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[text edit] clean up text in zoomagazine

Spackled Lanturn 3 years ago
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locations/zoomagazine.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'When you enter the pet store you see the owner talking to some customers.'
-		'In normal circumstances you would have simply waited your turn but you were in a hurry now.'
+		'In normal circumstances you would simply wait your turn but you are in a hurry now.'
 		'You notice a little ladder standing next to the men and decide to create a distraction.'
 		'You start climbing the ladder, pretending you need something from the top shelves'
 		'The men take a small look but mostly ignore you. But when you lift up your skirt a little, that sure gets their attention.'
@@ -30,10 +30,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'"So little girl, what''s the big emergency" the pet shop owner asks you.'
-			'"Well, a few months ago I bought a parrot from this shop. everything was fine at first but the last couple of weeks he has been saying some things he really should not be saying." you begin to explain.'
+			'"Well, a few months ago I bought a parrot from this shop. Everything was fine at first but the last couple of weeks he has been saying some things he really should not be saying." you begin to explain.'
 			'The owner smirks, "Oh, what kind of things would that be?"'
 			'"Just remarks about my body and my sister''s activities." you continue on.'
-			'"If you want me to help you, you will have to give me some more details, what exactly has he been saying?" the owner curiously asks.'
+			'"If you want me to help you, you will have to give me some more details, what exactly has he been saying?" the owner asks inquisitively.'
 			'Your face turns red and, with some reluctance, you tell him the parrot has been saying you have a great body.'
 			'Smiling, the owner replies, "Okay, I might have a solution for this, but I will have to determine if the parrot was lying or not. So, in a nutshell, you will have to show me that body of yours."'
 			'You realize the owner is probably just an old pervert trying to get some, but this is your only chance to save your bird.'
@@ -64,8 +64,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'"Just trust me!" the man says before lightly licking your nipple.'
 					'He then grabs you by the waist and sits you on top of the counter.'
 					'He proceeds to place his head between your legs and starts licking you.'
-					'Sliding his tongue into your wet pussy, he elicits a light shiver from you as he licks your pussy, before dragging his tongue lightly against your clit, causing you to purr with pleasure.'
-					'Once you are wet enough  he takes a tissue and collects some of your juices, "That''s the first ingredient, on to the next."'
+					'Sliding his tongue into your wet pussy, he elicits a light shiver from you before dragging his tongue lightly against your clit, causing you to purr with pleasure.'
+					'Once you are wet enough, he takes a tissue and collects some of your juices, "That''s the first ingredient, on to the next."'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 15
 					act 'Continue':
 						cla & *clr
@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/pet shop/pet7.jpg"</center>'
 							'After a few minutes the owner pulls his dick out of you and turns you around, stroking his dick as he orgasms all over your face.'
 							'He takes another tissue and wipes some of the cum off your face.'
-							'He the goes to the counter and mixes both your juices in the vial, "Here you go miss, one parrot inhibitor potion for you, on the house"'
+							'He then goes to the counter and mixes both your juices in the vial, "Here you go miss, one parrot inhibitor potion for you, on the house."'
 							'Taking the potion, you place it in your pocket and leave the store.'
 							gs 'arousal','end'
 							gs 'cum_call','face', $npclastgenerated