Merge remote-tracking branch 'origin/master'

locations/eugeneev1.qsrc

@@ -5,15 +5,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firsttime':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttime1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You follow Eugene through the kitchen, into the pantry or sorts. Other than the racks of stored food and equipment, as well as varies boxes stacked around back here, there is also a desk near a corner and a old couch as well.'
-	'She stops near the couch and some boxes, then she turns towards you and pulls you into a kiss. The two of you kiss passionately for several minutes, before she breaks the kiss and looks at you a bit hesitantly, and there is an awkward pause when she takes a few steps away from you.'
-	'Then she breaks the silence and says: "Look. This may scare you a bit, but I don''t know how else to say it, so..." She reaches under her skirt and pulls her panties down, the slide down her legs to the floor, around her ankles. Then she starts lifting her skirt...'
+	'You follow Eugene through the kitchen and into the pantry. Racks of stored food and equipment, as well as various boxes are stacked around back here. There is also a desk in the corner and an old couch as well.'
+	'She stops near the couch and turns towards you before pulling you into a kiss. You passionately make out for several minutes before she breaks the kiss and looks at you hesitantly as she backs away from you as an awkward silence falls over you.'
+	'After a few awkward seconds, she breaks the silence. "This may scare you, but I don''t know how else to say it, so..." She reaches under her skirt and pulls her panties down around her ankles before she starts slowly lifting her skirt...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Look':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttime2.jpg"></center>'
-		'She drops her skirt and you see... a cock!? Yep a honest to god dick dangling between her legs. She looks at you questioningly, you can tell she is feeling unsure of herself and vulnerable, putting herself out there so to speak. Part of you just wants to reassure her, you know she is attracted to you and you have spent a lot of time flirting with her. Your eyes are drawn back to her dangling dick, this wasn''t what you expected, still you''re a little curious, how different from a guy might she be? Part of you wants to just run away, another part wants to let her down easy, yet another part of you wants to walk over and drop to your knees and suck her beautiful dick. You know you need to decide and stop staring at her cock.'
+		'She finishes pulling her her skirt up and you see... a cock!? She looks at you questioningly and you can tell she is feeling unsure of herself and vulnerable. Part of you wants to reassure her and part of you wants to run away, but you also feel the urge to just drop to your knees and suck her dick...'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get on your knees':
@@ -24,47 +24,47 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firsttime':
 			npc_QW['A89'] = 2
 			npc_sex[$boy] += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimebj1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You make up your mind, you look back at her face and smile as you walk closer to her. She bites her lower lip as she watches you walk over, the uncertainty seems to be fading. When you are nearly face to face with her, you drop down to your knees and start sucking on her mostly flaccid penis. You feel it rapidly growing and stiffening in your mouth as you suck on it. Soon it is rock hard and completely filling your mouth, you can taste her precum as you suck her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
+			'You smile as you walk over to her and she bites her lip as you drop to your knees and start sucking her cock. You feel it rapidly growing and stiffening in your mouth as you suck on it, and it''s soon rock hard and completely filling your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep sucking':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimebj2.jpg"></center>'
-				'As you suck her dick you look up and see her watching you with a smile. She starts moaning slightly in pleasure, she is obviously really enjoying the blowjob you are giving her. After a few minutes she says. "I want to fuck you."'
+				'You look up and see her watching you with a smile as you keep sucking. She starts moaning in pleasure, and after a few minutes looks down again and says "I want to fuck you."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck her off':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimebj3.jpg"></center>'
-					'You take your mouth off her cock to reply to her. "I would rather just suck you off."'
-					'She nods and helps you a bit, encouraging you to deepthroat her. Once you start deep throating her on your own she removes her hand from the back of your head and just lets you control things. Several minutes goes by, before you feel her hand go back to your head. Just as she says. "I''m about to cum." Then you feel her dick twitch, filling your mouth your her sperm. Her hand hold your head in place until she has finished cumming in your mouth. You feel her dick starting to go soft as she pulls it out of your mouth, you just swallow her sperm. As you stand up she says. "Next time I want to fuck you <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-					'You smile to her as you stand up. "Will see." Then she kisses you passionately.'
-					'"Ok we better get back." With that she leads you back out into the main area, where she returns to work.'
+					'You pop her cock out of your mouth to reply. "I''d rather just suck you off if that''s okay?"'
+					'She nods and encourages you to deepthroat her as you take her cock back into your mouth. Several minutes go by before you feel her hand on the back of your head and she groans as her dick starts twitching in your mouth. Her hand holds you down as her cum pours down your throat. When she finishes, she lets out a satisfied moan and pulls her cock your mouth. You smile up at her as you swallow her cum. "Next time, I want to fuck you..."'
+					'You grin at her as you stand up. "We''ll see..." you reply before she kisses you passionately.'
+					'"Okay, we better get back." With that, she leads you back out into the main area and returns to work.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'deepthroat'
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', 'A89', 1
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Back to the front': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+					act 'Finish': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 				end
 				act 'Let her fuck you':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimevag1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You take your mouth off her cock to reply to her and smile. "Ok."'
-					'She pulls you up to your feet and starts stripping you out of your clothes, you help her by stripping her in return. Soon you are both naked, she pulls you over to some boxes and pushes you back on them, until you are laying on top of a box on your back. With your ass just barely on the box and your legs spread wide, she steps up between you legs.'
+					'You pop her cock out of your mouth and smile. "Okay..."'
+					'She pulls you up to your feet and you start stripping each other. Once you''re both naked, she pulls you over to some boxes and pushes you back on them. She spreads your legs wide and steps in between them.'
 					*nl
 					if pcs_vag = 0:
 						brokenhymen = 1
-						'She uses one hand to rub your clit, while she rubs the tip of her dick against your slit. Once she is satisfied you are wet enough she slides her cock inside of your cunt. She goes slowly and not to deep, still you can feel a sharp pain when she breaks your hymen but it isn''t to bad. You start moaning in pleasure almost at once, several pleasurable minutes pass before she says. "I want to fuck your cute little ass."'
+						'She uses one hand to rub your clit while she rubs the tip of her dick against your slit. Once she''s satisfied you''re wet enough, she slowly slides her cock into your pussy and you feel a sharp pain when she breaks your hymen. She goes slowly and not too deeply at first, giving you time to adjust before you start moaning in pleasure. Several pleasurable minutes of her fucking your pussy pass before she speaks up. "I want to fuck your cute little ass."'
 					else
-						'She uses one hand to rub your clit, while she rubs the tip of her dick against your slit. Once she is satisfied you are wet enough she slides her cock inside of your cunt. She goes slowly and not to deep, giving you time to get wetter and adjust. You start moaning in pleasure almost at once, several pleasurable minutes pass before she says. "I want to fuck your cute little ass."'
+						'She uses one hand to rub your clit while she rubs the tip of her dick against your slit. Once she''s satisfied you''re wet enough, she slowly slides her cock into your pussy. She goes slowly and not too deeply at first, giving you time to get wetter and adjust. You start moaning in pleasure and several pleasurable minutes of her fucking your pussy pass before she speaks up. "I want to fuck your cute little ass."'
 					end
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'No anal':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimevag2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shake your head no. "Just keep fucking my pussy."'
-						'She nods a little, then reaches down and picks you up. She carries you over to the couch, before setting you down on it on your back. The whole time her dick stayed inside of you. She is surprisingly strong, as she didn''t seem to strain to much carrying you. Once on the couch on your back, she starts fucking you again. Now a little harder and a little faster, which makes you moan even louder.'
+						'You shake your head. "Just keep fucking my pussy."'
+						'She nods a little, then reaches down and picks you up. She carries you over to the couch and sets you down on your back before she starts fucking you again, harder and faster, which makes you moan even louder.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Cumming':
@@ -72,14 +72,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firsttime':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimevagcum.jpg"></center>'
 							if brokenhymen = 1:
 								killvar 'brokenhymen'
-								'Several minutes go by of blissful fucking before she starts grunting, then she suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After only a couple of strokes she starts cumming, ropy strings of cum land on your stomach. After several more squirts of cumming she finally squeezes out a last couple of drops of cum, which drop onto your stomach as well. Then she notices the blood. "Is that blood? Are you ok?" You smile and nod to her.'
-								'"Yes, this was my first time." You tell her.'
+								'Several minutes of blissful fucking pass by before she starts grunting and suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After a few strokes, ropes of her warm cum start landing on your stomach. After several more squirts, she squeezes out her last drops of cum onto your stomach before she notices the blood. "Is that blood!? Are you okay?"' 
+								'You smile and nod at her. "Yes, this was my first time..."'
 								*nl
-								'She looks surprised and a little confused. "Oh, you could have said something we didn''t ...."'
-								'You interupt her. "It''s fine, I wanted to."'
-								'She just nods to that, after which she walks away, grabbing a towel out of a open box and tossing it to you. As you wipe up the cum, she gets dressed. Before she finishes getting dressed you start getting dressed as well, she waits until you are finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing, we need to do this again. But for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+								'She looks surprised and a little confused. "Oh, you could have said something. We didn''t ...."'
+								'You interrupt her. "It''s fine, I wanted this."'
+								'She just nods before getting up and walking away, grabbing a towel out of a box and tossing it at you. She gets dressed as you clean up before getting dressed yourself. She waits until you''re finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.'
 							else
-								'Several minutes go by of blissful fucking before she starts grunting, then she suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After only a couple of strokes she starts cumming, ropy strings of cum land on your stomach. After several more squirts of cumming she finally squeezes out a last couple of drops of cum, which drop onto your stomach as well. After which she walks away, grabbing a towel out of a open box and tossing it to you. As you wipe up the cum, she gets dressed. Before she finishes getting dressed you start getting dressed as well, she waits until you are finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing, we need to do this again. But for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+								'Several minutes of blissful fucking go by before she starts grunting and suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After a few strokes, ropes of her warm cum start landing on your stomach. After several more squirts, she squeezes out her last drops of cum onto your stomach.' 
+								'Once she''s finished, she gets up and walks over to a box, grabbing a towel out of it and tossing it at you. She gets dressed as you clean up before getting dressed yourself. She waits until you''re finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 							end
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 							gs 'cum_call', 'stomach', 'A89', 1
@@ -87,55 +88,55 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firsttime':
 							cumspclnt = 14
 							gs 'cum_cleanup'
 							gs 'stat'
-							act 'Get dressed': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+							act 'Finish': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 						end
 					end
 					act 'Let her butt fuck you':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimeanal1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You nod your head and bite your lower lip. "Yes, fuck my tight little ass with your big fat cock."'
-						'She grins at that and you can tell that really turned her on. She pulls out of you and then flips you over, you get on all fours on top of the box. As you get in place, she walks over to the desk and pulls out a bottle of lube. She walks back over and applies some to your asshole and uses her fingers to work it inside of you. She applies some to her already wet cock, before tossing the bottle aside.'
+						'You nod your head and bite your lip. "Yes, fuck my tight little ass with your big fat cock!"'
+						'She grins and you can tell that she''s really aroused now. She pulls out of you and flips you over onto all fours on top of the box. As you get in place, she walks over to the desk and pulls out a bottle of lube. She walks back over and applies some to your asshole and uses her fingers to work it inside of you. She then applies some to her already wet cock before tossing the bottle aside.'
 						*nl
-						'The head of her dick presses against your butthole for a moment before popping in. You gasp as you feel her cock stretching your backdoor wide. She slowly fucks your ass, not going to deep, giving you plenty of time to get use to her.'
+						'The head of her dick presses against your asshole before it suddenly pops in and you gasp as you feel her cock stretching your backdoor wide. She starts fucking your ass, not going too fast or too deep, giving you plenty of time to adjust.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_sex', 5, 'lube'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Get butt fucked':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimeanal2.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you start moaning in pleasure she starts going a little deeper, before to long she has worked herself balls deep in you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass. Before to long she starts grunting, as she does she starts fucking you hard and fast, hammering away at your little ass. Just then she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside of you, as she feels your butt with hot cum.'
+							'As you start moaning in pleasure, she starts going a little deeper, and before long, she has worked herself balls deep into you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she pounds your ass. After a few minutes, she starts grunting and fucking you even harder before she cries out and shoves herself balls deep into your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside you as she fills your ass with her warm cum.'
 							*nl
-							'She pulls out of your gapping ass, as she does, you feel a bit of her cum leaking out of it. "What a beautiful sight to behold. You ass is so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
-							'You giggle a bit at that comment as you get up, she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+							'She pulls out of you and her cum trickles out of your stretched hole. "What a beautiful sight. You ass looks so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
+							'You giggle at her comment as you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 							gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
-							act 'Get dressed': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+							act 'Finish': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 						end
 					end
 				end
 				act 'Fuck my ass':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimeanal1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You take your mouth off her cock to reply to her, with a smile. "I want you to fuck my ass instead."'
-					'She grins at that. "I can do that." The she pulls you up to your feet and starts stripping you out of your clothes, you help her by stripping her in return. Soon you are both naked, she pulls you over to some boxes and turn you around to face them. With her standing behind you, she pushes you forward, at first you start to bend over the box, but she helps lift your legs. So you climb on the box and get on all fours.'
+					'You pop her cock out of your mouth and smile. "I want you to fuck my ass instead."'
+					'She grins. "I can do that." She pulls you up to your feet and you start stripping each other. Once you''re both naked, she pulls you over to some boxes and turns you around to face them. She stands behind you, pushes you forward and lifts your leg to help you climb on the box and get on all fours.'
 					*nl
-					'Once you are in place, she walks over to the desk and pulls out a bottle of lube. She walks back over and applies some to your asshole and uses her fingers to work it inside of you. She applies some to her already wet cock, before tossing the bottle aside.'
-					'The head of her dick presses against your butthole for a moment before popping in. You gasp as you feel her cock stretching your backdoor wide. She slowly fucks your ass, not going to deep, giving you plenty of time to get use to her.'
+					'Once you are in place, she walks over to the desk and pulls out a bottle of lube. She walks back over and applies some to your asshole and uses her fingers to work it inside of you before applying some to her already wet cock and tossing the bottle aside.'
+					'The head of her dick presses against your asshole before it suddenly pops in and you gasp as you feel her cock stretching your backdoor wide. She starts fucking your ass, not going too fast or too deep, giving you plenty of time to adjust.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get butt fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttimeanal2.jpg"></center>'
-						'As you start moaning in pleasure she starts going a little deeper, before to long she has worked herself balls deep in you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass. Before to long she starts grunting, as she does she starts fucking you hard and fast, hammering away at your little ass. Just then she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside of you, as she feels your butt with hot cum.'
+						'As you start moaning in pleasure, she starts going a little deeper, and before long, she has worked herself balls deep into you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she pounds your ass. After a few minutes, she starts grunting and fucking you even harder before she cries out and shoves herself balls deep into your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside you as she fills your ass with her warm cum.'
 						*nl
-						'She pulls out of your gapping ass, as she does, you feel a bit of her cum leaking out of it. "What a beautiful sight to behold. You ass is so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
-						'You giggle a bit at that comment as you get up, she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+						'She pulls out of you and her cum trickles out of your stretched hole. "What a beautiful sight. You ass looks so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
+						'You giggle at her comment as you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 						gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
-						act 'Get dressed': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+						act 'Finish': gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 					end
 				end
 			end
@@ -145,29 +146,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firsttime':
 			npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 			minut += 7
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/firsttime1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You make up your mind, finally looking away from her dick and back to her face. You shake your head a bit. "I... this wasn''t what I expected. I just don''t know."'
-			'She nods and drops her skirt back in place, then squats down to pull her panties back up. "I understand. If you change your mind let me know."'
-			'All you can do is nod at that, then she walks over and gives you a hug. "We should get back." With that she leads you back out of the pantry. She stops to work, while you unsure what to do, leave the place.'
+			'You shake your head a little. "I... this wasn''t what I expected. I just... I don''t know."'
+			'She nods and drops her skirt back into place, then squats down to pull her panties back up. "I understand. If you change your mind, let me know."'
+			'All you can do is nod as she walks over and gives you a hug. "We should get back." With that, she leads you out of the pantry and returns to work while you, unsure what to do, choose to leave.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'city_industrial'
 		end
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Get out of here (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+			act 'Leave (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				*clr & cla
 				npc_rel['A89'] -= 50
 				minut += 7
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/disgust.jpg"></center>'
-				'You make up your mind, finally looking away from her dick and back to her face. You shake your head a no. You turn away from her and hurried walk out of the pantry, and don''t stop walking until you''re well away from the diner.'
+				'You shake your head and turn away from her before hurrying out of the pantry. You dash out the door and don''t stop until you''re well away from the diner.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'city_industrial'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Get out of here (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Leave (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -175,22 +176,22 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Eugene leads you to the pantry again, and gives you a wink before she starts to undress.'
-	'"So, what would you like to do today, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she chuckles and exposes her semi-erect cock to you. The two of you kiss and fondle each other as you undress, once your both mostly naked, she grabs you by the hair and pushes you down.'
+	'"So, what would you like to do today <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she chuckles as she exposes her semi-erect cock to you. You kiss and fondle each other as you undress and once you''re both mostly naked, she grabs you by the hair and pushes you down.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Get on your knees':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You get on your knees in front of her. She holds you by the hair while she strokes her dick, until it is nice and hard. Once it is she pushes it into your mouth, you start sucking her dick, letting her control the action with her hand intertwined in your hair. "Oh yeah, you are such a good little cock sucker." She says as you suck her off. Several minutes go by before she speaks again. "I want to fuck you."'
+		'You get on your knees in front of her and she holds you by the hair as she strokes her dick until it''s hard. Once it is, she pushes it into your mouth and you start sucking it, letting her control the action with her hand intertwined in your hair. "Oh yeah, you''re such a good little cock sucker!" Several minutes go by before she speaks again. "I want to fuck you now."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck her off':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex3.jpg"></center>'
-			'Pulling your mouth off her dick for a moment you respond. "I want to just suck you off."'
-			'She laughs a big. "Fine have it your way, but you''re going to swallow my load." True to her word, after sucking her dick for several minutes she starts to grunt. Then she holds you head in place, while she just keeps the tip of her dick in your mouth, while she starts stroking her own cock. Moments later you feel and taste her salty cum shooting in your mouth, she keeps stroking her cock until she has milked every drop of cum out of it, into your mouth. She keeps hold of your hair, as she pulls her dick out of your mouth, as she says. "Now swallow it."'
+			'You pop her cock out of your mouth to respond. "I want to just suck you off if that''s okay."'
+			'She laughs. "Fine, have it your way, but you''re going to swallow my load." You slide her cock back into your mouth and resume sucking it. She starts to grunt a few minutes later and holds your head in place as she keeps just the tip of her dick in your mouth and starts stroking it. Moments later, you feel and taste her salty cum shooting into your mouth. She keeps stroking it until she has milked every drop of cum into your mouth. She keeps hold of your hair as she pulls her dick out of your mouth. "Now swallow it."'
 			*nl
-			'You swallow her cum, opening your mouth to show her, then she lets go of your hair. Afterwards you both start getting dressed, once fully dressed again she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+			'You swallow her cum, opening your mouth to show her, and she lets go of your hair. you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 			gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', 'A89', 1
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -200,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 		act 'Agree to fuck':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex4.jpg"></center>'
-			'You nod your head in agreement she can fuck you. Afterward she pulls you up and pushes you back into the desk, the back of your legs hit the desk. She moves in close passionately kissing you, pushing you, which causes you to sit down on the desk. One of her hands fondles your breasts, then slides down your body to your clit. She rubs that for a few moments, before sliding a finger inside of your wet pussy. She keeps kissing you while you finger bangs you, she finally breaks the kiss, but keeps fingering you. "Feels like your pussy is soaking wet, begging for my cock." She says as she tries to push you onto your back.'
+			'You nod your head in agreement and she pulls you up and pushes you back into the desk. She moves in close and starts passionately kissing you while gently pushing you, which causes you to sit down on the desk. One of her hands fondles your breasts, then slides down your body to your clit. She rubs it for a few seconds before sliding a finger inside your wet pussy. She keeps kissing you while fingerbanging you until she finally breaks the kiss, but keeps fingering you. "Feels like your pussy is soaking wet and just begging for my cock..." she teases as she tries to push you onto your back.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', -5
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -209,17 +210,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex5.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_vag = 0:
 					brokenhymen = 1
-					'You lay back on the desk, spreading your legs as you do. She moves up closer and you feel her hard dick already poking you, she takes a moment to rub the tip up and down against your wet slit, before sliding it in your twat, you feel a sharp pain as she tears your hymen. You moan in pleasure and pain as you feel her cock stretching your pussy, as she slowly fucks it. The more you moan the faster she starts to fuck you. She watches your face as she fucks you, it is starting to feel so good you are having trouble focusing on her. Next she slaps you on the ass and pulls out, helping you slide off the desk. She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it, until you are on your hands and knees. "I''m going to fuck your cute little ass now."'
+					'You lay back on the desk and spread your legs. She moves in close and takes a moment to rub the tip against your wet slit before sliding her cock inside you. You feel a sharp pain as she tears your hymen, and moan in pleasure and pain as you feel her cock stretching your pussy. The more you moan, the faster she starts to fuck you. After a few minutes, she slaps you on the ass and pulls out before sliding you off the desk. She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it on your hands and knees. "I''m going to fuck your cute little ass now."'
 				else
-					'You lay back on the desk, spreading your legs as you do. She moves up closer and you feel her hard dick already poking you, she takes a moment to rub the tip up and down against your wet slit, before sliding it in your twat. You moan in pleasure as you feel her cock stretching your pussy, as she slowly fucks it. The more you moan the faster she starts to fuck you. She watches your face as she fucks you, it is starting to feel so good you are having trouble focusing on her. Next she slaps you on the ass and pulls out, helping you slide off the desk. She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it, until you are on your hands and knees. "I''m going to fuck your cute little ass now."'
+					'You lay back on the desk and spread your legs. She moves in close and takes a moment to rub the tip against your wet slit before sliding her cock inside you. You moan in pleasure as you feel her cock stretching your pussy. The more you moan, the faster she starts to fuck you. After a few minutes, she slaps you on the ass and pulls out before sliding you off the desk. She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it on your hands and knees. "I''m going to fuck your cute little ass now."'
 				end
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'No anal':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex6.jpg"></center>'
-					'You look back over your shoulder at her. "Just fuck my pussy."'
-					'She smiles to you and slaps your ass kinda hard. "Ok this time, but next time I am fucking this cute little ass of yours." As she says that she slides her cock back into your wet pussy, it slides in easily and she starts fucking you again. The pleasure you feel overrides your desire to respond to her comment, as you blissful take her cock doggystyle.'
+					'You look back over your shoulder at her. "Just fuck my pussy please."'
+					'She smiles at you and slaps your ass hard. "Okay, but next time I <i>am</i> fucking this cute little ass of yours." She then slides her cock back into your wet pussy and starts fucking you again. The pleasure you feel overrides your desire to respond to her comment as you blissfully take her cock doggystyle.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Cumming':
@@ -227,56 +228,57 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex8.jpg"></center>'
 						if brokenhymen = 1:
 							killvar 'brokenhymen'
-							'Several minutes go by of blissful fucking before she starts grunting, then she suddenly pulls out of you and flips you over onto your back. Before she  starts jerking off, after only a couple of strokes she starts cumming, ropy strings of cum land on your stomach. After several more squirts of cumming she finally squeezes out a last couple of drops of cum, which drop onto your stomach as well. Then she notices the blood. "Is that blood? Are you ok?" You smile and nod to her.'
-							'"Yes, this was my first time." You tell her.'
+							'Several minutes of blissful fucking pass by before she starts grunting and suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After a few strokes, ropes of her warm cum start landing on your stomach. After several more squirts, she squeezes out her last drops of cum onto your stomach before she notices the blood. "Is that blood!? Are you okay?"' 
+							'You smile and nod at her. "Yes, this was my first time..."'
 							*nl
 							'She looks surprised and a little confused. "Oh, you could have said something we didn''t ...."'
-							'You interupt her. "It''s fine, I wanted to."'
-							'She just nods to that, after which she walks away, grabbing a towel out of a open box and tossing it to you. As you wipe up the cum, she gets dressed. Before she finishes getting dressed you start getting dressed as well, she waits until you are finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing, we need to do this again. But for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+							'You interrupt her. "It''s fine, I wanted this."'
+							'She just nods before she gets up and walks over to a box, grabbing a towel out of it and tossing it at you. She gets dressed as you clean up before getting dressed yourself. She waits until you''re finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.'
 						else
-							'Several minutes go by of blissful fucking before she starts grunting, then she suddenly pulls out of you and flips you over onto your back. Before she  starts jerking off, after only a couple of strokes she starts cumming, ropy strings of cum land on your stomach. After several more squirts of cumming she finally squeezes out a last couple of drops of cum, which drop onto your stomach as well. After which she walks away, grabbing a towel out of a open box and tossing it to you. As you wipe up the cum, she gets dressed. Before she finishes getting dressed you start getting dressed as well, she waits until you are finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing, we need to do this again. But for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+							'Several minutes of blissful fucking go by before she starts grunting and suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. After a few strokes, ropes of her warm cum start landing on your stomach. After several more squirts, she squeezes out her last drops of cum onto your stomach.' 
+							'Once she''s finished, she gets up and walks over to a box, grabbing a towel out of it and tossing it at you. She gets dressed as you clean up before getting dressed yourself. She waits until you''re finished before giving you a kiss. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 						end
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 						gs 'cum_call', 'tits', 'A89', 1
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
-						act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+						act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 					end
 				end
 				act 'Let her':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'boyStat', 'A89'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex7.jpg"></center>'
-					'She squirts some lube onto your asshole and works the lube inside of you with her fingers. Next she applies some lube to her dick, once it is lubed up as well she gets up on the couch on her knees behind you. You feel the tip of her cock pressing against your backdoor, until it finally pops in. You gasp when it enters you, she then slides it in slowly, giving you time to adjust to her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick stretching your asshole.'
+					'She squirts some lube onto your asshole and works it inside of you with her fingers before applying some to her dick. Once it''s lubed up, she gets on the couch behind you and you feel the tip of her cock pressing against your backdoor until it pops in. You gasp when it enters you before she slides it in slowly, giving you time to adjust to her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick stretching your asshole.'
 					*nl
-					'As you start moaning in pleasure she starts going a little deeper, before to long she has worked herself balls deep in you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass. Before to long she starts grunting, as she does she starts fucking you hard and fast, hammering away at your little ass. Just then she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside of you, as she feels your butt with hot cum.'
+					'As you start moaning in pleasure, she starts going a little deeper, and before long, she has worked herself balls deep into you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she pounds your ass. After a few minutes, she starts grunting and fucking you even harder before she cries out and shoves herself balls deep into your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside you as she fills your ass with her warm cum.'
 					*nl
-					'She pulls out of your gapping ass, as she does, you feel a bit of her cum leaking out of it. "What a beautiful sight to behold. You ass is so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
-					'You giggle a bit at that comment as you get up, she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+					'She pulls out of you and her cum trickles out of your stretched hole. "What a beautiful sight. You ass looks so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
+					'You giggle at her comment as you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'lube'
 					gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+					act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 				end
 			end
 		end
-		act 'Just my ass.':
+		act 'Just my ass':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'boyStat', 'A89'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/sex7.jpg"></center>'
-			'You resist going back. "Just fuck my ass." You tell her and then relax to let her push you back. Instead of pushing you back, she grabs you hand and pulls you off the desk instead, grabbing a bottle out of a drawer as she does.'
-			'She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it, on all fours. "Fine by me, but I want to fuck it right." She squirts some lube onto your asshole and works the lube inside of you with her fingers. Next she applies some lube to her dick, once it is lubed up as well she gets up on the couch on her knees behind you. You feel the tip of her cock pressing against your backdoor, until it finally pops in. You gasp when it enters you, she then slides it in slowly, giving you time to adjust to her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick stretching your asshole.'
+			'You resist being pushed back. "I want you to fuck my ass..." Instead of pushing you back, she grabs your hand and pulls you off the desk before grabbing a bottle out of a drawer.'
+			'She leads you over to the couch and pushes you down on it on all fours. "Fine by me, but I want to fuck it right." She squirts some lube onto your asshole and works it inside of you with her fingers before applying some to her dick. Once it''s lubed up, she gets on the couch behind you and you feel the tip of her cock pressing against your backdoor until it pops in. You gasp when it enters you and she slides it in slowly, giving you time to adjust to her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick stretching your asshole.'
 			*nl
-			'As you start moaning in pleasure she starts going a little deeper, before to long she has worked herself balls deep in you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass. Before to long she starts grunting, as she does she starts fucking you hard and fast, hammering away at your little ass. Just then she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside of you, as she feels your butt with hot cum.'
+			'As you start moaning in pleasure, she starts going a little deeper, and before long, she has worked herself balls deep into you. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she pounds your ass. After a few minutes, she starts grunting and fucking you even harder before she cries out and shoves herself balls deep into your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside you as she fills your ass with her warm cum.'
 			*nl
-			'She pulls out of your gapping ass, as she does, you feel a bit of her cum leaking out of it. "What a beautiful sight to behold. You ass is so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
-			'You giggle a bit at that comment as you get up, she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+			'She pulls out of you and her cum trickles out of your stretched hole. "What a beautiful sight. You ass looks so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
+			'You giggle at her comment as you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 15, 'lube'
 			gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
-			act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+			act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -286,75 +288,76 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex_work':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Eugene leads you to the pantry again, pushing you down on top of one of the boxes, and gives you a wink before she starts to strip you from the waist down.'
-	'Also pulls off her panties and pulls her skirt up around her waist, exposing her semi-erect cock to you. Then she grabs you by the hair and pulls you around, until you are facing her, on all fours on the box.'
+	'Eugene leads you into the pantry again and pushes you down on top of one of the boxes, giving you a wink before she starts to strip you from the waist down.'
+	'She pulls off her panties and pulls her skirt up around her waist, exposing her semi-erect cock to you before she grabs you by the hair and pulls you around so you''re facing her on all fours on the box.'
 	act 'Open your mouth':
 		*clr & cla
 		npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work2.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Fuck I am so horny." She says as sticks her cock in your mouth and grabs the back of your head with both hands and starts face fucking you. You start gagging on her dick, she pulls back enough to let you catch your breath before face fucking you again. Several minutes of this goes by before she says. "I''m going to fuck you now."'
+		'"Fuck, I''m so horny!" she says as she sticks her cock in your mouth, grabs the back of your head with both hands and starts face fucking you. You start gagging on her dick and she pulls back to let you catch your breath before face fucking you again. Several minutes of this goes by before she says "I''m going to fuck you now."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'deepthroat'
 		gs 'stat'
-		act 'Suck her off':
+		act 'Suck her dick':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work4.jpg"></center>'
-			'When she finally lets go to change positions you can at last respond to her. "I would rather just suck you off."'
-			'"Would you know." Before you can respond she shoves her dick back in your mouth and places her hands on the back of your head again. Her balls bounce off your chin as she deepthroats you. Some time later your throat starts to hurt from the face fucking she is giving you, after a bit more she starts to grunt. Then you feel her dick twitching, filling your mouth up with her salty cum. After the last squirt of sperm fills you mouth, she pulls out. "I spent all this time making you that salty snack, so swallow it down." She says with a slight laugh.'
+			'When she finally lets go to change positions, you cough a few times before responding. "I would rather just suck you off if that''s okay."'
+			'"Would you now?" Before you can respond, she shoves her dick back in your mouth and places her hands on the back of your head again. Her balls slap against your chin as she deepthroats you for some time before she starts to grunt and you feel her dick twitching. Her cum starts filling your mouth and she doesn''t pull out until she''s milked every drop onto your tongue. "I want you to swallow it all." she says with a slight laugh.'
 			*nl
 			'You swallow her cum, then open your mouth to show her. With that done the two of you smooth your clothes out and put your panties back on. Once you are standing she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 			gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', 'A89', 1
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
-			act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+			act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 		end
 		if stat['vaginal'] >= 1:
 			act 'Let her fuck you':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work3.jpg"></center>'
-				'When she pulls her dick out of your mouth and you don''t protest, she flips you over on the box, onto your back. Next she grabs you by the leg and spins you around on the box until your head is facing away from her and your pussy is facing her. You spread your legs wide for her, within moments you feel the tip of her dick rubbing against your slit, getting it and you wet. Once you are wet enough she slides her dick inside of your twat and starts slowly fucking you, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
+				'When she pulls her dick out of your mouth and you don''t protest, she flips you over onto your back before grabbing you by the leg and spinning you around. You spread your legs wide for her, and within moments you feel the tip of her dick rubbing against your slit. Once you are wet enough, she slides her dick inside your pussy and starts slowly fucking you, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck her again':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work4.jpg"></center>'
-					'With out warning she pulls you off the boxes, making sure you can catch yourself, while pushing you to your knees. At once she sticks her wet dick back in your mouth, you can taste your own pussy''s juices on her. After a few moment she places both of her hands on the back of your head and starts ramming her dick down your throat, face fucking you.'
+					'Without warning, she pulls you off the boxes and pushes you to your knees. She then sticks her wet dick back in your mouth and you can taste your pussy juices on her. After a few minutes, she places both her hands on the back of your head and starts ramming her dick down your throat, face fucking you.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'deepthroat'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get fucked again':
 						*clr & cla
 						gs 'boyStat', 'A89'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Pulling her dick out of your mouth again, she holds onto your hair and pulls you up gentle. You get up as she gently tugs your hair, once standing she turns you to face the box, pushing you onto one of them, and then forward. Until you are on all fours on top of the box, she stands behind you, placing one foot on the box as well and plunging her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick back into your soaking wet twat. This time she starts fucking you hard and rough, you feel her balls slapping against your clit, as she hammers your pussy balls deep. "Fuck yeah, this feels so good. I am going to fuck your ass balls deep now."'
+						'Pulling her dick out of your mouth again, she holds onto your hair and gently pulls you up before turning you to face the box and pushing you onto it. She then stands behind you and plunges her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick back into your soaking wet pussy. This time she starts fucking you hard and rough, and you feel her balls slapping against your clit as she hammers away at your pussy. "Fuck yeah, this feels so good. I''m going to fuck your ass balls deep now!"'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'rough'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'No anal':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work6.jpg"></center>'
-							'She pulls out of you, but before she can stick it in your ass you say. "No I just my pussy today."'
-							'She grabs you and flips you over onto your back again, at first you don''t think she heard you but then as she is pulling off the rest of her clothes. "Fine but next time, I get to fuck that tight little ass of yours." Next she strips you as well, once you are both naked and your legs are spread wide, she plunges her dick back into your cunt. Where she proceeds to fuck you hard and rough.'
+							'She pulls out of you, but you protest before she can stick it in your ass. "No! Just fuck my pussy please."'
+							'She grabs you and flips you over onto your back again. At first, you don''t think she heard you, she relents as she takes off the rest of her clothes. "Fine but next time, I get to fuck that tight little ass of yours!"' 
+							'She then strips you as well, and once you''re both naked, she spreads your legs wide and plunges her dick back into your pussy before proceeding to fuck you hard and fast.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'rough'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Cumming':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work9.jpg"></center>'
-								'Several minutes go by, before she starts to grunt, which only encourages her to go faster. She suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off, with in a couple of strokes she starts shooting out streams of cum, which land on your well fucked twat. She jerks off, shooting cum on you, until she finally squeezes the last couple of drops out, then she wipes the tip of her dick on your thigh. She grins at you, "Sorry I was so rough this time, but I really needed that. I was so horny I thought my balls where going to explode." She says with a laugh.'
+								'Several minutes go by before she starts to grunt, which only encourages her to go faster before she suddenly pulls out of you and starts jerking off. Within seconds, she starts shooting out streams of cum that splatter across your labia. She keeps jerking her cock until she squeezes the last few drops out, then wipes the tip of her dick on your thigh. "Sorry I was so rough this time, but I really needed that. I was so horny I thought my balls were going to explode!" she says with a laugh.'
 								*nl
-								'You grin to her. "Glad I could help, I really needed this too." Then the two of you start getting dressed again and cleaning up. She tosses you a towel to wipe yourself off with. Once you are standing she pulls you into a kiss, when she finishes kissing you she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+								'You grin at her. "Glad I could help, I really needed this too." She tosses you a towel to wipe yourself off with before you both get dressed. Once you finish, she pulls you into a kiss before leading you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 								gs 'cum_call', 'labia', 'A89', 1
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								cumspclnt = 15
 								gs 'cum_cleanup'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+								act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 							end
 						end
 						act 'Let her':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work7.jpg"></center>'
-							'She pulls out of your pussy, to walk over and grab a bottle out of the desk. She comes back and squirts some lube onto your butthole, working it into your ass with her fingers. You glance over your shoulder and watch her squirt some lube onto her dick, once it is lubed up well she tosses the bottle aside. She lines her cock up and pushes it inside or your asshole. "Fuck your ass feels so tight." While saying that she shoves her dick all the way in you, until your feel her balls against your slit. You clench the box tightly, as you bite your lower lip, as she starts just hammering away at your ass. Causing you to have a mixture of moans of pleasure and groans of pain.'
+							'She pulls out of your pussy to walk over and grab a bottle out of the desk. She comes back and squirts some lube onto your butthole, working it into your ass with her fingers. You glance over your shoulder and watch her squirt some lube onto her dick, once it is lubed up well she tosses the bottle aside. She lines her cock up and pushes it inside or your asshole. "Fuck your ass feels so tight." While saying that she shoves her dick all the way in you, until your feel her balls against your slit. You clench the box tightly, as you bite your lower lip, as she starts just hammering away at your ass. Causing you to have a mixture of moans of pleasure and groans of pain.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Get butt fucked':
@@ -368,7 +371,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex_work':
 								gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Get dressed':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
+								act 'Finish':gt 'Lakecafe', 'main'
 							end
 						end
 					end
@@ -378,17 +381,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex_work':
 		act 'Fuck my ass':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work7.jpg"></center>'
-			'She pulls out of your mouth, letting you finally respond to her. "I want you to fuck my ass." You tell her.'
-			'She grins down at you and gives you a wink. "If that''s what you want." She leaves you on all fours on the box, as she walks over and grabs a bottle out of the desk. She comes back and squirts some lube onto your butthole, working it into your ass with her fingers. You glance over your shoulder and watch her squirt some lube onto her dick, once it is lubed up well she tosses the bottle aside. She lines her cock up and pushes it inside or your asshole. "Fuck your ass feels so tight." While saying that she shoves her dick all the way in you, until your feel her balls against your slit. You clench the box tightly, as you bite your lower lip, as she starts just hammering away at your ass. Causing you to have a mixture of moans of pleasure and groans of pain.'
+			'She pulls out of your mouth, letting you respond to her. "I want you... to fuck my ass..." you gasp through your breaths.'
+			'She grins down at you and gives you a wink. "If that''s what you want." She leaves you on all fours on the box as she walks over and grabs a bottle out of the desk. She comes back and turns you around to squirt some lube onto your asshole, working it into your ass with her fingers. You glance over your shoulder and watch her squirt some lube onto her dick before tossing the bottle aside. She then lines her cock up and pushes it inside your asshole. "Fuck, your ass feels so tight!" You clench the box tightly and bite your lip as she slides balls deep into you and starts hammering away at your ass. You moan in a mixture of pleasure and pain.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal_sex', 5, 'lube'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Get butt fucked':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/work8.jpg"></center>'
-				'She reaches up to grab you by the shoulder with one hand, while wrapping her other hand in your hair to pull it back. The echoing of the slapping of flesh on flesh fills the room, as she furiously fucks your butt. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass. Before to long she starts grunting, as she does she starts fucking you hard and fast, hammering away at your little ass. Just then she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside of you, as she feels your butt with hot cum.'
+				'She reaches up to grab you by the shoulder with one hand, while wrapping her other hand in your hair to pull it back. The echoing of the slapping of flesh on flesh fills the room as she furiously fucks your backdoor. You feel her balls slapping against your pussy as she fucks your ass, and before too long she starts grunting and fucking you harder and faster before she cries out and shoves herself balls deep in your ass and holds it there. You feel her cock twitching inside you as she fills your ass with her warm cum.'
 				*nl
-				'She pulls out of your gapping ass, as she does, you feel a bit of her cum leaking out of it. "What a beautiful sight to behold. You ass is so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
-				'You giggle a bit at that comment as you get up, she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished the two of you start getting dressed. Once you are both finished dressing she says. "We need to do that again, but for now we best get back." With that she leads you back to the front of the cafe, where she returns to work.'
+				'She pulls out of you and her cum trickles out of your stretched hole. "What a beautiful sight. You ass looks so cute with my cum leaking out of it."'
+				'You giggle at her comment as you get up and she pulls you into a kiss. Once the kiss is finished, the two of you start getting dressed. "That was amazing! We need to do this again, but we need to get back now." With that, she leads you back to the front of the cafe and returns to work.' 
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 				gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -404,17 +407,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photography':
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take a few photo''s of her fully dressed but it really isn''t what you are looking for. Then you realize what you really want, is her partially undressed, hinting at her secret, with out fully revealing it. "Hey would you mind putting on some lingerie and letting me take you picture?"'
-	'She stops and looks at you a moment. "How come?"'
-	'You lower the camera when she seems hesitent to agree. "I want this to be special, to hint at your..." You motion towards her crotch region. "secret with out actually revealing it."'
-	'She seems even more unsure. "Who all would see this, you know how some people are."'
+	'You take a few photos of her fully dressed, but it really isn''t what you''re looking for. You then realize what you really want is her partially undressed, hinting at her secret without fully revealing it. "Hey would you mind putting on some lingerie and letting me take your picture?"'
+	'She stops and looks at you for a moment. "Why?"'
+	'You lower the camera when she seems hesitent to agree. "I want this to be special, to hint at your..." You motion towards her crotch. "secret without actually revealing it."'
+	'She seems even more unsure. "Who would see this? You know how some people are."'
 	*nl
-	'You smile to her. "Don''t worry I won''t go around showing people and the few that see it would be people I trust, plus I would never reveal your identity to anyone."'
-	'She bites her lower lip thinking about it for a few moments. "Ok I guess I can trust you, but you have to trust me in return." She says with a devious smile.'
-	'You raise a shapely brow slightly. "Ok in what way?"'
-	'She grin at that. "When you are done taking your pictures, I get to fuck you in anyway I want, do what ever I want to you."'
-	'Now it is your turn to frown a little, that can mean a lot of things. "Like what exactly?"'
-	'She shakes her head. "You will just have to trust me like I am trusting you." She does make a somewhat valid point, she is trusting you with her secret. But do you completely trust her to not do something bad?'
+	'You smile at her. "Don''t worry, I won''t go around showing people and the few that do see it would be people I trust. Plus I would never reveal your identity to anyone."'
+	'She bites her lower lip as she thinks about it. "Okay, I guess I can trust you, but you have to trust me in return." she says with a devious smile.'
+	'You raise a shapely brow slightly. "Okay... In what way?"'
+	'She grins. "When you''re done taking your pictures, I get to fuck you any way I want, do whatever I want to you."'
+	'"Like what exactly?" you ask in response.'
+	'She shakes her head. "You''ll just have to trust me, like I''m trusting you." She does make a somewhat valid point, but do you trust her to not do something bad?'
 	act 'Refuse':
 		cla & *clr
 		npc_rel['A89'] -= 10
@@ -422,15 +425,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photography':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/pc/reactions/no.mp4"></video></center>'
 		if stat['vaginal'] = 0:
-			'You think about it for a moment and then shake your head, you are not going to trade your virginity for a photo, not that she needs to know your still a virgin. "Um no, I''m not going to trade sex for photo''s sorry."'
-			'She frowns but nods. "I understand and nothing personal. I just don''t want images of me out there, never know how it might get out on the internet."'
-			'With your hopes dashed and there now this akward silence. You pack up your stuff. "Ok well guess I will see you around."'
-			'She nods. "Yeah see you later", with that you head out and she heads back to work.'
+			'You think about it before shaking your head. "Um no, I''m not going to trade sex for photos. Sorry."'
+			'She frowns but nods. "I understand. I just don''t want images of me out there. You never know how it might get out on the internet."'
+			'With your hopes dashed, you pack up your stuff. "Okay, well guess I''ll see you around then..."'
+			'She nods. "Yeah, see you later." With that, you leave and she heads back to work.'
 		else
-			'You think about it for a moment and then shake your head. "Um no, I''m not going to trade sex for photo''s sorry."'
-			'She frowns but nods. "I understand and nothing personal. I just don''t want images of me out there, never know how it might get out on the internet."'
-			'With your hopes dashed and there now this akward silence. You pack up your stuff. "Ok well guess I will see you around."'
-			'She nods. "Yeah see you later", with that you head out and she heads back to work.'
+			'You think about it before shaking your head. "Um no, I''m not going to trade sex for photos. Sorry."'
+			'She frowns but nods. "I understand. I just don''t want images of me out there. You never know how it might get out on the internet."'
+			'With your hopes dashed, you pack up your stuff. "Okay, well guess I''ll see you around then..."'
+			'She nods. "Yeah, see you later." With that, you leave and she heads back to work.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave':gt 'city_industrial'
 	end
@@ -440,8 +443,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photography':
 			npc_rel['A89'] += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/photography/foto/people/6.jpg"></center>'
-			'You think about it a moment, you want to have sex with her anyways, so why not. "Ok sure, you can fuck me how ever you want. AFTER I get the photo I want. Now go put on something sexy for me." She laughs and then goes to rummage round in her drawers for a bit, trying on a couple of different outfits until she finds something she likes. Afterwards she starts posing for you again and you take a few more photo''s until you are sure you have found the one. With the one you want taken, you put the camera aside. "Ok I got it."'
-			'She smiles to you and waves you over. "Well get that sexy body of yours over here, I am going to do all sorts of things to it."'
+			'You think about it before nodding. "Okay, sure. You can fuck me however you want <i>after</i> I get the photo I want. Now go put on something sexy for me." She laughs before going to try on a few different outfits until she finds something she likes. She then starts posing for you and you take a few photos until you''re sure you have the one. With the one you want taken, you put the camera aside. "Okay, I''ve got it."'
+			'She smiles at you and beckons you over. "Well get that sexy body of yours over here. I''m going to do all sorts of things to it."'
 			photoskl_exp += rand(3,5)
 			portfolio_people[6] = 1
 			gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 10
@@ -450,54 +453,54 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photography':
 				cla & *clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You walk over and climb on the bed with her, as you do she starts kissing you at once. You return her kiss and the two of you just kiss for a couple of minutes.'
+				'You walk over and climb onto the bed next to her. She starts kissing you and you both just make out for a few minutes.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Undress':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo2.jpg"></center>'
-					'She breaks the kiss to start undressing you, as she does, she rubs your clit several times and sucks on your exposed nipples as well. After a couple of minutes of playing around she finishes stripping you. Then pushes you forward until you are bent over at the waist, on your knees with your shoulders and head against the bed.'
+					'She breaks the kiss to start undressing you. She rubs your clit and sucks on your exposed nipples as she does. After spending a few minutes playing around, she finishes stripping you and pushes you forward onto your knees.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get eaten':
 						cla & *clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo3.jpg"></center>'
-						'She circles around behind you and starts licking your pussy from behind. While she is licking your slit, getting it nice and wet, she gives your ass a slap occasionally as well. Soon you are moaning in pleasure at her tongues ministrations, enjoying every minute of it.'
+						'She moves in behind you and starts licking your pussy from behind. She gives your ass an occasional slap as she licks your slit. You moan in pleasure, enjoying every minute of her tongue on your pussy.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5
 						gs 'stat'
-						act 'Give her a bj':
+						act 'Give her a blowjob':
 							cla & *clr
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo4.jpg"></center>'
-							'She stops licking you and undresses herself, then sits down on the bed next to your face. You know what she wants even before she grabs ahold of your head and pulls it towards her hard dick. You open your mouth and start sucking on her cock at once, the taste if her precum on your tongue arouses you even more. You keep your lips wrapped tightly around her dick as you bob your head up and down sucking her off. Unexpectedly she slaps your ass. "Alright enough, lay down, so I can fuck that hot, wet pussy of yours."'
+							'She stops licking your pussy and undresses herself before sitting down on the bed next to you. She grabs hold of your head and pulls it towards her hard dick. You open your mouth and start sucking it, the taste of her precum on your tongue arousing you even more. You keep your lips wrapped tightly around her dick as you bob your head up and down until she slaps your ass. "Okay, that''s enough. Lie down so I can fuck that nice wet pussy of yours."'
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Let her fuck you':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo5.jpg"></center>'
-								'You stop sucking her and roll over onto you back, then spreading your legs wide. She walks over to your between your knees on her knees, once there she slides the tip of her dick against your already wet slit, before sliding her cock in your twat. She starts fucking you slowly at first but going balls deep in you as she does. You start moaning right away, as you feel her filling you up.'
+								'You stop sucking her and roll over onto your back, spreading your legs wide. She moves in between your legs and slides the tip of her dick against your already wet slit before pushing her cock into your pussy. She starts fucking you slowly at first, but starts going faster as you start moaning at the sensation of her filling you.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Get fucked some more':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo6.jpg"></center>'
-									'As you start moaning more, she starts picking up the pace, fucking you a bit harder and faster. Which only makes you moan louder and louder, just as it is really starting to feel good she pulls out of you. "Roll over."'
+									'As you start moaning louder, she picks up the pace and starts fucking you harder and faster. Just as it''s really starting to feel good, she pulls out of you. "Roll over." she demands.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Roll over':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo7.jpg"></center>'
-										'You roll over onto all fours, but instead of sliding it in your pussy again. You feel her cock pressing against your asshole. "That''s my ass." You tell her.'
-										'She thrusts forwards, causing her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick to pop into your butthole. Even with only the natural lube from your pussy, it is enough to let is slide in easily, stretching your backdoor out. You hiss in pain for a moment as she says simply. "I know."'
-										'She stands up behind you and shoves her cock balls deep in your ass, as she starts fucking you deeply but not to fast. You blow out your breath several times, until it stops hurting, soon it is starting to feel good again.'
+										'You roll over onto all fours, but instead of sliding back into your pussy, you feel her cock pressing against your asshole. "That''s my ass!" you call out.'
+										'She thrusts forwards, causing her <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick to pop into your asshole. Even the natural lube from your pussy is enough to let it slide in easily, stretching your backdoor. You hiss in pain as she leans in and whispers in your ear. "I know..."'
+										'She stands up behind you and shoves her cock balls deep into your ass. She starts fucking you deeply, but not too fast. You grit your teeth until it stops hurting and starts feeling good.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Get butt fucked':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo8.jpg"></center>'
-											'She grabs a bottle of lube out of the bed side table and squirts it on her dick as it slides in and out of your anus, lubing things up a lot more. Soon she starts hammering your ass hard, her hips smacking against your butt cheeks, hard enough it starts forcing you forward until you are laying on your stomach, while she fucks your ass.'
+											'She grabs a bottle of lube out of the bed side table and squirts it on her dick as it slides in and out of your ass. With your ass now slick, she starts hammering your backdoor hard, her hips smacking against your ass cheeks hard enough to force you forward until you''re flat on your stomach.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 											gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'A89', 1
 											gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -505,16 +508,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photography':
 											act 'Roll over':
 												*clr & cla
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo9.jpg"></center>'
-												'Suddenly she pulls out of you. "Come on roll over again." You do as she says and rolls over, as you do she gets off the bed and then drags you to the edge of the bed, where your butt is nearly hanging off it. While standing along side the bed and your legs spread wide, she slides her dick back in your gapping ass. This time it slides in with no problem at all and no pain, she starts fucking your ass hard and fast again.'
+												'After a few minutes, she pulls out of you again. "Roll over again."' 
+												'You do as she says and rolls over as she gets off the bed and drags you to the edge. She spreads your legs spread wide, slides her dick back into your gaping ass and starts fucking you hard and fast again.'
 												gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lube'
 												gs 'stat'
 												act 'Cumming':
 													*clr & cla
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/eugene/sex/photo10.jpg"></center>'
-													'She starts grunting, then pulls out of you. She barely clears your gapping asshole before streams of cum shoot out of her dick, landing on your thighs. She strokes her cock a few more times to squeeze out the last few drops on you, before she wipes the tip off against your thigh. She glances over at the clock.'
+													'After a few minutes, she starts grunting and barely pulls out of you before streams of cum shoot out of her dick and splatter across your thighs. She jerks her cock a few times to squeeze out the last few drops before she wipes the tip against your thigh. She then glances over at the clock and jumps up.'
 													*nl
-													'"Fuck I need to get back to work, this was fun and all but I am already late." With that she starts getting dressed in her work clothes again and tosses you, your clothes. Grabbing some tissues you clean her cum off you, before hurriedly get dressed.'
-													'She leads you out and locks the door, then gives you a quick kiss. "I had a wonderful time, come see me again." With that she jogs off heading back to work, leaving you just outside her building.'
+													'"Fuck, I need to get back to work! This was fun and all, but I''m already late." With that, she starts getting dressed into her work clothes and your clothes at you. Grabbing some tissues, you clean her cum off you before quickly getting dressed youself.'
+													'Once you''re both dressed, she leads you out and locks the door before giving you a quick kiss. "I had a wonderful time. Come and see me again." With that, she jogs off back to work, leaving you outside her building.'
 													gs 'cum_call', 'legs', 'A89', 1
 													gs 'arousal', 'end'
 													cumspclnt = 17

locations/lakecafe.qsrc

@@ -13,29 +13,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 	'<center><B><font color=maroon>The Lake Cafe</font></B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakecafe.jpg"></center>'
-	'An old-fashioned BBQ café/diner near the lake, known for offering relatively cheap but tasty meals. Russia is littered with these.'
-	'Opening hours: 14:00 to 04:00'
+	'An old-fashioned BBQ café/diner near the lake, known for offering relatively cheap but tasty meals.'
+	'Opening hours are from 14:00 until 04:00'
 	*nl
 
 	act 'Leave the cafe': minut += 2 & gt 'city_industrial'
 
 	if hour >= 14 or hour < 4:
 		if npc_QW['A89'] = 0:
-			if barrnd = 1:'Behind the bar you see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a>, who is currently polishing some glasses.'
-			if barrnd = 2:'Inside the diner you see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a>, who is currently picking up some dirty dishes and cleaning a table.'
-			if barrnd = 3:'Behind the bar you see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a>, who is currently making some mixed drinks skilfully.'
+			if barrnd = 1:'You see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a> behind the bar polishing some glasses.'
+			if barrnd = 2:'When you walk into the diner, you see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a> picking up some dirty dishes and cleaning a table.'
+			if barrnd = 3:'You see a smiling <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">barmaid</a> behind the bar skilfully making some drinks.'
 		elseif npc_QW['A89'] = 1:
-			if barrnd = 1:'Behind the bar you see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a>, with that perpetual smile on her face. She''s currently polishing some glasses, it must be a slow period.'
-			if barrnd = 2:'Inside the diner you see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a>, with that perpetual smile on her face. She''s collecting dirty dishes from tables.'
-			if barrnd = 3:'Behind the bar you see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a>, with that perpetual smile on her face. She''s skilfully mixing some drinks for customers, making a show out of it.'
+			if barrnd = 1:'You see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a> behind the bar with that perpetual smile on her face. She''s currently polishing some glasses.'
+			if barrnd = 2:'You walk into the diner and see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a> with that perpetual smile on her face collecting dirty dishes from tables.'
+			if barrnd = 3:'You see <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'', ''barmensha''">Eugene</a> behind the bar with that perpetual smile on her face. She''s skilfully mixing some drinks.'
 		end
 
 		if week = 1 and hour = 22:
 			LCWorkRand = rand(1,6)
 			if LCWorkRand = 1:
 				randguycafe = rand(3, 6)
-				if LCwork = 0:'A group of men is seated at one of the tables. They''re talking loudly and laughing, while having drinks.'
-				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start1''"><<randguycafe>> men</a> are seated at one of the tables. They''re talking loudly and laughing, while having drinks.'
+				if LCwork = 0:'A group of men are seated at one of the tables. They''re talking loudly and laughing while having drinks.'
+				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start1''"><<randguycafe>> men</a> are seated at one of the tables. They''re talking loudly and laughing while having drinks.'
 			elseif LCWorkRand = 2:
 				if LCwork = 0:'An older man is sitting at one of the tables, enjoying his meal.'
 				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start2''">An older man</a> is sitting at one of the tables, enjoying his meal.'
@@ -43,18 +43,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 				if LCwork = 0:'Two guys are sitting at one of the tables in a corner. They''ve clearly had a few drinks already.'
 				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start3''">Two men</a> are sitting at one of the tables. They''ve clearly had a few drinks already.'
 			elseif LCWorkRand = 4:
-				if LCwork = 0:'A fairly young couple is seated at one of the tables. They''re in a lively discussion. The girl seems a bit embarrassed about something, while the guy exudes confidence.'
-				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start4''">A fairly young couple</a> is seated at one of the tables. They''re in a lively discussion. The girl seems a bit embarrassed about something, while the guy exudes confidence.'
+				if LCwork = 0:'A fairly young couple are seated at one of the tables having a lively discussion. The girl seems a bit embarrassed about something, while the guy exudes confidence.'
+				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start4''">A fairly young couple</a> are seated at one of the tables having a lively discussion. The girl seems a bit embarrassed about something, while the guy exudes confidence.'
 			elseif LCWorkRand = 5:
 				if LCwork = 0:'A woman sits by herself at one of the tables, enjoying a nice meal.'
 				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start5''">A woman</a> sits by herself at one of the tables, enjoying a nice meal.'
 			elseif LCWorkRand = 6:
-				if LCwork = 0:'A fat man is sitting at one of the tables. He''s loudly talking on his phone, receiving a few disgruntled looks from other visitors.'
-				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start6''">A fat man</a> is sitting at one of the tables. He''s loudly talking on his phone, receiving a few disgruntled looks from other visitors.'
+				if LCwork = 0:'A fat man is sitting at one of the tables. He''s loudly talking on his phone, receiving a few disgruntled looks from other diners.'
+				if LCwork = 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''LCwork'', ''start6''">A fat man</a> is sitting at one of the tables. He''s loudly talking on his phone, receiving a few disgruntled looks from other diners.'
 			end
 		end
 
-		if hour => 23: 'In a fairly secluded corner of the diner, several <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'',''bandits''">shady looking men</a> are sitting around a small table. They talk in hushed voices amongst each another, and look like they might very well be criminals.'
+		if hour => 23: 'Several <a href="exec:gt ''lakecafe'',''bandits''">shady looking men</a> are sitting around a small table in a fairly secluded corner of the diner. They talk in hushed voices amongst each another, and look like they might very well be criminals.'
 	
 		'The diner has a single <a href="exec:gt ''laketoilet'', ''main''">toilet</a> available, for both males and females.'
 
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 	end
 
 	if LCwork2 >= 1 and LCwork2day ! daystart and hour = 18: 
-		act 'Help out the kitchen': gt 'lakecafe', 'Kitchen'
+		act 'Help out in the kitchen': gt 'lakecafe', 'Kitchen'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -93,27 +93,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakebarmensha.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	if npc_QW['A89'] = 0:
-		'The barmaid gives you a warm smile, and looks you straight in the eyes as she says: "Hi there! Can I get you anything?"'
+		'The barmaid gives you a warm smile as she looks you straight in the eyes. "Hi there! Can I get you anything?"'
 	elseif npc_QW['A89'] = 1:
-		'Eugene smiles as she sees you approach the bar, and says cheerfully: "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>! What''s up?"'
+		'Eugene smiles as she sees you approach the bar and cheerfully greets you. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>! What''s up?"'
 	end
 	act 'Leave Eugene so she can work':gt 'lakecafe', 'main'
 	if hour >= 14 or hour < 4:
 		if npc_QW['A89'] = 0:
-			act 'Chat with the barmaid (0:30)':
+			act 'Chat with the barmaid':
 				*clr & cla
 				npc_QW['A89'] = 1
 				npc_rel['A89'] = 20
 				minut += 30
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakebarmensha.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend a half hour chatting with the barmaid. She''s very open, and you learn a lot about her.'
-				'Her name is Eugene, and she works here together with her sister, Angela. Angela is the cook, and Eugene is the barmaid in the diner. The two of them work here all days of the week, and wouldn''t have it any other way!'
+				'You spend some time chatting with the barmaid. She''s very open, and you learn a lot about her.'
+				'Her name is Eugene, and she works here with her sister, Angela, who is a chef in the kitchen. They both work every day of the week, and wouldn''t have it any other way.'
 				act 'Continue':gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 			end
 		end
 		if npc_QW['A89'] => 1:
-			act 'Chat with Eugene (0:30)':
+			act 'Chat with Eugene':
 				*clr & cla
 				npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 				minut += 30
@@ -122,71 +122,70 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 				if npc_rel['A89'] < 10:
 					'Eugene glares at you. "I have nothing to say to you."'
 				elseif npc_rel['A89'] < 40 and LCEugenefirst = 0:
-					'You spend a half hour chatting with Eugene, getting to know her a little bit better. You chat about all sorts of things; your lives, work, and current events.'
+					'You spend some time chatting with Eugene, getting to know her a little bit better. You chat about all sorts of things; your lives, work and current events.'
 				elseif lakepater[0] > 0:
-					'You spend a half hour discussing the family with Eugene.'
+					'You spend time discussing family with Eugene.'
 				else
 					if rand(1,5) = 1 and LCEugenefirst > 0 and eugene_randy ! daystart:
 						eugene_randy = daystart
 						*clr & cla
-						'Eugene smiles at you, with a glimmer in her eye. You can see her clothing slightly bulging, making you think her penis is erect.'
+						'Eugene smiles at you with a glimmer in her eye. You can see her clothing slightly bulging, making you think her cock is hard.'
 						if LCknowslut > 0:
 							'She grabs your hand and starts to lead you to the back room.'
 							act 'Resist':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/no.jpg"></center>'
-								'"No!" You say to her.'
+								'"No!" you shout in resistance.'
 								'She seems disappointed as she lets go of your hand.'
 								'"We both know what kind of girl you are, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t pretend you aren''t."'
 								act 'Resist':
 									*clr & cla
 									npc_rel['A89'] -= 5
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/no.jpg"></center>'
-									'"I said no!" You say to her.'
-									'She seems annoyed with you. "What suddenly I''m not good enough for you? Or do I need to pay for it? Never mind just go."'
+									'"I said no!" you fiercely reply.'
+									'She seems annoyed with you. "What? Suddenly I''m not good enough for you? Or do I need to pay for it? Never mind, just go."'
 									act 'Continue':gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 								end
 								act 'Relent':
 									*clr & cla
 									npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-									'You sigh a little. "Ok fine."'
-									'She smiles a little and takes you by the hand. "Don''t worry you won''t regret this." Then she leads you into the back.'
-									act 'Go with her.': gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
+									'You sigh. "Okay, fine."'
+									'She smiles and takes you by the hand. "Don''t worry, you won''t regret this."'
+									act 'Go with her': gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
 								end
 							end
 							act 'Agree':
 								*clr & cla
 								npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-								'You smile to her. "Sounds good to me."'
+								'You smile at her. "Sounds good to me."'
 								'She smiles and leads you into the back.'
-								act 'Go with her.': gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
+								act 'Go with her': gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
 							end
 						else
 							'"I seem to have a growing problem, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Could you help me out?"'
-							'When you nod, she continues: "How about you follow me to a back room, and we have some fun?"'
 							act 'Not today':
 								*clr & cla
 								npc_rel['A89'] -= 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-								'You shake your head. "Maybe some other day, I''m just not in the mood today." You say to her.'
-								'She seems disappointed as she lets go of your hand. "Ok, I understand. Maybe some other time." With that she goes back to work, you can tell she is disappointed.'
+								'You shake your head. "Maybe another day. I''m just not in the mood today." you reply.'
+								'She lets go of your hand. "Okay, I understand. Maybe some other time." She goes back to work, but you can tell she is disappointed.'
 								act 'Continue':gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 							end
-							act 'Follow her into a back room':
+							act 'Of course':
 								*clr & cla
 								npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-								'When you nod, she continues: "How about you follow me to a back room, and we have some fun?" Eugene guides you out to the back room.'
+								'She smiles when you nod. "Okay, how about you follow me and we have some fun?" she says as she grabs your hand and leads you out to the back room.'
 								gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
 							end
 						end
 					else
-						'You spend a half hour chatting with Eugene. You chat about all sorts of things; your lives, work, and current events.'
+						'You spend time chatting with Eugene. You chat about all sorts of things; your lives, work and current events.'
 						if portfolio_people[6] ! 1 and LCEugenefirst > 0:
 							gs 'camera', 'check_person', 'eugene'
-							act 'Decide not to ask': gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
+							act 'Don''t ask': gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -201,18 +200,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakebarmensha.jpg"></center>'
 				if npc_rel['A89'] >= 60:
-					'While you chat with Eugene you flirt with her to your heart''s delight, tossing in as many double innuendos as you can.'
-					'After a few minutes, she smiles wolfishly at you and says: "You want me, don''t you?"'
-					'When you nod, she continues: "How about you follow me to a back room, and we have some fun?"'
-					'Wow, that was easy!'
-					'You nod again and follow Eugene, feeling your heart pound in your chest while you stare at her ass.'
-					act 'Follow her into a back room':
+					'You flirt with Eugene as you chat, tossing in as many double innuendos as you can.'
+					'After a few minutes, she smiles wolfishly at you. "You want me, don''t you?"'
+					'She smiles when you nod. "How about you follow me out back and we have some fun?"'
+					'You nod and follow Eugene, feeling your heart pound in your chest as you stare at her ass.'
+					act 'Follow her':
 						if LCEugenefirst = 0:gt 'eugeneev1', 'firsttime'
 						if LCEugenefirst = 1:gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex'
 					end
 				else
-					'While you chat with Eugene you flirt with her to your heart''s delight, tossing in as many double innuendos as you can.'
-					'She flirts back a little, but it is hard to tell if she is being friendly or if she is really flirting. She has not given you a strong indication one way or the other yet.'
+					'You flirt with Eugene as you chat, tossing in as many double innuendos as you can.'
+					'She flirts back a little, but it''s hard to tell if she''s just being friendly or not. She''s not given you a strong indication one way or the other yet.'
 					act 'Continue':gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 				end
 			end
@@ -222,9 +220,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakebarmensha.jpg"></center>'
 				if LCworkwork2 < 1:
-					'You ask Eugene: "I''m looking for a job. Would you happen to know about anything?"'
-					'Eugene ponders for a second and offers: "Actually, my sister always complains about how busy she is in the kitchen, during the early evening hours! If you come between 18:00 and 19:00, you could probably help her out in the kitchen for about three hours. We''d be able to pay you 300 <b>₽</b> for your troubles!"'
-					'You smile at her and thank her, saying you''ll keep it in mind.'
+					'"I''m looking for a job. Would you happen to know about anything?" you ask Eugene with a smile.'
+					'She ponders for a second before answering. "Actually, my sister always complains about how busy she is in the kitchen during the early evening hours. If you come between 18:00 and 19:00, you could probably help her out for a bit. We''d pay you 300 <b>₽</b> for your troubles!"'
+					'You smile at and thank her, saying you''ll keep it in mind.'
 					LCworkwork2 = 1
 					LCwork2 = 1
 					act 'Continue':
@@ -232,7 +230,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 						gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 					end
 				else
-					'When you ask Eugene about a job, she laughs: "Did you forget, <<$pcs_nickname>>? I already told you that my sister could use some help in the kitchen, during the early evening hours! If you come between 18:00 and 19:00, you can help her out for about three hours! We can pay you 300 <b>₽</b> for your time."'
+					'When you ask Eugene about a job, she laughs. "Did you forget <<$pcs_nickname>>? I already told you that my sister could use some help in the kitchen! If you come between 18:00 and 19:00, you can help her out for a bit and we''ll pay you 300 <b>₽</b> for your time."'
 					act 'Thank her for the reminder':
 						minut += 4
 						gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
@@ -245,21 +243,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/lakebarmensha.jpg"></center>'
 				if LCworkwork = 0:
-					'During a slow moment, you ask Eugene: "Say, I''ve overheard some of the customers talking fondly about a ''special'' service this diner has. What''s that all about?"'
+					'You pull Eugene aside during a slow moment. "I''ve overheard some of the customers talking fondly about a ''special'' service this diner has. What''s that all about?"'
 					if npc_love['A89'] > 80:
-						'Eugene blushes and says: "That''s something some of the girls do here. It would hurt me to see you doing that, love"'
+						'Eugene blushes. "That''s something some of the girls do here. It would hurt me to see you doing that though."'
 					elseif npc_love['A89'] > 60:
-						'Eugene blushes and says: "That''s something some of the girls do here. I don''t think you should do it, <<$pcs_nickname>>"'
+						'Eugene blushes. "That''s something some of the girls do here. I don''t think you should do it, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 						act 'Press for more information':
 							*clr & cla
-							'You press for more information.'
-							'Eugene seems to be hurt by your insistance to find out more. She begs you not to ask any more.'
-							act 'Refuse to relent.':
+							'You press for more information, but Eugene seems to be hurt by your insistance. She begs you not to ask any more.'
+							act 'Refuse to relent':
 								*clr & cla
 								npc_love['A89'] -= 5
 								npc_rel['A89'] -= 20
-								'You refuse to relent.'
-								'Eugene sighs: "All our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say: ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. Please don''t do it, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+								'You refuse to relent and Eugene sighs. "All our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means, but I beg you, please don''t do it <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
 								'You see tears forming in her eyes.'
 								gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'easy'
 								if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -292,14 +288,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 							end
 						end
 					elseif npc_love['A89'] > 30:
-						'Eugene blushes and says: "That''s something some of the girls do here. It''s not something I would like to see you doing, <<$pcs_nickname>>"'
+						'Eugene blushes. "That''s something some of the girls do here, but it''s not something I would like to see you doing, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 						act 'Press for more information':
 							*clr & cla
-							'You press Eugene for more information.'
-							'Eugene seems to be hurt by your insistance to find out more, but she reluctantly relents.'
-							'"All our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say: ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
-							'Before you leave, she adds: "Please don''t do it. I''m starting to care for you and..."'
-							'She looks away from you.'
+							'You press Eugene for more information and Eugene seems to be hurt by your insistance, but she reluctantly relents.'
+							'"All our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
+							'Before you leave, she adds "Please don''t do it though. I''m starting to care for you and..." She looks away from you before finishing her sentence.'
 							gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'easy'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 								act 'Say you won''t do it (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -331,14 +325,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 						end
 					else
 						if LCknowslut = 0:
-							'Eugene ponders for a moment, but then decides she can trust you and says: "We... we do offer special services, once a week. It''s every Monday, at 22:00. I''m not sure it''s something you would be interested in."'
-							'When you seem confused, she confesses: "It''s... it''s borderline prostitution, really. Some of the girls working here earn some extra money on the side, by offering their services to our customers after work. It happened sporadically at first, but then it became so popular that we organize a weekly event now. Customers can hook up with our waitresses, and our waitresses can earn some extra cash if they want. Everybody wins... right?"'
+							'Eugene ponders for a minute before deciding that she can trust you. "We... we do offer special services, once a week. It''s every Monday, at 22:00. I''m not sure it''s something you would be interested in though..."'
+							'She confesses when she sees the confusion on your face. "It''s... it''s borderline prostitution, really. Some of the girls working here earn some extra money on the side by offering themselves to our customers after work. It happened sporadically at first, but then it became so popular that we organize a weekly event now. Customers can hook up with our waitresses, and our waitresses can earn some extra cash if they want. Everybody wins... right?"'
 							act 'Ask for more information':
 								*clr & cla
-								'Eugene notices that spark in your eye, and laughs: "I see you might be interested after all!"'
-								'You play it cool for now: "Maybe. But just in case I were, how does it work?"'
-								'She gives you a kind smile: "I trust you, so... okay. I''ll let you do it if you want. Like I said, all our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say: ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
-								'Before you leave, she adds: "Keep in mind that the diner is just a meeting area; whatever happens when you leave with someone is between you and them! Don''t embarrass us though, we''d hate to lose regular customers, no matter how perverted they might be!" She added the last bit with a laugh and a wink.'
+								'Eugene notices the spark in your eye and laughs. "I see you might be interested after all!"'
+								'You play it cool. "Maybe. But just in case I were, how does it work?"'
+								'She gives you a kind smile. "I trust you, so... okay. I''ll let you do it if you want. Like I said, all our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
+								'Before you leave, she adds "Keep in mind that the diner is just a meeting area; whatever happens when you leave with someone is between you and them! Don''t embarrass us though, we''d hate to lose regular customers, no matter how perverted they might be!" She added the last bit with a laugh and a wink.'
 								act 'Say you''ll think about it':
 									*clr & cla
 									LCworkwork = 1
@@ -350,7 +344,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 						else
 							'Eugene smiles at you. "This is something right up your alley"'
 							'All our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say: ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 2,000 <b>₽</b>."'
-							'Before you leave, she adds: "Keep in mind that the diner is just a meeting area; whatever happens when you leave with someone is between you and them! Don''t embarrass us though, we''d hate to lose regular customers, no matter how perverted they might be!" She added the last bit with a laugh and a wink.'
+							'Before you leave, she adds "Keep in mind that the diner is just a meeting area; whatever happens when you leave with someone is between you and them! Don''t embarrass us though, we''d hate to lose regular customers, no matter how perverted they might be."'
 							act 'Thank her for the information':
 								*clr & cla
 								LCworkwork = 1
@@ -363,7 +357,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 				elseif LCworkwork = 1:
 					if LCknowslut = 1 and npc_love['A89'] > 30:
 						'Eugene glares at you.'
-						'"Did you come to brag about how much of a slut you are, <<$pcs_firstname>>? If you want to prostitute yourself out, come monday night between 2200 and 2300 and show the men here what kind of a person you are. Just don''t lose us any customers."'
+						'"Did you come to brag about how much of a slut you are, <<$pcs_firstname>>? If you want to whore yourself out, come here on Monday night between 22:00 and 23:00 and show the men here what kind of a person you are. Just don''t lose us any customers."'
 						'She turns around and walks away from you.'
 						npc_love['A89'] = -5
 						act 'Continue':
@@ -371,8 +365,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'barmensha':
 							gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
 						end
 					else
-						'"So you''re still interested in that, huh?" Eugene smirks, when you mention the special work.'
-						'She reminds you: "Like I said, our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money using your body, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say: ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 2,000 <b>₽</b>."'
+						'"So you''re still interested in that, huh?" she smirks when you mention the special work. "Like I said, our regulars know that we ''arrange meetings'' every Monday between 22:00 and 23:00. If you''re here at that time and want to earn some money using your body, introduce yourself to the person or group you want to service and say ''I''ll be your waitress tonight.'' They''ll know what it means. From what the girls told me, they get paid between 500 and 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
 						act 'Thank her for the reminder':
 							minut += 3
 							gt 'lakecafe', 'barmensha'
@@ -392,21 +385,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Kitchen':
 	money += 300
 	LCwork2day = daystart
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/kitchenworkcafe.jpg"></center>'
-	'Eugene gives you a warm smile and says: "That would be great, thanks!" Then she hands you a hat and a apron to wear while you work. Once you put them on, you get to work.'
+	'Eugene gives you a warm smile. "That would be great, thanks!" She then hands you a hat and an apron to wear while you work. Once you put them on, you get to work.'
 	if rand(1,5) = 1 and LCEugenefirst > 0 and eugene_randy ! daystart:
 		eugene_randy = daystart
 		*clr & cla
-		'As you work in the kitchen chopping up vegetables, Angela leaves. A few moments later Eugene comes in and walks up behind you, leaning against your back. You can feel her breasts against your back and her stiff cock against your ass.'
+		'Angela leaves as you''re in the middle of chopping vegetables. A few seconds later, Eugene comes in and walks up behind you, leaning against your back. You can feel her breasts against your back and her stiff cock against your ass.'
 		'"I seem to have a growing problem, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Could you help me out?"'
-		'When you nod, she continues: "How about you follow me to a back room, and we have some fun?"'
 		act 'Not today':
 			*clr & cla
 			npc_rel['A89'] -= 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-			'You shake your head. "Maybe some other day, I''m just not in the mood today." You say to her.'
-			'She seems disappointed as she lets go of your hand. "Ok, I understand. Maybe some other time." With that she goes back to work, you can tell she is disappointed.'
+			'You shake your head. "Maybe another day. I''m just not in the mood today." you reply.'
+			'She lets go of your hand. "Okay, I understand. Maybe some other time." She goes back to work, but you can tell she is disappointed.'
 			act 'Continue':
-				'You spend the rest of the time washing dishes, cleaning the floors, chopping vegetables and cooking food. When you''re finished, Eugene gives you your well-earned 300 <b>₽</b>.'
+				'You spend the rest of the time washing dishes, cleaning the floors and chopping vegetables. When you''re finished, Eugene gives you your well-earned 300 <b>₽</b>.'
 				act 'Finish work': gt 'lakecafe', 'main'
 			end
 		end
@@ -414,12 +406,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Kitchen':
 			*clr & cla
 			npc_rel['A89'] += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big89.jpg"></center>'
-			'When you nod, she continues: "How about you follow me to a back room, and we have some fun?" Eugene guides you out to the back room.'
+			'She smiles when you nod. "Okay, how about you follow me and we have some fun?" she says as she grabs your hand and leads you out to the back room.'
 			npc_horny['A89'] = 49
 			gt 'eugeneev1', 'sex_work'
 		end
 	else
-		'You spend the next three hours washing dishes, cleaning the floors, chopping vegetables and cooking food. When you''re finished, Eugene gives you your well-earned 300 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'You spend the next three hours washing dishes, cleaning the floors and chopping vegetables. When you''re finished, Eugene gives you your well-earned 300 <b>₽</b>.'
 		act 'Finish work': gt 'lakecafe', 'main'
 	end
 end
@@ -430,39 +422,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bandits':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><B><font color=maroon>Criminals</font></B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/bbq/bandits.jpg"></center>'
-	'A group of tough men, clearly very different from the other visitors this diner usually gets. Their dark clothes and threatening demeanor leave no doubt in your mind: these men are criminals. Fairly well organized, and probably dangerous criminals.'
-	'You overheard that they will loan people money, but at abysmal terms. They demand 20% interest, and give you 7 days to repay the debt. Several girls who were unable to repay their debts have disappeared.'
+	'A group of tough men, clearly very different from the other visitors this diner usually gets, sit around the table. Their dark clothes and threatening demeanor leave no doubt in your mind: these men are criminals. Fairly well organized, and probably dangerous criminals.'
+	'You overheard that they loan people money with abysmal terms. They demand 20% interest, and give you 7 days to repay the debt. Several girls who were unable to repay their debts have disappeared.'
 	''
 	if workDolg > 0:
-		'One of them notices you and says: "Hey, you! You know you owe us <B><<workDolg>></B> <b>₽</b>? We want it back, and soon!"'
+		'One of them notices you and says "Hey, you! You know you owe us <B><<workDolg>></B> <b>₽</b>? We want it back, and soon!"'
 	else
-		'"Are you lost, girl? Get lost!", one of them grunts menacingly.'
+		'"Are you lost, girl? Fuck off!" one of them grunts menacingly.'
 	end
-	act '<B>Leave them alone</B>':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
+	act 'Leave them alone':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
 	act 'Ask to borrow money':
 		intinp = input ("How much money do you want to borrow?")
 		if intinp <= 0:
 			'"You want to borrow... no money? Quit wasting our time!" one of them shouts, rather annoyed at your inability to choose an amount.'
 		elseif intinp > 2000000:
-			'"Do we look like the National Bank, girl? Don''t be ridiculous!" one of them scoffs. They can''t lend you that much!'
+			'"Do we look like the National Bank, girl? Don''t be ridiculous!" one of them scoffs.'
 		elseif intinp > 0 and intinp <= 2000000:
 			*clr & cla
 			money += intinp
 			workDolg += intinp + (intinp/100)*20
 			workDolgDay = 7
-			'One of them extends his hand and says: "Passport."'
-			'With your passport in his hand, he makes a few quick phone calls. He writes a bunch of stuff down, and then gives you your passport back, plus a wad of cash! As if it''s nothing!'
-			'"Listen up, <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>," he grunts. "You have <<workDolgDay>> days to pay back the <<intinp>> <b>₽</b>, plus <<(intinp/100)*20>> <b>₽</b> in interest."'
-			'When you nod, he grabs your wrist roughly and says in a menacing voice: "I''m warning you, do not screw us over! I know everything about you, and I will get my money back! One way or the other."'
-			act '<B>Promise you''ll pay, and leave</B>':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
+			'One of them extends his hand out at you. "Passport. Now."'
+			'With your passport in his hand, he makes a few quick phone calls. He writes some stuff down before handing you your passport back, along with your money.'
+			'"Listen up, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>," he grunts. "You have <<workDolgDay>> days to pay back the <<intinp>> <b>₽</b>, plus <<(intinp/100)*20>> <b>₽</b> in interest."'
+			'When you nod, he grabs your wrist roughly. "<i>Don''t</i> screw us over! I know everything about you, and I <i>will</i> get my money back, one way or the other..."'
+			act 'Promise you''ll pay and leave':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
 		end
 	end
 	if workDolg > 0:
 		*clr & cla
-		act '<B>Move away</B>':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
+		act 'Move away':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
 		act 'Promise you''ll pay him on time':
-			'You tell him: "Relax, I''ll pay you back on time! I swear!"'
-			'"Talk is cheap, <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. You have <<workDolgDay>> days, don''t forget!" he shrugs, and turns back to his associates.'
+			'"I''ll pay you back on time! I swear!" you plead.'
+			'"Talk is cheap, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. You have <<workDolgDay>> days, don''t forget!" he shrugs, and turns back to his associates.'
 		end
 	end
 	if workDolg > 0 and money >= workDolg:
@@ -473,9 +465,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bandits':
 			money -= workDolg
 			workDolg = 0
 			gs'stat'
-			'You pay back the money you owe the criminals. The man who gave you the money seems a tad surprised but quickly pockets the money.'
-			'"Excellent! I knew I could trust you, pleasure doing business!" he grins, even though it''s fairly obvious he''s lying through his teeth.'
-			act '<B>Leave them alone</B>':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
+			'You pay back the money you owe the criminals. The man who gave you the money seems surprised, but quickly pockets the money.'
+			'"Excellent, I knew I could trust you! Pleasure doing business!" he grins, even though it''s fairly obvious he''s lying through his teeth.'
+			act 'Leave them alone':gt'lakecafe', 'main'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -485,12 +477,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bandits':
 		workDisk = 0
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/street/bug.jpg"></center>'
 		'When two very broad men approach you, you can''t help but notice the distinct outline of pistols underneath their clothes.'
-		'They look at you with disdain, and one of them says: "You. It''s time you repay your debt."'
+		'They look at you with disdain, and one of them says "You. It''s time you repay your debt."'
 		if money >= workDolg:
 			money -= workDolg
 			workDolg = 0
-			'You give the man the amount of money you owe, and he counts it meticulously. Then he nods to his colleague: "It''s all there."'
-			'The other guy already had his gun in his hand and puts it away reluctantly. He says in a menacing voice: "I guess you''re off the hook, for now, consider yourself lucky!"'
+			'You give the man the amount of money you owe, and he counts it meticulously before he nods to his colleague. "It''s all there."'
+			'The other man already had his gun in his hand and reluctantly puts it away. "I guess you''re off the hook, for now. Consider yourself lucky!" he says in a menacing tone.'
 			act 'Watch them leave': gt 'lakecafe', 'main'
 		else
 			if (money + stolmoney + karta) >= workDolg:
@@ -499,9 +491,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bandits':
 				karta = 0
 				money -= workDolg
 				workDolg = 0
-				'You don''t have the full amount on you, but you have enough at home! When you tell them that, one of the drones grunts: "Oh really? Very original! We''re coming with! I''m not letting you out of my sight for even one second, until your debt is paid!"'
-				'The men follow you to your place, and wait impatiently while you collect the money you owe them. When you produce the full amount, they actually seem a bit surprised.'
-				'"Huh, guess you weren''t lying after all," one says, after counting it twice. "Consider your debt paid, miss. Pleasure doing business."'
+				'You don''t have the full amount on you, but you tell them that you have the rest at home. "Oh really? Very original! We''re coming with you! I''m not letting you out of my sight for even one second until your debt is paid!" one of the men grunts.'
+				'The men follow you to your home, and wait impatiently while you collect the money you owe them. When you produce the full amount, they actually seem a bit surprised.'
+				'"Huh. I guess you weren''t lying after all," one says after counting it twice. "Consider your debt paid, miss. Pleasure doing business."'
 				act 'Close the door behind them': gt $home_entrance, 'start'
 			else
 				money += stolmoney + karta
@@ -511,19 +503,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bandits':
 				money = 0
 				workDolg += 10000
 				'"I... I don''t have the money, I''m sorry!" you tell the guys, who roughly grab you by the shoulders the moment you confess.'
-				'"Oh, you will be sorry!" one laughs at you, not even worried. They walk to your house with you between them, never even asking for directions. Apparently they knew where you live. Hiding would''ve been pointless.'
-				'One brute searches your house, piling up all the money you do have while the other keeps you at gunpoint.'
-				'"Still not enough, huh." the man holding you the gun says matter-of-factly. "So, here''s what''s gonna happen. Since you can''t pay your debt and we have to go through all this trouble of getting it back, consider your debt increased by another 10,000 <b>₽</b>. Don''t you worry your pretty little head, though! We''re going to give you an alternative way to pay it off."'
-				'"Hah! That pretty face will come in handy there!" the other laughs.'
-				'Without explaining further, they drag you to a car outside your apartment and throw you into the back seat. About a half hour later, the car pulls over and one of the drones tells you to get out. You''re at a sauna building in the city.'
+				'"Oh, you will be sorry!" one laughs at you. They walk to your apartment with you between them, never even asking for directions.'
+				'Once you arrive, one of the men searches your house, piling up all the money you do have, while the other holds you at gunpoint.'
+				'"Still not enough, huh?" the man holding you the gun mutters as the other finishes his search. "So, here''s what''s gonna happen. Since you can''t pay your debt and we have to go through all this trouble getting it back, consider your debt increased by another 10,000 <b>₽</b>. Don''t you worry your pretty little head, though. We''re going to give you an alternative way to pay it off."'
+				'"Ha! That pretty face will come in handy there!" the other laughs.'
+				'Without explaining further, they drag you to a car outside your apartment and throw you into the back seat. About half an hour later, the car pulls over and one of the men tells you to get out. You''re at a sauna building in the city.'
 				act 'Get out of the car':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 30
 					gs'stat'
-					'After one of the criminals made sure the coast is clear, the two of them pull you out of the car and escort you to a room inside the sauna building. One leaves the room, and the other explains: "Until you pay off your debts, we own you! You will live here and work here, until you pay off your debts. Any expenses you incur while you are here will be added to your debt. Understood?"'
-					'Silence fills the room as he waits for you to acknowledge what he just said. Mortified about what might happen if you don''t, you nod. He decides to paint the picture anyway: "If you try to escape or refuse to work, we''ll put a bullet in your head, chop you up and bury you in the woods in pieces! And that would be a waste, with a pretty face such as yours."'
-					'He pinches your cheeks and then slaps your face; not hard enough to be painful, but it certainly drives the message home. You can tell he''s dead serious.'
-					'After looking you in the eyes for a few more seconds to make sure you get the message, he turns around and leaves. You are all alone now.'
+					'After one of the criminals makes sure the coast is clear, the two of them pull you out of the car and escort you to a room inside the sauna building. One leaves the room as the other explains your situation. "Until you pay off your debt, we own you! You''ll live and work here until you''ve paid off every last ruble. Any expenses you incur while you are here will be added to your debt. Understood?"'
+					'Silence fills the room as he waits for you to acknowledge what he just said. Mortified about what might happen if you don''t, you nod. He decides to paint the picture anyway. "If you try to escape or refuse to work, we''ll put a bullet in your head, chop you up and bury you in the woods in pieces! And that would be a waste, with a pretty face such as yours."'
+					'He pinches your cheek and then slaps your face. After looking you in the eyes for a few more seconds to make sure you get the message, he turns around and leaves. You''re all alone now...'
 					act 'Look around':gt 'city_sauna', 'saunaroom'
 				end
 			end