a banner, which is written in large print:'
-	'"Please note, that all transactions of purchases and sales are made exclusively through your bank account. Rent payments excluded."'
+	'At the reception you notice a large print banner,'
+	'"Please be aware that all sales transactions are made exclusively through your bank account. Rent payments excluded from this policy."'
 
 	if home_owned[1] = 1 and ArendHouseSL > 0:
 		*nl
-		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL>> days</B> rental on your St. Petersburg apartment remaining. '+iif(money >= home_rent[1],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[1] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to pay rent at the moment')+''
+		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL>> days</B> rental on your St. Petersburg apartment remaining. '+iif(money >= home_rent[1],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[1] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to pay your rent at the moment')+''
 	end
 	if home_owned[4] > 0 and ArendHouseSL4 > 0:
 		*nl
-		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL4>> days</B> rental on your Pushkin apartment. '+iif(money >= home_rent[4],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[4] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL4 += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to pay rent at the moment')+''
+		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL4>> days</B> rental on your Pushkin apartment. '+iif(money >= home_rent[4],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[4] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL4 += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to your pay rent at the moment')+''
 	end
 
 	if home_owned[1] = 2 or home_owned[3] > 0 or home_owned[5] = 1:
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		'You own the following property:'
 		*nl
 		if home_owned[1] = 2: 'An apartment in St. Petersburg residential area'
-		if home_owned[1] = 3: 'An apartment in St. Petersburg residential area, that is currently occupied by your tenants'
+		if home_owned[1] = 3: 'An apartment in St. Petersburg residential area which is currently occupied by your tenants'
 		if home_owned[3] > 0: 'An cottage located in the cooperative village'
 		if home_owned[5] = 1: 'A plot of land in the St. Petersburg suburbs'
 		*nl
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if home_owned[1] = 1:
 			act 'Cancel the lease of the city apartment':
 				cla & *nl
-				'Warning: You won''t be able to return to your apartment, when you cancel the lease.'
+				'Attention: You won''t be able to return to your apartment when you cancel the lease.'
 				
 				act 'Return': gt'agentned', 'start'
 				act 'Cancel it': home_owned[1] = 0 & gs 'set_home', 4 & gt'agentned', 'start'
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		end
 		act 'Cancel the lease of the apartment in Pushkin':
 			cla & *nl
-			'Warning: You won''t be able to return to your apartment, when you cancel the lease.'
+			'Attention: You won''t be able to return to your apartment when you cancel the lease.'
 			
 			act 'Return': gt'agentned', 'start'
 			act 'Cancel it': home_owned[4] = 0 & gs 'set_home', 1 & gt'agentned', 'start'		
@@ -96,15 +96,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy':
 		end
 
 		if home_owned[3] = 0:
-			'There is a holiday cottage with an adjacent allotment in the village, for <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'There is a holiday cottage with an adjacent allotment in the village for <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			*nl
 			if karta + bankDebtLimit >= home_value[3]:act 'Buy the cottage in the village': gt 'agentned','buy_dacha'
 		end
 
 		if home_owned[5] = 0:
-			'There is a plot in the suburbs with planning permission for a mansion for <<$home_value_txt[5]>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'There is a plot of land in the suburbs with planning permission for a mansion for <<$home_value_txt[5]>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			*nl
-			if karta + bankDebtLimit >= home_value[5]:act 'Buy the plot in the suburbs': gt 'agentned','buy_Mansion'
+			if karta + bankDebtLimit >= home_value[5]:act 'Buy the land plot in the suburbs': gt 'agentned','buy_Mansion'
 		end
 	else
 		'We currently have no properties listed for sale.'
@@ -136,7 +136,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sell':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 30
-			'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the sale of your renovated apartment, with a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value1/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
+			'You spend thirty minutes filling out the paperwork for the sale of your renovated apartment. You will suffer a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value1/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
 			home_owned[1] = 0
 			ArendHouseSL = 0
 			if bankaccount = 1:
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sell':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 30
-			'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the sale of your apartment, with a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value1/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
+			'You spend thirty minutes filling out the paperwork for the sale of your apartment. You will suffer a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value1/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
 			home_owned[1] = 0
 			ArendHouseSL = 0
 			if bankaccount = 1:
@@ -180,7 +180,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sell':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 30
-			'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the sale of your small cottage, with a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value3/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
+			'You spend thirty minutes filling out the paperwork for the sale of your small cottage. You will suffer a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value3/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
 			home_owned[3] = 0
 			if bankaccount = 1:
 				karta += home_value3/100*95
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sell':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 30
-			'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the sale of the renovated cottage, with a loss of 1around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value3/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
+			'You spend thirty minutes filling out the paperwork for the sale of your small cottage. You will suffer a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value3/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
 			home_owned[3] = 0
 			if bankaccount = 1:
 				karta += home_value3/100*95
@@ -222,7 +222,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sell':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 30
-			'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the vacant plot, with a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value5/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
+			'You spend thirty minutes filling out the paperwork for the vacant plot. You will suffer a loss of around 5% for fees and taxes. <<home_value5/100*95>> <b>₽</b> has been paid into your bank account.'
 			home_owned[5] = 0
 			if bankaccount = 1:
 				karta += home_value5/100*95
@@ -263,12 +263,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent':
 	act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 	
 	if home_owned[1] > 0 and home_owned[4] > 0:
-		'We currently have no properties for rent.'
+		'We currently have no properties listed for rent.'
 	elseif home_owned[1] = 0 and home_owned[4] = 0:
 		*nl
 		'There are two properties available for rent.'
 		*nl
-		'There is an apartment in the city residential area, and an apartment in Pushkin available'
+		'There are two apartments for available to rent. They are located in the city residential area and in Pushkin.'
 		act 'View the city apartment details': gt 'agentned', 'rent_cityres'
 		act 'View the Pushkin apartment details': gt 'agentned', 'rent_pushkin'
 	elseif home_owned[1] = 0:
@@ -287,8 +287,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_cityres':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"We have a flat available right now in the residential area of St. Petersburg." The receptionist says as he starts pulling out the paperwork. "Rent is <<$home_rent_txt[1]>> ₽ and leases have to be renewed every 30 days, which can be taken automatically from your account or you can come in and pay directly. Last but not least, you have to make your first payment up front at signing."'
-	'<br>He pulls out a pen and slides the paperwork onto the counter. "Interested? We can get you moved in right away."'
+	'"We have a flat available right now in the St. Petersburg's residential area." The receptionist says as he starts pulling out the paperwork, "Rent is <<$home_rent_txt[1]>> ₽ and leases have to be renewed every 30 days. Payment will be automatically deducted from your account or you can come into the office to pay. When you sign for the lease you must make your first month's rental payment upfront."'
+	'<br>He pulls out a pen and slides the paperwork onto the counter. "Interested? You can move in right away," he calmly says.'
 
 	if money >= home_rent[1] or karta >= home_rent[1]:
 		act 'Agree and pay':
@@ -304,7 +304,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_cityres':
 			if ARRSIZE('home_owned') = 0:
 				gs 'set_home', 1
 			else
-				$set_homeyn = input("Whould you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
+				$set_homeyn = input("Would you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
 				if $set_homeyn = 'yes': gs 'set_home', 1
 				killvar '$set_homeyn'
 			end
@@ -313,13 +313,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_cityres':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You take the pen and start filling out the paperwork. Half an hour later, you’re handing over the money and getting the keys to your new apartment.'
+			'You take the pen then start filling out the paperwork. After writing for half an hour, you hand over the money and receive the keys to your new apartment.'
 
 			act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 		end
 	else
 		*nl
-		'You do not have enough money with you or in your bank account to rent this.'
+		'You do not have enough money with you or in your bank account to pay the rent.'
 	end
 	
 	act 'Decline':
@@ -329,7 +329,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_cityres':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
 		'You shake your head, "Actually, I need more time to think about this."'
-		'<br>The receptionist seems a bit miffed, but says nothing as he grabs the paperwork and stuffs it back in a drawer.'
+		'<br>The receptionist seems a bit miffed, but says nothing as he takes back the paperwork and stuffs it back into his desk drawer.'
 
 		act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 	end
@@ -342,8 +342,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_pushkin':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"We have a small apartment available right now in Pushkin’s city center. It’s a little bit pricey, but it’s been recently renovated to be more modern, and it looks quite nice. You won’t find a place like that outside of Pushkin." The receptionist says as he starts pulling out the paperwork. "Rent is <<$home_rent_txt[4]>> ₽ and leases have to be renewed every 30 days, which can be taken automatically from your account or you can come in and pay directly. Last but not least, you have to make your first payment up front at signing."'
-	'<br>He pulls out a pen and slides the paperwork onto the counter. "Interested? We can get you moved in right away."'
+	'"We have a small apartment available right now that is in Pushkin’s city center. It’s a little bit pricey, but it’s been recently renovated to be more modern. It looks quite nice, so you won’t find a place like that outside of Pushkin." The receptionist says as he starts pulling out the paperwork. "Rent is <<$home_rent_txt[4]>> ₽ and leases have to be renewed every 30 days, which can be taken automatically from your account or you can come in and pay directly. Last, but not least, you have to make your first payment up front at signing."'
+	'<br>He pulls out a pen and slides the paperwork onto the counter. "Interested? You can move in right away," he calmly says.'
 	
 	if money >= home_rent[4] or karta >= home_rent[4]:
 		act 'Agree and pay':
@@ -358,7 +358,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_pushkin':
 			if ARRSIZE('home_owned') = 0:
 				gs 'set_home', 4
 			else
-				$set_homeyn = input("Whould you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
+				$set_homeyn = input("Would you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
 				if $set_homeyn = 'yes': gs 'set_home', 4
 				killvar '$set_homeyn'
 			end
@@ -367,7 +367,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_pushkin':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You take the pen and start filling out the paperwork. An hour later, you’re handing over the money and getting the keys to your new apartment.'
+			'You take the pen and start filling out the paperwork. After writting for an hour, you hand over the money and receive the keys to your new apartment.'
 
 			act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 		end
@@ -384,7 +384,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_pushkin':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
 		'You shake your head, "Actually, I need more time to think about this."'
-		'<br>The receptionist seems a bit miffed, but says nothing as he grabs the paperwork and stuffs it back in a drawer.'
+		'<br>The receptionist seems a bit miffed, but says nothing as he takes back the paperwork and stuffs it back into his desk drawer.'
 
 		act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 	end
@@ -400,7 +400,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_cityres':
 	if ARRSIZE('home_owned') = 0:
 		gs 'set_home', 1
 	else
-		$set_homeyn = input("Whould you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
+		$set_homeyn = input("Would you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
 		if $set_homeyn = 'yes': gs 'set_home', 1
 		killvar '$set_homeyn'
 	end
@@ -408,7 +408,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_cityres':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork to buy an apartment in the residential area. <<$home_value_txt[1]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
+	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork to buy the apartment in the residential area. <<$home_value_txt[1]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
 
 	act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 end
@@ -423,7 +423,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_dacha':
 	if ARRSIZE('home_owned') = 0:
 		gs 'set_home', 3
 	else
-		$set_homeyn = input("Whould you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
+		$set_homeyn = input("Would you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
 		if $set_homeyn = 'yes': gs 'set_home', 3
 		killvar '$set_homeyn'
 	end
@@ -432,7 +432,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_dacha':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a cottage with a garden on the co-op 5km up the north road. <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
+	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a cottage with a garden in the co-op. It's located 5km away from St. Petersburg. <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
 
 	act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 end
@@ -447,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_Mansion':
 	if ARRSIZE('home_owned') = 0:
 		gs 'set_home', 5
 	else
-		$set_homeyn = input("Whould you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
+		$set_homeyn = input("Would you like to set this as your new home? (yes/no)")
 		if $set_homeyn = 'yes': gs 'set_home', 5
 		killvar '$set_homeyn'
 	end