Fixes and proofreading for jock disco file

locations/pav_disco_jocks.qsrc

@@ -7,43 +7,43 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar':
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A149', 'like'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big149.jpg"></center>'
 	if rand(1,4) = 1:
-		'Lazar is out on the dance floor dancing with a small group of people, a couple of the girls seem to be competing for his attention.'
+		'Lazar is out on the dance floor dancing with a small group of people. The girls in the group are all competing for his attention.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		act 'Go out on the dance floor':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/school_kids/lazar_dance2.jpg"></center>'
 			if npc_rel['A149'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
-				'As you move out onto the dance floor with him, just as you get close to him he says. "Come to have a little fun huh?"'
+				'You move out onto the dance floor and he smiles as you approach. "Come to have a little fun, huh?"'
 				'You nod your head and join the group dancing.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'lazar_dance'
 			elseif grupTipe = 5:
-				'As you get close he laughs. "Get lost loser." Then he turns his back on you.'
+				'He laughs as you get close. "Get lost loser." he scoffs before turning his back on you.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif npc_rel['A149'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
-				'As you approach him he gives you a dirty look. "Go dance somewhere else." With the look he is giving you, you decided not to press it and leave.'
+				'He gives you a dirty look as you approach. "Go dance somewhere else." With the look he is giving you, you decide not to press it and leave.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
-				'As you approach him he laughs. "The sluts in the house!" He says very loudly drawing the attention of several other dancers. Feeling a little uncomfortable with some of the looks you are getting now you decided to move away.'
+				'He laughs as you approach. "Look everyone, the slut is in the house!" he says very loudly, drawing the attention of several other dancers. Feeling a little uncomfortable with some of the looks you''re getting, you decide to move away.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			else 
-				'As you move out onto the dance floor with him, just as you get close to him he gives you a chin up greeting but keeps dancing with those he was already dancing with. Not having anyone to dance with you decide to do something else.'
+				'He gives you a chin up greeting as you approach, but keeps dancing with the small group he''s with. Not having anyone to dance with, you decide to do something else.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		end
 	else
-		'You see Lazar hanging out with the cool kids and jocks, he is the center of attention of a small group of them, most of them girls who seem to be fawning over him.'
+		'You see Lazar hanging out with the cool kids and jocks. He is the center of attention of a small group of mostly girls who seem to be fawning over him.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hangout with him':
+		act 'Hang out with him':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big149.jpg"></center>'
 			if npc_rel['A149'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
-				'As you approach Lazar he smiles to you. "Hey wants up Lazar?" You ask him when close enough.'
-				'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that comes with hard work. You?"'
-				'You shrug a little. "You know just out to have a little fun." Soon the two of you start talking, before long though the conversation turns towards sports.'
+				'Lazar smiles as you approach. "Hey Lazar, what''s up?"'
+				'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that come with hard work. You?"'
+				'You shrug a little. "You know, just out to have a little fun." The two of you start talking and the conversation soon turns towards sports.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Ask him to dance':
 					*clr & cla
@@ -51,47 +51,47 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big149.jpg"></center>'
 					if hotcat >= 6:
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
-						'He grins at that. "Sure why not."'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'He grins. "Sure why not."'
 						'Lazar leads you out onto the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lazar_dance'
 					else
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
 						'He shakes his head. "No thanks."'
-						'You get the feeling he doesn''t want to dance with you but doesn''t want to be rude. "Sure." You tell him, and then decided to do something else.'
+						'You get the feeling he doesn''t want to dance with you, but doesn''t want to be rude, so you decide to do something else.'
 						act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 					end
 				end
 			elseif grupTipe = 5:
-				'As you approach him he says. "Why don''t you stick to your own kind, no one wants you here."'
-				'You notice several of the other jocks giving you unkind looks, so you figure it is best to go.'
+				'Lazar gives you a dirty look as you approach. "Why don''t you stick to your own kind? No one wants you here."'
+				'You notice several of the other jocks giving you unkind looks, so you decide to just leave.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif npc_rel['A149'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
 				if grupTipe = 2:
-					'As you approach him he says. "Well well, if it isn''t <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Lazar is standing with his arms crossed.'
+					'"Well well, if it isn''t <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Lazar quips as he stands with his arms crossed.'
 					'You sigh. "What now Lazar? I don''t have time for your games today..."'
 					'He huffs. "Somebody has been talking shit behind my back to some girls, but I haven''t figured out who it is yet. I wanted you to know that I''m keeping my eyes on you <<$pcs_nickname>>, you see like the type to make up shit and lie."'
-					'"It''s not me, I swear." you say as you roll your eyes. You spend a little bit of time trying to convince him it''s not him, but he obviously doesn''t like you so your words fall on deaf ears.'
+					'"It''s not me, I swear." you say as you roll your eyes. You spend time trying to convince him it''s not you, but he obviously doesn''t like you so your words fall on deaf ears.'
 				else
-					'As you approach him he says. "Are you the one that''s been going around and telling the other girls that I''m no good for them?!" Lazar angrily asks you.'
+					'"Are you the one that''s been going around and telling the other girls that I''m no good for them?!" Lazar angrily asks as you approach.'
 					'"No... Like I give a shit about you! You''re not the center of the world, Lazar!" you yell back.'
 					'"Good. Keep it that way or else we might have a problem..." he says as he pushes you.'
 				end
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
-				'As you approach him he says. "You here to suck me off, slut?" Lazar snickers.'
+				'"You here to suck me off, slut?" he snickers as you approach.'
 				'"What did you say?" you angrily reply.'
-				'"Come on, everyone knows that you''re the school''s biggest slut! What''s another dick to you?" he winks. You try to defend your reputation but it is no good, he obviously thinks of you only as a slut now.'
+				'"Come on, everyone knows that you''re the school''s biggest slut! What''s another dick to you?" he winks. You try to defend your reputation but it''s no good. He obviously thinks of you as nothing but a slut now.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			else 
 				if grupTipe = 2:
-					'As you approach Lazar he smiles to you. "Hey wants up Lazar?" You ask him when close enough.'
-					'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that comes with hard work. You?"'
-					'You shrug a little. "You know just out to have a little fun." Soon the two of you start talking, before long though the conversation turns towards sports.'
+					'Lazar smiles as you approach. "Hey Lazar, what''s up?"'
+					'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that come with hard work. You?"'
+					'You shrug a little. "You know, just out to have a little fun." The two of you start talking and the conversation soon turns towards sports.'
 				else
-					'As you approach Lazar nods slightly to you. "Hey wants up Lazar?" You ask him when close enough.'
-					'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that comes with hard work."'
-					'You shrug a little. "You know just out to have a little fun." Soon the two of you start talking, before long though the conversation turns towards sports.'
+					'Lazar nods at you as you approach. "Hey Lazar, what''s up?"'
+					'He spreads his arms wide. "Just taking it all in and basking in the good times that come with hard work."'
+					'You shrug a little. "You know, just out to have a little fun." The two of you start talking and the conversation soon turns towards sports.'
 				end
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Ask him to dance':
@@ -100,14 +100,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big149.jpg"></center>'
 					if hotcat >= 6:
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
-						'He grins at that. "Sure why not."'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'He grins. "Sure why not."'
 						'Lazar leads you out onto the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lazar_dance'
 					else
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
 						'He shakes his head. "No thanks."'
-						'You get the feeling he doesn''t want to dance with you but doesn''t want to be rude. "Sure." You tell him, and then decided to do something else.'
+						'You get the feeling he doesn''t want to dance with you, but doesn''t want to be rude, so you decide to do something else.'
 						act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 					end
 				end
@@ -121,9 +121,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar_dance':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/school_kids/lazar_dance1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Lazar and you start dancing, he is a very good dancer for a boy. Likely due to his natural athletic talents and well toned body. He seems to be enjoying dancing with you as much as you like dancing with him. Several songs go by as the two of you keep dancing, he seems to have endless endurance.'
+	'You and Lazar start dancing together. He''s a very good dancer for a boy, likely due to his natural athletic talents and well toned body. He seems to be enjoying dancing with you as much as you like dancing with him. Several songs go by as the two of you keep dancing - he seems to have endless endurance.'
 	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-	act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'igor_dance'
+	act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'lazar_dance'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
@@ -131,54 +131,54 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A3', 'like'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
-	'To your surprise you see Ivan hanging out with the other jocks, he is talking to a few of them and smiling. You almost never see him here.'
+	'To your surprise, you see Ivan hanging out with the other jocks, talking to a few of them and smiling. You almost never see him here.'
 	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-	act 'Hangout with him':
+	act 'Hang out with him':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 15
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
 		if fame['pav_slut'] >= 250 or grupTipe = 5:
-			'As you approach him you ask. "So hold up Ivan. I need to talk to you..."'
+			'"Hold up Ivan! I need to talk to you." you call out as you approach him.'
 			'Ivan stops and gives you a confused look. "Why are you talking to me? I don''t really have anything to say to you."'
-			'"Come on, don''t be like that... I thought we could just talk some." You give him a smile.'
-			'Ivan looks apathetically at you without any response, making the whole situation a bit awkward and after what feels like an eternity, he just walks off.'
+			'"Come on, don''t be like that. I thought we could just talk." you say with a smile.'
+			'Ivan looks at you apathetically without any response, making the whole situation a bit awkward. After what feels like an eternity, he just walks off.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		elseif npc_rel['A3'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
-			'As you approach him you ask. "So whats up Ivan, having fun?"'
-			'He smiles to you. "It''s ok, but I can''t stay to long." Then he checks his watch.'
-			'"Need to be somewhere?" You ask him.'
-			'He nods. "Yeah need to get going soon, to help my mom." You get into a conversation about what he is up to and he tells you he has to go home soon and help his mom with his little brother and sister, plus help with some of the work around the house. You find out his mom works two jobs and most days he has to take care of his little brother and sister when he is not training.'
+			'"What''s up Ivan, having fun?" you ask as you approach.'
+			'He smiles at you. "It''s okay, but I can''t stay too long." he replies as he checks his watch.'
+			'"Need to be somewhere?" you inquire.'
+			'He nods. "Yeah, I need to get going soon. I need to help my mom." You have a short conversation before he tells you he has to go home and help around the house. You learn that his mother works two jobs and so he has to take care of his little brother and sister when he isn''t training.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Ask him to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Hey Ivan, want to dance?" You ask him.'
-				'He pauses a moment as if thinking about it then shakes his head. "Maybe some other time."'
-				'You nod slightly. "Sure some other time." Then he starts talking to some of the other jocks.'
+				'"Hey Ivan, want to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+				'He pauses and thinks about it before shaking his head. "Maybe another time."'
+				'You nod as he turns and starts talking with the other jocks. "Sure, some other time..." you mumble before walking away.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A3'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
 			if grupTipe = 2:
-				'As you approach him you ask. "Are you looking towards your next fight, Ivan?"'
-				'Shrugging his shoulders, he replies "I guess. I don''t really know who they will have me fight..." He isn''t very talkative but you manage to get him to talk a little about his past fights.'
+				'"Are you looking towards your next fight, Ivan?" you ask as you approach.'
+				'He casually shrugs his shoulders before replying. "I guess. I don''t really know who they''ll have me fight..." He isn''t very talkative, but you manage to get him to talk a little about his past fights.'
 			else
-				'As you approach him you curiously ask."Hi Ivan! How''s everything going?"'
+				'"Hey Ivan! How''s everything going?" you ask curiously while approaching him.'
 				'Ivan looks at you and shrugs his shoulders before walking off.'
 			end
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		else 
-			'As you approach him you ask. "So whats up Ivan, having fun?"'
-			'Shrugs a little and checks his watch. "It''s ok, but I can''t stay to long." You get into a conversation about what he is up to and he tells you he has to go home soon and help his mom with his little brother and sister, plus help with some of the work around the house. You find out his mom works two jobs and most days he has to take care of his little brother and sister when he is not training.'
+			'"What''s up Ivan, having fun?" you ask while approaching.'
+			'Ivan just shrugs and checks his watch. "It''s okay, but I can''t stay too long." You have a short conversation before he tells you he has to go home and help around the house. You learn that his mother works two jobs and so he has to take care of his little brother and sister when he isn''t training.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Ask him to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Hey Ivan, want to dance?" You ask him.'
-				'He pauses a moment as if thinking about it then shakes his head. "Maybe some other time."'
-				'You nod slightly. "Sure some other time." Then he starts talking to some of the other jocks.'
+				'"Hey Ivan, want to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+				'He pauses and thinks about it before shaking his head. "Maybe another time."'
+				'You nod as he turns and starts talking with the other jocks. "Sure, some other time..." you mumble before walking away.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		end
@@ -203,69 +203,69 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'svyatoslav':
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A8', 'like'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big8.jpg"></center>'
 	if rand(1,4) = 1:
-		'You see Svyatoslav out of the dance floor trying to dance with the prettiest girls, sometimes he is successful and sometimes not, but he seems to be enjoying himself.'
+		'You see Svyatoslav out on the dance floor flirting and trying to dance with the prettier girls. He has mixed results, but seems to be enjoying himself regardless.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		act 'Go out on the dance floor':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/svyatoslav_dance1.jpg"></center>'
 			if npc_rel['A8'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
-				'You move out onto the dance floor, as you get close he gives you a smile and starts dancing with you.'
+				'You move out onto the dance floor and he gives you a smile as you approach before you start dancing with each other.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Dance with him': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'svyatoslav_dance'
 			elseif grupTipe = 5:
-				'As you approach him he gives you a disgusted look. "Find somewhere else to dance." Not wanting to make a scene you move off.'
+				'He gives you a disgusted look as you approach. "Find somewhere else to dance." Not wanting to cause a scene, you back off.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif npc_rel['A8'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
-				'As you approach him he gives you a pissed off look. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to make a scene you move off.'
+				'He gives you a pissed off look as you approach. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to cause a scene, you back off.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
-				'As you approach him he says. "So when am I going to get the complementary blowjob?"'
+				'"So when am I going to get the complementary blowjob?" he teases as you approach.'
 				'"Never..." you sourly reply.'
-				'"Come on, don''t play hard to get. I know you loving sucking cock, you little slut." he starts approaching you. You decide it is best to get away while you can.'
+				'"Come on, don''t play hard to get. I know you loving sucking cock, you little slut." He starts approaching, so you decide to flee while you can.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			else 
-				'You move out onto the dance floor, as you get close he gives you a slight nod in acknowledgment, but keeps trying to dance with some of the pretty girls on the dance floor..'
+				'He gives you a slight nod in acknowledgment as you approach, but otherwise ignores you while continuing to try and dance with the pretty girls.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		end
 	else
 		'You see Svyatoslav hanging out with the cool kids and jocks, flirting with the girls and seemingly enjoying himself.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hangout with him':
+		act 'Hang out with him':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big8.jpg"></center>'
 			if grupTipe = 5:
-				'As you approach him he gives you a pissed off look. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to make a scene you move off.'
+				'He gives you a pissed off look as you approach. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to cause a scene, you back off.'
 			elseif npc_rel['A8'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
-				'As you approach him you say. "Hey whats up Svyatoslav?"'
-				'He smiles to you. "Oh you know same old same old." Soon the two of you start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
+				'"Hey, what''s up Svyatoslav?" you ask as you approach.'
+				'He smiles at you. "Oh you know, same old same old." You start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif npc_rel['A8'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
 				if grupTipe = 2:
-					'As you approach him you say. "Hey whats up Svyatoslav?"'
-					'He smiles to you. "Oh you know same old same old." Soon the two of you start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
+					'"Hey, what''s up Svyatoslav?" you ask as you approach.'
+					'He smiles at you. "Oh you know, same old same old." You start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
 				else
-					'As you approach him he gives you a pissed off look. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to make a scene you move off.'
+					'He gives you a pissed off look as you approach. "I want nothing to do with you, so get lost." Not wanting to cause a scene, you back off.'
 				end
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
-				'As you approach him he says. "So when am I going to get the complementary blowjob?" Svyatoslav asks.'
+				'"So when am I going to get the complementary blowjob?" he teases as you approach.'
 				'"Never..." you sourly reply.'
-				'"Come on, don''t play hard to get. I know you loving sucking cock, you little slut." he starts approaching you.'
-				'You shake your head. "I said no."'
-				'He smiles to you. "Come on we can slip into the restroom and you can suck me off, you do it at school all the time."'
-				'Knowing this won''t get any better you turn and leave before it gets worse.'
+				'"Come on, don''t play hard to get. I know you loving sucking cock, you little slut." he says and starts approaching you.'
+				'You shake your head and back away. "I said no!"'
+				'He smiles at you. "Come on, we can slip into the restroom and you can suck me off. You do it at school all the time."'
+				'Knowing this won''t get any better, you turn and leave before it gets worse.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			else 
 				if grupTipe = 2:
-					'As you approach him you say. "Hey whats up Svyatoslav?"'
-					'He smiles to you. "Oh you know same old same old." Soon the two of you start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
+					'"Hey, what''s up Svyatoslav?" you ask as you approach.'
+					'He smiles at you. "Oh you know, same old same old." You start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
 				else
-					'As you approach him you say. "Hey whats up Svyatoslav?"'
-					'He slightly smiles to you. "Just hanging out and relaxing." Soon the two of you start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
+					'"Hey, what''s up Svyatoslav?" you ask as you approach.'
+					'He smiles at you. "Just hanging out and relaxing." You start talking about a variety of things, though mostly about how close he comes to beating Ivan or Lazar in different sports or some of the pretty girls in school.'
 				end
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Ask him to dance':
@@ -274,15 +274,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'svyatoslav':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big8.jpg"></center>'
 					if hotcat >= 5:
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
-						'He shurgs a bit at that. "Sure why not."'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'He shurgs slightly. "Sure why not."'
 						'Svyatoslav leads you out onto the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'svyatoslav_dance'
 					else
-						'You ask him. "Would you like to dance?"'
-						'He laughs a little. "With you? Hell no."'
-						'You are taken a bit aback. "Why not me?"'
-						'He shakes his head. "Look in the mirror sometimes, it should be obvious." Then he starts ignoring you and talking to some of the other jocks nearby. Feeling fairly insulted you move off.'
+						'"Would you like to dance?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'He laughs. "With you? Hell no."'
+						'You are taken back a bit. "Why not me?"'
+						'He shakes his head and scoffs. "Look in the mirror, it should be obvious." Before you can react, he turns and starts talking to some of the other jocks nearby. You walk away feeling rather insulted.'
 						act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 					end
 				end
@@ -296,9 +296,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'svyatoslav_dance':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/svyatoslav_dance2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Svyatoslav and you start dancing, he is a decent dancer. He lacks the rhythm of some of the other boys, but what he lacks in skill he makes up for in enthusiasm. The two of you dance away not seeming to care what others think.'
+	'You and Svyatoslav start dancing. He''s a decent dancer who lacks the rhythm of some of the other boys, but makes up for in enthusiasm. The two of you dance away, not caring what the others think.'
 	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-	act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'igor_dance'
+	act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'svyatoslav_dance'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'vanya':
@@ -316,55 +316,55 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'erast':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A150', 'like'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big150.jpg"></center>'
-	'You see Erast hanging out with the cool kids and jocks, you are a bit surprised as you rarely see him here. He is standing near one of the tables with his arms crossed, you don''t think he is enjoying himself, but he gives polite smiles to people that talk to him.'
+	'You''re a little surprised to see Erast hanging out with the cool kids and jocks, standing near one of the tables with his arms crossed. You rarely see him here and you don''t think he''s enjoying himself, but he gives polite smiles to people that talk to him.'
 	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-	act 'Hangout with him':
+	act 'Hang out with him':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 15
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big150.jpg"></center>'
 		if npc_rel['A150'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:		
 			if grupTipe = 2:
-				'As you approach him he smiles and says. "Oh hi <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Erast gently says. "What can I help you with?"'
+				'Erast smiles as you approach. "Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." he gently says. "What can I help you with?"'
 				'"Hi Erast! So I saw you working out and needed some pointers..." you ask him.'
 				'"No worries <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''ll gladly share my secrets with you." he winks and continues on, talking about different workout techniques,that he swears will make you stronger and more fit.'
 			else
-				'As you approach him he smiles and says. "Oh hi <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Erast gently says. "What can I help you with?"'
+				'Erast smiles as you approach. "Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." he gently says. "What can I help you with?"'
 				'"Hi Erast! Well, I was thinking about starting to work out and wanted to ask you about some pointers, if you have the time?" you politely ask.'
 				'"Of course <<$pcs_nickname>>." Erast brightens up as he starts asking you about what you want to achieve with your training.'
 			end
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		elseif npc_rel['A150'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
 			if grupTipe = 2:
-				'As you approach him he says. "Oh hi <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Erast gently says. "What can I help you with?"'
+				'"Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." Erast gently says as you approach. "What can I help you with?"'
 				'"Just a quick thing, Erast. I promise..." you plead with him.'
 				'"Sorry, I don''t have any time right now. Later, okay?" he politely replies, then walks off.'
 			else
-				'As you approach him he says. "Oh I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>> I don''t have the time to talk to you..."'
-				'"Hi Erast! Well, I was thinking about starting to work out and wanted to ask you about some pointers, if you have the time?" you politely ask.'
-				'"Oh... I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>> but I don''t have time right now... I got to head to restroom... Maybe another time..." Erast avoids looking you in the eyes, as he walks off.'
+				'"I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I don''t have the time to talk to you..." he gently apologizes as he sees you approach.'
+				'"Are you sure you don''t have the time? I''ll only be a few seconds..." you politely ask.'
+				'"I''m sorry, but I don''t have time right now... I need to go to the restroom... Maybe another time..." Erast avoids looking you in the eyes as he walks off.'
 			end
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
-			'As you approach him he says. "Are the rumors true?"'
+			'"Are the rumors true?" he quietly asks as you approach.'
 			'"What rumors?" you ask back.'
 			'"Well..." he looks around, avoiding meeting your eyes. "I heard that you''ve built quite the reputation..."'
 			'"What reputation?! Out with it!!!" You''re getting irritated by him trying to avoid the subject.'
 			'"Well..." he takes a deep breath. "I heard you''ll sleep with anyone so I was thinking about if I had a shot..."'
-			'Before you''re able to reply, he grabs his stuff and walks away, clearly blushing...'	
+			'Before you''re able to reply, he walks away, clearly blushing...'	
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		else 
-			'As you approach him he says. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>... What''s up?"'
-			'"Nothing much just hanging out and looking to have a little fun. You?" you ask.'
-			'He shakes his head a little. "They guys talked me into coming." Erast replies, you talk to him a bit. Seems the other jocks thought it would be good for him to hang out and meet girls, but he seems either uninterested or to shy.'
+			'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>... What''s up?" he asks as you approach.'
+			'"Nothing much. Just hanging out and looking to have a little fun. You?" you reply.'
+			'He shakes his head a little. "The guys talked me into coming." he replies and you start talking to him. The other jocks thought it would be good for him to hang out and meet girls, but he''s either uninterested or too shy.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Ask him to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big150.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Would you like to dance with me?" You ask him.'
-				'"What? No!" He seems surprised and flustered. "I mean... I don''t dance... I need a drink." The he just walks off but you noticed him blushing.'
+				'"Would you like to dance with me?" you ask with a smile.'
+				'"What? No!" He seems surprised and flustered. "I mean... I don''t dance... I need a drink." He quickly walks away, but you notice him blushing heavily as he does.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		end
@@ -397,25 +397,48 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 	else
 		'You look out onto the dance floor and see Albina dancing. She is expertly moving her body in an erotic manner to the beat of the music. You almost feel a little jealous watching her dance so well.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hang out with Albina':
+		act 'Hang out with her':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
+			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big23.jpg"></center>'
-			'text dance with her'
+			if grupTipe = 5:
+				'Albina just laughs loudly as you approach her. "Why are <i>you</i> here? Go hang out with the other losers somewhere else." she taunts before moving away and dancing with her friends.'
+			elseif (grupeTipe = 1 or grupeTipe = 2) and npc_rel['A23'] >= 70 or AlbQW['Friends'] = 2:	
+				'"What''s up Albina?" you ask as you approach.'
+				'She smiles at you. "Oh you know, just letting my hair down and having some fun. What about you?"'
+				'"Same. Just enjoying the night." you reply and she smiles at you again.'
+				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
+			elseif npc_rel['A23'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 250:
+				if grupTipe = 2:
+					'"What''s up Albina?" you ask as you approach.'
+					'She scoffs in response. "Like you actually care. I don''t like you, I barely tolerate you being in the same social group as me, so why would I want to talk to you? Just piss off already." Not wanting to cause a scene, you back off.'
+				else
+					'Albina sees you approaching and rolls her eyes before walking away, not giving you a chance to speak to her.'
+				end
+				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
+			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
+				'Albina seems a little surprised at your presence. "Why are <i>you</i> here? Do you enjoy all the boys wanting a piece of you like you''re just some fuck toy to them?"'
+				'Before you can react, Albina waves you aside and walks away. "You know what, I don''t fucking care. I''m sure you''ll find plenty of dicks to suck here, so why don''t you go find one or two?"'
+				'You could clearly hear the disappointment in her voice, but you think she also felt pity towards you at the same time.'
+				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
+			else 
+				'"Hey Albina, what''s up?" you ask as you approach.'
+				'Albina just looks at you and shrugs before turning around and ignoring you. Seeing that she''s not interested in speaking with you, you walk away.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Ask her to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big23.jpg"></center>'
-				if (grupeTipe = 1 or grupeTipe = 2) and npc_rel[A23] >= 70 or AlbQW['Friends'] = 2:
+				if (grupeTipe = 1 or grupeTipe = 2) and npc_rel['A23'] >= 70 or AlbQW['Friends'] = 2:
 				  'Albina smiles and accepts your offer to dance.'
 					act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'albina_dance'
 				else
-					'Albina looks you over with a hint of contempt on her face before moving away from you.'
+					'Albina looks you over with a hint of contempt on her face before moving away from you and dancing with her friends.'
 					act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				end
 			end
-			if (grupeTipe = 1 or grupeTipe = 2) and npc_rel[A23] >= 70 or AlbQW['Friends'] = 2:
+			if (grupeTipe = 1 or grupeTipe = 2) and npc_rel['A23'] >= 70 or AlbQW['Friends'] = 2:
 				act 'Chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
@@ -467,9 +490,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina_dance':
 				minut += 15
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 				if npc_sex['A23'] >= 1:
-					'When the song ends, Albina looks back at you and winks. "That was hot <<$pcs_nickname>>, I think need to go and sit down for a bit." She excuses herself and walks away with a seductive sway in her hips directed at you, leaving you standing in the middle of the dance floor.'
+					'When the song ends, Albina looks back at you and winks. "That was hot <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I need to go and sit down for a bit and have a drink." She excuses herself and walks away with a seductive sway in her hips directed at you, leaving you standing in the middle of the dance floor.'
 				else
-					'When the song ends, Albina steps off to the side. "That was fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I need to sit down for a bit." She excuses herself and leaves you standing in the middle of the dance floor.'
+					'When the song ends, Albina steps off to the side. "That was fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I need to sit down for a bit and have a drink." She excuses herself and leaves you standing in the middle of the dance floor.'
 				end
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
@@ -500,17 +523,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 					act 'Dance with her': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_dance'
 				elseif npc_rel['A18'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
 					if grupTipe = 2:
-						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch!"'
+						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch?"'
 						'"I want to dance, Christina."'
 						'"Just because you''re one of us doesn''t mean I have to like you. Get the fuck out of here."'
 					else
-						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch!"'
+						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch?"'
 						'"I want to dance, Christina."'
 						'"No. Get the fuck out of here."'
 					end
 				elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
 					if grupTipe = 2:
-						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. I don''t care if you are one of us, I''m still not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
+						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. I don''t care if you''re one of us, I''m still not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
 					else
 						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. Well, I''m certainly not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
 					end
@@ -523,7 +546,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 	else
 		'You find Christina leaning against a wall, looking bored.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hangout with her':
+		act 'Hang out with her':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -547,34 +570,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 					act 'Ask her to dance':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big18.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Hell yes! Lets go, girl!" She grabs your hand and moves to the dance floor.'
+						'"Hell yes! Let''s go, girl!" She grabs your hand and drags you out to the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_dance'
 					end
 					act 'Chat with her some more': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_chat'
 				elseif npc_rel['A18'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
 					if grupTipe = 2:
-						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch!"'
+						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch?"'
 						'"I just wanted to talk, Christina."'
 						'"Just because you''re one of us doesn''t mean I have to like you. Get the fuck out of here."'
 					else
-						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch!"'
+						'"What the fuck do you want, bitch?"'
 						'"I just wanted to talk, Christina."'
 						'"No. Get the fuck out of here."'
 					end
 				elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
 					if grupTipe = 2:
-						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. I don''t care if you are one of us, I''m still not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
+						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. I don''t care if you''re one of us, I''m still not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
 					else
 						'"Oh look. The little skank must be doing her slut rounds. Well, I''m certainly not going to fuck you. Get lost, whore!"'
 					end
 				else
 					'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>? I''m busy enjoying myself right now.'
 					'"I just wanted to chat."'
-					'She rolls her eyes a little, but doesn''t run you off. The two of you chat for awhile, though it''s mostly you doing the talking.'
+					'She rolls her eyes a little, but doesn''t run you off. The two of you chat for a while, though it''s mostly you doing the talking.'
 					act 'Ask her to dance':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big18.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Sure, why not." She grabs your hand and moves to the dance floor.'
+						'"Sure, why not." She grabs your hand and drags you out to the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_dance'
 					end
 					act 'Chat with her some more': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_chat'
@@ -596,7 +619,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_chat':
 		if npc_rel['A18'] >= 50:
 			'"Hey, girl! You enjoying your night?" She seems to be in a good mood, and the two of you talk about random things for a little bit.'
 		else
-			'"Sure, why not." She grabs your hand and moves to the dance floor.'
+			'"Sure, why not." She grabs your hand and drags you out to the dance floor.'
 		end
 		act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_dance'
 	end
@@ -606,11 +629,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_chat':
 		minut += 15
 		gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A18', 'like'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big18.jpg"></center>'
-		'The two of you talk about whatever comes to mind at the time'
+		'The two of you talk about whatever comes to mind.'
 		act 'Ask about something else': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_chat'
 	end
 	if chris_dico_talk['track'] ! daystart:
-		act 'Ask about Track':
+		act 'Ask about track':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			chris_dico_talk['track'] = daystart
@@ -625,7 +648,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_chat':
 		end
 	end
 	if chris_dico_talk['cheer'] ! daystart:
-		act 'Ask about Cheerleading':
+		act 'Ask about cheerleading':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			chris_dico_talk['cheer'] = daystart
@@ -634,7 +657,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_chat':
 			if cheerleadingQW['quest_stage'] >= 3:
 				'The two of you talk about how the last practice went. She can''t seem to stop herself from complaining about the way Albina runs things.'
 			else
-				'Smiling, she talks about how the last practice went. '
+				'Smiling, she talks about how the last practice went.'
 			end
 			act 'Ask about something else': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'christina_chat'
 		end
@@ -646,7 +669,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_dance':
 	if christinaQW['subpath'] >= 2:
 		if $pantyworntype = 'none' and PCloSkirt > 2:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance9.jpg"></center>'
-			'The two of you start dancing, separately at first, before she starts sliding closer to you. Getting behind you, she wraps an arm around your waist and begins grinding her crotch up against your ass. Your skirt slides up enough to show your bare pussy, you desperatly hope no one is paying enough attention to notice.'
+			'The two of you start dancing, separately at first, before she starts sliding closer to you. Getting behind you, she wraps an arm around your waist and begins grinding her crotch up against your ass. Your skirt slides up enough to show your bare pussy and you desperately hope no one is paying enough attention to notice.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'no'
 			gs 'inhibition', 1
 			gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 15
@@ -673,15 +696,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_dance':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
-			'The two of you start dancing, separately at first, before she starts sliding closer to you. Getting behind you, she wraps an arm around your waist and begins grinding her crotch up against your ass. You dance together like this for awhile.'
+			'The two of you start dancing, separately at first, before she starts sliding closer to you. Getting behind you, she wraps an arm around your waist and begins grinding her crotch up against your ass. You dance together like this for a while.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Keep dancing':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
-				'Surrendering yourself to the music, you dance in sync with Christina. She holds onto you possesively, making it clear to any boys watching you belong to her.'
-				'Eventually she lets you go, muttering something about the bathroom, and disappears into the crowd.'
+				'Surrendering yourself to the music, you dance in sync with Christina. She holds onto you possesively, making it clear to any boys watching that you belong to her.'
+				'She eventually lets you go, muttering something about the bathroom, and disappears into the crowd.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				!!Possible bathroom sex
 				!!act 'Follow her': gt '', ''
@@ -693,27 +716,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_dance':
 		gs 'stat'
 		if $pantyworntype = 'none' and PCloSkirt > 2:
 			gs 'inhibition', 1
-			'You start dancing with Christina, both of you having a good time, twisting in sync with the music and each other. Knowing anybody watching will catch glimpses of your bare ass peeking out of your skirt fills you with excitement.'
+			'You start dancing with Christina and you both have a good time, twisting in sync with the music and each other. Knowing that anybody watching will catch glimpses of your bare ass peeking out of your skirt fills you with excitement.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Keep dancing':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 				gs 'inhibition', 1
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
-				'The two of you bounce in tune with the music, having a great time. The breeze coming up your skirt keeps you smiling, and wondering if anybody was getting a good look at your bare pussy.'
-				'Eventually Christina gets tired of dancing and wanders off, saying something about needing a drink.'
+				'The two of you bounce in tune with the music, having a great time. The breeze coming up your skirt keeps you smiling, and wondering if anybody is getting a good look at your bare pussy.'
+				'Christina eventually gets tired of dancing and wanders off, saying something about needing a drink.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 			
 		else
-			'You start dancing with Christina, both of you having a good time, twisting in sync with the music and each other.'
+			'You start dancing with Christina and you both have a good time, twisting in sync with the music and each other.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			act 'Keep dancing':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'The two of you bounce in tune with the music, having a great time.'
-				'Eventually Christina gets tired of dancing and wanders off, saying something about needing a drink.'
+				'Christina eventually gets tired of dancing and wanders off, saying something about needing a drink.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			end
 		end
@@ -726,7 +749,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A13', 'like'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
 	if rand(1,4) <= 3:
-		'You see blonde hair flashing across the dance floor. It''s Lariska in a low top and a short skirt, dancing by herself, but having a good time.'
+		'You see blonde hair flashing across the dance floor. It''s Lariska in a low cut top and a short skirt, dancing by herself and having a good time.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		act 'Go out on the dance floor':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -737,66 +760,66 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Dance with her': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-				'She sees you coming over to her and disappears into the crowd. Apparently she doesn''t like you.'
+				'She sees you coming over and disappears into the crowd. She apparently doesn''t like you.'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
-				'She takes on look at you and says, "Hell, no. Go suck a cock."'
+				'She takes one disgusted look at you. "Hell, no. Go suck a cock."'
 			else
-				'She lets you approach her, no really making an effort to encourage or avoid you. After giving you a polite smile, she continues dancing.'
+				'She lets you approach her, not really making any effort to encourage or avoid you. After giving you a polite smile, she continues dancing.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Dance with her': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 			end
 		end
 	else
-		'You spot Lariska, in a low top and a short skirt, relaxing up against a wall, people watching.'
+		'You spot Lariska, wearing a low cut top and a short skirt, relaxing up against a wall watching other people dance.'
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-			'She sees you coming and waves at you.'
-			'"Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Having a good time?"'
-			'"Yeah, are you?"'
+			'She sees you coming and smiles at you.'
+			'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. Having a good time?"'
+			'"Yeah. You?"'
 			'"Yes, I love coming here and watching people mingle and dance."'
 			act 'Ask her to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Sure, she gives you a big smile, grabs your hand, and practically runs for the dance floor."'
+				'"Sure!" She gives you a big smile, grabs your hand and practically runs for the dance floor.'
 				act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 			end
-			act 'Hangout with her':
+			act 'Hang out with her':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend some time chatting with her. She likes to talk about Christina, Volleyball, Christina, and, of course, Christina.'
+				'You spend some time chatting with her. She likes to talk about Christina, Volleyball, Christina and, of course, Christina.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Ask her to dance':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-					'"Sure, she gives you a big smile, grabs your hand, and practically runs for the dance floor."'
+					'"Sure!" She gives you a big smile, grabs your hand and practically runs for the dance floor.'
 					act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-			'She sees you coming over to her and disappears into the crowd. Apparently she doesn''t like you.'
+			'She sees you coming over and disappears into the crowd. She apparently doesn''t like you.'
 		elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
-			'She takes on look at you approaching her and says, "Hell, no. Go suck a cock."'
+			'She takes one disgusted look at you approaching. "Hell, no. Go suck a cock."'
 		else
-			'She lets you approach her, no really making an effort to encourage or avoid you. After giving you a polite smile, she continues watching people around her.'
+			'She lets you approach her, not really making any effort to encourage or avoid you. After giving you a polite smile, she continues watching people around her.'
 			act 'Ask her to dance':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Ok. Sounds fun." She leads the way to the dance floor.'
+				'"Okay. Sounds fun." She leads the way to the dance floor.'
 				act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 			end
-			act 'Hangout with her':
+			act 'Hang out with her':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend some time chatting with her. She likes to talk about Christina, Volleyball, Christina, and, of course, Christina.'
+				'You spend some time chatting with her. She likes to talk about Christina, Volleyball, Christina and, of course, Christina.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 				act 'Ask her to dance':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
-					'"Ok. Sounds fun." She leads the way to the dance floor.'
+					'"Okay. Sounds fun." She leads the way to the dance floor.'
 					act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lariska_dance'
 				end
 			end
@@ -810,7 +833,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska_dance':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
-	'Dancing with her, you notice several guys hungrily eyeing the two of you. She doesn''t seem to be paying attention though, and you try not to think about it yourself and let loose a bit.'
+	'Dancing with her, you notice several guys hungrily eyeing the two of you. She doesn''t seem to be paying attention though, and you try not to think about it yourself and let loose a little.'
 	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 	act 'Keep dancing':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -827,7 +850,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska_dance':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 			'She begins to rub against you, almost shyly, probably not even aware she''s doing it. You respond by grinding back, making her cheeks flush as she realizes what she was doing, surrounded by strangers.'
-			'Suddenly she mumbles something about needing fresh air and runs off, much to the chagrin of the bays watching you two.'
+			'She suddenly mumbles something about needing fresh air and runs off, much to the chagrin of the boys watching you.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		end
 	end
@@ -846,48 +869,46 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			if npc_rel['A19'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and calls out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come dance with me!"'
+				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and calls you out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come dance with me!"'
 				act 'Dance with her': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 			elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and turns and disappears into the crowd. Obviously she didn''t want to dance with you.'
+				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and disappears into the crowd. She obviously didn''t want to dance with you.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
-				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you, gets a disgusted look on her face, and disappears into the crowd. Obviously she didn''t want to be seen with you.'
+				'As you get closer to Lina, she looks you over with disgust and mouths "slut" at you before she disappears into the crowd.'
 				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			else
-				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and calls out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come dance with me!"'
+				'As you get closer to Lina, she sees you and calls you out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come dance with me!"'
 				act 'Dance with her': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 			end
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hangout with Lina':
+		act 'Hang out with her':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 			if npc_rel['A19'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 200:
-				'"Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>. How''s it going?"'
+				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. How''s it going?"'
 				'"Pretty good. You?"'
 				'"Enjoying the night."'
 				act 'Ask her to dance':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-					'"Sure. Sounds like fun."'
-					'The two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
+					'"Sure. Sounds like fun." she replies and the two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
 					act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 				end
-				act 'Hangout with Lina':
+				act 'Hang out with her':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-					'You spend some time chatting with Lina about school, sports, and a bit of gossip.'
+					'You spend some time chatting with Lina about school, sports and a bit of gossip.'
 					act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 					act 'Ask her to dance':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Sure. Sounds like fun."'
-						'The two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
+						'"Sure. Sounds like fun." she replies and the two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 					end
 				end
@@ -918,22 +939,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 				act 'Ask her to dance':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-					'"Sure. Sounds like fun."'
-					'The two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
+					'"Sure. Sounds like fun." she replies and the two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
 					act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 				end
-				act 'Hangout with Lina':
+				act 'Hang out with her':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-					'You spend some time chatting with Lina about school, sports, and a bit of gossip.'
+					'You spend some time chatting with Lina about school, sports and a bit of gossip.'
 					act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 					act 'Ask her to dance':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Sure. Sounds like fun."'
-						'The two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
+						'"Sure. Sounds like fun." she replies and the two of you head out onto the dance floor.'
 						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_jocks', 'lina_dance'
 					end
 				end
@@ -964,155 +983,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina_dance':
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
-			'She finally gets too daring, and during one particular move, her skirt flips all the way up, givin everybody watching a good look at her rather tight panties.'
+			'She finally gets too daring, and during one particular move, her skirt flips all the way up, giving everybody watching a good look at her rather tight panties.'
 			'She freezes, realizing everybody can see the outline of her pussy and panics. She flees the dance floor, mumbling something to you about the bathroom.'
 			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_coolkids', 'classmates'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'natasha':
-	*clr & cla
-	minut += 15
-	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A16', 'like'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big16.jpg"></center>'
-	if $loc = 'pav_disco' and rand(1,3) = 1:
-		'text'
-		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Go out on the dance floor':
-			*clr & cla
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/club_dance.jpg"></center>'
-			if npc_rel['A146'] >= 50 and pav_slut < 250:		
-				'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-				act 'Dance with him': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'igor_dance'
-			elseif npc_rel['A146'] <= 20 and pav_slut < 250:
-				if hotcat >= 5:
-					'text'
-					act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-					act 'Dance with him': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'igor_dance'
-				else
-					'text'
-					act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-				end
-			elseif pav_slut >= 250:
-				'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-			else 
-				'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-			end
-		end
-	else
-		'text'
-		act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-		act 'Hangout with him':
-			*clr & cla
-			minut += 15
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-			if npc_rel['A146'] >= 50 and pav_slut < 250:		
-				'text'
-				if hotcat >= 5:
-					'text'
-					act 'No':
-						*clr & cla
-						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-						'text'
-						act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-					end
-					act 'Yes':
-						*clr & cla
-						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-						'text'
-						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'marcus_dance'
-					end
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-				end
-			elseif npc_rel['A146'] <= 20 and pav_slut < 250:
-				if grupTipe = 1:
-					'text'
-				else
-					'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-				end
-			elseif pav_slut >= 250:
-				'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-			else 
-				'text'
-				act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-				act 'Ask him to dance':
-					*clr & cla
-					minut += 15
-					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-					if hotcat >= 5:
-						'text'
-						act 'Go dancing': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'marcus_dance'
-					else
-						'text'
-						act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-					end
-				end
-			end
-		end
-	end
-end
-
-if $ARGS[0] = 'natasha_dance':
-	*clr & cla
-	minut += 15
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/marcus_dance.jpg"></center>'
-	'text'
-	act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-	act 'Keep dancing': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'marcus_dance'
-	act 'Grind against him':
-		*clr & cla
-		gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 1
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/marcus_grind1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You step back till you are up against him and then start grinding your butt against his crotch.'
-		if hotcat >= 5:
-			'text'
-			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'inhibition'
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			act 'Go back to just dancing': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'marcus_dance'
-			act 'Keep grinding':
-				*clr & cla
-				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/marcus_grind2.jpg"></center>'
-				'text'
-				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'inhibition'
-				gs 'arousal', 'end'
-				gs 'stat'
-				act 'Makeout':
-					*clr & cla
-					minut += 15
-					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/marcus_grind2.jpg"></center>'
-					'text'
-					gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'inhibition'
-					gs 'arousal', 'end'
-					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Go off together': gt 'pav_discoev1', 'marcus'
-					gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'easy'
-					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-						act 'No (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
-							*clr & cla
-							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
-							minut += 5
-							gs 'stat'
-							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-							'text'
-							act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-						end
-					else
-						act 'No (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
-					end	
-				end
-			end
-		else
-			'text'
-			act 'Do something else': gt 'pav_disco_kids', 'classmates'
-		end
-	end
-end
-
 --- pav_disco_jocks ---------------------------------