Edit edits from blatte

locations/Timofei

@@ -3,11 +3,11 @@ minut += 1
 sosedDay = daystart
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/timothy/sosed.jpg"></center>'
-'Timothy takes a long drag from his cigarette and flicks off some of the ashes into a jar. He gives you a nod when he notices you. "Hello."'
+'Timofei takes a long drag from his cigarette and flicks off some of the ashes into a jar. He gives you a nod when he notices you, "Hello."'
 
 act 'Say "hello" and leave':gt 'etoexhib', 'pos51'
 
-act 'Have a chat with Timothy':
+act 'Have a chat with Timofei':
 	cls
 	minut += 15
 	Sosed += 1
@@ -16,22 +16,22 @@ act 'Have a chat with Timothy':
 
 	if sosedSlut = 0:
 		if sosed = 1:
-			'Timothy says that he''s a college student but he''s going to graduate soon.'
+			'Timofei tells you that he''s a college student but he''s going to graduate soon.'
 		elseif sosed = 2:
-			'Timothy says that he lives with his mother; his father filed for divorce a couple of years ago and now and lives with a new wife and children.'
+			'Timofei tells you that he lives with his mother; his father filed for divorce a couple of years ago and now and lives with a new wife and children.'
 		elseif sosed = 3:
-			'Timothy tells you that he is working towards a law degree and his father promised to buy him a car if he succeeds.'
+			'Timofei tells you that he is working towards a law degree and his father promised to buy him a car if he succeeds.'
 		elseif sosed = 4:
-			'Timothy says that he has been taking dance lessons since he could walk and even today, he and his team sometimes practice in the community center.'
+			'Timofei tells you that he has been taking dance lessons since he could walk and even today, he often practices at dancing at the fitness center.'
 		elseif sosed = 5:
-			'Timothy tells you that he spends most of his evenings repairing computers. It costs him most of his freetime but at least he doesn''t have to rely on his parents for money.'
+			'Timofei tells you that he spends most of his evenings repairing computers. It costs him most of his freetime but at least he doesn''t have to rely on his parents for money.'
 		elseif sosed = 6:
-			'Timothy says that after college, he wants to go to university and study law - he''ll probably have to serve in the military first, though.'
+			'Timofei tells you that after college, he wants to go to university and study law; he''ll probably have to serve in the military first, though.'
 		elseif sosed >= 7:
-			'Timothy and you chat about life, computers and other things, cracking jokes and enjoying each other''s company.'
+			'Timofei and you chat about life, computers and other things, cracking jokes and enjoying each other''s company.'
 		end
 	elseif sosedSlut = 1:
-		'You are trying to strike up a conversation but Timothy''s responses are taciturn and once he has finished his cigarette, he turns and leaves without another word.'
+		'You are trying to strike up a conversation but Timofei''s responses are taciturn and once he finishes his cigarette, he turns and leaves without another word.'
 	end
 
 	act 'Say goodbye and leave':gt 'etoexhib', 'pos51'

locations/TimofeiMetro

@@ -4,26 +4,26 @@ sosedMetroDay = daystart
 gs 'stat'
 ! Missing Image
 !!'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/timothy/sosed.jpg"></center>'
-'Timothy saw you and said hello, "Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+'Timofei saw you and greeted you, "Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>. How are you doing today?"'
 
-if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 and sosedSlut = 0:'You chatted with Timothy while riding the subway.'
+if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 and sosedSlut = 0:'You chatted with Timofei while riding the subway.'
 
 if sosedSlut = 1:
-	'After greeting Timothy all kind shows that he is not interested in your further communication.'
+	'As you greet each other, Timofei clearly signals that he is not interested keeping up a conversation with you.'
 elseif sosedSlut = 0:
 	if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1:
 		sosedSlut = 1
 
 		if cumloc[11] = 1:
-			'He looked puzzled at your face. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, your face is smeared in something." He stared at you and after a moment he realized that you cum on her face. "What''s that? Cum?"'
+			'He looked puzzled at your face. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, your face is smeared in something." He stares at you and after a moment he realized that''s cum on her face. "What''s that? Cum?" he asks suspiciously.'
 		else
-			'He started chatting with you fun, then suddenly noticed semen on your clothes, his eyes widened noticeably "What''s that? Cum?"'
+			'The two of you are having a great conversation, before he suddenly notices semen on your clothes. As he comes to realization, his eyes noticeably widen, "What''s that? Cum?" he asks suspiciously.'
 		end
 
-		act 'Excuses':
+		act 'Make an excuse':
 			cls
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You began to make excuses, claiming that it is all an accident and you are absolutely innocent. But Timothy frankly do not believe you and listen to you without interest.'
+			'You begin making excuses, claiming that it was all a missunderstanding and that you''re are absolutely innocent. But Timofei doesn''t believe you and only pays half attention to your explanation.'
 
 			act 'Get out of the car':gt 'metro', 'start'
 		end

locations/bank

@@ -18,28 +18,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if week <= 5 and hour = 16 and minut >= 30 and mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] >= 32: 
 		!r125
-		'Looks like <a href="exec:gs''mey_tamara_events'',''tamara''">Tamara Mikhailovna</a> is going home.'
+		'Seems like <a href="exec:gs''mey_tamara_events'',''tamara''">Tamara Mikhailovna</a> is heading home.'
 	end	
 	
 	if bankAccount = 0:
-		'Do you want to open your account?'
+		'Do you want to open an account?'
 	else
 		if karta >= 0:
 			'You have <<karta>> <b>₽</b> in your account.'
-			'You have an approved credit of <font color="blue"><<bankDebtLimit>></font>!'
+			'You can take out a loan of <font color="blue"><<bankDebtLimit>></font>!'
 		else
 			'You hava a debt of <font color="red"><<-1 * karta>></font> <b>₽</b>.'
-			'You have an approved credit of <font color="blue"><<bankDebtLimit + karta>></font>!'
+			'You can take out a loan of <font color="blue"><<bankDebtLimit + karta>></font>!'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if BankPapper = 1 and dayBankPapper = daystart:
-		act 'Give documents':
+		act 'Show documents':
 			cls
 			minut += 15
 			BankPapper = 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You went to the office and gave the documents to the manager.'
+			'You went to the office and showed the required documents to the manager.'
 
 			act 'Leave':
 				minut += 5
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				'<br>You deposited <<kartaIN>> <b>₽</b>, your account balance is now <<karta>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			end
 
-			act 'Move away':gt 'bank', 'start'
+			act 'Walk away':gt 'bank', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<br>You withdraw <<kartaOUT>> <b>₽</b>. <font color="red">Your bank account is overdrawn by <b><<karta>> ₽</b>.</font>'
 				end
 			end
-			act 'Move away':gt 'bank', 'start'
+			act 'Walk away':gt 'bank', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 

locations/hotel

@@ -8,25 +8,25 @@ nom_o[4] = 100000
 gs 'stat'
 '<right><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/casino/metrd.jpg"></right>'
 
-if tobiQW < 2000:'In the hotel lobby deserted and alone bored girl at the reception.'
-if tobiQW >= 2000 and tobiQW < 2100:'In the lobby of the hotel is very crowded. Everywhere swarm comely old men in scanty jacket with patches on the elbows.'
+if tobiQW < 2000:'The hotel lobby is deserted and you only notice an alone bored girl standing at the reception desk.'
+if tobiQW >= 2000 and tobiQW < 2100:'The hotel lobby is very crowded. You notice there''s a swarm of comely old men dressed in scanty jackets with elbow patches.'
 
 if tobiQW = 2001:
-	'you notice, that one of the visitors of the hotel, sitting in a chair, reading a book, which are written squiggles, similar to the ones that scroll.'
-	act 'Excuse_Me, to disturb. And in what language it is written?':
+	'One of the visitors of the hotel, grabs your attention as he''s sitting in a chair, reading a book. It''s written in squiggles, which reminds you to the scroll you read earlier.'
+	act 'Excuse me':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<right><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/casino/oldman.jpg"></right>'
-		'(Do_You) - Excuse_Me, to disturb. And in what language it is written?'
-		'(The_Man) - This amiable, Old Japanese language. what? You are good in rare languages?'
-		'(Do_You) - not at all, but I have a parchment, in which the characters are written very similar.'
-		'(The_Man) - prelyubopytny! You can take a look?'
-		'(Do_You) - Well!'
-		'(The_Man) - ah yes, right word, it''s me. me, by_the_way, Plato called Aristarkhovich, and you?'
-		'(Do_You) - You can simply Igor.'
-		'(Plato Aristarkhovich) - Come to my room, if you do not mind.'
+		'"I didn''t mean to disturb you, but what language is the book written in?" you ask the man.'
+		'The man stops, looks up to you and cheerfully answers, "This book right here is written in old Japanese language. Why do you ask?" the man asks curiously.'
+		'"Well, I was handed this book, in which the characters are very similarly written." you answer.'
+		'The man gasps, "By the gods! Can I take a look?"'
+		'"I don''t really know if it''s okay..." you hesitantly answer.'
+		'The man is taken aback a little by your answer, "Oh yes, it''s no wonder you''re being careful, where are my manners, I should introduce myself. My name is Plato Aristarkhovich, and you are?"'
+		'"My name is <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>." you answer.'
+		'"I hope this doesn''t sound too creepy but would you please follow me to my room?" Plato asks you.'
 
-		act 'Go with a man':gt 'mqroom'
+		act 'Go with Plato':gt 'mqroom'
 	end
 end