[text edit] clean up swamphouse

locations/swamphouse.qsrc

@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		'There''s an empty bucket placed in the corner. It needs refilling with water from the spring.'
 	end
 	'You see an old <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''washstand'' ">washstand</a> you can use to wash your hands and face. There is a well-used <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''tub''">tub</a> nearby, that you can use to bathe in.'
-	'In the other corner you see a small <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''stove''">stove</a>. With water from the spring and some mushrooms or meat, you could cook something to eat, or warm the water so you can bathe in the tub.'
+	'In the other corner, you see a small <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''stove''">stove</a>. With water from the spring and some mushrooms or meat, you could cook something to eat, or you could warm the water so you can bathe in the tub.'
 	if stovefire = 0:
 		*nl
 		'The hut feels '+iif(temper < 15, 'quite cold, maybe you should start a fire in the old stove.', 'quite warm, even without the stove fire burning.')+''
@@ -53,8 +53,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 				'The <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''hunterstable''">hunters</a> are sitting around the table.'
 			else
 				'You see the <a href="exec: gs ''swamphouse'', ''huntersrelax''">hunters</a> hanging out in the hut.'
-			end if
-		end if
+			end
+		end
 	else
 		if hunters_inside = 1:
 			if hunters_drink = 1:
@@ -65,11 +65,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 				'You can see three hunters sitting around the table talking.'
 			else
 				'You can see three hunters resting at the table talking.'
-			end if
+			end
 		else
 		   'There''s nobody here right now'
-		end if
-	end if
+		end
+	end
 
 
 	act 'Go outside': minut += 1 & hunter_refuse = 0 & gt 'swamp_yard', 'start'
@@ -90,12 +90,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swamphouseundress.jpg"></center>'
-				''+iif(temper > 23, 'Feeling the heat in the cabin', 'You feel the need to get naked, so')+' you start removing your clothes.'
+				''+iif(temper > 23, 'Feeling the heat in the cabin,', 'You feel the need to get naked, so')+' you start removing your clothes.'
 				act 'Back': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 			else
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/noundress.jpg"></center>'
-				''+iif(temper > 23, 'Despite the heat', 'Despite your need to get naked')+' you''re still too shy to get undressed - what if someone suddenly comes in?'
+				''+iif(temper > 23, 'Despite the heat,', 'Despite your need to get naked,')+' you''re still too shy to get undressed - what if someone suddenly comes in?'
 				act 'Back': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -117,7 +117,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			act 'Pick up your clothes':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'swamphouse'
-				'You picked up your clothes.'
+				'You pick up your clothes.'
 				act 'Back': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'clothing', 'swamp_clothes', 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swamphouse_tkancloth.jpg"></center>'
-				'You find a piece of hessian... "Well, at least it''s something." you say to yourself.'
+				'You find a piece of hessian... "Well, at least it''s something," you say to yourself.'
 				act 'Back.': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -179,7 +179,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-		'Entering the hut you see Igor. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
+		'Entering the hut, you see Igor. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you," he whispers.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -190,7 +190,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterflirt2.'+rand(4,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'Smiling you look straight into Igor''s eyes telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
+			'Smiling, you look straight into Igor''s eyes, telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation, he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
 			act 'Go with Igor': gt 'hunterLoveSex','Igor'
 		end
 		act 'Refuse':
@@ -200,7 +200,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-			'"I''m sorry, Igor. I''m not in the mood." you say avoiding eye contact. Igor leaves disappointed...'
+			'"I''m sorry, Igor. I''m not in the mood," you say, avoiding eye contact. Igor leaves disappointed...'
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 		end
 	end
@@ -211,7 +211,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-		'Entering the hut you see Sergei. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
+		'Entering the hut, you see Sergei. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you," he whispers.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -222,7 +222,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterflirt2.'+rand(4,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'Smiling you look straight into Sergei''s eyes telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
+			'Smiling, you look straight into Sergei''s eyes, telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation, he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
 			act 'Go with Sergei': gt 'hunterLoveSex','Sergei'
 		end
 		act 'Refuse':
@@ -232,7 +232,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-			'"I''m sorry, Sergei. I''m not in the mood." you say avoiding eye contact. Sergei leaves disappointed...'
+			'"I''m sorry, Sergei. I''m not in the mood," you say, avoiding eye contact. Sergei leaves disappointed...'
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 		end
 	end
@@ -243,7 +243,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-		'Entering the hut you see Andrei. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
+		'Entering the hut, you see Andrei. He smiles and walks over to you, grabs hold of you and gives you a passionate kiss.'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you," he whispers.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -255,7 +255,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterhands.jpg"></center>'
-			'Smiling you look straight into Andrei''s eyes telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
+			'Smiling, you look straight into Andrei''s eyes, telling him all he needs to know. Without any hesitation, he takes you by the hand and leads you...'
 			act 'Go with Andrei': gt 'hunterLoveSex','Andrei'
 		end
 		act 'Refuse':
@@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-			'"I''m sorry, Andrei. I''m not in the mood." you say avoiding eye contact. Andrei leaves disappointed...'
+			'"I''m sorry, Andrei. I''m not in the mood," you say, avoiding eye contact. Andrei leaves disappointed...'
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 		end
 	end
@@ -279,10 +279,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterswork1.2.jpg"></center>'
 		'You see Andrei talking with Sergei in the hut.'
-		'"Come in <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s time to consummate the marriage," Andrew jokingly remarked. "I hope you''re willing to do anything we say.'
-		if klismaday ! daystart:'"I''m sorry, I don''t know if I''m ready yet..." you say . "I haven''t been able to clean myself as you asked, maybe we could skip it this time?.'
-		if klismaday ! daystart:'Well, we could <<$pcs_nickname>>..." said Andrew. "But since you''re already here, you not being all dolled up doesn''t matter to us. But don''t dare to try to fool us next time, we will not forget."'
-		'"There are some bushes not far from here, we could take her with us there, no one would be able to find us. Should we tell Igor to join us?" said Sergei. "Nevermind Igor, it would take him to long time to join us."'
+		'"Come in <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s time to consummate the marriage," Andrew jokingly remarks. "I hope you''re willing to do anything we say.'
+		if klismaday ! daystart:'"I''m sorry, I don''t know if I''m ready yet..." you say. "I haven''t been able to clean myself as you asked, maybe we could skip it this time?.'
+		if klismaday ! daystart:'Well, we could <<$pcs_nickname>>..." says Andrei, "but since you''re already here, you not being all dolled up doesn''t matter to us. But don''t dare to try to fool us next time, we will not forget."'
+		'"There are some bushes not far from here, we could take her with us there, no one would be able to find us. Should we tell Igor to join us?" says Sergei. "Never mind Igor, it would take him too long to join us."'
 
 		act 'Follow the guys':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -297,7 +297,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/doublehanterlove.jpg"></center>'
-			'The men hold your hands leading you away from the hut. You''re fully aware of their plans but you don''t really mind.'
+			'The men hold your hands, leading you away from the hut. You''re fully aware of their plans, but you don''t really mind.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'huntersex', 'doublelovesex'
 		end
 		act 'Refuse':
@@ -308,7 +308,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-			'"No, I refuse, this is something I don''t want part of," you say and without hesitating you turn around and walk away.'
+			'"No, I refuse, this is something I don''t want part of," you say, and without hesitating, you turn around and walk away.'
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 		end
 	end
@@ -332,7 +332,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			huntersAndreiQw += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big172.jpg"></center>'
 			'You enter the hut and notice the plastered hunters.'
-			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" said Andrei.'
+			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" says Andrei.'
 
 			act 'Join them at the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 			act 'Politely decline': hunter_refuse = 1 & gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
@@ -341,7 +341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			huntersSergeiQw += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big174.jpg"></center>'
 			'You enter the hut and notice the plastered hunters.'
-			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" Sergei says noticing you entering.'
+			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" Sergei says, noticing you entering.'
 
 			act 'Join them at the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 			act 'Politely decline': hunter_refuse = 1 & gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
@@ -350,7 +350,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			huntersIgorQw += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big173.jpg"></center>'
 			'You enter the hut and notice the plastered hunters.'
-			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" Igor shouts ignoring the other conversation.'
+			'Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, come join us for a drink!" Igor shouts, ignoring the other conversation.'
 
 			act 'Join them at the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 			act 'Politely decline': hunter_refuse = 1 & gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
@@ -359,7 +359,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		*clr & cla
 		huntersbreakfast = daystart
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
-		'You went into the hut and notice that the hunters have prepared '+iif(hunters_breakfast = 1, 'breakfast', 'lunch')+'.'
+		'You go into the hut and notice that the hunters have prepared '+iif(hunters_breakfast = 1, 'breakfast', 'lunch')+'.'
 		'"Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re just in time, come join us!"'
 
 		act 'Join them at the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
@@ -378,9 +378,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		if temphunt = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big172.jpg"></center>'
 		if temphunt = 2:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big174.jpg"></center>'
 		if temphunt = 3:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big173.jpg"></center>'
-		if temphunt = 1:'You enter the hut and bump into Andrei. "Come here <<$pcs_nickname>>," not saying anything more while he throws you on the bed.'
-		if temphunt = 2:'You enter the hut and bump into Sergei. Noticing you he heads toward you saying "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ve got an itch that only you can help scratch."'
-		if temphunt = 3:'You enter the hut and bump into Igor. He comes over saying smiling "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I need to empty my sack, help me out..."'
+		if temphunt = 1:'You enter the hut and bump into Andrei. "Come here <<$pcs_nickname>>," he exclaims, not saying anything more while he throws you on the bed.'
+		if temphunt = 2:'You enter the hut and bump into Sergei. Noticing you, he heads toward you saying "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ve got an itch that only you can help scratch."'
+		if temphunt = 3:'You enter the hut and bump into Igor. Smiling, he comes over saying "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I need to empty my sack, help me out..."'
 		if pcs_horny < 40:' You obediently follow suit, knowing what he wants.'
 		if pcs_horny >= 40 and pcs_horny < 70:'"Come and get me..." is all you manage to say before spreading your legs.'
 		if pcs_horny >= 70:'"I was hoping this would happen," you think to yourself, feeling your wet pussy screaming with desire. You jump on him, taking charge, leaving him stunned about who wants it more.'
@@ -399,7 +399,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stove':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/stove.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'A barely functioning wodden stove, but somehow it does what it''s supposed to do. You can heat 5 liters of water at a time. Or you can make a mushroom soup, and a meat stew.'
+	'A barely functioning wooden stove, but somehow it does what it''s supposed to do. You can heat 5 liters of water at a time, or you can make a mushroom soup or a meat stew.'
 
 	act 'Move away': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 
@@ -458,7 +458,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'food':
 			if meat_stew > 0:
 				'There''s <<meat_stew>> '+iif(meat_stew > 1, 'servings','serving')+' of stew left in the pot'
 			else
-				'You have finished the last of the stew, the pot is empty.'
+				'You finish the last of the stew, the pot is empty.'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -469,7 +469,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'food':
 			if mushroom_soup > 0:
 				'There''s <<mushroom_soup>> '+iif(mushroom_soup > 1, 'servings','serving')+' of soup left in the pot'
 			else
-				'You have finished the last of the soup, the pot is empty.'
+				'You finish the last of the soup, the pot is empty.'
 			end
 			gs 'stat'
 		end
@@ -489,7 +489,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bucket':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/vedro2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	if bucket > 0:
-	'There''s a bucket of water by the wall. There''s approximately <<bucket>> liters of water left.'
+	'There''s a bucket of water by the wall. There''s approximately <<bucket>> ' + iif(bucket = 1, 'liter', 'liters') + ' of water left.'
 		act 'Drink the water':
 			cla
 			minut+=5
@@ -549,11 +549,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tub':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/basin.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'An old tub, that you can use to bathe yourself. It''s a lot warmer than using the spring! You just need to warm some water, and get undressed first.'
+	'An old tub, that you can use to bathe yourself. It''s a lot warmer than using the spring! You just need to warm some water and get undressed first.'
 	*nl
-	'If you are desperate enough, you found a handful of well used '+iif(stanok < 1,'<a href="exec: stanok += 5 & gt ''swamphouse'', ''tub''">razors</a>','razors')+' on a shelf, that you can use to shave with. '+iif(stanok > 0, '<a href="exec:gs ''din_van'', ''shave_options''">Shave Options</a>','')+''
+	'If you are desperate enough, you find a handful of well used '+iif(stanok < 1,'<a href="exec: stanok += 5 & gt ''swamphouse'', ''tub''">razors</a>','razors')+' on a shelf that you can use to shave with. '+iif(stanok > 0, '<a href="exec:gs ''din_van'', ''shave_options''">Shave Options</a>','')+''
 	dynamic $brit
-	if swamp_enema = 1:*nl & 'You found an enema syringe on the shelf.'
+	if swamp_enema = 1:*nl & 'You find an enema syringe on the shelf.'
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude' and klismaday ! daystart and swamp_enema = 1 and hunters_inside = 0:
 		dynamic $enema
 	end
@@ -574,7 +574,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tub':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/basinswim.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You fill the tub with warm water, take off your clothes, and climbe into the tub. After a good clean and soak, you feel rejuvenated.'
+			'You fill the tub with warm water, take off your clothes, and climb in. After a good clean and soak, you feel rejuvenated.'
 
 			act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'tub'
 		end
@@ -600,7 +600,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stackmagazines':
 	'A stack of all kinds of magazines, there''s even one with "interesting" pictures.'
 
 	act 'Read the scientific journal (1:00)':
-		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page, it seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
+		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page. It seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 		cla
 		*clr
 		if pcs_nerd > 0:
@@ -620,7 +620,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stackmagazines':
 		act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 	end
 	act 'Read the literary magazine (1:00)':
-		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page, it seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
+		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page. It seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 		cla
 		*clr
 		if pcs_nerd > 0:
@@ -636,12 +636,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stackmagazines':
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		gs 'swamphouse', 'clothes_read_magazines'
-		'You decided to look through the literary magazine... It''s a real drag, you almost fall asleep several times while reading it.'
+		'You decide to look through the literary magazine... It''s a real drag. You almost fall asleep several times while reading it.'
 
 		act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 	end
 	act 'Read the entertainment magazine (1:00)':
-		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page, it seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
+		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page. It seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 		cla
 		*clr
 		if pcs_nerd > 0:
@@ -656,12 +656,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stackmagazines':
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		gs 'swamphouse', 'clothes_read_magazines'
-		'You flick entertainment magazine, you delve into the world of the rich and famous.'
+		'Flicking through the entertainment magazine, you delve into the world of the rich and famous.'
 
 		act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 	end
 	act 'Read the porn magazine (1:00)':
-		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page, it seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
+		if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1: glassqw = 1 & msg 'The text blurs across the page. It seems that your eyesight is actually pretty poor. Maybe you should head to the city and visit an ophthalmologist.' & gt 'swamphouse', 'stackmagazines'
 		cla
 		*clr
 		blizoruk+=1
@@ -672,7 +672,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stackmagazines':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude' and $pantyworntype ! 'none':'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/readpornomag_tanga.jpg"></center>'
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude' and $pantyworntype = 'none':'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/readpornomag_nude.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You''re flipping through a porn magazine, reading the stories and looking at pictures, when all of a sudden you realize you''ve started touching yourself.'
+		'You flip through the porn magazine, reading the stories and looking at pictures, when all of a sudden you realize you''ve started touching yourself.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'porn', 60
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -691,7 +691,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You see one of the hunters sitting at the table. Thinking you both could have some fun, you look at him smiling slyly. Not before long you''re crawling under the table...'
+	'You see one of the hunters sitting at the table. Thinking you both could have some fun, you look at him, smiling slyly. Not before long you''re crawling under the table...'
 
 	if hunterstableBJA = 0:
 		act 'Give Andrei a blowjob':
@@ -704,8 +704,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You got comfortable under the table and brought your head between his thighs and started sucking on his cock...'
-			'Andrei''s cock got rock hard fast and soon enough you could feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
+			'You get comfortable under the table, bring your head between his thighs and start sucking on his cock...'
+			'Andrei''s cock gets rock hard fast, and soon enough, you can feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -721,8 +721,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablecum1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'Andrei didn''t last more for a minute or two, his thighs tensed up and his load started shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
-					'When he was all done you cleaned Andrei the best you could, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zipped him up.'
+					'Andrei doesn''t last more than a minute or two. His thighs tense up and his load starts shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
+					'When he is all done, you clean Andrei the best you can, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zip him up.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -739,7 +739,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You could feel Andrei''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt and before you can react Andrei unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
+					'You can feel Andrei''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt, and before you can react, Andrei unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -759,8 +759,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You got comfortable under the table and brought your head between his thighs and started sucking on his cock...'
-			'Sergei''s cock got rock hard fast and soon enough you could feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
+			'You get comfortable under the table, bring your head between his thighs and start sucking on his cock...'
+			'Sergei''s cock gets rock hard fast, and soon enough, you can feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -776,8 +776,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablecum1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'Sergei didn''t last more for a minute or two, his thighs tensed up and his load started shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
-					'When he was all done you cleaned Andrei the best you could, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zipped him up.'
+					'Sergei doesn''t last more that a minute or two. His thighs tense up and his load starts shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
+					'When he is all done, you cleaned Sergei the best you can, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zip him up.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstableBJ'
@@ -792,7 +792,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You could feel Sergei''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt and before you can react Andrei unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
+					'You can feel Sergei''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt, and before you can react, Sergei unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -812,8 +812,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You got comfortable under the table and brought your head between his thighs and started sucking on his cock...'
-			'Igor''s cock got rock hard fast and soon enough you could feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
+			'You get comfortable under the table, bring your head between his thighs and start sucking on his cock...'
+			'Igor''s cock gets rock hard fast, and soon enough, you can feel a taste of pre-cum in your mouth...'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -829,8 +829,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablecum1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'Igor didn''t last more for a minute or two, his thighs tensed up and his load started shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
-					'When he was all done you cleaned Andrei the best you could, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zipped him up.'
+					'Igor doesn''t last more than a minute or two. His thighs tense up and his load starts shooting out and hitting your face several times.'
+					'When he is all done, you cleaned Igor the best you can, and then you put his cock back in his pants and zip him up.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstableBJ'
@@ -845,7 +845,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstableBJ':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hanterstablebj1.'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You could feel Igor''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt and before you can react Andrei unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
+					'You can feel Igor''s cock tensing up, ready to explode. You hear a grunt, and before you can react, Igor unloads his warm spunk in your mouth...'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -896,7 +896,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/kuh/beer2.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You take a bottle of bear, open it and start drinking it.'
+			'You take a bottle of beer, open it and start drinking it.'
 
 			act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
@@ -907,7 +907,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/snack1.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You grab something to eat, so you don''t get drunk to quickly.'
+			'You grab something to eat so you don''t get drunk too quickly.'
 			act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
 		act 'Chat (0:30)':
@@ -920,7 +920,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You chat with the men about various topics... You try to keep up with their lingo but sometime fail and you all have a laugh about it.'
+			'You chat with the men about various topics... You try to keep up with their lingo but sometimes fail and you all have a laugh about it.'
 
 			act 'Continue': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
@@ -953,7 +953,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hantersmoker2.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You follow them outside, they give you a cigarette, you light it and smoke it...'
+					'You follow them outside, they give you a cigarette, and you light it and smoke it...'
 
 					act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 				end
@@ -981,7 +981,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hantersmoker2.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'The two of you walk outside, Andrei hands you a cigarette. You start talking about your feelings for each other.'
+						'The two of you walk outside, and Andrei hands you a cigarette. You start talking about your feelings for each other.'
 
 						act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 					end
@@ -1002,14 +1002,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big172.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'You follow Andrei outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation. Suddenly Andrei, looking in your eyes, says:'
-							'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, could you help me out?"'
-							'"Of course, Andrei, I''ll be glad to." you replied. "What do you need help with?" you asked a bit worried.'
-							'"As you know <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have long been divorced for a long time," Andrei began. "But as every normal man, I need to relieve stress sometimes, well, you know what I mean..."'
+							'You follow Andrei outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation. Suddenly, Andrei, looking in your eyes, says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, could you help me out?"'
+							'"Of course, Andrei, I''d be glad to," you reply. "What do you need help with?" you ask, a bit worried.'
+							'"As you know <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have been divorced for a long time," Andrei begins, "but like every normal man, I need to relieve stress sometimes, well, you know what I mean..."'
 							'You look at his frankness with astonishment.'
-							'"Now <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you could help me out now and then, I would be very graIn the sput of the moment, while the men cheer you on, you remove your topteful," Andrei continued.'
-							'You watch in disbelief, he''s clearly not joking around. You can see on Andrei''s facial expression that he''s being dead serious.'
-							'"I won''t tell anybody about this, don''t worry, no one will know." he adds quickly. "Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, what do you say?'
+							'"Now <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you could help me out now and then, I would be very grateful," Andrei continues.'
+							'You listen in disbelief. He''s clearly not joking around. You can see from Andrei''s facial expression that he''s being dead serious.'
+							'"I won''t tell anybody about this, don''t worry, no one will know," he adds quickly. "Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, what do you say?'
 
 							act 'Agree':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -1022,10 +1021,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/thinks'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 								*nl
-								'After you hear him out, you start seriously considering his offer. It would be nice to help out a friend is nice, but you sense that there''s an ulterior motive.'
+								'After you hear him out, you start seriously considering his offer. It would be nice to help out a friend, but you sense that there''s an ulterior motive.'
 								'"Well Andrei, after carefully thinking about it, I''ll help you out. How do you want me to help you out?" you ask.'
-								'"Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I knew you would," he replied. "Well, I wouldn''t mind a blowjob now and then, that''s good enough for me."'
-								'"Go back to the hut, and crawl under the table so no one notices." he adds while getting up from the bench.'
+								'"Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I knew you would," he replies. "Well, I wouldn''t mind a blowjob now and then, that''s good enough for me."'
+								'"Go back to the hut, and crawl under the table so no one notices," he adds while getting up from the bench.'
 
 								act 'Go': gs 'swamphouse', 'huntersmokBJ'
 							end
@@ -1040,9 +1039,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/thinks'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
-									'After you hear him out, you start seriously considering his offer. It would be nice to help out a friend is nice, but you sense that there''s an ulterior motive.'
-									'"No Andrei, I''m sorry but I refuse." you answer. "How could you even think that I would be accepting your offer?'
-									'You got up from the bench and quickly went back to the hut.'
+									'After you hear him out, you start seriously considering his offer. It would be nice to help out a friend, but you sense that there''s an ulterior motive.'
+									'"No Andrei, I''m sorry but I refuse," you answer. "How could you even think that I would accept your offer?'
+									'You get up from the bench and quickly go back to the hut.'
 
 									act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 								end
@@ -1059,8 +1058,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big172.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'You went outside for a smoke, with Andrei following after you, immediately saying:'
-							'"Forget the cigarette <<$pcs_nickname>>, go back inside and crawl under the table, I need you so bad right now...'
+							'You go outside for a smoke, with Andrei following after you, immediately saying, "Forget the cigarette <<$pcs_nickname>>, go back inside and crawl under the table, I need you so bad right now...'
 
 							act 'Go': gs 'swamphouse', 'huntersmokBJ'
 							if alko < 6:
@@ -1074,7 +1072,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/thinks'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
 									'"You know what Andrei, I''ve changed my mind. I''m more than happy to help a friend in need, but I''m not some whore that only exists for your pleasure."'
-									'You got up from the bench and quickly went back to the hut.'
+									'You get up from the bench and quickly go back to the hut.'
 
 									act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 								end
@@ -1091,8 +1089,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big172.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'You went outside for a smoke, with Andrei following after you, immediately saying:'
-						'"To hell with the cigarette <<$pcs_nickname>>, I need to relieve some stress."'
+						'You go outside for a smoke, with Andrei following after you, immediately saying, "To hell with the cigarette <<$pcs_nickname>>, I need to relieve some stress."'
 
 						act 'Go': gs 'swamphouse', 'huntersmokBJ'
 					end
@@ -1120,7 +1117,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hantersmoker2.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You followed Sergei outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation.'
+					'You follow Sergei outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation.'
 
 
 					act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
@@ -1148,7 +1145,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hantersmoker2.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You followed Igor outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation.'
+					'You follow Igor outside. He gives you a cigarette, and the two of you continue on with your conversation.'
 
 					act 'Return to the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 				end
@@ -1184,7 +1181,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel1.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'Three hours later you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+							'Three hours later, you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 							act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 						end
@@ -1198,7 +1195,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep7.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'You try to reach the bed, but pass out right on the floor, before reaching it...'
+						'You try to reach the bed but pass out right on the floor before reaching it...'
 
 						act 'Wake up':
 							*clr & cla
@@ -1210,7 +1207,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel4.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'Four hours later you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+							'Four hours later, you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 							act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 						end
@@ -1248,7 +1245,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pjanaja5.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'The drunken men ask you to dance for them, Andrei turns on the music and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
+						'The drunken men ask you to dance for them. Andrei turns on the music, and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
 						inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 						if hunterslut < 5:
 							act 'Stop dancing':
@@ -1257,7 +1254,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep11.jpg"></center>'
 								*nl
-								'Standing on your feet you come to realization that you need to sleep. The men get frustrated when they notice you crashing on the couch and going to sleep.'
+								'Standing on your feet, you come to realization that you need to sleep. The men get frustrated when they notice you crashing on the couch and going to sleep.'
 
 								act 'Wake up':
 									*clr & cla
@@ -1283,7 +1280,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance1.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 								*nl
-								'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that reminds of rhythmic dance, the men start clapping.'
+								'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that resembles rhythmic dance. The men start clapping.'
 								inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 								if hunterslut >= 10:
 									act 'Keep dancing':
@@ -1297,7 +1294,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance2.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 										*nl
-										'In the spur of the moment, while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
+										'In the spur of the moment while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
 										inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 										if hunterslut >= 15:
 											act 'Keep dancing':
@@ -1311,7 +1308,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance3.jpg"></center>'
 												*nl
-												'The men continue cheering you on, you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
+												'The men continue cheering you on, and you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
 												inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 												act 'Pass out':
 													*clr & cla
@@ -1319,7 +1316,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 													gs 'stat'
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep10.jpg"></center>'
 													*nl
-													'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body. So after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
+													'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body, as after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
 
 													act 'Wake up':
 														*clr & cla
@@ -1331,7 +1328,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 														'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel4.jpg"></center>'
 														*nl
-														'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+														'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle of the night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 														act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 													end
@@ -1344,7 +1341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep11.jpg"></center>'
 												*nl
-												'After a while of dancing, your legs aren''t longer able to keep up, so you decide to go to sleep much to the mens disappointment.'
+												'After a while dancing, your legs are no longer able to keep up, so you decide to go to sleep, much to the men''s disappointment.'
 
 												act 'Wake up':
 													*clr & cla
@@ -1370,7 +1367,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep11.jpg"></center>'
 										*nl
-										'After a while of dancing, your legs aren''t longer able to keep up, so you decide to go to sleep much to the mens disappointment.'
+										'After a while dancing, your legs are no longer able to keep up, so you decide to go to sleep, much to the men''s disappointment.'
 
 										act 'Wake up':
 											*clr & cla
@@ -1401,7 +1398,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pjanaja5.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'The drunken men ask you to dance for them, Andrei turns on the music and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
+					'The drunken men ask you to dance for them. Andrei turns on the music, and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
 
 					act 'Dance':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -1410,7 +1407,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance1.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that reminds of rhythmic dance, the men start clapping.'
+						'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that resembles rhythmic dance. The men start clapping.'
 						inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 						act 'Keep dancing':
 							*clr & cla
@@ -1423,7 +1420,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance2.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'In the spur of the moment, while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
+							'In the spur of the moment while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
 							inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 							act 'Keep dancing':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -1437,7 +1434,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance3.jpg"></center>'
 								*nl
-								'The men continue cheering you on, you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
+								'The men continue cheering you on, and you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
 
 								act 'Keep dancing':
 									*clr & cla
@@ -1450,7 +1447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance4.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
-									'You remove the bra and throw it on the table, the men cheer you on and you flash your breasts in front of them.'
+									'You remove the bra and throw it on the table. The men cheer you on, and you flash your breasts in front of them.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10
 									gs 'stat'
 									if temp_sh = 1:
@@ -1460,7 +1457,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep17.jpg"></center>'
 											*nl
-											'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body. So after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
+											'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body, as after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
 
 											act 'Wake up':
 												*clr & cla
@@ -1472,7 +1469,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel3.jpg"></center>'
 												*nl
-												'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+												'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle of the night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 												act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 											end
@@ -1505,7 +1502,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swamphousedrunkgirl1.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You''re really drunk, you slur your words,	 and everything is spinning...'
+			'You''re really drunk, you slur your words, and everything is spinning...'
 
 			if temp_sh = 1:
 				act 'Pass out':
@@ -1526,7 +1523,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel1.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'Three hours later you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+						'Three hours later, you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 						act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 					end
@@ -1539,7 +1536,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep7.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You try to reach the bed, but pass out right on the floor, before reaching it...'
+					'You try to reach the bed but pass out right on the floor before reaching it...'
 
 					act 'Wake up':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -1551,7 +1548,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel4.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'Four hours later you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+						'Four hours later, you wake up in the middle of the night. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 						act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 					end
@@ -1564,7 +1561,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep4.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You somehow got to the couch and passed out without undressing...'
+					'You somehow get to the couch and pass out without undressing...'
 
 					act 'Wake up':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -1589,7 +1586,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pjanaja5.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'The drunken men ask you to dance for them, Andrei turns on the music and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
+					'The drunken men ask you to dance for them. Andrei turns on the music, and you drunkenly start swaying next to the table...'
 
 					act 'Dance':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -1599,7 +1596,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance1.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 						*nl
-						'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that reminds of rhythmic dance, the men start clapping.'
+						'You stand next to the table and begin to depict something that resembles rhythmic dance. The men start clapping.'
 
 						act 'Keep dancing':
 							*clr & cla
@@ -1609,7 +1606,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance2.'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 							*nl
-							'In the spur of the moment, while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
+							'In the spur of the moment while the men cheer you on, you remove your top, leaving you only with a bra on...'
 
 							act 'Keep dancing':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -1619,7 +1616,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance3.jpg"></center>'
 								*nl
-								'The men continue cheering you on, you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
+								'The men continue cheering you on, and you keep undressing further, remaining only in underwear...'
 
 								act 'Keep dancing':
 									*clr & cla
@@ -1627,7 +1624,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dance4.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
-									'You remove the bra and throw it on the table, the men cheer you on and you flash your breasts in front of them.'
+									'You remove the bra and throw it on the table. The men cheer you on, and you flash your breasts in front of them.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10
 									gs 'stat'
 									if temp_sh = 1:
@@ -1637,7 +1634,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/sleep17.jpg"></center>'
 											*nl
-											'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body. So after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
+											'You clearly overestimated the capability of your body, as after a while dancing, you pass out on the floor, making the men quite nervous...'
 
 											act 'Wake up':
 												*clr & cla
@@ -1649,7 +1646,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/bigroom/drunk_ev/pohmel3.jpg"></center>'
 												*nl
-												'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
+												'You sleep for four hours, waking up in the middle of the night, barely able to get up off the floor. You''ve got a headache and vaguely remember yesterday.'
 
 												act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 											end
@@ -1696,7 +1693,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You start chating with the guys about trivial stuff...'
+			'You start chatting with the guys about trivial stuff...'
 
 			act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
@@ -1712,7 +1709,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You start chating with the guys about trivial stuff...'
+			'You start chatting with the guys about trivial stuff...'
 
 			act 'Continue': gt 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
@@ -1726,9 +1723,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You sit down at the table, wanting to eat with the guys, before you can begin you hear...'
-			'"Not so fast <<$pcs_nickname>>, Andrei said with a smile on his face. "You understand that the only free cheese is the one found in the mousetrap."'
-			'"Want to eat with us, you need to do some work," he mockingly grinned and pointed under the table.'
+			'You sit down at the table, wanting to eat with the guys, but before you can begin, you hear...'
+			'"Not so fast <<$pcs_nickname>>," Andrei says with a smile on his face. "You understand that the only free cheese is the one found in the mousetrap."'
+			'"Want to eat with us, you need to do some work," he mockingly grins and points under the table.'
 
 			act 'Crawl under the table': gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstableBJ'
 			act 'Refuse': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
@@ -1740,7 +1737,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'Noticing you, the men start grinning...'
-			'"About time! Our <<$pcs_nickname>> has arrived. Come here, join us at the table." said Andrei.'
+			'"About time! Our <<$pcs_nickname>> has arrived. Come here, join us at the table," says Andrei.'
 
 			act 'Sit at the table':hunterstableBJ = 1 & gs 'swamphouse', 'hunterstable'
 		end
@@ -1753,7 +1750,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hunterstable':
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterstable.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You sit down at the table, wanting to eat with the guys, before you can begin you hear...'
+		'You sit down at the table, wanting to eat with the guys, but before you can begin, you hear...'
 		'"Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know you like our artistic work on your face, but you need to wash up before you sit down with us.'
 
 		act 'Go': gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
@@ -1786,8 +1783,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'huntersmokBJ':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hantersmokbj1.'+rand(1,3)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	if huntersmokBJ = 0:'You got comfortable on your knees and start sucking on his cock...'
-	if huntersmokBJ = 1:'Andrei did not finish, so you continue to suck...'
+	if huntersmokBJ = 0:'You get comfortable on your knees and start sucking on his cock...'
+	if huntersmokBJ = 1:'Andrei does not finish, so you continue to suck...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1803,7 +1800,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'huntersmokBJ':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/hunter/hantersmokcum.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'You notice Andrei''s thighs stiffen as he''s edging... He lets out a grunt and shoots his spunk all over your face.'
-			'"You''re really good at this, <<$pcs_nickname>>," said a pleased Andrei. "You''re the perfect stress reliever.'
+			'"You''re really good at this, <<$pcs_nickname>>," says a pleased Andrei. "You''re the perfect stress reliever.'
 			'You clean yourself up before walking back to the hut with Andrei.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -1827,8 +1824,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dirty_swamphouse':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/dirty_swamphouse.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Visiting the hut, you notice that the hut has gotten pretty dirty. "I need to do something about this." you think to yourself. You grab a broom and a rag and began cleaning.'
-	'After a while you''ve finished cleaning and put back everything in order again. You''re quite pleased with yourself.'
+	'Visiting the hut, you notice that it has gotten pretty dirty. "I need to do something about this," you think to yourself. You grab a broom and a rag and begin cleaning.'
+	'After a while, you''ve finished cleaning and put everything back in order again. You''re quite pleased with yourself.'
 
 	act 'Continue':dirty_swamphouse = 0 & gt 'swamphouse', 'start'
 end
@@ -1854,7 +1851,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'get_dressed':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swamphousenude1.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'Seeing you naked, the men just shake their heads...'
-			'"Look here <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you want to charm us, you will need to think of something else." said one of the guys.'
+			'"Look here <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you want to charm us, you will need to think of something else," says one of the guys.'
 
 			act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -1876,7 +1873,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'get_dressed':
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swampdvornude1.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'You look around searching for your clothes. When you spot them, you dash over to grab them.'
+				'You look around, searching for your clothes. When you spot them, you dash over to grab them.'
 				act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		else
@@ -1887,7 +1884,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'get_dressed':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/tkan_cloth.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'You look around searching for your clothes but can''t seem to find them, instead you hide behind a piece of hessian... It''s better than nothing.'
+				'You look around, searching for your clothes, but can''t seem to find them. Instead, you hide behind a piece of hessian... It''s better than nothing.'
 				act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		end
@@ -1898,8 +1895,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'get_dressed':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/swamphousenude1.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You take a deep breath and decided to disregard your nerves and leave it as it is. Upon encountering the hunters, they can''t help themselves, they start staring at your most private parts.'
-			'"Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you look really good. The things I would want to do to you..." said a somewhat aroused Andrei.'
+			'You take a deep breath and decide to disregard your nerves and leave yourself as is. Upon encountering the hunters, they can''t help themselves, they start staring at your most private parts.'
+			'"Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you look really good. The things I would want to do to you..." says a somewhat aroused Andrei.'
 			act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	end