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  1. 5 5
      main.tw2
  2. 11 11
      story/01_intro.tw2
  3. 8 8
      story/02_transform.tw2
  4. 16 16
      story/05_beaches.tw2

+ 5 - 5
main.tw2

@@ -29,8 +29,8 @@ Fast-Forward:
 [[Get a Girl Name ⏩->ff1]]
 [[Travel to the Beach ⏩->ff2]]
 [[Choose your custom bikini ⏩->ff3]]
-[[Secret Beach⏩->secret beach 2]]
-[[name puzzle⏩->name puzzle start]]
+[[Secret Beach ⏩->secret beach 2]]
+[[name puzzle ⏩->name puzzle start]]
 
 ::Versionlog <289,61>
 <<silently>>
@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ Technical Changes
 - &lt;&lt;cyclinglink>>, &lt;&lt;cyclinglinka>> (array), and &lt;&lt;cyclinglinkd>> (dictionary/Object) macros added.
 - Added the &lt;&lt;bugreport>> and the &lt;&lt;checkvars>> to the sidebar.
 - Third-Party software page added.
-- Fastforward options so people can explore the story.
+- Fast-forward options so people can explore the story.
 
 Display Changes
 - Added a pink bikini favicon (along with copyright attribution for the icon creator).
@@ -66,8 +66,8 @@ Story Additions
 - Choose a beach (private, public or secret)
 - public beach and the cheerleaders (not started)
 - private beach and the MILF (partial story)
-- secret beach and the greek goddesses (partial story)
-- money game (incomplete & innaccessible)
+- secret beach and the Greek goddesses (partial story)
+- money game (incomplete & inaccessible)
 
 v0.3
 - Guaranteed 80% bug free or your money back.

+ 11 - 11
story/01_intro.tw2

@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ You sit down to play some video games for a bit, when the land line rings.
 [[Answer it.->Listen to phone]]
 
 ::Listen to phone <547,505>
-The caller ID just shows a local number you don't recognize. You pick up the phone, and are about to say "Hello" when you are interupted.

+The caller ID just shows a local number you don't recognize. You pick up the phone, and are about to say "Hello" when you are interrupted.

 

 "Hello Heather. You're on speaker with Sally and Nat. Why didn't you call my cell?"

 

@@ -129,7 +129,7 @@ You tippy toe upstairs and lean your ear to Jess's door.
 ::barge in <265,880>
 You barge in, all eyes are on you.

 

-You annouce, "I'll do it."

+You announce, "I'll do it."

 

 Jess is incredulous. "What? Have you been listening in this whole time?"

 

@@ -176,7 +176,7 @@ You go to your room and open the bag Sally gave you. Inside, is a pink two piece
 ::play games 3 <833,1004>
 With the TV off, you listen to what your sister and her friends have to say.

 

-"We need your help dingus," Jessica chides, "We're down one person for this tournament. Qualifying rounds are tommorrow."

+"We need your help dingus," Jessica chides, "We're down one person for this tournament. Qualifying rounds are tomorrow."

 

 Jessica stands in front of you with her slutty asian friend Natalie, and her nerdy friend Sally, but her friend Heather is missing. #FIXME

 

@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ Her east asian heritage is visible in her small nose and the epicanthic folds of
 

 She likes it when people call her Nat.

 

-She's always wearing low-cut tops despite her lack of signifcant bosom.

+She's always wearing low-cut tops despite her lack of significant bosom.

 

 <<return>>
 
@@ -295,7 +295,7 @@ Natalie winks.
 [["\"I'm still not interested.\""->new plan 1]]
 
 ::discuss further <770,1134>
-"Can we discuss this futher upstairs?" your sister begs.

+"Can we discuss this further upstairs?" your sister begs.

 

 [["\"Sounds great.\" go upstairs to your sister's room."->go upstairs to talk]]

 [["(sarcastically) \"Whatever.\" go upstairs to your sister's room."->go upstairs to talk][$jess_disposition -= 1]]
@@ -489,7 +489,7 @@ Jess blushes. "Ew. Gross brother."
 
 ::"Sally goes on a date with me." [nobr] <962,3175>
 <<if $sally_disposition >= 0 >>

-"Alright, I guess that's ok. I mean a date doesn't mean anything?" Sally asks, blushing.<br><br>

+"Alright, I guess that's OK. I mean a date doesn't mean anything?" Sally asks, blushing.<br><br>

 [["\"Awesome.\""->what next?][$reward to "sally_date"]]

 <<if $jess_disposition >= 0 >>

 "Oh. You'll make such a cute couple," Jess adds.<br><br>

@@ -501,11 +501,11 @@ Jess blushes. "Ew. Gross brother."
 [["\"So it's settled?\""->sally date 2]]

 <</if>>

 <<else>>

-"Uh. I... Uh..." Sally strugles to find words.<br><br>

+"Uh. I... Uh..." Sally struggles to find words.<br><br>

 

 "What Sally is trying to say, is 'No.' you're a little creep," Jess intones.<br><br>

 

-"No. Jess that's ok. It's just a date. It might be fun."<br><br>

+"No. Jess that's OK. It's just a date. It might be fun."<br><br>

 

 [["\"So it's settled?\""->sally date 2]]

 <</if>>
@@ -523,7 +523,7 @@ Jess blushes. "Ew. Gross brother."
 [["\"Sweet.\""->what next?][$reward to "college parties"]]
 
 ::"Sally gives me a longer-lasting feminization enchantment and you treat me like one of the girls at school." <1109,3130>
-"Oh. I never knew you fealt that way. I kind of feel bad for teasing you for being a sissy wimp," Jess says before hugging you.

+"Oh. I never knew you felt that way. I kind of feel bad for teasing you for being a sissy wimp," Jess says before hugging you.

 

 Sally explains, "That kind of magic is doable, but it will take a while and be expensive. In the meantime, I could put a spell similar to the one on the bikini on some underwear and you can change every day."

 

@@ -673,7 +673,7 @@ Jess exclaims, "Oh come on now Sally, don't make him look better than me."<br><b
 ::magical cheating [know-magical-ethics] <1080,1782>
 "No! that's against magic user ethical guidelines! I'd be banished from magic for at least a year," Sally declares.

 

-"Disguising yourself to bypass bigoted guidelines or pass arbititrary beauty requirements was deemed eligible in the '60s, but in general using magic at all during sporting events is prohibited, even if the event isn't professional."

+"Disguising yourself to bypass bigoted guidelines or pass arbitrary beauty requirements was deemed eligible in the '60s, but in general using magic at all during sporting events is prohibited, even if the event isn't professional."

 

 <<include [[bikini questions]]>>
 
@@ -706,7 +706,7 @@ Sally continues, "Each bikini I made is tied to a different person and whoever p
 ::explain tits [know-bikini-heather know-bikini-busty know-bikini-feminizes] <1075,1335>
 "Tee hee!" the girls giggle.

 

-"You look just like Heather!" Jess gigles.

+"You look just like Heather!" Jess giggles.

 

 "Well it's a funny story..." Sally starts.

 


+ 8 - 8
story/02_transform.tw2

@@ -1,5 +1,5 @@
 ::static electricity <3215,1867>
-You pull out the bikni top, it's a got four strings, two for the neck and two for the back. 

+You pull out the bikini top, it's a got four strings, two for the neck and two for the back. 

 

 <<if $girls_present>>\

 [["\"Could I get some help with this?\""->help with bikini]]

@@ -95,7 +95,7 @@ After getting a good look in, hand the mirror back.
 [["\"I need to talk to Jess and Sally.\""->back to jess and sally]]
 
 ::feel your tits with nat <3734,2526>
-They feel so good. They're large and sensitive. You've never been in such proximiity to boobs like this before, it's getting your dick hard.

+They feel so good. They're large and sensitive. You've never been in such proximity to boobs like this before, it's getting your dick hard.

 

 <<if $nat_disposition >= 0>>"Oh they're nice are they? May I?" Nat gestures to your décolletage.

 

@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@ You don't have a full length mirror in your room, so you rush out to the bathroo
 [[Go back to Jess's room.->back to jess and sally]]
 
 ::Feel your new tits. <4402,1653>
-They feel so good. They're large and sensitive. You've never been in such proximiity to boobs like this before,\

+They feel so good. They're large and sensitive. You've never been in such proximity to boobs like this before,\

 <<if $current_bottom == 'heather bikini'>>\

 it's getting your new pussy all wet.

 

@@ -169,7 +169,7 @@ Her face lights up with pleasure as she plays with them. She slips a hand undern
 ::nat motorboating 2 <3864,2527>
 Nat brings her head into your ample cleavage and then uses both hands to squeeze your tits together with her head between.

 

-Nat waggles her head and gets nice and comfy betwitch your new mounds.

+Nat waggles her head and gets nice and comfy betwixt your new mounds.

 

 Your cock is now hard with anticipation.

 

@@ -247,14 +247,14 @@ Natalie is exasperated, "What? no! that's terrible advice. The 'friendzone' isn'
 ::pathetic sally <4405,3141>
 "Oh that's adorable. And pathetic. Actually the more I think about it, you two nerds were made for each other."

 

-Nat stroaks her chin, "I have an idea: Why don't I put in a good word for you with Sally, and you do the same for me with your sister, and we promise each other that after this is over we both ask our crush out?"

+Nat strokes her chin, "I have an idea: Why don't I put in a good word for you with Sally, and you do the same for me with your sister, and we promise each other that after this is over we both ask our crush out?"

 

 Nat extends her pinky.

 

 [["\"Deal.\""->crush deal.]]
 
 ::crush deal. <4578,3058>
-You shake pinkys: enacting the solemnest of vows: A Pinky Promise.

+You shake pinkies: enacting the solemnest of vows: A Pinky Promise.

 

 "Lets get back to the group, I bet you have questions."

 

@@ -510,7 +510,7 @@ Nat sits behind you on your bed, and starts to massage your shoulders.
 

 [[Look in mirror.->mirror2]]

 [[Feel your new tits.->feel your tits2]]

-[[Coninue to put on the bottoms.->put on bottoms2]]
+[[Continue to put on the bottoms.->put on bottoms2]]
 
 ::mirror2 <1631,4523>
 You don't have a full length mirror in your room, so you rush out to the bathroom.

@@ -520,7 +520,7 @@ You don't have a full length mirror in your room, so you rush out to the bathroo
 [[Continue to put on the bottoms.->put on bottoms2]]
 
 ::feel your tits2 <1856,4451>
-You squeze and squish your new
+You squeeze and squish your new
 
 ::put on bottoms2 <439,3993>
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+ 16 - 16
story/05_beaches.tw2

@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ The car is out of the driveway.
 <<include [[which beach 3]]>>
 
 ::which beach 3 <7024,5429>
-"I mean technically, I guess it would be trepassing, but it's owned by an old widoer, do you think he'd kick out some busty bikini babes playing volleyball?" Natalie defends herself.
+"I mean technically, I guess it would be trespassing, but it's owned by an old widower, do you think he'd kick out some busty bikini babes playing volleyball?" Natalie defends herself.
 
 "Well I have a better idea, I know a secret beach that's open to the public, it's kind of hard to get to, but I can provide directions," Sally proposes.
 
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@ Jess smiles at you, surprised at how helpful you're being.
 [['"Is this safe?"'->is secret beach safe]]
 
 ::secret beach 4 <6773,6628>
-You walk through the crevace, it's about a 15 minute hike.
+You walk through the crevasse, it's about a 15 minute hike.
 
 Finally the path opens up to a breathtaking view of the ocean.
 
@@ -183,7 +183,7 @@ She has small brown nipples, that she plays with a little before staring at Sall
 
 "You too girl," Nat says while ribbing an elbow in Sally's direction.
 
-Sally shyly and dextrously pushes each top aside revealing one tit at a time. Her pale skin reflects the western sun and her nipples are pink and a little puffy.
+Sally shyly and dexterously pushes each top aside revealing one tit at a time. Her pale skin reflects the western sun and her nipples are pink and a little puffy.
 
 Nat looks at Sally lasciviously and grabs the boob nearest to her. Sally recoils a little in surprise but then lets Nat get a good grope in.
 
@@ -203,7 +203,7 @@ Sally blushes, and quietly responds, "Thanks."
 \#TODO
 
 ::secret beach put tits away <6960,6868>
-The girls maneaver the small slips of lycra to be covering their nipples again and recompose themselves.
+The girls maneuver the small slips of lycra to be covering their nipples again and recompose themselves.
 
 <<include [[secret beach 4]]>>
 
@@ -255,7 +255,7 @@ The girls giggle.
 "Crazy idea: why don't we knock on his door and ask permission to use his beach," Sally adds.
 
 [['"No way! better to ask for forgiveness than permission."'->forgiveness gt permission]]
-[['"I guess it can\'t hurt to ask."'->ask permisssion]]
+[['"I guess it can\'t hurt to ask."'->ask permission]]
 
 ::private beach second thoughts <6219,5753>
 \#TODO
@@ -266,7 +266,7 @@ The girls giggle.
 
 <<include [[private beach 2]]>>
 
-::ask permisssion <5956,6241>
+::ask permission <5956,6241>
 <<include [[milf house desc]]>>
 
 You head up to the door, behind Jess and Sally.
@@ -319,7 +319,7 @@ You trade places with your Sister, and a standard white door is before you with
 ::milf judge intro <5933,6720>
 You hear the noise of someone coming downstairs, and the door swings swiftly inward revealing a fit woman in her mid forties wearing a dressing gown.
 
-I thought Nat said a Widoer lived here?
+I thought Nat said a Widower lived here?
 
 She speaks: "Good afternoon, what do you fine young ladies want?"
 
@@ -330,7 +330,7 @@ She speaks: "Good afternoon, what do you fine young ladies want?"
 [['"Could we please use your beach?"'->you talk 3]]
 
 ::milf judge 2 <5921,6865>
-"Oh really?" she responds, "The one with qualifiers tommorrow? I'm judging that one. I wasn't able to last year since my daughter participated."
+"Oh really?" she responds, "The one with qualifiers tomorrow? I'm judging that one. I wasn't able to last year since my daughter participated."
 
 [['"Uh. here\'s the thing... I\'m kind of a last minute addition to this group... could your daughter take my spot?"'->daughter swap 1]]
 [['"Thanks!"'->milf judge 3]]
@@ -342,7 +342,7 @@ She speaks: "Good afternoon, what do you fine young ladies want?"
 [['Lean in, say, "It\'s a secret," and flash her.'->seduce milf]]
 
 ::seduce milf <6123,7011>
-"Well, you've got a volleyball net and a volleyball, so I think you're going to be playing Beach Volleyball. Perhaps practicing for the tournament tommorrow?"
+"Well, you've got a volleyball net and a volleyball, so I think you're going to be playing Beach Volleyball. Perhaps practicing for the tournament tomorrow?"
 
 [['"Guilty."'->milf dinner invite]]
 [['"Is it so obvious?"'->milf dinner invite]]
@@ -351,7 +351,7 @@ She speaks: "Good afternoon, what do you fine young ladies want?"
 "It's fine by me, I'll be on the deck reading a book and keeping an eye on you. Just one thing, when the sun goes down, come have dinner with me and my daughter."
 
 ::daughter swap 1 <5789,7018>
-"Hrm. I'd have to recuse myself from referreeing the tournament, and I don't think the organizers have enough substitutes for a last minute vacancy like that. Besides what's in it for Danni and I? Let's discuss it later over dinner? All four of you and Danni?"
+"Hrm. I'd have to recuse myself from refereeing the tournament, and I don't think the organizers have enough substitutes for a last minute vacancy like that. Besides what's in it for Danni and I? Let's discuss it later over dinner? All four of you and Danni?"
 
 [['"Oh. OK then."'->milf judge 3]]
 [['"We\'ll see you at dinner."'->milf judge 3]]
@@ -361,15 +361,15 @@ She speaks: "Good afternoon, what do you fine young ladies want?"
 \#TODO
 
 ::milf house desc <6168,6340>
-Jess pulls down a subburban street and parks next to someone's driveway.
+Jess pulls down a suburban street and parks next to someone's driveway.
 
 The house is big, but kind of generic looking, I guess people would call it a McMansion.
 
 ::stare at the beach <6614,6890>
-You stare in amazement at the wonderous natural beauty, but in the distance you see beach chairs and umbrellas set out, so it's not completely unspoiled territory.
+You stare in amazement at the wondrous natural beauty, but in the distance you see beach chairs and umbrellas set out, so it's not completely unspoiled territory.
 
 [['"We should introduce ourselves."'->introduce ourselves to goddesses]]
-[['"Oh hey we have neighbours!"'->mention goddesses]]
+[['"Oh hey we have neighbors!"'->mention goddesses]]
 
 ::amazed at secretness of secret beach <6828,6902>
 "We're not completely alone," Sally says and points out a few beach chairs and umbrellas in the distance.
@@ -397,7 +397,7 @@ But just as we finished staking the guy lines, visitors approached.
 
 It was two women, both very fit and tan, one had straight shoulder length brown hair, and the other one had long curly lighter brown hair, and was noticeably curvier, but neither was as busty as You, Jess, Sally or Nat.
 
-They were wearing what looked like expensive white bikinis with gold rings and flowing ribbons instead of just tieing lycra directly to lycra.
+They were wearing what looked like expensive white bikinis with gold rings and flowing ribbons instead of just tying Lycra directly to Lycra.
 
 "Welcome, I'm Minnie, and this is Van, what *are* you doing on our beach?"
 
@@ -422,7 +422,7 @@ You overhear a snippet of conversation, one of them is reading from a magazine.
 
 The four women turn to look at you, and you can now get a good look at them. One of them, with short hair, puts down her book, (A large format, illustrated version of Sun Tzu's the Art of War), you get the feeling that she was watching you this entire time.
 
-They are all fit and tan, but of an unkowable age, they have the immaculate beauty of youth, but also a demeanor of wisdom and authority that comes with age.
+They are all fit and tan, but of an unknowable age, they have the immaculate beauty of youth, but also a demeanor of wisdom and authority that comes with age.
 
 They are all wearing expensive looking white bikinis with gold rings on the waist, shoulder straps and between the cups.
 
@@ -439,7 +439,7 @@ She continues, "But what is this net for? you shan't be able to catch many fish
 ::reason for being on secret beach is volleyball <6481,7460>
 "Volleyball, the sport?" Minnie asks.
 
-"Oh! Diana loves sports," Van exlaims.
+"Oh! Diana loves sports," Van exclaims.
 
 Van shouts, "Diana! Vicky! the young women are playing some sort of sport!"