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[text edit] clean up stwork2

Spackled Lanturn hace 3 años
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locations/stwork2.qsrc

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 	if striptip < 10:$pubhot = 'booing you, you hear someone shout, "Get this stupid cow off the stage."'
 	if striptip >= 10 and striptip < 20:$pubhot = 'clearly showing discontent with your dancing. They want you off the stage as quickly as possible.'
 	if striptip >= 20 and striptip < 30:$pubhot = 'clearly looking bored, drinking and talking among themselves, ignoring you.'
-	if striptip >= 30 and striptip < 60:$pubhot = 'sometime looking at you, smiling and enjoy the performance.'
+	if striptip >= 30 and striptip < 60:$pubhot = 'sometimes looking at you, smiling and enjoy the performance.'
 	if striptip >= 60 and striptip < 70:$pubhot = 'watching you with genuine interest while conversing with each other over their beers.'
 	if striptip >= 70 and striptip < 80:$pubhot = 'having their attention focused on you.'
 	if striptip >= 80 and striptip < 90:$pubhot = 'with strained faces, sweat beading on their foreheads, their arousal clearly showing.'
@@ -50,10 +50,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripclo' + rand(4,5) + '.jpg"></center>'
 							if custboo = 0:
 								pcs_mood += 5
-								'Urged on by the audience you take off your blouse and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
+								'Urged on by the audience, you take off your blouse and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
 							else
 								pcs_mood -= 5
-								'Ignoring the comments from the audience you take off your blouse and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
+								'Ignoring the comments from the audience, you take off your blouse and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
 							end
 							gs 'stwork2', 'custboo'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -62,10 +62,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripclo' + rand(6,7) + '.jpg"></center>'
 								if custboo = 0:
 									pcs_mood += 5
-									'The positive responses make you smile even broader as you unzip your skirt and let it drop to your ankles before kicking it off and laying down on the stage, rolling around and looking several customers straight in the eyes. Some of them throw some bills your way and you take care to pay them some extra attention.'
+									'The positive responses make you smile even broader as you unzip your skirt and let it drop to your ankles before kicking it off and lying down on the stage, rolling around and looking several customers straight in the eyes. Some of them throw some bills your way, and you take care to pay them some extra attention.'
 								else
 									pcs_mood -= 5
-									'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable as you unzip your skirt and let it drop to your ankles before kicking it off and laying down on the stage, rolling around and looking several customers straight in the eyes.'
+									'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable as you unzip your skirt and let it drop to your ankles before kicking it off and lying down on the stage, rolling around and looking several customers straight in the eyes.'
 								end
 								gs 'stwork2', 'custboo'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -75,15 +75,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripclo' + rand(9,15) + '.jpg"></center>'
 										if custboo = 0:
 											pcs_mood += 5
-											'The men in the first row go wild when you take off your bra. Shouting "Show your pussy! Show your pussy!"'
-											'As you hook your fingers into your panties a few customers start throwing money on the stage. You walk over to one of them and bend over, giving him a great view of your ass as you pull your panties off.'
+											'The men in the first row go wild when you take off your bra, shouting "Show your pussy! Show your pussy!"'
+											'As you hook your fingers into your panties, a few customers start throwing money on the stage. You walk over to one of them and bend over, giving him a great view of your ass as you pull your panties off.'
 											'After that you dance as seductively as you can, trying to spread your attention over the audience, but paying extra attention to the ones who give you more money.'
 										else
-											'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable as you take off your bra, but as soon as soon as they can see your tits the audience becomes a lot more appreciative.'
-											'This gives you the courage to take off your panties as well. Once you are naked some customers start throwing money on the stage.'
+											'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable as you take off your bra, but as soon as soon as they can see your tits, the audience becomes a lot more appreciative.'
+											'This gives you the courage to take off your panties as well. Once you are naked, some customers start throwing money on the stage.'
 											'You dance as seductively as you can, trying to spread your attention over the audience, but paying extra attention to the ones who give you more money.'
 										end
-										'When the music starts winding down you collect your tips and pick up your clothes, waving a few kisses to your audience before going backstage again.'
+										'When the music starts winding down, you collect your tips and pick up your clothes, blowing a few kisses to your audience before going backstage again.'
 										gs 'exhibitionism', 3
 										stprivatechance = 1
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -94,9 +94,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripclo8.jpg"></center>'
 										pcs_mood -= 5
-										'Not sure what you could do to please your audience you take off your bra and toss it with the rest of your clothes. Even this doesn''t seem to get any positive responses.'
-										'All you can hear is mockery as you try to ignore them and continue your act. The cutting remarks keep coming however and soon you are close to tears.'
-										'Before the music stops you start collecting your meager tips and clothes and flee backstage.'
+										'Not sure what you could do to please your audience, you take off your bra and toss it with the rest of your clothes. Even this doesn''t seem to get any positive responses.'
+										'All you can hear is mockery as you try to ignore them and continue your act. The cutting remarks keep coming however, and soon you are close to tears.'
+										'Before the music stops, you start collecting your meager tips and clothes and flee backstage.'
 										gs 'exhibitionism', 1
 										stprivatechance = 0
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -114,10 +114,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripund' + rand(4,8) + '.jpg"></center>'
 							if custboo = 0:
 								pcs_mood += 5
-								'Urged on by the audience you slowly take off your bra and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
+								'Urged on by the audience, you slowly take off your bra and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
 							else
 								pcs_mood -= 5
-								'Ignoring the comments from the audience you slowly take off your bra and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
+								'Ignoring the comments from the audience, you slowly take off your bra and let it drop to the stage while you keep teasing them.'
 							end
 							'You even perform a few easy moves on the pole.'
 							gs 'stwork2', 'custboo'
@@ -128,7 +128,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripund' + rand(9,12) + '.jpg"></center>'
 								if custboo = 0:
 									pcs_mood += 5
-									'The positive responses make you smile even broader as you playfully drop your panties to your ankles before kicking them off. You look several customers straight in the eyes as you do so. Some of them throw some bills your way and you take care to pay them some extra attention.'
+									'The positive responses make you smile even broader as you playfully drop your panties to your ankles before kicking them off. You look several customers straight in the eyes as you do so. Some of them throw some bills your way, and you take care to pay them some extra attention.'
 								else
 									pcs_mood -= 5
 									'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable as you playfully drop your panties to your ankles before kicking them off. You look several customers straight in the eyes as you do so.'
@@ -142,13 +142,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripund' + rand(13,14) + '.jpg"></center>'
 										if custboo = 0:
 											pcs_mood += 5
-											'The men in the first row go wild as soon as you are fully nude. Shouting out their approval. Several of them are tipping generously.'
+											'The men in the first row go wild as soon as you are fully nude, shouting out their approval. Several of them are tipping generously.'
 											'You dance as seductively as you can, trying to spread your attention over the audience, but paying extra attention to the ones who give you more money.'
 										else
-											'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable. Not wanting to give up you put all your effort into your dancing. This seems to please some of them and they start tipping you after all.'
+											'The negative comments make you feel a bit uncomfortable. Not wanting to give up, you put all your effort into your dancing. This seems to please some of them, and they start tipping you after all.'
 											'You dance as seductively as you can, trying to spread your attention over the audience, but paying extra attention to the ones who give you more money.'
 										end
-										'When the music starts winding down you collect your tips and pick up your clothes, waving a few kisses to your audience before going backstage again.'
+										'When the music starts winding down, you collect your tips and pick up your clothes, blowing a few kisses to your audience before going backstage again.'
 										gs 'exhibitionism', 3
 										stprivatechance = 1
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -160,8 +160,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/stripund' + rand(13,14) + '.jpg"></center>'
 										pcs_mood -= 5
 										'Even being completely naked doesn''t seem to get any positive responses.'
-										'All you can hear is mockery as you try to ignore them and continue your act. The cutting remarks keep coming however and soon you are close to tears.'
-										'Before the music stops you start collecting your meager tips and clothes and flee backstage.'
+										'All you can hear is mockery as you try to ignore them and continue your act. The cutting remarks keep coming however, and soon you are close to tears.'
+										'Before the music stops, you start collecting your meager tips and clothes and flee backstage.'
 										gs 'exhibitionism', 3
 										stprivatechance = 0
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -194,25 +194,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strip':
 				
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/strippole.jpg"></center>'
-				'You step up on the stage and the music starts. You grab hold of the pole and acrobatically slide around it while you teasingly undress.'
+				'You step up on the stage, and the music starts. You grab hold of the pole and acrobatically slide around it while you teasingly undress.'
 
 				if pcs_weight > pcs_hgt - 90:
 					vesrand = rand(0, 100)
 
 					if vesrand >= 75:
-						'Performing another trick on the pole you can not support your weight and fall flat to the floor. The crowd laughs, "Hey, hippopotamus, stomp back to the swamp where you came from."'
+						'Performing another trick on the pole, you can not support your weight and fall flat on your face. The crowd laughs, "Hey, hippopotamus, stomp back to the swamp where you came from."'
 						striptip -= 15
 						fingalrand = rand(0, 100)
 						if fingalrand >= 75:
 							fingal += rand(2, 5)
 							gs 'pain', 4, 'cheeks', 'Slam'
 							gs 'stat'
-							'As you fall, you hit the floor really hard and you can feel a bruise forming on your face.'
+							'As you fall, you hit the floor really hard, and you can feel a bruise forming on your face.'
 						end
 					end
 					if vesrand >= 50:
 						striptip -= rand(5, 10)
-						'You overhear some of the customers right next to the stage, "Look at her fat hanging out. Her gut and ass shaking like jelly."'
+						'You overhear some of the customers right next to the stage, "Look at her fat hanging out. Her gut and ass are shaking like jelly."'
 					end
 				end
 
@@ -250,7 +250,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'custboo':
 			custbooing += 1
 			resprand = rand(0,3)
 			if resprand = 0:
-				'You overhear some of the customers right next to the stage, "Look at her fat hanging out. Her gut and ass shaking like jelly."'
+				'You overhear some of the customers right next to the stage, "Look at her fat hanging out. Her gut and ass are shaking like jelly."'
 			elseif resprand = 1:
 				'You overhear some of the customers right next to the stage, "What a cow. Someone should roll her off the stage."'
 			elseif resprand = 2:
@@ -309,7 +309,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tipcalculator':
 		end
 	else
 		if rand(0,15) = 0:
-			'The customers were mesmerized by your dancing but no one tipped you.'
+			'The customers were mesmerized by your dancing, but no one tipped you.'
 		else
 			paymoneyrand = rand(10,100) * 5
 			money += paymoneyrand
@@ -334,7 +334,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'privatdance':
 
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/privatstrip.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk over to a smaller private room where you put on some music before the customer walks in. As the customer walks in you tell him to sit down and enjoy the show. You spend half an hour showing off your dancing skills, and every time you grind against him you can feel his rock hard cock.'
+	'You walk over to a smaller private room where you put on some music before the customer walks in. As the customer walks in, you tell him to sit down and enjoy the show. You spend half an hour showing off your dancing skills, and every time you grind against him, you can feel his rock hard cock.'
 
 	stprrand = rand(0,15)
 	if stprrand = 0:
@@ -351,7 +351,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pr1':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/pr1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Just as you start to dance, you hear a knock on the door. His friends are waiting outside wanting to join in on the dance. Feeling trapped you agree and start dancing, after a while they tell you to stop and ask if you''re willing to go all the way for 4000 <b>₽</b>.'
+	'Just as you start to dance, you hear a knock on the door. His friends are waiting outside wanting to join in on the dance. Feeling trapped, you agree and start dancing. After a while, they tell you to stop and ask if you''re willing to go all the way for 4000 <b>₽</b>.'
 
 	act 'Reject them':gt 'stwork', 'start'
 
@@ -378,7 +378,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pr2':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/pr2.jpg"></center>'
-	'The man you''re dancing is mesmerized by you and can''t stop touching himself, after a while he asks you if he can fuck you for 2000 <b>₽</b>.'
+	'The man you''re dancing for is mesmerized by you and can''t stop touching himself. After a while, he asks you if he can fuck you for 2000 <b>₽</b>.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -404,7 +404,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pr3':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/stripclub/pr3.jpg"></center>'
-	'It''s a bit different dancing for a woman, it''s not often you have the pleasure doing that so you''re feeling a bit more frisky than usual. As you finish the dance she gives you an kiss and you start making out. She stops and offers you 1000 <b>₽</b> to continue on.'
+	'It''s a bit different dancing for a woman. It''s not often you have the pleasure of doing that, so you''re feeling a bit more frisky than usual. As you finish the dance, she gives you a kiss, and you start making out. She stops and offers you 1000 <b>₽</b> to continue on.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr: