Merge remote-tracking branch 'upstream/master' into ml-dev

locations/city_market.qsrc

@@ -184,8 +184,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $loc_arg = 'start':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'clo':
-	$loc_arg = $ARGS[0]
-	$loc = '$city_market'
+	$loc_arg = 'clo'
+	$loc = 'city_market'
 	cls
 	gs'stat'
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'

locations/dinParty.qsrc

@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	elseif temp = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_3_<<rand(1,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'A girl sits on the toilet peeing and she seems oddly happy to see you.'
+		'A girl sits on the toilet, urinating. She seems oddly happy to see you.'
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	elseif temp = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_4.jpg"></center>'
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 			*clr & cla
 			toiletEvent_Rex = daystart
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_5_2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You walk over to Rex and when you are with in arms reach he grabs you by the neck and pulls you close kisses your lips, you take his dick in hand and gently stroke it.'
+			'You walk over to Rex and when you are within arms reach, he grabs you by the neck and pulls you close, kissing your lips. You take his dick in your hand and gently stroke it.'			
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 			act 'Masturbate':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_5_<<rand(3,4)>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'Breaking the kiss you put your full attention on jerking Rex off.'
+				'Breaking the kiss, you put your full attention into jerking Rex off.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 					spafinloc = 15
 					gs 'cum_manage'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_5_5.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you jerk him off he moans and sperm starts spewing everywhere getting on your hands. "Ooh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you saved me, but next time use your mouth." He said with a wink.'
+					'As you jerk him off, he moans and sperm starts squirting all over your hands. "Ooh <<$pcs_nickname>>, you saved me. But next time, use your mouth." he says with a wink.'
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -63,8 +63,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 				if reksMeet = 1: bja += 1
 				gs 'boyStat', 'A57'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_5_<<rand(6,10)>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'You feel Rex''s hands on your shoulders gently pushing you down, you instantly obey and drop to your knees. Once your eye and more importantly mouth level with Rex''s <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick, you take his head into your mouth and wrap your lips tightly around his shaft as you begin to stroke him off with your mouth.'
-				'He moans as you suck his cock, he is already tensing up, you can tell he is already about to cum.'
+				'You feel Rex''s hands on your shoulders gently pushing you down. You instantly obey and drop to your knees. Once you''re level with Rex''s <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick, you take his head into your mouth and wrap your lips tightly around his shaft as you begin to suck him off.'
+				'He moans as you suck his cock. He is already tensing up and you can tell he is already about to cum.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_5_<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 					end
-					'You barely have time to pull the penis out of your mouth, but a couple of spurts of cum still shoot into your mouth. The rest of the sperm spurts in streams across your pretty face, you happily lick his quivering dick, licking up the last drops of cum up.'
+					'You barely have time to pull his cock out of your mouth and a couple of spurts of cum shoot into your mouth, but the rest coats your pretty face. You happily lick his quivering dick, licking the last drops of cum up.'
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -96,8 +96,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	elseif temp = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_6_1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Coming into the bathroom you find your sister Anna sitting on the toilet, you notice cum on her face.'
-		'When she see''s you, she smiles, then opens up her mouth and sticks out her tongue, showing her tongue completely coated in cum.'
+		'Entering the bathroom, you find your sister sitting on the toilet. You notice the cum on her face.'
+		'When she sees you, she smiles, then opens up her mouth and sticks out her tongue, showing how it is completely coated in cum.'
 		act 'Lick':
 			*clr & cla
 			toiletEvent_Sis = daystart
@@ -113,21 +113,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_6_<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 			end
-			'Seeing this little display you smile and kneel down in front of her. You start licking the sperm off her face, once you have licked it all up, you kiss her. The two of you share a long kiss where you trade the cum back and forth in your mouths before you both end up swallowing a portion of it.'
-			'"So who''s dick or should I say dicks, have you been sucking to get all that cum, all over you?" You ask with a smile.'
-			'"Roma tried to make up again." You sister responded angrily, once she finished peeing she got up and left. Obviously not wanting to talk about it.'
+			'Seeing this little display, you smile and kneel down in front of her and start licking the sperm off her face. Once you have licked it all up, you kiss her. The two of you share a long kiss where you trade the cum back and forth in your mouths before you both end up swallowing a portion of it.'
+			'"So who''s dick, or should I say dicks, have you been sucking to get all that cum all over you?" you ask with a smile.'
+			'"Roma tried to make up again." your sister responds angrily. Once she has finished peeing, she gets up and leaves, obviously not wanting to talk about it.'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	elseif temp = 6:
 		toiletEvent_Girls = daystart
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You just opened the door and saw Lena and Ira kissing, while Ira sat on the toilet. Lena pushes Ira''s legs apart and then breaks the kiss, lowering her facshe begins to lick her pussy, while Ira is still sitting on the toilet.'
+		'You open the door and see Lena and Ira kissing while Ira sits on the toilet. Lena pushes Ira''s legs apart and then breaks the kiss, lowers herself and begins to lick her pussy while Ira is still sitting on the toilet.'
 		'"Ahaha, Lena, your such a bitch sometimes and that''s why I love you." Moaned Ira.'
 		act 'Watch':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_2.jpg"></center>'
-			'A few moments later they both get up and strip naked, Lena sits Ira on the edge of the sink. Lena drops back to her knees while Ira spreads her legs wide, giving her friend easy access. Lena starts licking her friends pussy at once, Ira closes her eyes and moans softly at her friends attention.'
+			'A few moments later, they both get up and strip naked. Lena sits Ira on the edge of the sink and drops back to her knees while Ira spreads her legs wide, giving her friend easy access. Lena starts licking her friend''s pussy at once and Ira closes her eyes and moans softly.'
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 			act 'Watch':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_3.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Ira moans louder, her breathe coming quicker, she grabs Lena''s head and pushes it against her crotch as she grinds herself against her friends face. Her body begins to tremble as she lets out a finally load moan of pleasure as she orgasms, coating her friends face with her pussy juices.'
+				'Ira moans louder and her breathing becoming quicker. She grabs Lena''s head and pushes it against her crotch as she grinds herself against her friend''s face. Her body begins to tremble as she lets out a loud moan of pleasure as she orgasms, coating her friend''s face with her pussy juices.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -145,15 +145,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_4.jpg"></center>'
-					'Once they finish you walk in. Ira and Lena look at each other and then smile at you.'
-					'"Oh, it''s you <<$pcs_nickname>>, glad it is not some guy. We do not know what we would have done with him."'
-					'"Yes, I just wanted to tidy myself up." you said with a slight blush.'
-					'Lena came up to you and leaned in close as she whispered in your ear: "You liked watching what we were doing, right?. Stay with us, and you''ll like it even more."'
+					'Once they finish, you walk in. Ira and Lena look at each other and then smile at you.'
+					'"Oh, it''s you <<$pcs_nickname>>. Glad it is not some guy. We do not know what we would have done with him."'
+					'"Yes, I just wanted to tidy myself up." you say with a slight blush.'
+					'Lena comes up to you and leans in close as she whispers in your ear: "You liked watching what we were doing, right? Stay with us and you''ll like it even more."'
 					act 'Stay':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Looking at the naked girls you bite your lower lip as your eyes roam over their bodies with a lustful look. Ira and Lena start taking your clothes off as they start kissing you all over.'
-						'"Mmm, Oh yes, don''t stop." You moan out. With these words, Lena sucks your clit and began licking your wet pussy.'
+						'Looking at the naked girls, you bite your lower lip as your eyes roam over their bodies with a lustful look. Ira and Lena start kissing you all over while stripping you.'
+						'"Mmm.. Oh yes, don''t stop." you moan out. Lena sucks your clit and begins licking your wet pussy.'
 						
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -162,8 +162,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 							*clr & cla
 							pcs_mood = 100
 							'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_6.mp4"></video></center>'
-							'From the gentle caresses of girls you feel incredible pleasure, completely trusting them you feel totally relaxed. Then Ira takes Lena''s place licking your pussy, while Lena slides her tongue to your asshole as she begins to lick it.'
-							'From this dual tongue lashing you don''t last long. You start moaning loudly and your body spasms hard with an orgasm, coating Ira''s face from the wetness of your pussy. Once you orgasm passes both girls stand up and Lena starts licking Ira''s face, licking your wetness off her. You quickly join in licking Lena''s face licking Ira''s juices off her face. While Ira''s kisses you both in turns.'
+							'You feel incredible pleasure from the gentle carresses of the girls. Completely trusting them, you feel totally relaxed. Ira takes Lena''s place licking your pussy, while Lena slides her tongue to your asshole and begins to lick it.'
+							'You don''t last long from this dual tobgue lashing. You start moaning loudly and your body spasms hard with an orgasm, coating Ira''s face from the wetness of your pussy. Once your orgasm passes, both girls stand up and Lena starts licking Ira''s face, licking your wetness off her. You quickly join in, licking Ira''s juices off of Lena''s face while Ira kisses you both in turns.'
 							
 							$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'group'
@@ -173,9 +173,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 								*clr & cla
 								minut += 5
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_7_7.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'"Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, did you like it?"'
-								'"Oh, it was amazing girls, makes me think we never need the touch of a man."'
-								'"That''s for sure, you only need a special girlfriend or girlfriends." With these words, Lena and Ira left you.'
+								'"Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, did you like it?"'
+								'"Oh, that was amazing girls! It makes me think we never need the touch of a man."'
+								'"That''s for sure! You only need a special girlfriend or girlfriends." Lena and Ira then leave.'
 								
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -198,12 +198,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet_event':
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_8_<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'From the sounds of the groans, moans and cries of passion the bathroom is in use again. Peeking inside you see a sweet couple fucking like rabbits.'
+		'From the sounds of the groans, moans and cries of passion, the bathroom is in use again. Peeking inside, you see a sweet couple fucking like rabbits.'
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	elseif temp = 8:
 		toiletEvent_SisBoy = daystart
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_9.jpg"></center>'
-		'Looking inside the bathroom you find your sister with her back against the wall, her skirt pulled up and panties around her ankles, while Roma''s face is buried between her legs. He''s apparently asking for forgiveness from your sister again.'
+		'Looking inside the bathroom, you see your sister with her back against the wall, her skirt pulled up and panties around her ankles with Roma''s face buried between her legs. He''s apparently asking for forgiveness from your sister again.'
 		act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	end
 end
@@ -217,7 +217,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet_mast':
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	if i < 3:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_1_<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 	if i = 3:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_toilet_1_<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'With your arousal over powering your senses you couldn''t take it anymore, you pull your panties down and rigorously begin rubbing your clit. Once you are good and soaked you slide your fingers inside of yourself and finger fuck yourself, switching back and forth between rubbing your clit and fucking your fingers until you bring yourself to an orgasm.'
+	'With your arousal overpowering your senses, you can''t take it anymore. You pull your panties down and rigorously begin rubbing your clit. Once you are good and wet, you slide your fingers inside your pussy and start finger fucking yourself, switching back and forth between rubbing your clit and fucking your fingers until you bring yourself to an orgasm.'
 	
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5
@@ -248,10 +248,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_beer':
 	dj_thank = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take two beers to the guys, they gratefully appreciated your offer.'
-	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you ever use one of these before?" The DJ asks you indicating the turntable.'
-	'Shaking your head. "No, never."'
-	'He smiles to you. "While everyone is still sitting and drinking you can give it a little <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dj_thank''">twist</a>, lets see what you can do girl."'
+	'You take two beers to the guys. They gratefully appreciate your offer.'
+	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you ever use one of these before?" the DJ asks you, indicating the turntable.'
+	'You shake your head. "No, I can''t say I have."'
+	'He smiles at you. "While everyone is still sitting and drinking, you can give it a little <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dj_thank''">twist</a>. Let''s see what you can do girl!"'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
@@ -264,7 +264,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_thank':
 	instrmusic_exp += rand(0,2) 
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are happy to take this opportunity, putting your fingers on the records you move them around, making god awful noises. The guys stop you before to long. "Ok I think that''s enough, I think you made my ears bleed." He says with a laugh.'
+	'You are happy to take this opportunity. Putting your fingers on the records, you move them around, making some god awful noises. The guys stop you before too long. "OK, I think that''s enough. I think you made my ears bleed." he says with a laugh.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 !why not add in an option here to start the series below?
 end
@@ -277,8 +277,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_boobs':
 	dj_boobs = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Like this boys?" You ask as you put your breasts on the turn table and move it a bit with your breasts.'
-	'Not much sound comes out form your attempt, but guys seem to love the attempt all the same.'
+	'"Like this boys?" you ask as you put your breasts on the turntable and move it a bit with your breasts.'
+	'Not much sound comes out from your attempt, but the guys seem to love it all the same.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'Take off your top': gt 'dinParty', 'dj_cock'
 end
@@ -290,8 +290,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_cock':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Seeing the interest from the smiling guys watching you, you get rid of your top and take off your bra and then place your naked breasts on the turntable and try to play it topless. "I think I did better that time, what do you think?"'
-	'The guy pulled out his erection as he said "Not bad, maybe try this instead."'
+	'Seeing the interest from the smiling guys watching you, you get rid of your top and bra and then place your naked breasts on the turntable, trying to play it topless. "I think I did better that time. What do you think?"'
+	'The guy pulls out his erection and says "Not bad. Maybe try this instead."'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'Give his dick a try': gt 'dinParty', 'dj_suck'
 end
@@ -303,8 +303,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_suck':
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You grab his hard cock and place the head on the spinning record, barely touching it. The guy started a bit, perhaps it was a little painful for him.'
-	if Rex_Love = 1: 'You don''t think Rex would like you playing these games with the DJ, you had a little fun but that''s enough.'
+	'You grab his hard cock and place the head on the spinning record, barely touching it. The guy squirms a bit. Perhaps it was a little painful for him?'
+	if Rex_Love = 1: 'You don''t think Rex would like you playing these games with the DJ. You''ve had a little fun, but that''s enough.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	if Rex_Love = 0:
 		act 'Kiss it and make it better':
@@ -313,9 +313,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_suck':
 			gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'The DJ at Rex''s Party', rand(17,22)
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_5.jpg"></center>'
-			'You decide to make amends to guy, and kiss the head of his cock.'
+			'You decide to make amends to the guy and kiss the head of his cock.'
 			'You find you don''t want to stop and passionately start sucking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick right there in front of everyone.'
-			'After you suck him for a bit, he pulls you up and turns you around. Pulling your panties down, he pushes you forward bending you over.'
+			'After you suck him for a bit, he pulls you up and turns you around. Pulling your panties down, he pushes you forward, bending you over.'
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -327,9 +327,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dj_suck':
 				pcs_vag += 1
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy_6.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You let him bend you over, as he begins to rub the head of his dick against your pussy lips.'
+				'You let him bend you over as he begins to rub the head of his dick against your pussy lips.'
 				'He abruptly pushes his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick inside of you and starts fucking you with a fast pace.'
-				'With in just a few moments he grunts and shoots his load of sperm deep into your wet pussy.'
+				'Within just a few moments, he grunts and you feel him shooting his load deep into your wet pussy.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -351,9 +351,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_gost_1_<<rand(1,7)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Moving to the rhythmic sounds, you indulge in an unrestrained dance.'
-	'You jump, sway your body, and rock your booty, losing yourself in the general merriment.'
-	if pcs_danc >= 50: 'You move your body perfectly with the rhythm of the music in an erotic way. This gets you a lot of attention from the others and you love their attention.'
-	if pcs_danc < 50: 'Your ridiculous movements during the dance does not bother anyone, You dance badly, but you do not care.'
+	'You jump, sway your body and rock your booty, losing yourself in the general merriment.'
+	if pcs_danc >= 50: 'You move your body perfectly with the rhythm of the music in an erotic way. This gets you a lot of attention from the others. Attention that you love.'
+	if pcs_danc < 50: 'Your ridiculous movements during the dance doesn''t bother anyone. You dance badly, but you don''t care.'
 	act 'Have a rest': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'Dance more': gt 'dinParty', 'dance' 
 end
@@ -374,9 +374,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boys_swalow':
 	if i > 0: jump 'dinPartySwalloop'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_4_<<rand(13,15)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You swallowed the tart mixture of several different guys sperm, greedily licking your lips with your tongue.'
-	'"Uhh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, You''re still the best cocksucker around, want more sperm to swallow, Call us."'
-	'The guys helped you back into the apartment and into one of the bedrooms, as you are to drunk to do it yourself.'
+	'You swallow the tart mixture of several different guys sperm, greedily licking your lips with your tongue.'
+	'"Uhh <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''re still the best cocksucker around. If you want more sperm to swallow, call us."'
+	'The guys help you back into the apartment and into one of the bedrooms as you are too drunk to do it yourself.'
 	
 	act 'Fall asleep': gt 'dinParty', 'sleep'
 end
@@ -396,9 +396,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boys_spit':
 	if i > 0: jump 'dinPartySpitloop'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_4_<<rand(16,17)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You spat out the mouthful mixture of cum from several guys from your mouth.'
-	'"What''s wrong <<$pcs_nickname>> didn''t you like it? I thought all the girls loved the taste of cum." One of the guys asked you with a laugh.'
-	'The guys helped you back into the apartment and into one of the bedrooms, as you are to drunk to do it yourself.'
+	'You spit out the mixture of cum from several guys.'
+	'"What''s wrong <<$pcs_nickname>>? Didn''t you like it? I thought all girls loved the taste of cum." one of the guys asked you with a laugh.'
+	'The guys help you back into the apartment and into one of the bedrooms as you are too drunk to do it yourself.'
 	
 	act 'Fall asleep': gt 'dinParty', 'sleep'
 end
@@ -410,7 +410,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rex_talk':
 	rex_talk += 1
 	gs 'stat'	
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_rex_party_gost_2_<<rand(1,5)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You find a space to sit and talk to Reks, he''s quite interesting and very handsome so you spend most of the time just nodding and flirting.'
+	'You find a space to sit and talk to Rex. He''s quite interesting and very handsome, so you spend most of the time just nodding and flirting.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	if rex_talk >= 2: act 'Hug': gt 'dinParty', 'rex_hug'
 	act 'Ask Rex to dance': gt 'dinParty', 'rex_dance'
@@ -428,9 +428,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rex_hug':
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_rex_party_gost_4_<<rand(2,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'Rex grabbed you with his strong hands and began to knead your ass with one hand and caress your pussy with the other, in front of everybody.'
-		'You grab his neck and audible groan completely given into his affections.'
-		'You are flooded with the most pleasant feeling in the world, you don''t want it to stop.'
+		'Rex grabs you with his strong hands and begins to knead your ass with one hand and caress your pussy with the other in front of everybody.'
+		'You grab his neck and audibly groan, completely giving into his affections.'
+		'You are overwhelmed with the most pleasant feeling in the world. You don''t want it to stop.'
 		act 'Kiss':
 			*clr & cla
 			if rand(1,2) = 1:
@@ -438,9 +438,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rex_hug':
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_rex_party_gost_5_<<rand(2,4)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 			end
-			'Looking adoring into each others eyes, being to passionately kiss.'
-			'You lips touch in your long kiss, it almost feels like a shock of electricity is running through you body.'
-			'For a long time you continue to enjoying the warm kiss, Rex finally breaks the kiss and says. "Come with me <<$pcs_nickname>>, I think we''ve had enough fun here." Simling he takes you by the hand and leads you away.'
+			'Looking adoringly into each other''s eyes, you begin to passionately kiss.'
+			'You lips touch in your long kiss. It almost feels like a shock of electricity is running through your body.'
+			'For a long time, you continue to enjoy the warm kiss, but Rex eventually breaks the kiss and says "Come with me <<$pcs_nickname>>. I think we''ve had enough fun here." Smiling, he takes you by the hand and leads you away.'
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -456,9 +456,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rex_hug':
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_rex_party_gost_13_<<rand(1,3)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
-		'Rex grabbed you with his strong hands and began to knead your ass with one hand and caress your pussy with the other, in front of everybody.'
-		'You grab his neck and audible groan completely given into his affections.'
-		'After playing with your pussy for a bit, he stops and takes you by the hand and pulls you away as he says. "Come with me <<$pcs_nickname>>, I think we''ve had enough fun here."'
+		'Rex grabs you with his strong hands and begins to knead your ass with one hand and caress your pussy with the other in front of everybody.'
+		'You grab his neck and audibly groan, completely giving into his affections.'
+		'After playing with your pussy for a bit, he stops, takes you by the hand and pulls you away as he says "Come with me <<$pcs_nickname>>, I think we''ve had enough fun here."'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -478,9 +478,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rex_dance':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_rex_party_gost_3_<<rand(1,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'Rex took you by the hand and dragged you out to dance, you are happily follow him.'
+	'Rex takes you by the hand and drags you out to dance. you are happy to follow him.'
 	'You dance, slowly getting closer to each other and finally grinding a bit against each other.'
-	'You turn around putting your back to him and grind your tight ass against his crotch, you can feel his hard cock against your ass, as you grind against it.'
+	'You turn around, putting your back to him and grind your tight ass against his crotch. You can feel his hard cock against your ass as you grind against it.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg 
 	if rex_talk >= 2: act 'Hug': gt 'dinParty', 'rex_hug'
 end
@@ -492,20 +492,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_13_<<rand(1,4)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You fall asleep feeling the warmth of his body against you back, he hugs you tightly.'
-		'You feel is hard erection against your butt, it excites you, but you are to tired to do anything with it as you fall fast asleep.'
+		'You fall asleep feeling the warmth of his body against your back as he hugs you tightly.'
+		'You feel his hard erection against your ass. It excites you, but you are too tired to do anything with it as you fall fast asleep.'
 	elseif Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 0:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_12_<<rand(1,11)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You feel completely safe, as you fall asleep to have sweet dreams.'
+		'You feel completely safe as you fall asleep.'
 	elseif iralenasleep >= 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_iralena_6_<<rand(6,7)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Lena, Ira and you lay in the bed, side by side as you fall asleep.'
+		'You Lena and Ira lie in the bed side by side as you fall asleep.'
 	elseif drunk_sveta >= 1 and sister_party_dom < 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_girls_party_gost_4_<<rand(1,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your body could not withstand so much alcohol and you end up passing out. Fortunately friends were close, who dragged you into a bedroom and put you in bed.'
+		'Your body could not withstand so much alcohol and you end up passing out. Fortunately for you, friends are close and you are placed in a bed.'
 	elseif sister_party_dom >= 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_9_<<rand(3,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You fall asleep in the arms of your beloved sister with a final kiss before drifting off.'
+		'You fall asleep in the arms of your sister with a final kiss before drifting off.'
 	elseif party_boys_in >= 1:
 		i = rand(1,3)
 		hidden_guy += 3
@@ -565,7 +565,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 			end
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_6_<<rand(1,9)>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep, your face and body still smeared and coated in sperm, but you don''t care.'
+			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep. Your face and body are still smeared and coated in sperm, but you don''t care.'
 		elseif i = 2:
 			gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'unconcious rapist', rand(17,22)
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
@@ -583,7 +583,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 			spafinloc = 11
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_8_<<rand(1,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep, you have a dream about warm wet drops landing on your face and lips, like a warm summers rain, you sleepily like at the drops.'
+			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep. You have a dream about warm wet drops landing on your face and lips, like a warm summers rain. You sleepily like at the drops.'
 		elseif i = 3:
 			gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'unconcious rapist', rand(17,22)
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
@@ -615,23 +615,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 			i = rand(1,2)
 			if i = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_9_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
 			if i = 2:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_9_3.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep, you have a dream about being impaled on a stake for all your sins, but surprisingly instead of hurting it feels wonderful.'               
+			'After everything that happened tonight, you feel exhausted and fall asleep. You have a dream about being impaled on a stake for all your sins but surprisingly, instead of hurting, it actually feels wonderful.'               
 		end
 	end
 	if (indorf = 0):
 		''
-		'After sleeping some time, you are suddenly awakened by someone yelling at you to wake up while they slap you.'
+		'After sleeping for some time, you are suddenly awakened by someone yelling at you to wake up while they slap you.'
 		act 'Wake up':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 90
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_7.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya shakes, yells and smacks you until you slowly wake up'
-			'She smiles at you. "Well it looks like you had fun tonight, how are you feeling?"'
-			'You groan, feeling sick, your head is pounding, you feel like your about to throw up and you are sore in more places than you can remember. "Go away and let me sleep you evil bitch."'
-			'Anya shakes you again. "Get up stupid, or our parents will kill us both, if you don''t come home tonight."'
+			'Anya shakes, yells at and slaps you until you slowly wake up.'
+			'She smiles at you. "It looks like you had fun tonight. How are you feeling?"'
+			'You groan, feeling sick. Your head is pounding, you feel like you are about to throw up and you are sore in more places than you can remember. "Go away and let me sleep, sis"'
+			'Anya shakes you again. "Get up you drunk idiot! Mom will kill us both if you don''t come home tonight."'
 			if Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 0: 'As you leave the apartment, you gently kiss Rex on the cheek, thanking for the evening.'
-			if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionate kiss Rex on the lips, "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
-			if party_boys_in >= 1: 'As you leave the apartment, some drunk guys tell you they will miss you and sleep well, while laughing to each other.'
+			if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionatly kiss Rex on the lips. "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
+			if party_boys_in >= 1: 'As you leave the apartment, some drunk guys tell you they will miss you and to sleep well while laughing to each other.'
 			if hour < 22 and  hour > 18:
 				minut += ((21 - hour) * 60) + (60 - minut)
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -650,11 +650,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_kuh_7.jpg"></center>'
 			'Anya shakes you until you slowly wake up'
-			'She smiles at you. "Well it looks like you had fun tonight, how are you feeling?"'
-			'You groan, feeling sick, your head is pounding and you are sore in more places than you can remember. "Let me sleep sis, I''m sick."'
-			'Anya shakes you again. "Get up stupid, or our parents will kill us both, if they find out that we were not at home tonight."'
+			'She smiles at you. "Well it looks like you had fun tonight. How are you feeling?"'
+			'You groan, feeling sick. Your head is pounding and you are sore in more places than you can remember. "Let me sleep sis! I feel so sick."'
+			'Anya shakes you again. "Get up you drunk idiot! Mom is going to kill us both since we haven''t come home yet!"'
 			if Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 0: 'As you leave the apartment, you gently kiss Rex on the cheek, thanking for the evening.'
-			if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionate kiss Rex on the lips, "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
+			if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionatly kiss Rex on the lips. "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Go home': minut += 15 & gt 'bedrPar'
@@ -663,7 +663,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleep':
 			minut += 90
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_girls_party_gost_4_1.jpg"></center>'
-			*nl 'You woke up an hour later, the party was still in full swing.'
+			*nl 'You wake up an hour later and find the party still in full swing.'
 			act 'Return to party': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	end

locations/etoexhib.qsrc

@@ -700,7 +700,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos18':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'pos19':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'pos19' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 	*clr & cla
 	$menu_loc = 'etoexhib'
 	$menu_arg = 'pos19'

locations/gschool_lessonsev1.qsrc

@@ -98,7 +98,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fiz_rand':
 		act 'Leave the creep':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/victor/sex/storage1.jpg"></center>'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/supply.jpg"></center>'
 			'Once you have the equipment, you duck out of the room as quickly as you can, not looking back at him.'
 			act 'End of lesson':gt 'gschool_lessons4', 'postphys'
 		end

locations/gschool_lessonsev3.qsrc

@@ -1215,7 +1215,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'music':
 			act 'Ignore them and wait for the end of the lesson': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			act 'Eavesdrop':
 				*clr & cla
-				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/events/urok<<rand(0, 12)>>.jpg"></center>'
+				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/classroom/eavesdrop.jpg"></center>'
 				gs 'gschool_gossip', 'lesson'
 				act 'Wait for the end of the lesson': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			end
@@ -1503,7 +1503,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'art':
 			act 'Ignore them and wait for the end of the lesson': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			act 'Eavesdrop':
 				*clr & cla
-				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/events/urok<<rand(0, 12)>>.jpg"></center>'
+				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/classroom/eavesdrop.jpg"></center>'
 				gs 'gschool_gossip', 'lesson'
 				act 'Wait for the end of the lesson': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			end

locations/katjaEv.qsrc

@@ -161,7 +161,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	if katjaLernTimes >= 10: gs 'katjaEv', 'learning'
 
 	if mey_vika['key'] = 1:
-		Act 'Leave the room': gt 'mey_home', 'start'
+		act 'Leave the room': gt 'mey_home', 'start'
 	else
 		act 'Say goodbye and leave':minut += 5 & gt 'pav_residential'
 	end
@@ -178,9 +178,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learning':
 		if katrand = 2:'Katja as if by accident puts her hand on your knee, then quickly removes it.'
 		if katrand = 3:'Katja smiles at you, quite a silly smile, then turns away.'
 	elseif katjaLernQW = 5:
-		gt 'katjaEv', '5'
+		xgt 'katjaEv', '5'
 	elseif katjaLernQW >= 6:
-		gt 'katjaEv', '6'
+		xgt 'katjaEv', '6'
 	end
 end
 

locations/obroom.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # obroom
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 	$sexloc = 'obroom'
 	CLOSE ALL
 	$loc_arg = 'start'

locations/set_home.qsrc

@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ elseif curr_home = 4:
 	$home_name = 'Old town apartment'
 	$home_town = 'oldtown'
 	$home_location = 'liames'
-	$home_entrance = 'koor2x'
+	$home_entrance = 'korr2x'
 elseif curr_home = 5:
 	$home_name = 'My mansion'
 	$home_town = 'city'

locations/sister.qsrc

@@ -7,11 +7,11 @@ gs 'stat'
 
 '<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister' + rand(1,3) + '.jpg"></center>'
-'Your sister Anya is a bit older than you. She is <<sisterAge>> years old. She graduated from Secondary school, but didn''t go to the university and now works at the local supermarket, here in Pavlovsk.'
+'Your sister Anya is a bit older than you. She is <<sisterAge>> years old. She graduated from school, but didn''t go to the university. She works at Pavlovsk''s local supermarket.'
 gs 'sister_chat', 'checks'
 
 if hour = 8 and week < 6:
-	'God damn it, <<$pcs_nickname>>, because of you I will be late for work.'
+	'God damn it, <<$pcs_nickname>>! I will be late for work because of you!'
 	act 'Apologize and let her get ready': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 exit
 end
@@ -20,12 +20,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pav_commcenter':
 	*clr & cla
 	if npc_rel['A33'] < 20:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma1.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What do you want? Fuck off!" Anya and her friends laugh and point at you, until you leave them alone.'
+		'"What do you want? Fuck off!" Anya and her friends laugh and point at you until you leave them alone.'
 		act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	! Showing up after party invite
 	elseif week = 5 and (daystart - (daystart mod 7)) mod 2 = 0 and sisterQW['party'] = 1 and daystart - sisterQW['partyday'] < 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Anya and some of her friends are dressed up organizing themselves before going to the party. Anya sees you and waves you to her. "Come on, I was starting to wonder if you were going to show up."'
+		'Anya and some of her friends are dressed up and organizing themselves before going to the party. Anya sees you and waves at you. "Come on, I was starting to wonder if you were going to show up."'
 		gs 'sister', 'partyanswer', 'anya'
 	! Anya heading to party
 	elseif npc_rel['A33'] >= 70 and week = 5 and (daystart - (daystart mod 7)) mod 2 = 0 and (sisterQW['party'] = 0 or sisterQW['party'] = 2):
@@ -33,18 +33,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pav_commcenter':
 		gs 'stat'
 		if npc_rel['A57'] >= 80:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/reks/reks.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya and her friends are dressed up and hanging out, like they are about to leave and go somewhere.'
+			'Anya and her friends are dressed up and hanging out, but look like they are about to leave and go somewhere.'
 			gs 'sister', 'partyanswer', 'rex'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya and her friends are dressed up and hanging out, like they are about to leave and go somewhere.'
-			'Then your sister sees you, smiles and waves you over. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>, we''re going to a party at Rex''s today. Want to come with us?"'
+			'Anya and her friends are dressed up and hanging out, but look like they are about to leave and go somewhere.'
+			'Your sister sees you, smiles and waves you over. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! We''re going to a party at Rex''s place. Want to come with us?"'
 			gs 'sister', 'partyanswer', 'anya'
 		end
 	else
 		cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anya.jpg"></center>'
-		'Anya sits with some girls and boys, drinking beer. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>!" Anya smiles, "Want a beer?"'
+		'Anya sits with her friends, drinking beer. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>!" Anya smiles. "Want a beer?"'
 		act 'Drink beer':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 60
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pav_commcenter':
 			else
 				AniaFrends = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You meet Anya''s friends. They are all her former classmates. There''s small and nimble Lusya, Ira who is constantly confused, a tall athletic guy, whom everyone calls Rex, and a red-haired lanky guy named Roma. After the introductions you sit down with them, drinking beer and chatting with Anya and her friends.'
+				'You meet Anya''s friends, who are all her former classmates. There''s the small and nimble Lusya, the ditzy Ira, a tall athletic guy whom everyone calls "Rex" and a lanky, red-haired guy named Roma. After the introductions, you sit down with them, drinking beer and chatting with Anya and her friends.'
 			end
 			act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -74,19 +74,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'partyanswer':
 		if mesec > 0 or pcs_mood < 25 or alko >= 3 or cumloc[11] = 1 or cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1:
 			sisterQW['party'] = -1
 			if mesec > 0:
-				'"Sorry Anya, I''m not in the mood today, you go without me."'
+				'"Sorry Anya, I''m not in the mood today. You go without me."'
 				'"What, are you on the rag today? You should have told me! Alright, go home and get some rest."'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			elseif pcs_mood < 25:
-				'"Sorry Anya, I''m not in the mood today, you go without me."'
-				'"You do look a little pale sis, go home and get some rest."'
+				'"Sorry Anya, I''m not in the mood today. You go without me."'
+				'"You do look a little pale sis. Go home and get some rest."'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			elseif alko >= 3:
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, how the hell did you get so drunk already? I was going to invite you to a party, but you look like you have already been to one. Go home and sleep it off."'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, how the hell did you get so drunk already? I was going to invite you to a party, but you look like you have already been to one. Go home and sleep it off!"'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			else
-				'Her smile fades and she seems confused for a moment then gets a look of disgust on her face. "My God, why are you walking around with your face coverd in cum? You''ll get yourself a reputation! Go home and wash that off, quickly."'
-				'You feel a little ashamed that your sister has seen you looking like this in public.'
+				'Her smile fades and she seems confused for a moment before a look of disgust appears on her blushing face. "My God, why are you walking around with cum all over your face!? You''ll get yourself a reputation! Go home and wash that off, quickly!" She then shoos you away as her friends stare at you.'
+				'You feel a little ashamed that you have embarrassed yourself and your sister by walking around like this in public.'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		else
@@ -97,7 +97,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'partyanswer':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_1.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I''d love to, but I have a lot of homework to do. I''m sorry."'
-				'"Don''t worry, maybe next time you can come."'
+				'"Don''t worry. Maybe you can come next time?"'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 			act 'Go to the party': if sisterQW['partycount'] > 0: gt 'sbReksHome', 'party' else gt 'sister_party', 'sisboyQW_party'
@@ -110,35 +110,35 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'partyanswer':
 			rexPark = 0
 			rexCar = 0
 			if pav_slut >= 250:
-				'"Shit, <<$pcs_nickname>> everywhere people are saying you are a fucking whore. What is this garbage, <<$pcs_nickname>>? I thought we were an item, and things were getting serious, and you''re fucking around?"'
-				'"I do not know what came over me, I was not myself, please forgive me, if you can."'
+				'"Shit, <<$pcs_nickname>> people everywhere are saying you are a fucking whore. What is this garbage, <<$pcs_nickname>>? I thought we were an item and things were getting serious, but you''re fucking everything that moves?"'
+				'"I don''t know what came over me. I wasn''t myself. Please, forgive me if you can."'
 				'"Listen, everything''s OK, but let''s just be friends and forget being together. Okay?"'
 				'"Okay..."'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			else
-				'"Shit, <<$pcs_nickname>> are you covered in cum? What is this garbage, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" He leans in to get a better look then recoils in disgust.'
-				'Your hand goes up to the dried cum on your face, you forgot about it. "I do not know what came over me, I was not myself, please forgive me, if you can."'
-				'"What ever slut, just get away from me." With that he moves away from you and now you see everyone giving you either a disgusted or angry look.'
-				'"Okay..." Not knowing what else to say you walk away.'
+				'"Shit <<$pcs_nickname>>, is that cum?" He leans in to get a better look then recoils in disgust.'
+				'Your hand goes up to the dried cum on your face that you forgot to wipe off. "I don''t know what came over me, I wasn''t myself. Please, forgive me if you can."'
+				'"Whatever slut. Just get away from me." He moves away from you and you see everyone giving you either a disgusted or angry look.'
+				'"Okay..." Not knowing what else to say, you walk away disheartened.'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		elseif mesec > 0 or pcs_mood < 50:
-			'"Sorry Rex, sweetie, I''m not feeling too good today, you go without me."'
-			'"Sweetie, I do not want to leave you alone, but I need to go with the guys, take care, and do not be sad."'
-			'Rex gives you a gentle kiss on your cheek and leaves.'
+			'"Sorry sweetie, but I''m not feeling too good today. You go without me."'
+			'"Babe, I don''t want to leave you alone, but I need to go with the guys. Take care and do not be sad."'
+			'Rex gives you a gentle kiss on the cheek and leaves.'
 			act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif alko >= 3:
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you drunk? I wanted to invite you to the party, but you look like you just left a party. Go home and sleep it off."'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you drunk? I wanted to invite you to the party, but you look like you just left one. Go home and sleep it off."'
 			act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		else
-			'"Baby, let''s go to my place, I am throwing another one of my parties."'
+			'"Babe, let''s go to my place. I''m throwing another one of my parties."'
 			act 'Decline':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 				sisterQW['party'] = -1
 				gs 'stat'
-				'"Sorry Rex, I have a lot of homework. I''d love to but I don''t want to fail my exams."'
-				'"Well, go on then, but next time you definitely come, okay?"'
+				'"Sorry Rex, but I have a lot of homework. I''d love to come, but I don''t want to fail my exams."'
+				'"Well, go on then. But you''re definitely coming next time, okay?"'
 				act 'Move away': SiSgdk = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 			act 'Accept': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party'
@@ -151,7 +151,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your sister Anya and her friends Lusya, Ira, Rex, and Roman are sitting outside the community center drinking beer.'
+	'Your sister and her friends Lusya, Ira, Rex and Roma are sitting outside the community center, drinking beer.'
 	if npc_QW['A33'] = 1:
 		act 'Meet your sister''s boyfriend':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -159,15 +159,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 			npc_QW['A33'] = 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/sisboyqw_02.jpg"></center>'
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you wanted to meet my boyfriend? This is my boyfriend Roma, and this is my sister <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you wanted to meet my boyfriend, right? Well, this is Roma. Roma, this is my sister <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 			'"To friendship!!!" Rex shouts drunkenly, raising his cup. You pick up a cup full of beer and start drinking, glancing at your sister''s boyfriend.'
-			'Roma, red-haired and skinny, is actually pretty cute, he kinda reminds you of Katja and Vicky but more manly. You think to yourself, "Sister, how very lucky you are."'
+			'Roma, red-haired and skinny, is actually pretty cute. He reminds you of Katja and Vicky, but more manly. You think to yourself how lucky Anya is to have him.'
 			act 'Continue to drink beer': gt 'sister', 'scene2'
 		end
 	else
 		temp = rand(0,4)
 		if temp = 0:
-			'Impatiently, Anya picks up a bottle of beer and shouts, "Come on guys! Will you pour me some beer today or what?"'
+			'Impatiently, Anya picks up a bottle of beer and shouts "Come on guys! Will you pour me some beer today or what?"'
 			if rand(0,1) = 0:
 				'Rex takes the bottle out of Anya''s hands.'
 				temprand = rand(0,4)
@@ -180,32 +180,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 						'With a resounding slap on Rex''s shoulder, Lusya says "Hurry up, you piece of dog shit!"'
 					else
 						'With a smile, Ira says "Don''t get angry, Rex."'
-						if rand(0,10) = 0:'Anya quickly interjects, "We might need to chain him to a post until he calms down."'
+						if rand(0,10) = 0:'Anya quickly interjects. "We might need to chain him to a post until he calms down."'
 					end
 				elseif temprand = 1:
-					'"Well, you always like to be late for the fun. Relax your ass, I''m sorting it all out."'
+					'"Well, you always like to be late for the fun. Will your loud ass relax? I''m sorting it all out."'
 					temprand = rand(0,2)
 					if temprand = 0:
 						'Between fits of giggles, Anya says "My ass is always relaxed."'
-						'Roma wraps his arm around her and cups the side of her hip with his hand. "Hell yeah it is." Which gets everyone laughing.'
+						'Roma wraps his arm around her and cups the side of her hip with his hand. "Hell yeah it is.", which gets everyone laughing.'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
-						'With a resounding slap on Rex''s shoulder, Lusya says "If we had something to drink we would be relaxed!"'
+						'With a resounding slap on Rex''s shoulder, Lusya says "If we had something to drink, we would be relaxed!"'
 					else
-						'Roma giggles and says "If she relaxes it anymore it will be too loose to feel anything."'
-						'Anya quips, "That''s just because you have a little dick." Which gets everyone laughing.'
+						'Roma giggles and says "If she relaxes it anymore, it will be too loose to feel anything."'
+						'"That''s just because you have a little dick." Anya quips, which gets everyone laughing.'
 					end
 				elseif temprand = 2:
-					'"Come on, you could have opened it yourself, lazy bitch. Don''t you have hands?" He says with a smile'
+					'"Come on, you could have opened it yourself, you lazy bitch. Don''t you have hands?" he says with a smile.'
 					temprand = rand(0,2)
 					if temprand = 0:
 						'Anya giggles "Yeah, but what else are yours good for?"'
-						if rand(0,10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "Really just one other thing."'
+						if rand(0,10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "Really? Just one other thing..."'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
 						'With a resounding slap on Rex''s shoulder, Lusya says "Is that how you speak to a lady?"'
-						if rand(0,10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "Yes. I speak Russian to her."'
+						if rand(0,10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "Yes, I speak Russian to her."'
 					else
 						'Ira smiles, saying "Don''t get so upset, Rex."'
-						if rand(0,10) = 0:'Anya quickly interjects, "We might need to chain him up to a tree to keep him calm."'
+						if rand(0,10) = 0:'Anya quickly interjects. "We might need to chain him to a tree to keep him calm."'
 					end
 				elseif temprand = 3:
 					'"Allow me, madame."'
@@ -219,12 +219,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 						'Impatiently, Anya says "Pour it already, you clown."'
 					end
 				else
-					'"Shit! Where''re the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
+					'"Shit! Where are the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
 					temprand = rand(0,2)
 					if temprand = 0:
-						'Anya picks up the cups, "Here they are, you blind monster."'
+						'Anya picks up the cups. "They''re right here, you blind moron."'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
-						'Roma says "Rex, you''re the one who bought them, is your memory really that bad?"'
+						'"Rex, you''re the one who bought them. Is your memory really that bad?" Roma asks.'
 					else
 						'Lusya holds up the cups and says "Rex, calm down."'
 					end
@@ -237,16 +237,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 				elseif temprand = 1:
 					'Rex takes the cups and mutters "That worthless ass. Can''t he use both of his hands at once?"'
 				elseif temprand = 2:
-					'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you big doofus."'
+					'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour already, you big doofus."'
 				else
-					'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly starts to tip over, unable to regain his balance this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
+					'As Roma pours beer in the cups, he suddenly starts to tip over. Unable to regain his balance while this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
 					temprand = rand(0, 2)
 					if temprand = 0:
-						'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you, ''Always pour with two hands!''"'
+						'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you ''Always pour with two hands?!''"'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
-						'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that, are you really that drunk already?"'
+						'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that? Are you really that drunk already?"'
 					else
-						'Indignantly, Anya says "Always the same, getting too drunk, too fast.."'
+						'Placing her head in her hand, Anya indigantly mutters "Always the fucking same! Getting too drunk, too fast.."'
 					end
 				end
 			end
@@ -258,12 +258,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 			if rand(0,1) = 0:
 				'Rex picks up a bottle of beer and pops it open.'
 				if rand(0,2) = 0:
-					'"Shit! Where''re the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
+					'"Shit! Where are the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
 					temprand = rand(0, 2)
 					if temprand = 0:
-						'Anya picks up the cups, "Here they are, you blind monster."'
+						'Anya picks up the cups. "They''re right here, you blind moron!"'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
-						'Roma says "Rex, you''re the one who bought them, is your memory really that bad?"'
+						'"Rex, you''re the one who bought them. Is your memory really that bad? Roma asks."'
 					else
 						'Lusya holds up the cups and says "Rex, calm down."'
 					end
@@ -281,14 +281,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 				elseif temprand = 2:
 					'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you big doofus."'
 				else
-					'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly starts to tip over, unable to regain his balance this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
+					'As Roma pours beer in the cups, he suddenly starts to tip over. Unable to regain his balance while this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
 					temprand = rand(0, 2)
 					if temprand = 0:
-						'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you, ''Always pour with two hands!''"'
+						'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you ''Always pour with two hands?!''"'
 					elseif temprand = 1:
-						'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that, are you really that drunk already?"'
+						'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that? Are you really that drunk already?"'
 					else
-						'Indignantly, Anya says "Always the same; getting to drunk, to fast.."'
+						'Anya places her head in her hand and indignantly mutters "Always the fucking same! Getting too drunk, too fast.."'
 					end
 				end
 			end
@@ -300,16 +300,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 			elseif temprand = 1:
 				'Rex takes the cups and mutters "That worthless ass. Can''t he use both of his hands at once?"'
 			elseif temprand = 2:
-				'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you big doofus."'
+				'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour already, you big doofus."'
 			else
-				'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly starts to tip over, unable to regain his balance this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
+				'As Roma pours beer in the cups, he suddenly starts to tip over. Unable to regain his balance while this drunk, he falls over and spills all the beer on the ground.'
 				temprand = rand(0, 2)
 				if temprand = 0:
-					'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you, ''Always pour with two hands!''"'
+					'Outraged, Rex screams "You worthless drunk ass! No one can trust you! Didn''t your mother ever tell you ''Always pour with two hands?!''"'
 				elseif temprand = 1:
-					'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that, are you really that drunk already?"'
+					'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that? Are you really that drunk already?"'
 				else
-					'Indignantly, Anya says "Always the same; getting to drunk, to fast.."'
+					'Anya places her head in her hand and indignantly mutters "Always the fucking same! Getting too drunk, too fast.."'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -317,7 +317,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 	end
 	
 	
-	'Finally, everybody''s plastic cup is filled with cold beer. You all merrily drink together.'
+	'Eventually, everybody''s plastic cup is filled with ice cold beer. You all merrily drink together.'
 	if reksLike = 1 and toiletRexSex = 0 and sisterQW['partycount'] > 0 and rex_breakup = 0:
 		temp = rand(1,100)
 		if temp >= 70:
@@ -341,7 +341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 			npc_rel['A57'] += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/reks/rex.jpg"></center>'
-			'Already pretty tipsy, Rex approaches you - "<<$pcs_nickname>>, let me refill your glass" - but he, seemingly accidentally, spills some on your foot. - "Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, forgive me! Here, I''ll clean that up."'
+			'Already pretty tipsy, Rex approaches you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, let me refill your glass." However he, seemingly by accident, spills some on your foot. "Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, forgive me! Here, I''ll clean that up for you."'
 			'Rex begins wiping off your legs with his shirt sleeve.'
 			gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'resist', 'easy'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -352,7 +352,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 					npc_rel['A57'] -= 1
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/reks/event/community/rexnet.jpg"></center>'
-					'"No problem, I can manage that." You say as you clean your own shoe.'
+					'"No problem, I can manage that." you say as you clean your own shoe.'
 					act 'Continue to drink beer': gt 'sister', 'scene2'
 				end
 			else
@@ -396,7 +396,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/reks/rex.jpg"></center>'
 			gs 'reks', 'rexRep'
-			'Rex comes up to you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you could have at least told me you didn''t want to go out... last night was a disaster! Next time, please just tell me if you can''t make it."'
+			'Rex comes up to you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you could have at least told me you didn''t want to go out! Last night was a disaster! Next time, please just tell me if you can''t make it."'
 			act 'Continue to drink beer': gt 'sister', 'scene2'
 		elseif temp > 50 and npc_rel['A57'] >= 30:
 			cla
@@ -420,7 +420,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 !2 - agreed to go to the party
 !!again want to change rexs party to only every other Friday
 		elseif week < 5 and week > 1 and (daystart - (daystart mod 7)) mod 2 = 0 and pcs_vag > 0 and (sisterQW['party'] = 0 or sisterQW['party'] = 2) and daystart - sisterQW['partyday'] > 3:
-			'Roma looks up at you, suddenly remembering something. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex''s apartment is available on Friday and he''s having a party, do you want to go?"'
+			'Roma looks up at you, suddenly remembering something. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex''s apartment is available on Friday and he''s having a party. Do you want to go?"'
 			sisterQW['partyday'] = daystart
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -429,7 +429,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You turn down the invitation.'
-				'"Sorry Roma, I would love to, but I can''t get behind at school. I have homework and books to read, you know what it''s like."'
+				'"Sorry Roma, I would love to, but I can''t get behind at school. I have homework to do and books to read, you know what it''s like."'
 				act 'Finish':SiSgdk = 0 & gt 'sister', 'pav_commcenter'
 			end
 			if razradbeg > 0:
@@ -448,7 +448,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_5.jpg"></center>'
 					'You turn down the invitation.'
-					'"I can''t, the coach does not allow my to stay out late, and drinking is also prohibited."'
+					'"Sorry, but I can''t. The coach doesn''t allow me to stay out late and drinking is also prohibited."'
 					act 'Finish':SiSgdk = 0 & gt 'sister', 'pav_commcenter'
 				end
 			end
@@ -457,7 +457,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene1':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma1.jpg"></center>'
 				'You agree to go to the party.'
-				'"Awesome <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''ll be fun. We will meet here, don''t forget to be there before 18:00, otherwise we will leave without you."'
+				'"Awesome <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''ll be fun. We will meet here. Just don''t forget to be here before 18:00, otherwise we will leave without you."'
 				'Anya gives Roma a dirty look, but he just shrugs it off.'
 				act 'Finish':SiSgdk = 0 & gt 'sister', 'pav_commcenter'
 			end
@@ -470,7 +470,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'scene2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/community/anyaroma1.jpg"></center>'
-	'The bottles of beer are quickly drained and everyone seems a little tipsy at this point. Soon everyone gets up and staggers inside, as they go they tell you bye, you wave to them and head on your way.'
+	'The bottles of beer are quickly drained and everyone seems a little tipsy at this point. Soon everyone gets up and staggers inside. As they go, they all shout goodbye at you, so you wave to them and head on your way.'
 	act 'Leave':SiSonWork = 0 & SiSgdk = 0 & gt 'pav_commcenter'
 end
 

locations/sisterQW.qsrc

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_expel':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_07.jpg"></center>'
 	if sisboytrioQW ! 1:
-		'Your sister reminds you, she wants spend time alone with Roma and asks you to leave the room.'
+		'Your sister reminds you that she wants spend time alone with Roma and asks you to leave the room.'
 	else
 		'Your sister asks you to briefly leave the room.'
 	end
@@ -19,14 +19,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_bedroom':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sisboyqw_08.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk up to your bedroom door, you stop just before it. Your sister asked you to give her some privacy with her boyfriend and you are sure you know they are having or going to have sex. You know you should just walk away, but at the same time you can not shake the stimulating thoughts, your desire to spy on Anya and her boyfriend.'
+	'You walk up to your bedroom door and stop. Your sister asked you to give her some privacy with her boyfriend and you are sure they are having or are going to have sex. You know you should just walk away, but you cannot shake the stimulating thoughts of your desire to spy on Anya and her boyfriend.'
 	act 'Leave them in peace':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		blockBedrPar = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_06.jpg"></center>'
-		'You can''t bring yourself to spy on them and you remember your promise to your sister and decide not to bother her.'
+		'You can''t bring yourself to spy on them and remember your promise to your sister, so you decide not to bother her.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 	end
 	gs 'willpower', 'voyeur', 'self', 'medium'
@@ -35,8 +35,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_bedroom':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You force yourself to slowly touch the handle of the door. You turn the knob slowly and pull it open just a crack, pressing your face to the crack in the door you peer into the room.'
-			'Your eyes focus on your sister and her boyfriend passionately kissing and undressing each other, yep it looks like they are about to have sex.'
+			'You force yourself to slowly grab the handle of the door. You turn it slowly and push the door open just a crack. Pressing your face to the gap, you peer into the room.'
+			'Your eyes focus on your sister and her boyfriend passionately kissing and undressing each other. It looks like they are about to have sex.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Close the door':
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_bedroom':
 				minut += 1
 				blockBedrPar = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You feel guility about spying on your sister after you promised her you would leave her and her boyfriend in peace and you close the door softly so they don''t hear it. You lean your head against the door for a few moment to collect yourself before turning and moving away.'
+				'You feel guility about spying on your sister after you promised you would leave her in peace and you close the door softly so they don''t hear you. You lean your head against the door for a few moments to collect yourself before walking away.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
@@ -81,10 +81,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy1':
 	*clr & cla
 	sisterbfspy += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once naked Roma lays back on her bed, Anya kneels on the bed next to him and starts to kiss and lick his cock, she slowly starts sucking on his dick.'
+	'Once naked, Roma lies back on her bed. Anya kneels on the bed next to him and starts to kiss and lick his cock. She then slowly starts sucking his dick.'
 	'He is lying relaxed, as if he had fallen asleep, but your sister is wide awake and continues playing with him.'
-	'Anya is so skillful with a cock, you are greatly impressed. She could teach you a few lessons, you start imagining yourself in her position.'
-	'You are getting a little carried away, you should leave the room, before you are discovered.'
+	'Anya looks pretty skilled handling a cock and you think that she could teach you a thing or two. You start imagining yourself in her position.'
+	'You are getting a little carried away. You should leave the room before they see you.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
@@ -106,8 +106,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy2':
 	*clr & cla
 	sisterbfspy += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy4.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once naked Anya lays down on her bed, with her legs hanging off the edge. Then she spreads her legs wide apart, while Roma kneels down at the edge of the edge of the bed between her legs. He leans forward and buries his face in her pussy, you can hear her moaning from here. By the sounds of it, Roma really knows what he is doing down there. Several minutes pass and your sister starts squirming around and moaning loudly on the bed like she is about to have a orgasm already.'
-	'At that moment you want so much to be in your sisters place, but you are exposed here by the door and you don''t want to be caught.'
+	'Once naked, Anya lies down on her bed, with her legs hanging off the edge. She spreads her legs wide and Roma kneels down at the edge of the bed between her legs. He leans forward and buries his face in her pussy. You can hear her moaning from where you stand. By the sounds of it, Roma really knows what he is doing. Several minutes pass and your sister starts squirming around and moaning loudly on the bed like she is about to have an orgasm already.'
+	'At that moment, you wish to be in your sister''s place, but you are exposed here by the door and you don''t want to be caught.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
@@ -129,10 +129,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy3':
 	*clr & cla
 	sisterbfspy += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once Anya is naked, Roma pushes her down to her knees roughly. She pulls down his pants once she is down on her knees, his large hard cock springs free. She immediately starts stroking and sucking on his dick.'
-	'Anya relishes swallowing his member all the way to the testicles and taking it out of her mouth, she sobs heavily, her face plastered in saliva.'
+	'Once Anya is naked, Roma pushes her down to her knees roughly. She pulls down his pants and his large hard cock springs free. She immediately starts stroking and sucking it.'
+	'Anya relishes swallowing his member balls deep and when she takes it out of her mouth, she sobs heavily, her face plastered in saliva.'
 	*nl
-	'She has a hard time deep-throating such a large penis, mascara and tears run down her face, but Roma forcefully grabs her hair in both his hands and starts fucking her mouth roughly, his balls slapping against her chin.'
+	'She has a hard time deep-throating such a large cock with mascara and tears running down her face, but Roma forcefully grabs her hair in both his hands and starts fucking her mouth roughly, his balls slapping against her chin.'
 	'You can hear her gags and muffled gasps from here. Your mischievous sister suffers, just to please her boyfriend.'
 	'You want to watch until the end, but you are running the risk of being noticed.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
@@ -156,11 +156,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy4':
 	*clr & cla
 	sisterbfspy += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once they are both naked, Anya crawls on the bed. While she is still on all fours, Roma comes up behind her, slaps her ass once. Then he grabs her hips and pulls her back towards him, suddenly she moans loudly, and Roma starts thrusting against her obviously fucking her and she seems to be loving it. For several minutes this goes on.'
+	'Once they are both naked, Anya crawls on the bed. While she is still on all fours, Roma comes up behind her and slaps her ass. He then grabs her hips and pulls her back towards him. She then moans loudly and Roma starts thrusting against her, obviously fucking her and she seems to be loving it. This goes on for several minutes.'
 	*nl
-	'Roma is red and sweety, when he suddenly freezes for a moment, then falls on his back.'
-	'Your sister groans, "Already?" Then pauses a moment and her tone turns angry. "What the fuck? You came inside me again? You fucking moron, Get off of me, how many times do I have to tell you?"'
-	'It seems they need to talk, you have time to run away, since you have not been noticed.'
+	'Roma is red and sweaty when he suddenly freezes for a moment, then falls on his back. You look closely and can clearly see his cum trickling from her pussy.'
+	'Your sister groans. "Already?" Her tone turns angry when she realizes what''s happened. "What the fuck!? You came inside me again? How many times do I have to tell you, you fucking moron? Get the fuck away from me!"'
+	'It seems they need to talk and so you take the opportunity to run away before they notice you.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
@@ -182,11 +182,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy5':
 	*clr & cla
 	sisterbfspy += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once they are both naked, Anya crawls on the bed. While she is still on all fours, Roma comes up behind her, slaps her ass once. Then he reaches over to her night stand and grabs a small bottle. He squirts some of it on his dick and then some on her butt, after that he grabs her hips and pulls her back towards him. He reach down to grab his dick with one hand, while keeping the other on her hip. He takes a moment to line things up then pushes forward. Suddenly your sister gasp and tenses up a moment. Her hands tighly gripping the sheets, she takes a relaxing breath, as Roman starts to slowly fuck her.'
+	'Once they are both naked, Anya crawls on the bed. While she is still on all fours, Roma comes up behind her and slaps her ass. He reaches over to her nightstand and grabs a small bottle. He squirts some of it''s contents on his dick and then some on her ass before he grabs her hips and pulls her back towards him. He reaches down to grab his dick with one hand, while keeping the other on her hip. He takes a moment to line things up then pushes forward. Suddenly your sister gasps and tenses up for a moment. Her hands tighly gripping the sheets, she takes a relaxing breath as Roma starts to slowly fuck her.'
 	*nl
-	'Anya slowly leans forward as Roma starts to really pound her, until she is laying on her stomach, offering her ass to her man. "God damn your ass is so tight, babe." Roma grunts out as he boldly and confidently tears into Anya''s ass, tightly gripping her hips, as he starts to really hammer her ass.'
-	'His movements get faster and faster, and their bodies sway in unison, Anya screams, "More... more! Fuck my tight little ass!"'
-	'It seems they are so engrossed in each other, that they have not yet noticed your presence, it might be time to leave the hot couple.'
+	'Anya slowly leans forward as Roma starts to really pound her. She is soon laying on her stomach, offering her ass to her man. "God damn your ass is so tight, babe." Roma grunts out as he boldly and confidently tears into Anya''s ass, tightly gripping her hips as he starts to really hammer her back door.'
+	'His movements get faster and faster and their bodies soon sway in unison as Anya screams "More... More! Yes...Fuck my tight little ass...Just like that!"'
+	'They are so engrossed in each other that they have not yet noticed your presence. Now might be the time to leave the hot couple to it.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
@@ -207,9 +207,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'spy6':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once naked Roma kneels on her bed, Anya lays on the bed in front of him and starts to kiss and lick his cock, she slowly starts sucking on his dick.'
-	'Anya is so skillful with a cock, you are greatly impressed. She could teach you a few lessons, you start imagining yourself in her position.'
-	'You are getting a little carried away, you should leave the room, before you are discovered, you know. But you really want to watch the whole thing.'
+	'Once naked, Roma lies back on her bed. Anya kneels on the bed next to him and starts to kiss and lick his cock. She then slowly starts sucking his dick.'
+	'Anya looks pretty skilled handling a cock and you think that she could teach you a thing or two. You start imagining yourself in her position.'
+	'You are getting a little carried away. You should leave the room before you are discovered, but you really want to watch the whole thing.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
@@ -232,35 +232,35 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy6':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy5.jpg"></center>'
-			'After giving him a blowjob for a bit, he pulls her up till she is kneeling facing him. He grabs her and lifts her up, she spreads her legs and lines up his cock with her pussy as he lowers her back down, impaling her on his dick. They both moan as he holds her up as they fuck, Roma seems to be pretty strong, being able to hold her up like that and still fuck her.'
+			'After giving him a blowjob, he pulls her up until she is kneeling while facing him. He grabs her and lifts her up, she spreads her legs and lines his cock up with her pussy before he lowers her back down, impaling her on his dick. They both moan as he holds her up as they fuck. Roma seems to be pretty strong, being able to hold her up like that and still fuck her.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Ride''em cowgirl':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy6.jpg"></center>'
-				'Eventually Roma gets tired and lays back on the bed, after a bit of adjustment. He lays on his back and she mounts him and starts riding him cowgirl style. Her pace is frantic almost animal like, after a few minutes she cries out as a orgasm crashing through her body and she slowly stops moving while laying on top of him.'
+				'Eventually Roma gets tired and lies back on the bed. Anya then mounts him and starts riding him hard. Her pace is frantic, almost animal like. After a few minutes, she cries out as an orgasm pulses through her body and she slowly stops moving while sitting on top of him, his dick still inside her pussy.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Doggy for the win':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy7.jpg"></center>'
-					'Having recovered his strength, Roma rolls Anya off him and gets back up on his knees. He pulls her up on her knees, then spins her around so he is behind her, and pushes her shoulders folder until she bends over, on all fours. Once she is on all fours he slides up behind her and starts fucking her doggy style. With one hand he smacks her ass and with the other he grabs ahold of her hair and occasionally pulls it back, causes her head to strain back.'
+					'Having recovered his strength, Roma rolls Anya off him and gets back up on his knees. He pulls her up on her knees, spins her around and pushes her shoulders forwards until she bends over on all fours. Once she is in position, he slides up behind her and starts fucking her doggy style. He smacks her ass with one hand and grabs hold of her hair with the other, occasionally pulling it back and causing her head to strain back.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Tight ass no more':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy8.jpg"></center>'
-						'He suddenly pulls out of her pussy, takes only a moment to line his large dick up against her asshole before pushing forward. The head of his dick pops into her ass before she, really has time to react. She cries out in a mixture of pain and pleasure. Roma on the other hand groan in full pleasure as he starts fucking her ass, he quickly starts to really hammer her ass. You see her hands grip the sheets tightly and her moans and groans remain a mixture of pain and pleasure, it sounds like pleasure might be winning out though.'
+						'He suddenly pulls out of her pussy and takes only a moment to line his large dick up against her asshole before pushing forward. The head of his dick pops into her ass before she really has time to react. She cries out in a mixture of pain and pleasure. Roma, on the other hand, groans in pleasure as he starts fucking her ass, quickly starting to really hammer it. You see her hands grip the sheets tightly and her moans and groans remain a mixture of pain and pleasure.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 						gs 'stat'
-						act 'ATM':
+						act 'Ass To Mouth':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spy11.jpg"></center>'
-							'Suddenly he pulls out of her and grabs her by the hair. He pulls her head around towards his dick, the first spurt of cum hits her in the chest. Before another spurt comes out though, he sticks his dick in her mouth and groans loudly. He milks his dick into her mouth, filling it with his sperm. He pulls his dick out and says. "Swallow it!" She makes a swallowing motion then opens her mouth, sticking out her clean tongue. They both collapse on the bed. Roma just out of your view, while your sister cum splattered tits are visible.'
+							'He suddenly pulls out of her and grabs her by the hair. He pulls her head around towards his dick and the first spurt of cum lands on her chest. Before another spurt comes out, he sticks his dick in her mouth and groans loudly. He unloads into her mouth, filling it with his sperm. He then pulls out and says "Swallow it!" Anya makes a swallowing motion then opens her mouth, sticking out her clean tongue. Roma collapses on the bed just out of your view, with only your sister and her cum splattered tits visible.'
 							*nl
-							'After a few moments your sister finally speaks. "I told you to stop doing that, it''s gross."'
+							'After a few moments your sister finally speaks. "I told you to stop doing that. It''s fucking gross."'
 							'You hear Roma chuckle. "You said you love the taste of my cum babe."'
-							'She sighs. "I am talking about taking it out of my ass and sticking it straight into my mouth, stop doing it, it''s gross." Roma mutters something that you can''t quite make out. You have been watching them for a long time, you need to leave before someone finds you spying or before Roma gets dressed and leaves.'
+							'She sighs. "I mean pulling out of my ass and sticking it straight into my mouth. Stop doing it, it''s gross." Roma mutters something that you can''t quite make out. You have been watching them for a long time, you need to leave before someone finds you spying or before Roma gets dressed and leaves.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -281,10 +281,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'caress':
 	if pcs_inhib < 40:inhib += rand(1,3)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/spymas<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You can not restrain yourself from the strong excitation, you turn and rest your back against the wall.'
-	'You pull your panties down and touch your glistening, wet pussy with your finger, as you listen to the moans and groans coming from your room.'
-	'You lick your finger before rhythmically caressing your swollen clit, and caressing your breasts with the other hand, lost in the moment, oblivious to all around you.'
-	'Your muscles contract, your breath shortens, realizing you have hit your peak, biting your lip to restrain your moans.'
+	'You can''t help yourself. You turn and press your back against the wall.'
+	'You pull your panties down and rub your glistening, wet pussy with your finger as you listen to the moans and groans coming from your room.'
+	'You lick your finger before rhythmically caressing your swollen clit and caressing your breasts with your other hand. You are lost in the moment, oblivious to everything around you.'
+	'Your muscles contract, your breath shortens. Realizing you have hit your peak, you bite your lip to stiffle your moans.'
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -306,7 +306,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_07.jpg"></center>'
 		'Anya opens the door, looking sad.'
-		'"You promised to come, what happened? Well maybe next time..."'
+		'"You promised to come! What happened? Well maybe next time..."'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 		exit
 	end
@@ -315,7 +315,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_41.jpg"></center>'
 	'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
-	'Anya notices you, Roma frees her from his embrace and she walks slowly to you and gives you a intimate hug and pulls your towards the bed.'
+	'Anya notices you, Roma frees her from his embrace and she walks slowly to you, gives you an intimate hug and pulls your towards the bed.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'This is wrong':
@@ -330,8 +330,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom':
 		sisThank = 0
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep4.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Screw this, someone in this family should have a shred of dignity."'
-		'It feels so wrong, you think you might throw up. You turn and flee from these perverts. Once outside the door you turn and close it, you hold the door closed a moment with a look of shock on your face as you realize what almost happened. Then you finally let go of the door and walk away.'
+		'"Screw this! Someone in this family should have a shred of dignity!"'
+		'It feels so wrong, you think you might throw up. You turn and flee from these perverts. Once outside the door you turn and close it. You hold the door closed a moment with a look of shock on your face as you realize what almost happened. You then let go of the door and walk away.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Flee': gt 'korrPar'
@@ -339,14 +339,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom':
 	act 'Join her on the bed':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You crawl on her bed with her and the two of you hug and lightly fondly each other on the bed as Roma just watches the two of you for the moment. Roma licks his lips as he watches obviously already aroused at the thought of what is to come. "Come on girls, show me your tits."'
+		'You crawl on her bed with her and the two of you hug and lightly fondle each other as Roma just watches the two of you for the moment. Roma licks his lips as he watches, obviously already aroused at the thought of what is to come. "Come on girls, show me your tits."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Flash':
 			*clr & cla
 			if $braworntype ! 'none':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some2.jpg"></center>'
-				'You and Anya both expose your bras to him, his eyes go to first your chest than her''s, going back and forth as if he can''t decide who to look at. "Nice bras but I said tits, don''t be shy girls." You pull up your bra.'
+				'You and Anya both expose your bras to him. His eyes are drawn to your chest, than Anya''s before going back and forth as if he can''t decide who to look at. "Nice bras, but I said tits. Don''t be shy girls." With his encouragement, you pull up your bra.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 1, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Boobs': gt 'sisterQW', 'flash_boobs'
@@ -360,32 +360,32 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'flash_boobs':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some3.jpg"></center>'
-	'You expose your tits, Anya moves around behind you and cups them in her hands. While Roma walks closer and places his hands on your hips as he stares at your boobs. He starts pulling off your top as he says "Take off Anya''s top." Soon both you and Anya are topless. "Now kiss for me girls."'
+	'As you expose your tits, Anya moves around behind you and cups them in her hands while Roma walks closer and places his hands on your hips as he stares at them. He starts pulling off your top as he says "Take off Anya''s top." You and Anya are soon topless. "Now kiss for me girls."'
 	gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Kiss':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some4.jpg"></center>'
-		'Anya and you kiss, as Roma takes turns fondling both of you. "Damn this is so fucking hot." Roma says, he starts tugging at the rest of your clothes and Anya''s obviously wanting to get you both naked as quickly as he can.'
+		'You and Anya kiss as Roma takes turns fondling both of you. "Damn this is so fucking hot." Roma says as he starts tugging at the rest of your clothes as well as Anya''s, obviously wanting to get you both naked as quickly as he can.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Fondle':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some5.jpg"></center>'
-			'Once you are both naked, Roma removes his clothes as well. With you all naked Roma starts to rub your pussy with one hand, while he suckles at one of your nipples. Anya plays with your other tit with one hand, while her other smacks your ass before squeezing it. Not wanting Anya to feel left out, you start rubbing her clit with one of your hands. Roma then stops playing with you and says "Damn, one of you needs to start sucking my dick."'
+			'Once you are both naked, Roma removes his clothes as well. All of you now naked, Roma starts to rub your pussy while he suckles at one of your nipples. Anya plays with your other tit with one hand while the other smacks and squeezes your ass. Not wanting Anya to feel left out, you start rubbing her clit with one of your hands. Roma then stops playing with you and says "Damn, one of you needs to start sucking my dick."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Watch Anya suck':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some6.jpg"></center>'
-				'Anya gets down on all fours and starts sucking Roma''s dick like a pro, you get down as well and have a close view of her work. Roma places a hand on the top of your head and the back of her. He makes her deep throat him a few times as you watch. After a couple of minutes Anya pops his dick out of her mouth and offers it to you.'
+				'Anya gets down on all fours and starts sucking Roma''s dick like a pro. You get down as well and have a close view of her work. Roma places a hand on top of your head and on the back of Anya''s. He makes her deepthroat him as you watch. After a couple of minutes, Anya pops his dick out of her mouth and offers it to you.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck Roma':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some7.jpg"></center>'
-					'You open your mouth as he slides his wet dick into it, closing your lips around his shaft you start sucking his dick. You feel his hand slide to the back of your head to force you to go deep on his dick, while Anya starts playing with your boobs. Several minutes go by of you sucking Roma before he states "I want to fuck you <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+					'You open your mouth as he slides his wet dick into it. Closing your lips around his shaft, you start sucking his dick. You feel his hand slide to the back of your head to force you to go deep on his dick, while Anya starts playing with your tits. Several minutes go by of you sucking Roma before he states "I want to fuck you <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 					gs 'stat'
 					gs 'willpower', 'action', 'resist', 'medium'
@@ -400,27 +400,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'flash_boobs':
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some8.jpg"></center>'
 						if pcs_vag = 0:
 							roma_cherry = 1
-							'When you nod your head in agreement, Roma pulls pack, pulling his dick out of your mouth and lays down on his back. Anya encourages you to straddle him, she takes ahold of his dick and guides it as you lower yourself down. You feel the head of his dick already slick with slobber pressed up against your vaginal lips and then force them apart, sliding into you. You feel your hymen tearing as his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick fills your slot. As you ride his cock Anya licks and sucks at your clit making the pain feel less and the pleasure to be almost overwhelming.'
+							'When you nod your head in agreement, Roma pulls his dick out of your mouth and lies down on his back. Anya encourages you to straddle him and she takes hold of his dick and guides it as you lower yourself down. You feel the head of his dick, already slick with drool, press up against your lips and then force them apart, sliding into you. You feel your hymen tearing as his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick fills you. As you ride his cock, Anya licks and sucks at your clit, reducing the pain and causing the pleasure to be almost overwhelming.'
 							gs 'pain', 3, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni', -10, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Red surprise': gt 'sisterQW', 'first_cum_shot'
 						else
-							'When you nod your head in agreement, Roma pulls pack, pulling his dick out of your mouth and lays down on his back. Anya encourages you to straddle him, she takes ahold of his dick and guides it as you lower yourself down. You feel the head of his dick already slick with slobber pressed up against your vaginal lips and then force them apart, sliding into you with his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick. As you ride his cock Anya licks and sucks at your clit making the pleasure to be almost overwhelming.'
+							'When you nod your head in agreement, Roma pulls his dick out of your mouth and lies down on his back. Anya encourages you to straddle him and she takes hold of his dick and guides it as you lower yourself down. You feel the head of his dick, already slick with drool, press up against your lips and then force them apart, sliding into you with his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick. As you ride his cock, Anya licks and sucks at your clit, causing the pleasure to be almost overwhelming.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni', -5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Anya''s turn':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some9.jpg"></center>'
-								'After what seems like a long time and no time at all, he lifts you off and puts you aside. He drags Anya over and rolls her onto her back. He slides his dick effortlessly into her, she moans loudly as he does, just as he starts fucking her. "Straddle her face <<$pcs_nickname>>." Doing as Roma says, you straddle Anya''s face and she starts licking your pussy as Roma fucks her.'
+								'After what seems like a long time and no time at all, he lifts you off of him and places you aside. He drags Anya over and rolls her onto her side. He slides his dick effortlessly into her and she moans loudly as he starts fucking her. "Straddle her face <<$pcs_nickname>>." Doing as Roma says, you straddle Anya''s face and she starts licking your pussy as Roma fucks her.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Your turn again':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some11.jpg"></center>'
-									'Suddenly you feel a smack on your ass. "Ok come over here and get on all fours, I want to fuck you again" says Roma and you are sure he is the one that smacked your butt. You climb off Anya and gets on all fours, Roma scoots up behind you and easily slides his dick back in your pussy, while Anya lays down in front of your face and spreads her legs. Roma reaches forward and forces you face into her crotch, you start licking her pussy as Roma starts fucking you again. Several minutes pass before Roma pulls his dick out of your pussy and then you feel the head of it pressing against your asshole.'
+									'You then feel a sudden smack on your ass. "OK, come over here and get on all fours. I want to fuck you again." Roma demands. You are sure he is the one that smacked you. You climb off Anya and gets on all fours as Roma scoots up behind you and easily slides his dick back in your pussy, while Anya lays down in front of your face and spreads her legs. Roma reaches forward and forces you face into her crotch and you start licking her pussy as Roma starts fucking you again. Several minutes pass before Roma pulls his dick out of your pussy and you feel the head of it pressing against your asshole.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 									gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', -5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 									gs 'stat'
@@ -431,8 +431,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'flash_boobs':
 											gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some9.jpg"></center>'
-											'You pull away and turns your head back to him. "No anal!" He visable sighs obviously looking forward too.'
-											'"Ok, no anal." Then he grabs Anya and drags her back over to him while she is still on her back. As you watch he slides his dick in her ass, then he glances up at you "Well, get back on her face." You straddle her face as he fucks her, she licks you pussy, as you glance back he occasionally switches which of her holes he is fucking, going from ass to pussy and then back to ass again.'
+											'You pull away and turn your head back to him. "No anal!" He sighs, obviously having looked forward to fucking your ass.'
+											'"OK, no anal." He grabs Anya and drags her back over to him while she is still on her back. You watch as he slides his dick in her ass, then he glances up at you. "Well, get back on her face." You straddle her face as he fucks her and she licks your pussy. You glance back occasionally and see how he switches which of her holes he is fucking, going from ass to pussy and then back to ass again.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 											gs 'stat'
 											act 'Cum prize': gt 'sisterQW', 'first_cum_shot'
@@ -444,14 +444,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'flash_boobs':
 										*clr & cla
 										gs 'boyStat', 'A56'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some12.jpg"></center>'
-										'When you don''t say anything he pushes his dick forward until the head of it painfully pops into your ass and pauses a moment to let you get us to it. Then he slowly starts sliding his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. It is already wet from Anya and your''s pussy juices, so it slides up your butt fairly easily. He is fairly gentle, not going too fast or too deep, giving you time to adjust and stretch out. As he does you start fingering Anya with two fingers as you lick her clit.'
+										'When you don''t say anything, he pushes his dick forward until the head of it painfully pops into your ass, pauses for a moment to let you get used to it. He then slowly starts sliding his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. It is already wet from you and Anya''s pussy juices, so it slides into you fairly easily. He is fairly gentle, not going too fast or too deep, giving you time to adjust and stretch out. As he does, you start fingering Anya with two fingers as you lick her clit.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 										gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', -5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Deep pounding':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some10.jpg"></center>'
-											'Once he dick starts more easily sliding back and forth in your ass he gets up on his feet and grips your hips. He pushes his cock balls deep into your butthole and starts fucking it a little harder, slowly picking up speed, only backing off when you visibly tense up. You keep licking Anya''s clit and fingering her pussy as Roma fucks your ass, he does a pretty good job of pounding you without being to rough, but eventually he starts getting rougher and you can hear him straining and you can tell he is getting read to come, maybe it is the sound or maybe you, either way at that moment is when Anya has a orgasm rock through her body. Just then Roma pulls his dick out of your ass.'
+											'Once his dick starts more easily sliding back and forth in your ass, he gets up on his feet and grips your hips. He pushes his cock balls deep into your asshole and starts fucking it a little harder, slowly picking up speed and only backing off when you visibly tense up. You keep licking Anya''s clit and fingering her pussy as Roma fucks your ass. He does a pretty good job of pounding you without being too rough, but eventually he starts getting rougher and you can hear him straining. You can tell he is getting read to cum, and at that moment, Anya has an orgasm rock through her body. Roma then pulls his dick out of your ass.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 											gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', -5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 											gs 'stat'
@@ -471,7 +471,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'refuse_to_fuck_roma':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some9.jpg"></center>'
-	'You shake your head no. "I just want to do oral this time, maybe next time." He frowns obviously a little disappointed but nods. He drags Anya over and rolls her onto her back. He slides his dick effortlessly into her, she moans loudly as he does, just as he starts fucking her. "Straddle her face <<$pcs_nickname>>." Doing as Roma says, you straddle Anya''s face and she starts licking her pussy as Roma fucks her. He fucks her for some time, as you occasionally glance back at what they are doing, you see him sometimes switch holes, from her pussy to her ass, and then later back to her pussy and then finally back to her ass. A few moments later a massive orgasm rocker her body, which gets Roma to start grunting obviously on the verge of a orgasm himself.'
+	'You shake your head. "I just want to do oral. Maybe next time." He frowns, obviously a little disappointed, but nods. He drags Anya over and rolls her onto her side. He slides his dick effortlessly into her and she moans loudly as he starts fucking her. "Straddle her face <<$pcs_nickname>>." Doing as Roma says, you straddle Anya''s face and she starts licking her pussy as Roma fucks her. He fucks her for some time and you occasionally glance back at what they are doing, seeing him sometimes switch holes. A few moments later, a massive orgasm rocks her body, which causes Roma to start grunting, obviously on the verge of an orgasm himself.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 15, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Cum prize': gt 'sisterQW', 'first_cum_shot'
@@ -484,23 +484,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_cum_shot':
 		minut += 60
 		npc_rel['A33'] += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
-		'Despite the pain from having your cherry popped you still enjoyed it. Roma starts to change positions, as he does he looks down at his dick seeing the blood. "Shit, Anya I think <<$pcs_nickname>> was a virgin."'
-		'Anya sits up suddenly. "What?" She looks at Roma, then to the blood on his dick and then to you. As she looks at you her eyes get big, realizing her boyfriend just popped her little sisters cherry.'
+		'Despite the pain from having your cherry popped, you still enjoyed it. Roma changes positions and as he does, he looks down at his dick and notices the blood. "Anya, you didn''t tell me that <<$pcs_nickname>> was a virgin!"'
+		'Anya frantically sits up. "What!!??" She looks at Roma, then to the blood on his dick and then to you. As she looks at you, her eyes grow wide at the realization that her boyfriend just took her little sister''s virginity.'
 		*nl
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what the hell where you thinking?" She asks you angrily.'
-		'Seeing their reaction, you start to tear up "I was thinking I loved you and couldn''t think of a better way to lose my virginity and I was tired of being a virgin."'
-		'Anya seeing your tears gives you a hug. "I''m sorry I yelled at you <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was just a shock. Let''s get you cleaned up and we can talk about it." She gives Roma a look that says go away.'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what the hell where you thinking?" she asks you angrily.'
+		'Seeing their reaction, you start to tear up. "I was thinking I loved you! I was tired of being a virgin and couldn''t think of a better way to lose my virginity!"'
+		'Anya, seeing your tears, gives you a hug. "I''m sorry I yelled at you <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was just a shock. Let''s get you cleaned up and we can talk about it." She gives Roma a glare and he leaves.'
 		*nl
-		'Roma gets up and goes to take a shower and finish himself off in there.'
-		'Anya and you end up having a long talk about what just happened and what it means going forward. Your bond, if anything, is now stronger and you really were tired of being a virgin.'
-		'Shit, what are you going to tell your mother?'
+		'Roma gets up to take a shower and finish himself off in there.'
+		'You and Anya end up having a long talk about what just happened and what it means going forward. Your bond, if anything, is now stronger.'
+		'"Shit, what are you going to tell mother?" she asks aloud.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		roma_cherry = 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get up': gt 'bedrPar'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some13.jpg"></center>'
-		'Roma pulls you over and onto your back, so your head is just under his dick. Anya climbs over the top of you so her face is just above your face, with his dick nearly between you. He starts jerking off and mere moments latter cum starts spurting out of his cock, Anya opens her mouth and you follow suit. Most of his cum ends up on her face or yours, but some of it ends up in both of your mouths. More drops drip from Anya''s face onto your face or into your mouth.'
+		'Roma pulls you over and onto your back, so your head is just under his dick. Anya climbs on the top of you so she is is just above you, with his dick between you. He starts jerking off and mere moments later, cum starts spurting out of his cock. Anya opens her mouth and you follow suit. Most of his cum ends up on her face or yours, but some of it ends up in both of your mouths. More drops drip from Anya''s face onto your face or into your mouth.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 		gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'A56', 1
 		gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'A56', 1
@@ -508,9 +508,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_cum_shot':
 		act 'Aftermath':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/anya3some14.jpg"></center>'
-			'Once the last drop of cum is spent, Roma collapse back on the bed. While Anya starts licking the cum off your face and kissing you, the two of you share his cum as you kiss. A few moments later she climbs off you, still having left some of his cum on your face. She grabs a tissue and hands you one as well and starts cleaning his cum off her face. You follow suit and start cleaning your face as well, after that all of you get dressed. Just as you finish dressing Roma says "That was a blast girls, we will have to do that again." He gives Anya a pleading look as he says it.'
-			'Anya laughs and shakes her head like a mom might do with a small kid asking for more cookies. "Maybe, we''ll see, depends on how good you are."'
-			'He laughs and grabs her, pulling her up into a huge bear hug "I am always good, that''s why you love me." Then before she can respond he kisses her deeply and passionately. Feeling like they are getting all romantic you decided to leave.'
+			'Once the last drop of cum is spent, Roma collapses back on the bed. Anya starts licking the cum off your face and kissing you, the two of you sharing his cum as you kiss. A few moments later, she climbs off you, some of his cum still on your face. She grabs a tissue and starts cleaning her face before offering you one. You follow suit and start cleaning your face and then get dressed. Just as you finish dressing, Roma says "That was a blast girls! we have to do that again." He gives Anya a pleading look as he says it.'
+			'Anya laughs and shakes her head. "Maybe. It depends on how good you are."'
+			'He laughs and grabs her, pulling her up into a huge bear hug "I am always good, that''s why you love me." Before she can respond, he kisses her deeply and passionately. Feeling like they are getting all romantic, you decide to leave.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 			cumspclnt = 12
 			gs 'cum_cleanup'

locations/sister_chat.qsrc

@@ -34,12 +34,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 		!! If you have visible cum on you:	
 		if cumloc[11] = 1 or (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) and pav_slut < 200:
 			sisterknowslut = 1
-			'Your Sister looks at you, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what is that?". Suddenly, her eyes narrow, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, is that cum on you? What was you thinking walking around with that on you? It''s a good thing I noticed, what if it had been <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>?!"'
+			'Your sister looks at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what is that?" Suddenly, her eyes narrow. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, is that cum!? What were you thinking walking around with that on you? It''s a good thing I noticed and not <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>. God forbid what she would do if she ever saw you like that!"'
 		elseif cumloc[11] = 1 or (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) and pav_slut >= 200 and sisterknowslut = 0:
 			sisterknowslut = 1
-			'Your Sister looks at you, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, so the rumours are true, you are <<$gnikname>>"'
+			'Your sister looks at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>?! So the rumours are true, you are <<$gnikname>>!"'
 		elseif cumloc[11] = 1 or (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) and pav_slut >= 250 and sisterknowslut > 0:
-			'Your Sister looks at you, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, up to your usual tricks? You could at least wash yourself."'
+			'Your sister looks at you. "Up to your usual tricks, <<$pcs_nickname>>? You could at least wash yourself."'
 		end
 
 		!! If you are on drugs:
@@ -58,14 +58,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 			if StrongNarkota > 20:
 				if pcs_mood > 10: pcs_mood -= 10
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You realize you are way to high to talk to your sister right now and she would flip out if she noticed you are high again, so you quickly move away before she notices.'
+				'You realize you are way too high to talk to your sister right now and she would flip out if she noticed you are high again, so you quickly move away before she notices.'
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			else
 				if pcs_mood > 10: pcs_mood -= 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				narkossister = 0
 				*nl
-				'You tell yourself, "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, deep breath, focus, you can do this."'
+				'You tell yourself "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, deep breath, focus. You can do this."'
 				'You feel your head is clear enough to talk to your sister once more.'
 				act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 			if sisterQW['naked'] = 0:
 				sisterQW['naked'] = 1
-				'Anya looks at you, her eyes wide. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing? What if someone walks in and sees you like this? Mom would throw a fit if she catches you walking around naked like that. Sometimes I just don''t understand you.'
+				'Anya looks at you, her eyes wide. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing? What if someone walks in and sees you like this? Mom would throw a fit if she catches you walking around naked like that. Sometimes I just don''t understand you."'
 			else
 				'Anya shakes her head at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, sooner or later mom is going to catch you and tan your ass.'
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -91,23 +91,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 			act '"Hey sis, can you teach me how to braid my hair...?"':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 1
-				'She pauses for a moment and looks at you funny, "You don''t know how to braid your own hair?"'
-				'You look down embarrassed, "I usually just go to the salon for them to braid it..."'
-				'She laughs and gives you a hug. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, of course I will teach you how to braid your hair, though it make take a bit."'
-				act 'Spend an hour with your sister learning how to braid your hair.':
+				'She pauses for a moment and looks at you, eyebrow raised. "You don''t know how to braid your own hair?"'
+				'You look down embarrassed. "I usually just go to the salon for them to braid it..."'
+				'She laughs and gives you a hug. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, of course I will teach you how to braid your hair, though it make take a while."'
+				act 'Spend time learning how to braid your hair.':
 					minut += 60
 					canBraidHair = 1
 					npc_rel['A33'] += 5
 					*clr & cla
-					'Though you made plenty of mistakes and got your hair in a knot a couple of times, afterwords you feel confident that you can braid your hair on your own.'
+					'You make plenty of mistakes and get your hair in a knot a couple of times, but eventually you feel confident enough to braid your hair on your own.'
 					act 'Thank your sister and leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
-				act 'Thank her but say you really actually have to get going':
+				act 'Thank her but say you actually have to get going':
 					minut += 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
-					'She shrugs her head and says, "Come back if you want to learn how <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
+					'She shrugs her head and says "Come back if you want to learn how <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
 					act 'Thank your sister and leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
@@ -138,23 +138,23 @@ $narkosisterspalila = {
 	gs 'stat'
 	!'sister slept on drugs.'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Come on, keep it together, act sober." You think. "I have just have to talk normally and not think about it."'
-	'Your sister looks at you quizzically. "Are you stoned <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+	'"Come on <<$pcs_firstname>>, keep it together! Act sober." you think to yourself. "I just have to talk normally and not think about it."'
+	'Your sister looks at you, her eyebrow raised. "Are you stoned <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 	act 'No':
 		cla
 		narkossister = 1
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You shake your head "No." You back away, but it''s very clear your sister could tell that you are stoned.'
+		'You nervously shake your head and back away, but it''s obvious that Anya can tell that you are high.'
 		act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	end
-	act 'Share':
+	act 'Yes':
 		*clr & cla
 		narkossista = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You tell your sister, that you learned where to buy drugs, and you really wanted to try and it is just this once, never again.'
-		'Your sister strictly looks at you and says, "<<$pcs_nickname>> I''m not your mother, who would kill you if she found out, but this is the first and last time. It''s not worth it!'
-		'If you continue, then your whole life will not be worth shit.'
+		'You admit that you learned where to buy drugs and you really wanted to try them out, just this once.'
+		'Anya looks at you sternly and says "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m not your mother, who would kill you if she found out, but this is the first and last time. It''s not worth it!"'
+		'"If you continue, then your whole life will not be worth shit."'
 		act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		exit
 	end
@@ -185,11 +185,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 		if npc_pregtalk['A33'] = 0 and func('body_din','pregnancyVisibility') = 1 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			npc_pregtalk['A33'] = 1
 			if $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
-				'With surprise your sister says, "You''re pregnant, <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
-				'"How the hell can you tell?"'
-				'With a smile, she says, "I have a bionic eye." As she reaches out and rubs your protruding belly, "So, do you know who the father is?"'
+				'"You''re pregnant <<$pcs_nickname>>?!" your sister exclaims in surprise.'
+				'"How the hell can you tell?" you reply.'
+				'With a smile, she says "I have a bionic eye." She reaches out and rubs your protruding belly. "So, do you know who the father is?"'
 			else
-				'You sister looks at your belly with surprise. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you pregnant? And who got you pregnant?'
+				'You sister looks at your belly with surprise. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you pregnant? Who the hell knocked you up!?"'
 			end
 			$tmpstr = ''
 			$tmpstr2 = ''
@@ -223,11 +223,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			if arrsize('$specfath') > 0 and npc_rel['A33'] > 50:
 				$tmpa = ''
 				if $tmpstr2 ! '':
-					$tmpa = ' You decide to start by telling her the easy news. "Oh, sister, <<$tmpstr>>it''s possible the father is <<$tmpstr2>>. I think it could also be someone we know.'
+					$tmpa = ' You decide to start by telling her the easy news. "<<$tmpstr>>it''s possible the father is <<$tmpstr2>>. I think it could also be someone we know.'
 				else
-					$tmpa = ' You look at her for a moment and then say, "Oh, sister, I think the father might be someone we know."'
+					$tmpa = ' You look at her for a moment and then say "I think the father might be someone we know."'
 				end
-				'You realize that telling her who the father might be could be difficult.<<$tmpa>>'
+				'You realize that telling her who the father is could be difficult.<<$tmpa>>'
 				idx = 0
 				sz = arrsize('$specfath')
 				if sz > 1:
@@ -241,22 +241,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					$fath = $specfath[idx]
 					if $fath = 'Roma':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father might <<$tmpc>>be Roma.'
-						'"You mean my Roma?"'
+						'"You mean [i]my[/i] Roma?"'
 						'You nod with a forced smile.'
-						'"Oh, I am so sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>! This is probably my fault.", she says and hugs you to her strongly.'
+						'"Oh, I am so sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>! This is probably my fault." she says and hugs you tightly.'
 						pcs_mood += 50
 					elseif $fath = 'Kolka':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father could <<$tmpc>>be Kolka.'
-						'"Seriously? Our little brother?" she asks with a little shock. "Why would you have sex with our little brother? What is wrong with you?"'
-						'You feel yourself blushing, as you murmur, "I don''t know it just felt right." She just shakes her head at you.'
+						'"Seriously?" she asks with a little shock. "You had sex with our little brother? What is wrong with you!?"'
+						'You feel yourself blushing as you murmur "I don''t know, it just felt right." She just shakes her head at you.'
 					elseif $fath = 'Stepfather':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father could <<$tmpc>>be your stepfather.'
 						'"Oh, what a slut you are!" she smiles happily. "Do you think he will notice it too?"'
 					elseif $fath = 'our real father':
 						'You <<$tmpb>> the father might conceivably <<$tmpc>>be your real father.'
-						'Your Sister looks at you with shock! "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what is wrong with you? How did you even find him?"'
-						'You explain how you tracked him down through the truck drivers to the where he works now, and how your relationship quickly grew into something unexpected for both of you. "I haven''t told him," you tell her. "Maybe I should. I don''t know."'
-						'She listens intently to your story and gives you a hug when you finish. "I don''t know either, <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I hope you take me to meet him someday."'
+						'Your sister looks at you with shock. "What is wrong with you <<$pcs_nickname>>?! How did you even find him?"'
+						'You explain how you tracked him down through the truck drivers and how your relationship quickly grew into something unexpected for both of you. "I haven''t told him." you tell her. "Maybe I should. I don''t know."'
+						'She listens intently to your story and gives you a hug when you finish. "I don''t know either <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I hope you take me to meet him someday."'
 					end
 					if idx = 0 and sz > 1:
 						$tmpc = 'also '
@@ -269,15 +269,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 				end
 			else
 				if arrsize('$wombpotfath') = 0:
-					'"Oh, sister, I have no idea who the father could be! I''m not even sure how I got pregnant!"'
+					'"I have no idea who the father could be! I''m not even sure how I got pregnant!"'
 				elseif arrsize('$wombpotfath') = 1:
 					if $wombpotfath[0] = '' or $wombpotfath[0] = 'unknown':
-						'"Oh, sister, I have no idea whom the father could be!"'
+						'"I have no idea who the father could be!"'
 					else
-						'"Oh, sister, <<$tmpstr>>I think the father is <<$tmpstr2>>."'
+						'"<<$tmpstr>>I think the father is <<$tmpstr2>>."'
 					end
 				else
-					'"Oh, sister, <<$tmpstr>>I think the father is <<$tmpstr2>>"'
+					'"<<$tmpstr>>I think the father is <<$tmpstr2>>"'
 				end
 			end
 			act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -287,16 +287,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			sisterQW['partyday'] = daystart
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_1.jpg"></center>'
 			if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 0:
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, one of my friends birthday is this friday and he''s having a party. I asked him if I could invite you."'
-				'"Oh, Anya I don''t know, they are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s one of my friend''s birthday this Friday and he''s having a party. I asked him if I could invite you."'
+				'"I don''t know. They are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
 			elseif sisterQW['partycount'] = 0:
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, one of my friends is having a party this friday. I asked him if I could invite you."'
-				'"Oh, Anya I don''t know, they are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, one of my friends is having a party this Friday. I asked him if I could invite you."'
+				'"I don''t know. They are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
 			else
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex is having another party this friday. I asked him if I could invite you again and he said yes."'
-				'"Really? You want me to go to another party?"'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex is having another party this Friday. I asked him if I could invite you again and he said yes."'
+				'"Really? You want to take me to another party?"'
 			end
-			'"Come on, it will be a lot of fun I promise. So will you come?"'
+			'"Come on, it will be a lot of fun. I promise. So will you come?"'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'No (study)':
 				sisterQW['party'] = -1
@@ -304,8 +304,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You refuse to go to the party.'
-				'"Sorry Anya, I would love to, but I can''t get behind at school. I have homework and books to read, you know what it''s like."'
-				'She smiles to you. "My nerdy little sister, well have fun studying."'
+				'"Sorry Anya. I would love to, but I can''t get behind at school. I have homework and books to read, you know what it''s like."'
+				'She smiles to you. "My nerdy little sister. Well have fun studying!"'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
 			if razradbeg > 0:
@@ -316,7 +316,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_4.jpg"></center>'
 					'You refuse to go to the party.'
-					'"I would love to, but I have a competition to prepare for. I have to train. One day I could be a great athlete, not like you lazy bones." You tell her with a teasing laugh.'
+					'"I would love to, but I have a competition to prepare for. I have to train. I could be a great athlete one day, unlike you Miss Lazy Bones." you tell her with a teasing laugh.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
 			end
@@ -327,7 +327,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_5.jpg"></center>'
 					'You refuse to go to the party.'
-					'"I can''t, the coach does not allow my to stay out late, and drinking is also prohibited."'
+					'"I can''t. The coach does not allow me to stay out late and drinking is also prohibited."'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
 			end
@@ -339,7 +339,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 				!'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_2.jpg"></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
 				'You agree to go to the party.'
-				'"Awesome <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''ll be fun! We will meet at the community center this friday, don''t forget to be there before 18:00, otherwise we will leave without you."'
+				'"Awesome <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''ll be fun! We will meet at the community center this Friday. Don''t forget to be there before 18:00, otherwise we will leave without you."'
 				'With these words, your sister hugs you and kisses you on the cheek.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
@@ -347,7 +347,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 		elseif (sisterQW['party'] = 1 and daystart > sisterQW['partyday'] and week > 5) or (sisterQW['party'] = 1 and daystart - sisterQW['partyday'] > 3):
 			sisterQW['party'] = 0
 			if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 1: sisterQW['rexbday'] = -1
-			'"We missed you at the party, <<$pcs_nickname>>." Anya pouts at you, "I''ll let you know when the next party is and maybe you''ll be able to make it, okay?"'
+			'"We missed you at the party <<$pcs_nickname>>." Anya pouts at you. "I''ll let you know when the next party is and maybe you''ll be able to make it, okay?"'
 			'You apologize for missing the party and Anya smiles at you.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 		!! After Roma visit
@@ -364,14 +364,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_00.jpg"></center>'
-			'Merrily Anya runs up to you and wraps her arms around your neck.'
+			'Anya merrily runs up to you and wraps her arms tightly around your neck.'
 			if sisboytrioQW ! 1:
-				'"Sister, I adore you! I spent a lovely evening with Roma."'
-				'"Yes, I''m glad for you. Enough already, you''ll strangle me."'
-				'Anya is happy to let you go, and kisses you on the cheek.'
+				'"I adore you, little sis! I had a lovely evening with Roma."'
+				'"Yes, I''m glad for you, but enough already. You''re going to strangle me!"'
+				'Anya lets you go and kisses you on the cheek.'
 			else
 				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I adore you! I really enjoyed our evening with Roma."'
-				'"Yes, me too. But please, not so tight, you''re strangling me."'
+				'"Yes, me too. But please, not so tight. You''re strangling me."'
 				'Anya is bouncing with joy and loosens her grip just enough to kiss you on the cheek.'
 				sisboytrioQW = 0
 			end
@@ -396,8 +396,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-			'You''re both embarrassed after what happened that night, and can not look into each other''s eyes, finally Anya speaks with you.'
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>," with a smile she tells you, "I thought you liked guys and I always found it much more pleasant to handle men."'
+			'You''re both embarrassed after what happened that night, and cannot look each other in the eye. Anya eventually speaks.'
+			'"I thought you liked guys <<$pcs_nickname>>? I always found it much more pleasant to handle men." she says with a smile.'
 			if sisterQW['dno'] = 0:
 				act 'I don''t know what happened':
 					sisterQW['dno'] = 1
@@ -405,8 +405,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You look at Anya blushing, "Forgive me, I was so worked up, I just could not control myself, I do not know what came over me."'
-					'"Well, I do not mind, if you sometimes lose control of yourself. Just try and control yourself though." She smiles slyly, You smile at her...'
+					'You blush at Anya. "Forgive me, I was so worked up and I just couldn''t control myself. I don''t know what came over me."'
+					'"Well, I don''t mind if you sometimes ''lose control of yourself''. Just try and control yourself though." she smiles slyly. You smile back at her.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -418,8 +418,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You look at Anya blushing, "I like girls, I''m a lesbian and I don''t know what came over me... you are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
-					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy that is all I care about, but for the record I''m not a lesbian." She says with a laugh and then she asks you about any girl friends you have had, for someone that claims to be straight she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
+					'You blush at Anya. "I... I like girls. I''m...I''m a...lesbian. I don''t know what came over me. You are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
+					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised, but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian." she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -431,8 +431,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You look at Anya blushing, "I like girls too, I''m not a lesbian, I just like both guys and girls. I don''t know what came over me that night... you are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
-					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy that is all I care about, but for the record I''m not a lesbian or into girls." She says with a laugh and then she asks you about any girl friends you have had, for someone that claims to be straight she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
+					'You blush at Anya. "I like girls too. I''m not a lesbian, I just like both guys and girls. I don''t know what came over me that night. You are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
+					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised, but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian or into girls." she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -444,10 +444,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'Wait, she said more pleasant, so does that mean? "Wait you said more pleasant, so does that mean you have been with other girls before?"'
-					'Anya blushes. "Well yes, twice before. I was curious and horny." She says with a laugh when she realizes it sounds like you when you came onto her.'
+					'"Wait, you said ''more pleasant.'' Does that mean you have been with other girls before?" you ask.'
+					'Anya blushes. "Well, yes... Twice before actually. I was curious and horny." she says with a laugh when she realizes she sounds like you when you came onto her.'
 					'You grin and pry. "So did you like it?"'
-					'She blushes maybe even more. "Yeah a little, it was fun. But I much prefer guys, they are way more fun." Soon the two of your are talking about the differences in sex with guys and girls, with you adding in your own experiences along with hers.'
+					'She blushes even more. "Yeah, a little. It was fun, but I prefer guys. They are way more fun." Soon the two of you are talking about the differences in sex with guys and girls, with you adding in your own experiences along with hers.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -459,7 +459,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya looks at you and laughs "Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know what you were up to! I went into the room, and you were playing with yourself!"'
+			'Anya looks at you and laughs "Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know what you were up to! I went into the room, and you were playing with yourself!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			exit
 		!! Anya is about to head to work
@@ -468,14 +468,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sobir.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is busy getting ready for work.'
-			'Anya, without even turning around, says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk, I''m already late!"'
+			'Anya, without even turning around, says "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I''m already late!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif anyaloc = 2 and $loc ! 'bedrPar':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat_kitchen1.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is finishing her breakfast.'
-			'Anya, without even turning around, says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk, I need to get ready for work!"'
+			'Anya, without even turning around, says "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I need to get ready for work!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		!! Anya is going for a walk
 		elseif sisterdialog = 3 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
@@ -484,7 +484,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/progulka.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is getting herself ready to go out. She admires herself in a mirror and wiggles her ass, trying different poses.'
-			'Anya, without even turning to look at you, says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, If you decide to take a walk, I will be near the club with my friends."'
+			'Anya, without even turning to look at you, says "<<$pcs_nickname>>, if you decide to take a walk, I will be near the club with my friends."'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif npc_rel['A33'] < 20:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
@@ -496,7 +496,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					sisterQW['lowrelboost'] = daystart
 					npc_rel['A33'] += (pcs_intel/10) + (pcs_apprnc/20)
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You apologize to your sister and it seems she forgives you some.'
+					'You apologize to your sister and it seems she forgives you somewhat.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
@@ -518,14 +518,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			sisterpirsadaytalk = daystart
 			if rand(1,100) >= 75:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-				'Your sister looks you in the mouth. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, and what have you got there in your tongue?"'
+				'Your sister looks you in the mouth. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what is that on your tongue?"'
 				gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'easy'
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 					act 'Nothing (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 						cla
 						gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You shake your head. "Nothing." Then turn away, so that your sister does not see your pierced tongue.'
+						'"Nothing." you quip as you turn away so that she can''t see your pierced tongue.'
 						act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					end
 				else
@@ -539,8 +539,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/piercings/a<<pirsA>>.jpg"></center>'
-					'You open your mouth and stick out your tongue, showing your sister your tongue piercing.'
-					'Your sister smiles, "Wow, you go <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
+					'You open your mouth and stick out your tongue, showing her your tongue piercing.'
+					'She smiles. "Wow, you go <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
 					'She seems to approve and spends a few minutes asking you all about it.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -551,13 +551,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			end
 		elseif pirsB > 0 and pirsB < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsB'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Your sister looks at your lip, studying your piercing. "That''s so cool, and pretty, I love it!"'
-			act 'Thank you':
+			'Your sister looks at your lip, studying your piercing. "That''s so cool and pretty! I love it!"'
+			act 'Thank her':
 				*clr & cla
 				sisterQW['pirsB'] = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/piercings/b<<pirsB>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'You thank your sister for her compliment instinctively playing with your new piercing.'
+				'You thank your sister for her compliment, instinctively playing with your new piercing.'
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
@@ -565,22 +565,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 		elseif pirsC > 0 and pirsC < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsC'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsC'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Your sister looks at your earrings. Reaching up to hold and inspect one closely she says, "Well, finally! I thought you would never get your ears pierced."'
+			'Your sister looks at your earrings. Reaching up to hold and inspect one closely, she says "Well, finally! I thought you would never get your ears pierced."'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
 		elseif pirsD > 0 and pirsD < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsD'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsD'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya is clearly shocked by your nose ring: "Damn, <<$pcs_nickname>>, tell me who did this to you and I''ll get them for you."'
-			'She dances around you shadow boxing and you both end up laughing loudly.'
+			'Anya is clearly shocked by your nose ring: "Damn <<$pcs_nickname>>, tell me who did this to you and I''ll get them for you."'
+			'She dances around you, shadow boxing and you both end up laughing loudly.'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
 		elseif pirsE > 0 and pirsE < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsE'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsE'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Your sister takes a good look at your eyebrow piercing and says, "Nice, but be careful, don''t accidentally get it caught on something!"'
+			'Your sister takes a good look at your eyebrow piercing and says "Nice, but be careful and don''t accidentally get it caught on something!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
@@ -600,7 +600,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					trfatherQW = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-					'You ask about your real father, Anya grins, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I was 4 years old when they broke up. I don''t even remember what he looks like. <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> does not like to talk about him, but as you know, our real father went to live in another town. I also remember, he worked as a long-distance truck driver, maybe sometimes he passes through Pavlovsk."'
+					'You ask about your real father and Anya sighs. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I was barely 3 years old when they broke up. I don''t even remember what he looks like. <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> doesn''t like to talk about him, but as you know, our real father went to live in another town. I remember that he worked as a long-distance truck driver. Maybe he sometimes passes through Pavlovsk?"'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -617,36 +617,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 				end
 				if temp = 1:
-					'As you chat with your sister, she says it is possible to rent an apartment in the city and live and work there, but she is happy living in Pavlovsk, even with helping with the bills she has way more money to spend on herself this way.'	
+					'As you chat with your sister, she says it is possible to rent an apartment in the city and live and work there, but she is happy living in Pavlovsk. Even she helps pay the bills, she has way more money to spend on herself this way.'	
 				elseif temp = 2:
-					'You chat with your sister, Anya, she tells you the tailor at the Garment factory is a creep who makes his customers wait around in their underwear or at least the pretty girls.'
+					'You chat with your sister. She tells you the tailor at the garment factory is a creep who makes his customers wait around in their underwear. At least the pretty girls that is.'
 				elseif temp = 3:
-					'You ask Anya about the University. She grins, "I almost went, passed the entrance exam. However, I started working in the summer and got used to having cash. What can I buy with a diploma?"'
+					'You ask Anya about the University and she grins. "I almost went, passed the entrance exam. However, I started working in the summer and got used to having cash. What can I buy with a diploma?"'
 				elseif temp = 4:
-					'You ask Anya about her boyfriend. She smiles, "Well, I have a boyfriend. Although nothing serious. It''s more like friends with benefits."'
+					'You ask Anya about her boyfriend and she smiles. "Well, I have a boyfriend, but it''s nothing serious. It''s more like friends with benefits."'
 				elseif temp = 5:
-					'You start talking with Anya, she tells you about the boys she met, parties she''s been to and cosmetics.'
+					'You start talking with Anya and she tells you about the boys she has met, the parties she''s been to and cosmetics.'
 				elseif temp = 6:
-					'You chat with your sister, she tells you about the new dress she brought at the store today.'
+					'You chat with your sister and she tells you about the new dress she brought at the store today.'
 				elseif temp = 7:
 					'You chat with your sister about movie stars, discussing and sharing fantasies about them, and arguing about which ones are sexier.'
 				elseif temp = 8:
 					'Anna talks about sports clubs in the community center, and how sport is very good for the figure, but she is too lazy to go there.'
 				elseif temp = 9:
-					'Anya says, that one of her friends had a kid, but the father denies it and she''s left looking after her kid alone. She says, that if you are smart, you will buy the pill from the pharmacy.'
+					'Anya says that one of her friends had a kid, but the father denied it and she was left looking after her kid alone. She says that if you are smart, you will buy the pill from the pharmacy.'
 				elseif temp = 10:
-					'Anya says, one winter she went out without a coat and caught a bad cold. You remind her that she spent the whole time complaining about it to you.'
+					'Anya talks about the one winter where she went out without a coat and caught a bad cold. You remind her that she spent the whole time complaining about it to you.'
 				elseif temp = 11:
-					'You chat with your sister, discussing the latest trends in fashion.'
+					'You chat with your sister, discussing the latest fashion trends.'
 				elseif temp = 12:
-					'Anya tells you how used to try various fad diets to make herself beautiful. However she was under weight, her skin looked gaunt and she kept getting acne. Since quitting the diets she is much healthier and looks more beautiful every day.'
+					'Anya tells you how she used to try various fad diets to make herself beautiful. However she ended up underweight, her skin looked gaunt and she kept getting acne. Since quitting the diets, she is much healthier and looks more beautiful every day.'
 					'The last part has you both laughing.'
 				elseif temp = 13:
 					'You chat with your sister and she tells you that you can find a lot of interesting bargains if you wander through the market.'
 				elseif temp = 14:
-					'You chat with your sister and she tells you about one of her weird ex-boyfriends who was always so poetically dramatic. In particular, she tells you about how he broke up with her. "He said: Anya, my love, I so deeply cherish you, but we are not meant to be. Like water and oil, no matter how hard we try, we cannot be together!"'
+					'You chat with your sister and she tells you about one of her weird ex-boyfriends who was always so poetically dramatic. In particular, she tells you about how he broke up with her. "He said: Anya my love, I so deeply cherish you, but we are not meant to be. Like water and oil, no matter how hard we try, we cannot be together!"'
 				else
-					'You chat with your sister, Anya, she asks you how you feel about women''s sexual rights. You spend some time having a very frank and quite revealing conversation.'
+					'You chat with your sister and she asks you how you feel about women''s sexual rights. You spend some time having a very frank and quite revealing conversation.'
 				end
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -662,22 +662,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						'Your sister boasts to you about how good her boyfriend is in bed. She goes into a surprising amount of detail.'
 					elseif temp = 2:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister tells you a story about her and her girlfriend sucking off their friend on his birthday. Afterwards he came on both their faces and they licked his cum off of each other.'
+						'Your sister tells you a story about her and her friend sucking off her other friend on his birthday. Afterwards, he came on both their faces and they licked his cum off of each other.'
 					elseif temp = 3:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister3.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it in the ass. With mother having her innocence checked all the time, she wanted to have sex so decided to try anal. It hurt the first couple of times but after that she loved it. Though once she lost her virginity she found she liked vaginal sex more, but still does anal. She suggest you try it or just stick to blowjobs to keep mom from finding out you''re sexualy active.'
+						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it in the ass. With mother having her innocence checked all the time, she wanted to have sex and so decided to try anal. It hurt the first couple of times, but after that she loved it. Once she lost her virginity she found she liked vaginal sex more, but still does anal. She suggests that you try it or just stick to blowjobs to keep mom from finding out you''re sexualy active.'
 					elseif temp = 4:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister4.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister tells you about how she gave her boyfriend a blowjob and swallowed his load with out slowing down, "Oh, You should have seen his face!"'
+						'Your sister tells you about how she gave her boyfriend a blowjob and swallowed his load without slowing down. "Oh, you should have seen his face!"'
 					elseif temp = 5:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister tells you about when in school she use to go to a classmates apartment to help her study and afterwards he would fuck her in the ass.'
+						'Your sister tells you about how, when she was in school, she would to go to a classmate''s apartment to study and afterwards, he would fuck her ass.'
 					elseif temp = 6:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister reveals to you, that she just loves when a guy just takes over and grabs her by the head and just fucks her mouth.'
+						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it when a guy takes over, grabs her by the head and just fucks her mouth hard.'
 					elseif temp = 7:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister7.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister reveals to you, that at a party she let two guys fuck her at the same time. Sucking one and getting fucked by the other was fun, but having one fuck her pussy while is friend fucked her ass was amazing.'
+						'Your sister reveals to you that, at a party, she let two guys fuck her at the same time. Sucking one and getting fucked by the other was fun, but having one fuck her pussy while his friend fucked her ass was amazing.'
 					else
 						cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister8.jpg"></center>'
@@ -685,17 +685,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						act 'Tell her you don''t':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-							'You shake your head no. "Eww, don''t you have a boyfriend anyways?"'
-							'She sighs. "Yes but if we ever break up."'
-							'Then she drops the topic.'
+							'You shake your head. "Eww! Don''t you have a boyfriend anyway?"'
+							'She sighs. "Yes, but if we ever break up..."'
+							'She then awkwardly drops the topic.'
 							act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 							act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						end
 						act 'Tell her you want to':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-							'You grin at that imagery as well. "God yes I would like to as well, there is a boy in my school from America. He is tall and well built and as dark skinned as I have ever seen."'
-							'She laughs. "Well why don''t you hit on him then. I am sure he would be eager to show you what it is like."'
+							'You grin at that imagery as well. "God yes I would like to as well. There is a boy in my school from America. He is tall, well built and as dark skinned as I have ever seen."'
+							'She laughs. "Well why don''t you hit on him then? I am sure he would be eager to show you what it is like."'
 							'You laugh and the two of you talk about what it would be like and why it is taboo.'
 							act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 							act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -711,9 +711,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 										*clr & cla
 										OluQW['anya_inv'] = 1
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-										'You ask her if she wants to go up and visit him. "Would you like to come up with me next time I visit him?"'
-										'She thinks about it for a moment and then grins and nods yes. "Yes I think I would, you know just to try it." She says with a blush.'
-										'You promise to text her next time you are going up there and let him know she is willing to help with his needs too. "Ok next time I am going up there I will let you know and tell him."'
+										'"Would you like to come up with me next time I visit him?" you ask.'
+										'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+										'You promise to text her next time you are going up there and let him know she is willing to help with his needs too. "OK, next time I am going up there I will let you know and tell him."'
 										act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 										act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 									end
@@ -724,14 +724,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							act 'Tell her about Marcus':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-								'You tell her about Marcus from school and how you have been having sex with him. Her eyes get big and she starts asking all kinds of questions about how it was. You tell her how big he is and start getting into details about your sex with him.'
+								'You tell her about Marcus from school and how you have been having sex with him. Her eyes grow wide and she starts asking all kinds of questions about how it was. You tell her how big he is and start getting into details about your sex with him.'
 								act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 								act 'Ask if she wants a turn':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-									'You ask her if she wants to give him a go. "Maybe I could invite him over one evening and you can give him a go, interested?"'
-									'She thinks about it for a moment and then grins and nods yes. "Yes I think I would, you know just to try it." She says with a blush.'
-									'You promise to text her next time you are going up there and let him know she is willing to help with his needs too. "Ok I will talk to him about it and let you know."'
+									'"Maybe I could invite him over one evening and you can give him a go? Interested?" you ask.'
+									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+									'"OK, I will talk to him about it and let you know."'
 									act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 									act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
@@ -746,9 +746,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								act 'Ask if she wants to join you':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-									'You ask her if she wants to go to the city with you and go have sex with them. "Would you like to come up with me next time I go?"'
-									'She thinks about it for a moment and then grins and nods yes. "Yes I think I would, you know just to try it." She says with a blush.'
-									'You promise to text her next time you are going up there and let him know she is willing to help with his needs too. "Ok next time I am going to the city to see them, I will let you know."'
+									'"Would you like to come up with me next time I go?" you ask.'
+									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+									'"OK, next time I am going to the city to see them, I will let you know."'
 									act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 									act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
@@ -766,20 +766,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 						if hour > 6 and hour < 23:
-							'You you crawl over her bed towards her to kiss her and when she realizes what you are about to do she pulls back from you. "What are you doing? Everyone is still up, what if someone walked in?" She shakes her head. "You really need to control yourself little sister." She makes it clear nothing is going to happen.'
+							'You crawl over her bed towards her to kiss her and when she realizes what you are about to do, she pulls back from you. "What are you doing? Everyone is still up. What if someone walked in?" She shakes her head. "You really need to control yourself little sister." She makes it clear nothing is going to happen.'
 							act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 							act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						else
-							'You lean in and give her a quick but passionate kiss on the lips. She stiffens a bit at first, obviously unsure but then returns the kiss. Once you break the kiss she says. "You''re a horny little thing aren''t you?"'
-							'You grin to her. "Come on, it will be fun."'
+							'You lean in and give her a quick but passionate kiss on the lips. She stiffens a bit at first, obviously unsure but then returns the kiss. Once you break the kiss, she says "You''re a horny little thing aren''t you?"'
+							'You grin at her. "Come on, it will be fun."'
 							gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
 							if rand(1,3) = 1:
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
 								'Anya says "Again? You know I enjoy this, but I''m not a lesbian and we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
-								'You give her another short kiss, then gently caress her. "You know you want to, come on." You whisper to her seductively.'
-								'Then she kisses you back as her answer.'
+								'You give her another short kiss, then gently caress her. "You know you want to, come on." you whisper to her seductively.'
+								'She kisses you back as her answer.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Have sex with her': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_sex'
@@ -787,7 +787,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
 								'Anya says "Again? You know I enjoy this, but we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
-								'She gives you another short kiss, then gently pushes you away. "Not tonight, let''s both get some sleep tonight and not wear outselves out, huh?"'
+								'She gives you another short kiss, then gently pushes you away. "Not tonight. Let''s both get some sleep and not wear outselves out, huh?"'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -807,10 +807,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-						'You ask Anya about her boyfriend. She smiles.'
-						'"Well, I have a boyfriend. Although nothing serious. He is more of a friend who I have sex with."'
-						'"Awesome, now when I think out about it, you simply must introduce me to him!"'
-						'"Good sister, we hang out in the evenings at the community center. Meet me there and I''ll introduce you to him."'
+						'You ask Anya about her boyfriend and she smiles.'
+						'"Well, I have a boyfriend, but it''s nothing serious. He is more of a friend who I have sex with."'
+						'"Awesome. Now that I think about it, you have to introduce me to him!"'
+						'"We hang out in the evenings at the community center. Meet me there and I''ll introduce you to him."'
 						act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 					end
 				elseif npc_QW['A33'] >= 2 and npc_rel['A33'] >= 40 and sisboytrioQW > -1 and sisboytrioDayOtkaz <= daystart and sisboypartyQW < 2:
@@ -824,19 +824,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							sisboyday = daystart
 							if rand(0,3) = 1:
 								'"Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, did you like it last time? We had a very good time with Roma."'
-								'You do not say anything and just smile slyly watching your sister''s eyes.'
-								'"We want to repeat our games tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
+								'You don''t say anything and just smile slyly, watching your sister''s eyes.'
+								'"We want to repeat our game tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
 								act 'I would love to, but can we postpone it?':
 									*clr & cla
 									sistrioday = daystart + rand(7,14)
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sisboyqw_36.jpg"></center>'
-									'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening is really not good! Could we do it some other day?"'
+									'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening isn''t a good time! Could we do it some other day?"'
 									'She looks kind of dejected, so you continue to talk to her.'
-									'"Really Anya, I am glad to be asked! And I do want to have sex with you two at the same time! But it is really not a good time, and I am the most bummed about it."'
-									'Finally she realize that you didn''t reject her idea, and simply the timing is off a little. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
-									'"Then later it is, little sis.", she says.'
+									'"Really Anya, I am glad you asked. I do want to have fun with both of you, but tomorrow really isn''t a good time."'
+									'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
+									'"Then later it is, little sis." she says.'
 									act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
 								act 'Agree':
@@ -848,13 +848,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sisboyqw_36.jpg"></center>'
 									'You agree to Anya''s indecent proposal.'
 									'"Well, aren''t you all liberated? Of course I agree, it will be very interesting."'
-									'You hug and kiss with your beloved sister.'
+									'You hug and kiss your beloved sister.'
 									act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
 							else
-								'"The last time Roma was here was so good, thank you very much."'
-								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my beloved sister and to see her happy."'
-								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow, do you mind taking another walk for about an hour?"'
+								'"The last time Roma was here was so good! Thank you very much."'
+								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my sister and to see her happy."'
+								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow. Do you mind taking another walk for about an hour?"'
 								gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'easy'
 								if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 									act 'No (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -881,8 +881,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 									'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
-									'"Certainly sister, I understand, I will go for a walk late at night. Only do not be too loud, if Kolka hears you it will blow his tiny little mind."'
-									'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying, "You''re the best!"'
+									'"Fine, I''ll ''go for a walk.'' Just don''t be too loud. If Kolka hears you, it will blow his tiny little mind."'
+									'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying "You''re the best!"'
 									act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
 							end
@@ -892,13 +892,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							sisboyday = daystart
 							if sisterQW['roma3inv'] = 0:
 								sisterQW['roma3inv'] = 1
-								'"Sister, Roma and I have thought about it a lot and... I do not know how to say this..."'
+								'"Sister, Roma and I have thought about it a lot and... I don''t know how to say this..."'
 								'"Well, don''t just leave me hanging. What is it that you want to say to me?"'
-								'"Well, hmmm... We want, you to err... join us tomorrow evening."'
+								'"Well, hmmm... We want you to err... join us tomorrow evening."'
 							else
-								'"Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, did you like it last time? We had a very good time with Roma."'
-								'You do not say anything and just smile slyly watching your sister''s eyes.'
-								'"We want to repeat our games tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
+								'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, did you like it last time? We had a very good time with Roma."'
+								'You do not say anything and just smile slyly, watching your sister''s eyes.'
+								'"We want to repeat our game tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
 							end
 							act 'Decline':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -908,9 +908,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								sisterQW['roma3block'] = 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/mikhail/terminal/sisboyqw_37.jpg"></center>'
-								'You decline your sisters indecent proposal.'
-								'"You fucking perverts! No way, you disgusting bitch!'
-								'You quarrel with your sister and when you have both shouted yourselves out and tears roll down your cheeks, she turns away from you and does not want to talk any more."'
+								'You decline your sister''s indecent proposal.'
+								'"No, you pervert!"'
+								'You argue with your sister and when you have both shouted yourselves out and tears roll down your cheeks, she turns away from you and doesn''t want to talk any more."'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 							act 'I would love to, but can we postpone it?':
@@ -919,11 +919,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sisboyqw_36.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening is really not good! Could we do it some other day?"'
-								'She looks kind of dejected, so you continue to talk to her.'
-								'"Really Anya, I am glad to be asked! And I do want to have sex with you two at the same time! But it is really not a good time, and I am the most bummed about it."'
-								'Finally she realize that you didn''t reject her idea, and simply the timing is off a little. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
-								'"Then later it is, little sis.", she says.'
+								'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening isn''t a good time! Could we do it some other day?"'
+							    'She looks kind of dejected, so you continue to talk to her.'
+								'"Really Anya, I am glad you asked. I do want to have fun with both of you, but tomorrow really isn''t a good time."'
+								'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
+								'"Then later it is, little sis." she says.'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 							act 'Agree':
@@ -936,7 +936,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								*nl
 								'You agree to Anya''s indecent proposal.'
 								'"Well, aren''t you all liberated? Of course I agree, it will be very interesting."'
-								'You hug and kiss with your beloved sister.'
+								'You hug and kiss your sister.'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 						!! Anya asks Sveta to go for a walk the next day at 18:00
@@ -946,12 +946,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								sisterQW['romatime'] = 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_01.jpg"></center>'
 								'Anya takes a long and hesitant look at you, and eventually decides to ask you.'
-								'"<<$pcs_nickname>> could you spend an hour tomorrow after 18:00 going for a walk or something? Roma wants to visit me here and... well, you know what I mean."'
+								'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, could you spend an hour tomorrow after 18:00 going for a walk or something? Roma wants to visit me here and... well, you know what I mean."'
 								'Your sister is blushing a little and looks at you with pleading eyes.'
 							else
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_09.jpg"></center>'
-								'"The last time Roma was here was so good, thank you very much."'
-								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my beloved sister and to see her happy."'
+								'"The last time Roma was here was so good! Thank you for giving us some space, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my sister and to see her happy."'
 								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow, do you mind taking another walk for about an hour?"'
 							end
 							gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'easy'
@@ -980,63 +980,63 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Certainly sister, I understand, I will go for a walk late at night. Only do not be too loud, if Kolka hears you it will blow his tiny little mind."'
-								'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying, "You''re the best!"'
+								'"Fine, I''ll ''go for a walk.'' Just don''t be too loud. If Kolka hears you, it will blow his tiny little mind."'
+								'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying "You''re the best!"'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 						elseif temp = 4:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'You ask your sister about Roma, she is happy talking about him and says how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
+							'You ask your sister about Roma and she happily talks about him, saying how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 5:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya says, before she met Roma he was with a mean girl, and after ignoring her for a long time he called her, making Anya jealous and she scolded him.'
+							'Anya says that before she met Roma, he was with a mean girl and after ignoring her for a long time, he called her, making Anya jealous, so she scolded him.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 6:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'One day she and Roma were in a movie, and noticed on the back row a girl sucking a guy, and that Roma asked her if she would do the same. So she did, she sucked him off right there in the theater and then swallowed all his cum.'
+							'Anya tells you of the time that she and Roma were at the movie theater and noticed a girl sucking a guy off in the back row, and that Roma asked her if she would do the same. She says she did and so gave him a blowjob before swallowing his load.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 7:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya complains that Roma drinks too much beer, does not buy her gifts, and doesn''t pay enough attention to her.'
+							'Anya complains that Roma drinks too much beer, does not buy her gifts and doesn''t pay enough attention to her.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 8:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya says, Roma offered her a threesome with another girl, which she was most offended by and didn''t speak to him for a week afterwards. Though she admits she was tempted to try it, but it was the way he asked that bothered her.'
+							'Anya says Roma offered her a threesome with another girl, which she was most offended by and didn''t speak to him for a week afterwards. She admits she was tempted to try it, but it was the way he asked that bothered her.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 9:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya blushes as she tells you that Roma sometimes comes to her work and drags her into the back room for a quicky.'
+							'Anya blushes as she tells you that Roma sometimes comes to her workplace and drags her into the back room for a quicky.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 10:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya in detail and with enthusiasm tells you about Roma''s magnificent virility, and how if not for this, they would have long since parted.'
+							'Anya, in detail and with great enthusiasm, tells you about Roma''s magnificent virility and how if not for this, they would have long since parted.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 11:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya shares with you a secret, that her favorite position is "cowgirl", even though Roma prefers to do her in doggy-style.'
+							'Anya shares a secret with you. Her favorite position is "cowgirl", even though Roma prefers to do her doggy-style.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 12:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'You speak with your sister very frankly about sexual things, and she says shyly, she use to not like to swallow sperm. With Roma it''s different and she was willing to swallow for him, because she loved him. Now she founds he loves the taste of cum and likes swallowing it and even licking it up.'
+							'You speak with your sister about sex. She shyly admits that she didn''t like swallowing cum at first, but she was willing to swallow for Roma because she loved him. She found that she loves the taste of cum and now likes swallowing it and even licking it up.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 13:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
@@ -1048,20 +1048,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								rexSisTalk = 0
 								rexPark = 0
 								rexCar = 0
-								'Anya talks for a long time about her and Roma''s friends, and asks you if you want to get to know any of them.'
+								'Anya talks for a long time about her and Roma''s friends and asks you if you want to get to know any of them.'
 								'"Well, Rex sounds quite nice... I guess."'
-								'Anya smiles, "Hmm... He is a nice guy, but sometimes behaves a bit strange, Rex is obsessed with women''s legs.'
-								'There was a case when Rex was driving without a license in his father''s car and gazing at a girl walking on the sidewalk, in stockings and a short skirt. Imagine, he was so carried away, he had not noticed a van ahead sitting at the traffic lights.'
-								'He drove straight into it and totalled the car! That''s why we call him Rex, because he stares at legs with his mouth open, teeth on show, wanting to devour them." As she says this, Anya is holding her hands like claws and impersonating a T-Rex growling at your legs.'
+								'Anya smiles. "Hmm... He is a nice guy, but sometimes behaves a bit strange. He is obsessed with women''s legs."'
+								'"There was the time he was driving his father''s car without a license and gazing at a girl walking on the sidewalk, who was wearing stockings and a short skirt. As you can imagine, he got so carried away that he didn''t notice a van ahead sitting at the traffic lights."'
+								'"He drove straight into it and totalled the car! That''s why we call him Rex, because he stares at legs with his mouth open, teeth on show, wanting to devour them." As she says this, Anya is holding her hands out like claws and impersonating a T-Rex growling at your legs.'
 							else
-								'You ask your sister about Roma, she is happy talking about him and says how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
+								'You ask your sister about Roma and she happily talks about him, saying how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
 							end
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						else
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya says that Roma likes you and asks if you like him, too.'
+							'Anya says that Roma likes you and asks if you like him too.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						end
 					end
@@ -1081,19 +1081,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pargone':
 	'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you have to get rid of your bird. Have you heard what he has been saying lately. If <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> ever heard this she would kick us both out of the house"'
-	'You have become quite attached to your bird and really don''t want to get rid of him. " Wait, there must be another solution. Give me a few days, I will go to the pet store and ask if they have a remedy for this"'
+	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you have to get rid of your bird. Have you heard what he has been saying lately? If <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> ever heard this, she would kick us both out of the house!"'
+	'You have become quite attached to your bird and don''t really want to get rid of him. " Wait, there must be another solution. Give me a few days. I will go to the pet store and ask if they have a remedy for this."'
 	if npc_rel['A33'] > 75:
-		'"Fine you have 3 days, if there is no solution by then , I will release him myself"'
-		'"Thanks sis, don''t worry I will find something."'
+		'"Fine, you have 3 days. If there is no solution by then, I will release him myself!"'
+		'"Thanks sis. Don''t worry, I will find something."'
 		ParrotQW['SisterReleaseParrotDay'] = daystart
 		ParrotQW['Level'] = 1
 		ParrotQW['Day'] = 1
 
 	else
-		'"No <<$pcs_nickname>>, it is too dangerous"'
-		'<<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, reaches for the cage and opens it. <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> immediately flies out and leaves through the open window.'
-		'You look at your pet flying away and have to hold back your tears'
+		'"No <<$pcs_nickname>>, it is too dangerous!"'
+		'<<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>> reaches for the cage and opens it. <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> immediately flies out and leaves through the open window.'
+		'You look at your beloved pet flying away and have to hold back your tears.'
 		'You turn away from your sister because you don''t want her to see you crying.'
 		ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 

locations/sister_party.qsrc

@@ -12,8 +12,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_party':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
 		''
 	end
-	'Your cheerful sister Anya' + iif($loc_arg = 'party_gost', ' is drunk and in good spirits.', '.')
-	'"Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, How do you like our humble party? It looks like your having a good time."'
+	'Your sister' + iif($loc_arg = 'party_gost', ' is drunk and in good spirits.', '.')
+	'"Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, How do you like our humble party? It looks like you''re having a good time."'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	if alko < 6 and $loc_arg = 'party_home': act 'Have a drink': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_drink'
 	if $loc_arg = 'party_gost': act 'Drink': gt 'sister_party', 'sister_drink'
@@ -33,53 +33,53 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'talk':
 			'"It is strange seeing you back together with Roma."'
 			'"We talked things out and decided to give it another chance.'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 2:
-			'"You''re over it after all the curing, crying and yelling?"'
-			'"I know, I know, I got excited a little bit, but now everything is worked out."'
+			'"You''re over it after all the cursing, crying and yelling?"'
+			'"I know, I know. I got excited a little bit, but now everything is worked out."'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 3:
-			'"So you just going to continue dating him, after everything that happened?"'
-			'"Well, little sister, he made mistakes. Now he and I have worked things out and I thank God everything is behind us."'
+			'"So you are just going to continue dating him after everything that happened?"'
+			'"Well little sis, he made mistakes. Now he and I have worked things out and I thank God everything is behind us."'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 4:
-			'"I can not believe it, my sister letting him crawl back and taking him back, it''s not like you."'
-			'"Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, best to have a bird in the hand, especially now that we don''t have such a simple relationship anymore.'
+			'"I cannot believe it! You let him crawl back and took him back? It''s not like you."'
+			'"Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s best to have a bird in the hand, especially now that we don''t have such a simple relationship anymore.'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 5:
-			'"What do you mean you don''t have a simple relationship, I need more details."'
-			'"Yes I know, so pay attention, I''m not going to repeat this. In a sense we now have an open relationship."'
+			'"What do you mean you ''don''t have a simple relationship''? I need more details."'
+			'"Yes I know, so pay attention, I''m not going to repeat this. In a sense, we now have an open relationship."'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 6:
-			'"Open relationship? You mean where you can both fuck anyone you want and you keep dating Roma?"'
-			'"Eh <<$pcs_nickname>>, it is something like that."'
+			'"Open relationship? You mean where you can both fuck anyone you want and you keep dating him?"'
+			'"Eh, something like that <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 7:
-			'"I understand you are a fool, I could not agree to that."'
+			'"I can see that you are a fool! I could not agree to that."'
 			'"Why? I know he loves me and he knows that I love him, but while we are young, we have fun."'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 8:
-			'"I still say it''s crazy, how you can be in a loving relationship and fuck anyone."'
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I am a not complete, fool. Why with anyone? Look there are other nice guys here too, such as Rex.'
+			'"I still say it''s crazy how you can be in a loving relationship and still fuck anyone."'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I am a not complete fool. Why ''anyone''? Look around, there are other nice guys here too, such as Rex.'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 9 and Rex_Love = 1:
-			'"You want me to kill you, you know that I''m dating Rex."'
-			'"I know that you two are dating, I was joking, although I did let you fuck my boyfriend, why can''t I fuck yours?"'
+			'"Do you want me to kill you? You know that I''m dating Rex!"'
+			'"Calm down <<$pcs_nickname>>, I was joking! I know that you two are dating. Although... I did let you fuck my boyfriend, so why can''t I fuck yours?"'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 9 and Rex_Love = 0:
-			'"Ok you''re right, I wouldn''t mind it myself but I don''t know if Rex would."'
-			'"Oh what a naughty girl, well then how about we lure him together?"'
+			'"You''re right. I wouldn''t mind having him myself, but I don''t know if Rex would agree."'
+			'"Oh, what a naughty girl! Well then, how about we lure him together?"'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 10 and Rex_Love = 1:
 			sisterQW['AnyaRomaQW'] = 2
-			'"I get what you''re you hinting at, but I''m not sure Rex would also agree. You and Roma both agreed ahead of time."'
-			'"The main thing is that you are not opposed <<$pcs_nickname>>, besides all men are all the same. You really think Rex could withstand both of our charms?"'
+			'You huff and pout, but realize she has a point. "OK fine, but I''m not sure Rex would agree. You and Roma both agreed ahead of time."'
+			'"The main thing is that you are not opposed to it <<$pcs_nickname>>. Besides, all men are the same. You really think Rex could withstand both our charms?"'
 		elseif sisterQW['partytalk'] = 10 and Rex_Love = 0:
 			sisterQW['AnyaRomaQW'] = 2
-			'"You want to seduce Rex? Haha I have fucked him, and you have no idea what he is like in bed.'
-			'"Wow what little minx you are, so that''s why you are always running around in his room, well then that will make this easier."'     
+			'"You want to seduce Rex? Haha, I''ve already fucked him! You have no idea what he is like in bed.'
+			'"Wow! What a saucy little minx you are! So that''s why you are always running around in his room? Well then, that will make this easier."'     
 		end
 		
 	else
 		i = rand(1,9)
 		if i = 1:'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you still don''t have a man?"'
-		if i = 2:'"Sometimes I can''t decide, what is more important, the size of their wallet or penis? What do you think, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+		if i = 2:'"Sometimes I can''t decide what is more important. The size of their wallet or the size of their dick. What do you think <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 		if i = 3:'"If you have a reputation as the town whore, the guys won''t let you come to the parties anymore."'
-		if i = 4:'"Its not good to come here when you''re in a bad mood, Rex hates miserable bastards in his house."'
-		if i = 5:'"Still going to the crap school? Idiot, find yourself a rich man and all your problems are solved."'
+		if i = 4:'"It''s not good to come here when you''re in a bad mood. Rex hates having miserable bastards in his house."'
+		if i = 5:'"Still going to that crap school? Idiot, find yourself a rich man and all your problems are solved!"'
 		if i = 6:'"When I drink, I become like a man and constantly think about sex."'
-		if i = 7:'"Roma sends his greetings, he said he missed our threesomes, I slapped him across the face for it."'
+		if i = 7:'"Roma sends his greetings. He said he missed our threesomes, so I slapped him across the face."'
 		if i = 8:'"What do you think of our host?"'
-		if i = 9:'"Get wild <<$pcs_nickname>>, everything that happens at Rex''s parties, stays at Rex''s parties."'
+		if i = 9:'"Get wild <<$pcs_nickname>>! Everything that happens at Rex''s parties, stays at Rex''s parties."'
 
 	end
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -93,9 +93,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_drink':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Anya hands you a bottle and you take a drink and start to hand it back. "Keep the bottle, sister. I won''t tell <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>."'
-	'You gladly drink more sharing it with your beloved sister.'
-	'Ridding high on your alcohol high you are ready to plunge into the wild debauchery.'
+	'Anya hands you a bottle. You take a swig and hand it back. "Keep the bottle, little sis. I won''t tell <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>." she says with a wink.'
+	'You gladly drink more, sharing it with your sister.'
+	'Feeling buzzed, you are ready to plunge into the wild debauchery of the party.'
 	if alko >= 7: 'Sudden severe head spinning and you are ready at any time...'
 	if alko >= 7: act 'Pass out': gt 'dinParty', 'sleep'
 	if alko < 7: act 'Dance topless': gt 'sister_party', 'fun'
@@ -108,19 +108,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fun':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'     
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_3_<<rand(1,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Alcohol has hit you hard, you feel a little light headed but warm and happy.'
-	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, lets dance like there''s no tomorrow." Pulling her top off, she helps you remove yours.'
-	'Before long Anya and you have both stripped down to just your panties, dancing and shaking your boobs for anyone that wants to watch.'
+	'The alcohol has hit you hard. You feel a little light headed, but warm and happy. Anya cheerfully stumbles up to you.'
+	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, let''s dance like there''s no tomorrow!" Pulling her top off, she helps you remove yours.'
+	'Before long, you and Anya have both stripped down to your panties and are dancing and shaking your tits for anyone that wants to watch.'
 	if Rex_Love = 1: 'Rex watches you and your sister with great curiosity.'     
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'Kiss':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_3_<<rand(3,4)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you dance nearly naked with your sister the strong intoxication and excitement turns you on and you start kissing your sister.'
-		'She did not resist, instead she responds in kind with the kiss and soon you are both embraced in a deep passionate kiss, while your tongues explore each others mouths.'
-		if Rex_Love = 1:'Rex watches you and your sister with great curiosity.'
-		'Wild desire seizes you, as you continue to kiss, you pull her towards one of the bedrooms'
+		'As you dance half naked with your sister, the strong intoxication and excitement turns you on and you start kissing her.'
+		'She doesn''t resist. Instead, she responds in kind and soon you are both embraced in a deep passionate makeout, your tongues exploring each other''s mouths.'
+		if Rex_Love = 1:'Rex continues to watch you and your sister with great curiosity.'
+		'Wild desire seizes you. As you continue to kiss, you pull her towards one of the bedrooms.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -129,8 +129,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fun':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_3_<<rand(5,10)>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'Once in the room, you push the door close and then push Anya down on the bed, you quickly crawl on top of her as you continue to kiss and caress her.'
-			'Anya panting with excitement, caress your body in return and just as fiercely returns the kiss.'
+			'Once in the room, you push the door closed and then push Anya down on the bed. You quickly crawl on top of her as you continue to kiss and caress her.'
+			'Anya, panting with excitement, caresses your body in return and just as fiercely returns the kiss.'
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -140,10 +140,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fun':
 				sister_party_dom = 1
 				'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_4_<<rand(1,3)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Kissing her breasts, stomach, down to her panties. You pull her panties down exposing her already soaking wet pussy, which you begin to lick.'
-				'Both of you moan in pleasure, you feel hot with desire, but can''t help think that despite all your sisters protest that she isn''t a lesbian, she is just kidding herself, she loves having lesbian sex, way to much.'
-				'Kissing, licking and sucking her clit. Your face is already wet with her desire. Her body twitches and she moans loudly from your actions.' 
-				'After her moaning starts getting louder you plunge your tongue inside of her eliciting a cry of pleasure from her as you tongue fuck her pussy, slipping your tongue in and out of her.'
+				'You kiss her breasts and stomach right down to her panties. You pull her panties down, exposing her already soaking wet pussy, which you begin to lick.'
+				'Both of you moan in pleasure. You feel hot with desire, but can''t help but think that, despite all your sister''s protests that she isn''t a lesbian, she is just kidding herself. She loves having lesbian sex way too much.'
+				'Kissing, licking and sucking her clit, your face is wet with her juices. Her body twitches and she moans loudly from your actions.' 
+				'After her moaning starts getting louder, you plunge your tongue inside of her, eliciting a cry of pleasure as you tongue fuck her pussy, slipping your tongue in and out of her.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -156,10 +156,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fun':
 				sister_party_dom = 2
 				'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_4_<<rand(1,3)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You roll over as Anya climbs on top of you, kissing her way down to your nipples, your body arches in pleasure as you feel your pussy getting wet with desire already.'
-				'Kissing and licking her way down your body she pulls off your panties, she gently kisses your clit, her tongue flicking your clit gentling eliciting deep moans of pleasure from you. You feel a full tremor run through your body as her tongue slips inside of you.'
-				'"mmm <<$pcs_nickname>>, you taste so sweet." Mumbles your sister, you can''t help but smile at the skill of her tongue on your pussy and think, yeah sis your no lesbian.'
-				'Anya''s tongue works wonders, filling you with mounting pleasure, her tongue stroking inside of you, penetrating you as deeply as her tongue will go. She starts to tongue fuck your pussy.' 
+				'You roll over as Anya climbs on top of you. Kissing her way down to your nipples, your body arches in pleasure as you feel your pussy getting wet already.'
+				'Kissing and licking her way down your body, she pulls your panties off and gently kisses your clit. Her tongue gently flicking your clit elicites deep moans of pleasure from you. You feel a full tremor run through your body as her tongue slips inside of you.'
+				'"Mmm <<$pcs_nickname>>, you taste so sweet." Anya murmurs. You can''t help but smile at the skill of her tongue and again silently question her claims that she isn''t into girls.'
+				'Anya''s tongue works wonders, filling you with mounting pleasure as it strokes inside of you, penetrating you as deeply as it can will go. She starts to tongue fuck your pussy.' 
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -175,16 +175,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hand':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_5_<<rand(1,3)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if sister_party_dom = 1:
-		'After lick your sisters pussy for some time you pull your head away from her and slips your hand to her pussy, rubbing her clit with your fingers.'
-		'She moans and bucks her hips a bit against you hand, you slip several of your fingers inside of her pussy, fucking her pussy with your fingers, as they rapidly plunge in and out of her soaking twat.'
-		'Her moans get louder and she starts to fuck your fingers back as she pleads with you not to stop.'
+		'After licking your sister''s pussy for some time, you pull your head away from her and start rubbing her clit with your fingers.'
+		'She moans and bucks her hips against your hand. You then slip several of your fingers inside of her pussy and start rapidly finger blasting her wet hole.'
+		'Her moans get louder and she starts to fuck your fingers, pleading with you not to stop.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
 				
 	elseif sister_party_dom = 2:
-		'After playing plenty oral attention from Anya, her hand slowly slides to your pussy and starts rubbing it.'
-		'A little rubbing then she slips a finger into wet twat, then a second and finally a third, finger fucking you in earnest.'
+		'After recieving plenty of oral attention from Anya, she withdraws and starts rubbing your wet pussy with her fingers.'
+		'She slips a finger into wet hole, then a second and finally a third. She then starts finger fucking you in earnest.'
 		'You start trying to hump her hand as you wither in pleasure, begging her not to stop.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
@@ -196,9 +196,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hand':
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 		if rand(1,2) = 1:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_6_<<rand(1,3)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Stopping a moment so you can both catch your breath, neither of you exactly eager for it to end but also desperate for release.'
-			'Anya smiles wickely to you, "Well little sister lets see who licks pussy better and bring the other to orgasm first."'
-			'With those words, you simultaneous seek out each other twat, licking, sucking, using your fingers and tongue to fuck the other. Both of you moaning and panting, close to both close to your sweet release.'
+			'Stopping a moment so you can both catch your breath, neither of you want it to end, but you are both also desperate for release.'
+			'Anya smiles wickely at you. "Well little sis, let''s see who eats pussy better and brings the other to orgasm first."'
+			'With those words, you simultaneously seek out each other''s crotch and start licking, sucking and using your fingers and tongue to fuck the other. You both start moaning and panting, close to your sweet releases.'
 			''
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
@@ -234,7 +234,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hand':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_8_<<rand(1,4)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'Opening up your legs you rub your pussies against one another in a slow motion, both moaning in pleasure as you look into each other eyes. Slowly picking up speed as you begin to grind your pussies against one another.'     
+		'Opening up your legs, you rub your wet pussies against one another in a slow motion, both moaning in pleasure as you look into each other''s eyes. You slowly pick up speed as you continue to grind your pussies against one another.'     
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'trib', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -247,9 +247,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anya</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_sister_9_<<rand(1,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your bodies convulse and spasm at the same time as a pure wave of pleasure overwhelms you both. In time both of you will claim the other came first, but for now you are lost in the Ecstasy of the moment.'
-	'"Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you weren''t my sister I would marry you." Mumbles your sister.'
-	'Your warm wet, limp bodies lay entangled in a moment of pure bliss, you fall asleep in each other arms.'    
+	'Your bodies convulse and spasm at the same time as a pure wave of pleasure overwhelms you both. In time, both of you will claim the other came first but for now, you are lost in the ecstasy of the moment.'
+	'"Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, if you weren''t my sister, I would marry you." your sister mumbles.'
+	'Your warm, wet and limp bodies lay entangled in a moment of pure bliss before you fall asleep in each other arms.'    
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5
@@ -271,8 +271,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_party':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_8.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'Once you burst into Rex''s house, the loud music immediately drowns out just about any other noise.'
-	'You began to help the guys to lay out the table, they carried the drinks, you snacks, but there was so much booze that it covered the table leaving no where to put the snacks.'
-	'Everyone started to thump in unison, dealing, laughing, telling funny stories.'
+	'You help the guys lay out the table. They carried the drinks and you the snacks, but there was so much booze that it covered the table, leaving nowhere to put the snacks.'
+	'Everyone starts to thump in unison, dealing, laughing and telling funny stories.'
 	'You cheerfully ask Anya. "You won''t leave me alone at the party will you?"'
 	'Anya smiles and hands you a bottle of vodka. "Of course not <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 	act 'Decline the drink':
@@ -281,9 +281,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_party':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_9.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You politely try and refuse the drink.'
-		'But seeing everyone watching gathered around began to chant: "Drink, drink, drink, drink, drink, drink."'
-		'Giving into peer pressure you take the bottle from Anya''s hand, and gulp down a huge amount of vodka.'
+		'You politely try and refuse the drink, but everyone watching has gathered round and started chanting. "Drink! Drink! Drink! Drink! Drink! Drink!"'
+		'Giving into peer pressure, you take the bottle from Anya''s hand and gulp down a huge swig of vodka.'
 		act 'Go dance': gt 'sister_party', 'dance'
 		act 'Drink': gt 'sister_party', 'drink'
 		act 'Sit': gt 'sister_party', 'sit'
@@ -295,9 +294,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_party':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_9.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You took the bottle from her hands'
-		'"Well, let''s party." You say and gulp down a huge amount of vodka.'
-		'Roma looks at Anya and smirks. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>> is drinking more than you." with these words, everyone began to drink heavily.'
+		'You took the bottle from her hand."Well, let''s party!" you say and gulp down a huge swig of vodka.'
+		'Roma looks at Anya and smirks. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>> is drinking more than you!" Everyone then begins to drink heavily.'
 		act 'Go dance': gt 'sister_party', 'dance'
 		act 'Drink': gt 'sister_party', 'drink'
 		act 'Sit': gt 'sister_party', 'sit'
@@ -309,12 +307,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboyQW_party':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_9.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Standing, you tried to get out from behind the table, to go dancing, but no one was dancing they were all just sitting and drinking.'
-		'Seeing, you got up and wanting to leave the table, Rex pulls you over: "Where are you going, it''s only the beginning, hold the bottle, and let''s drink, otherwise I would be offended."'
+		'Standing, you try to get out from behind the table to go dancing, but no one is actually dancing. They are all just sitting and drinking.'
+		'Seeing you get up and wanting to leave the table, Rex pulls you over: "Where are you going? It''s only the beginning! Hold the bottle and let''s drink, otherwise I will be offended."'
 		if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 2:
-			'You can''t deny the birthday boy and take the bottle from his hands, and gulp down a huge shot, feeling it burn down your throat. You hear others shouting in encouragement.'
+			'You can''t deny the birthday boy, so take the bottle from his hand and gulp down a huge shot, feeling it burn down your throat. You hear others shouting in encouragement.'
 		else
-			'You can''t deny the host of the party and take the bottle from his hands, and gulp down a huge shot, feeling it burn down your throat. You hear others shouting in encouragement.'
+			'You can''t deny the host of the party, so take the bottle from his hand and gulp down a huge shot, feeling it burn down your throat. You hear others shouting in encouragement.'
 		end
 		act 'Go dance': gt 'sister_party', 'dance'
 		act 'Drink': gt 'sister_party', 'drink'
@@ -329,10 +327,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_10.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Drunk you stumble to go dance.'
-	'You did not need to be persuade, you were on the same wavelength with everyone else and pulled off your top, staying just in your bra.'
-	'The boys carried on dancing, jumping and bumping into each other, even though you were almost half-naked, it seemed like no one was paying any attention to you.'
-	'Anya approached you:"<<$pcs_nickname>>, come on cheer up, go get into the center, have fun dancing and other very tempting things."'
+	'You drunkenly stumble around to go and dance.'
+	'You do not need to be persuaded. You are on the same wavelength with everyone else and pull your top off, dancing in your bra.'
+	'The boys carry on dancing, jumping and bumping into each other. Even though you are almost half-naked, it seems like no one is paying any attention to you.'
+	'Anya approaches you. "Cheer up <<$pcs_nickname>>! Go get in the center and have fun dancing, among other things..."'
 	act 'Drink':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 10
@@ -340,22 +338,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_13.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You wanted to drink again and again, the boys quickly gave you two bottles of whiskey and without hesitation you start to pour both of them into your mouth, the whiskey spills out of your mouth, unable to drink it all fast enough, it pours all down your body.'
-		'All your clothes were wet, and through your wet bra everyone could see your protruding nipples.'
-		'Two guys around you mad with energy, began to dance around you, persistently lapping at the booze on your body.'
+		'You want to drink again and again. The boys quickly give you two bottles of whiskey and without any hesitation, you start to pour both of them into your mouth. The whiskey spills out of your mouth as you are unable to drink it all fast enough. It pours all down your body.'
+		'Your clothes are soaked in alcohol and everyone can see your nipples poking through your wet bra.'
+		'Two guys around you, mad with energy, begin to dance around you, persistently lapping at the booze on your body.'
 		act 'Dance with them': gt 'sister_party', 'two_boy'
 	end
 	act 'Keep dancing':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_18.mp4"></video></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You''re drunk, but still able to control yourself, you wanted to continue the dance.'
+		'You''re drunk, but still able to control yourself. You want to continue dancing.'
 		'Your erotic movements have attracted the attention of many guys, and two of them approach.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10
 		gs 'stat'
 !! This should have a way to back out, but where to?
 		if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 2: act 'Congratulate Rex personally': gt 'sister_party', 'reks'
-		if sisterQW['AnyaRomaQW'] = 0: act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_find'
+		if sisterQW['AnyaRomaQW'] = 0: act 'Look for Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_find'
 		act 'Dance with them': gt 'sister_party', 'two_boy'
 	end
 	if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 2:
@@ -363,17 +361,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_find':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'anya_find':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You are looking for your sister, but I can''t find her. "Where the hell, did she go?" You looked everywhere, you need to find her.'
-	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_toilet'
-	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_kit'
-	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_kom'
+	'You are looking for your sister, but can''t find her. "Where the hell did she go?" You look everywhere in desperation.'
+	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_toilet'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_kit'
+	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_bed'
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'anya_kit':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	$locclass = 'kitr'
@@ -381,30 +379,30 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_24.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You burst into the kitchen, and look around for your sister. You find two drunk chicks having fun in the corner of the room, but neither of them know where your sister is. Suddenly, you hear heavy breathing behind you.'
+	'You walk into the kitchen and look around for your sister. You see two drunk girls having fun in the corner of the room, but neither of them know where your sister is. Suddenly, you hear heavy breathing behind you.'
 	act 'Turn around':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_25.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Turning you find Anya completely naked, drinking from a bottle with tears running down her face, looking at Roma. "Well it''s over between us, go to hell, dog."'
-		'Roma didn''t say anything in response. Anya turned and ran away. You glare at him few moments for making your sister cry and then you rush after her.'
+		'Turning around, you find Anya completely naked, drinking from a bottle with tears running down her face while looking at Roma. "Well it''s over between us. Go to hell dog!"'
+		'Roma doesn''t say anything in response and Anya turns and runs away in tears. You glare at him for a few few moments, then rush after her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5, 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Chase Anya':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_26.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'It takes you a bit to find Anya again, you find her sitting on her knees in front of two unfamiliar guys. "What are you doing, stop, think about this." You plead with your sister.'
-			'Drunkenly Anya keeps sucking the guys off, The boys turn to look at you. "Come join us, or get the fuck out."'
+			'It takes you a while to find Anya again, but you eventually find her on her knees in front of two unfamiliar guys. "What are you doing? Stop and think about this!" you plead to your sister.'
+			'Anya keeps drunkenly sucking the guys off and they turn to look at you. "Come and join us or get the fuck out."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Wait':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_27.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'You decide not to argue with strong guys afraid of what they might do and wait.'
-				'The guys push Anya down on her stomach, one kneels down in front of her and sticks his cock back in her mouth, while the other kneels down behind her and shoves his dick in her ass and begins to fuck her hard.'
-				'Turning to look at you again, one of the guys leers and pats the floor next to Anya. "Come over here and join us, if your so worried about her. Then we will take turns fucking you both in the ass instead of just her."'
+				'You decide not to argue with them, afraid of what they might do and wait.'
+				'The guys push Anya down on her stomach. One kneels down in front of her and sticks his cock back in her mouth, while the other kneels down behind her, shoves his dick in her ass and begins to fuck her hard.'
+				'Turning to look at you again, one of the guys leers and pats the floor next to Anya. "Come over here and join us if you''re so worried about her. Then we will take turns fucking you both in the ass."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 10
 				gs 'stat'
 				if hour < 22:
@@ -426,11 +424,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
 					$npc_lastpart['A33'] = '$boy1'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_28.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You frown seeing your sister used like this, but maybe it would be better for her if you let them use you too, so she wouldn''t be the solo object of their lust. "Ok, who wants to fuck me first?" You say as you walk over and take your clothes off.'
-					'The one that had been talking to you and fucking your sisters mouth pulls away from her and shoves you down on your hands and knees. Without waiting he shoves his cock in your ass and begins to furiously fuck you.'
-					'You hands tighten as you grimace in pain, trying to think about anything but the pain of having your ass tore up.'
-					'It goes on for some time, eventually the boys switch places, taking turns fucking you and Anya in the ass. Finally mercifully they cum inside of both of you. After they finished they laughed and left the room.'
-					'You gather up your clothes and get dressed and then help Anya get dressed as you help her home.'
+					'You frown upon seeing your sister being used like this, but maybe it would be better for her if you let them use you too so she wouldn''t be the sole object of their lust? "OK, who wants to fuck me first?" you say as you walk over and take your clothes off.'
+					'The one that had been talking to you and fucking your sister''s mouth pulls away from her and shoves you down on your hands and knees. Without waiting, he shoves his cock in your ass and begins to furiously fuck you.'
+					'Your hands tighten as you grimace in pain, trying to think about anything but the pain of having your ass torn up.'
+					'This goes on for some time and the boys eventually switch places, taking turns fucking you and Anya in the ass. Finally, and mercifully, they cum inside of both of you. After they are finished, they laugh and leave the room.'
+					'You gather your clothes up and get dressed. You then help Anya get dressed and help her home.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 					gs 'stat'
 					if hour < 22:
@@ -447,27 +445,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_toilet':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'anya_toilet':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_22.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'In the bathroom you find some guy pushing some poor girls head into the toilet. It wasn''t Anya and you didn''t want to get involved so you left.'
-	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_kit'
-	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_kom'
+	'You walk into the bathroom and find some guy pushing some poor girl''s head into the toilet. Thankfully, it isn''t Anya and, not wanting to get involved any further, you leave.'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_kit'
+	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_kom'
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kom':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'anya_bed':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	pcs_horny += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_23.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'In the bedroom you see two guys jerking off on the face of some poor unconscious girl. As one of them says to the other. "Let''s get the fuck out of here before she wakes up, I don''t want to deal with her ex-boyfriend, he''s one of the boxers.'
-	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_toilet'
-	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_kit'
+	'In the bedroom, you see two guys jerking off onto the face of some poor unconscious girl as one of them says to the other "Let''s get the fuck out of here before she wakes up. I don''t want to deal with her ex-boyfriend, he''s one of the boxers."'
+	'Anya isn''t here, so you keep searching.'
+	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_toilet'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_kit'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
@@ -477,19 +476,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_19.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Hey girly, damn you''ve been having fun. Oh yeah, you''re Anya''s sister, I know, she''s... that''s odd, I haven''t seen her. Although I have been drinking bubbly all day, here, drink up."'
-	'With this he starts pouring the sweet champagne down your throat, he''s so drunk he pours it much too fast and as much as you try to keep up, alot of it spills on the floor.
+	'"Hey girl! Damn, you''ve been having fun. Oh yeah, you''re Anya''s little sister, right? I know she''s... That''s odd, I haven''t seen her. Although I have been drinking bubbly all day. Here, drink up!"'
+	'He starts pouring the sweet champagne down your throat. He''s so drunk that he pours it too fast and, as much as you try to keep up, a lot of it spills on you and the floor.
 	 Then, without a word, Rex just staggers off.'
-	act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_find'
+	act 'Look for Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_find'
 	act 'Follow Rex to the toilet for birthday sex':
 		*clr & cla
 		toiletRexSex = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_20.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You went to the bathroom only to find Rex already there just finishing taking a piss with his dick still out in his hand. "Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you again? I''m here already..."'
-		'Stopping him in mid-sentence, you push him down to sit on the toilet, and pull his hand away from his cock. You start taking your clothes off, you watch his cock stiffen and grow while he stares at your naked nubile body. You climb on and straddle him. Lowering yourself on his cock, you feel it slide into your wet pussy and you being to ride him as you kiss him. While you whisper. "Happy birthday."'
-		'"Fucking hell." he mumbled while you rode him.'
+		'You go to the bathroom, only to find Rex already there, having just finished taking a piss with his dick still out in his hand. "Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, you again? I''m here already..."'
+		'Stopping him mid-sentence, you push him down onto the toilet and pull his hand away from his cock. You start undressing and watch his cock stiffen as he stares at your naked body. You climb on and straddle him. Lowering yourself onto his cock, you feel it slide into your wet pussy and you begin to ride him. "Happy birthday." you whisper in his ear.'
+		'"Fucking hell." he mumbles as you ride him.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Doggystyle':
@@ -500,12 +499,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_21.mp4"></video></center>'
 			*nl
-			'Rex growls as he grabs you and lifts you off him. He gets up, bends you over, and plunges his dick right back into your pussy and begins to furiously fuck you balls deep.'
-			'"Not so fast, not so deep." You beg him, but gradually, the pain melted from his frantic balls deep fucking and gave way to waves of deep pleasure.'
-			'With a final grunt he shoots his sperm deep inside your pussy. "Wow <<$pcs_nickname>>, You are hotter than your sister." With these words he leaves you alone in the bathroom.'
+			'Rex growls as he grabs you and lifts you off him. He gets up, bends you over and plunges his dick right back into your pussy and begins to furiously fuck you balls deep.'
+			'"Not so fast, not so deep." you beg him. However, the pain of his frantic balls deep fucking soon gives way to waves of deep pleasure as he keeps pounding you.'
+			'With a final grunt, he shoots his load deep inside your pussy. "Wow <<$pcs_nickname>>, you are hotter than your sister!" He then zips his pants and leaves you alone in the bathroom.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'rough'
 			gs 'stat'
-			act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_find'
+			act 'Look for Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_find'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -515,17 +514,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_14.mp4"></video></center>'
 	*nl
-	'They rubbed your body, touched boobs, and squeezed your ass. Under the influence of alcohol, you really like it, and just enjoy the moment'
-	'Seeing, that you do not resist they pull you into the next room.'
+	'They rub your body, grab your boobs and squeeze your ass. Under the influence of alcohol, you really like it and just enjoy the moment'
+	'Seeing that you aren''t resisting, they pull you into the next room.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Go':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_15.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'As you enter the room, they pushed you down on the bed and pull out their cocks for you to service.'
-		'In a drunken fog you try to grab one, then the other, but you are so drunk the room is spinning.'
-		'One of the guys started licking your pussy, and you can hear yourself moaning in passion.'
+		'As you enter the room, they push you down on the bed and pull out their cocks.'
+		'In a drunken fog, you try to grab one, then the other, but you are so drunk that the room is spinning.'
+		'One of the guys starts licking your pussy and you can hear yourself moaning in passion.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Doggystyle':
@@ -536,9 +535,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 			$boy1[2] = $npclastgenerated
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_16.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'The lift you up into doggystyle, their hands help hold you steady as one of them slips his dick in your pussy and the other shoves his cock in your mouth.'
-			'The guys start laughing, obviously having fun fucking you as they talk and joke to each other. "She''s still a bit young, I think she might be Anya''s little sister."'
-			'"Fuck I think you''re right, she''s a sweet little thing, but I don''t fuck schoolgirls." Looking at his friend getting a blowjob from you. "Hey I''ll trade you."'
+			'They lift you up onto your knees. Their hands help hold you steady as one of them slides his dick into your pussy and the other shoves his cock in your mouth.'
+			'The guys start laughing, obviously having fun fucking you as they talk and joke to each other. "She looks a bit young. I think she might be Anya''s little sister."'
+			'"Fuck, I think you''re right. She''s a sweet little thing, but I don''t fuck schoolgirls. I''ll trade you."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 			minut -= 5
@@ -560,15 +559,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_17.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'The guys switch places and continued to rhythmically fuck you. After they fucked you awhile, you came to their senses a bit: "Oh yeah, wake up bitch, come on suck and fuck us harder."'
-				'Still mostly out of it you obey and began to suck harder, until he starts to cum. Then he pulls out of your mouth and splatters your entire face in his cum. The second guy cums quickly too, he pulls out of your pussy and splatters your ass with his cum.'
-				'After some time cleaning yourself up, you decide to go find your sister.'
+				'The guys switch places and continue to rhythmically fuck you. After they have fucked you for a while, you somewhat come to your senses. "Oh yeah, wake up bitch! Suck and fuck us harder."'
+				'Still mostly out of it, you obey and begin to suck harder until he starts to cum. He pulls out of your mouth and splatters your entire face in his cum. The second guy cums quickly too, pulling out of your pussy and covering your ass with his cum.'
+				'After spending some time cleaning yourself up, you decide to go and find your sister.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				minut -= 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anna_find'
+				act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sister_party', 'anya_find'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -581,8 +580,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'drink':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_11.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Everyone undressed to the waist and went into the hall to dance. "Come dance, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you don''t want to be left alone." Anya called to you.'
-	'Not now Anya, I want to drink some more first." You tell her.'
+	'Everyone undresses to the waist and goes into the hall to dance. "Come dance <<$pcs_nickname>>, you don''t want to be left alone." Anya calls out to you.'
+	'Not now Anya. I want to drink some more first." you reply.'
 	act 'Go dance': gt 'sister_party', 'dance'
 end
 
@@ -592,7 +591,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sit':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_12.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'After drinking you start to feel a little dizzy, and you chose to sit for awhile. As your sitting Anya and her friends approached you. "<<$pcs_nickname>> why are you sitting here? Come dance with us." Not taking no for an answer Anya drags you out to dance with her and her friends.'
+	'You are starting to feel a little dizzy after drinking so much and so sit down for a while. Anya and her friends then approach you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? Why are you just sitting there? Come dance with us." Not taking no for an answer, Anya drags you out to dance with her and her friends.'
 	act 'Go dance': gt 'sister_party', 'dance'
 end
 

locations/sistersleep.qsrc

@@ -5,15 +5,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Anya</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sleep0<<rand(1,7)>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'Anya is sleeping face down on her bed, with her covers tossed aside, exposing her panty clad ass. You admit she has a really nice ass, you never see her workout, you wonder how she keeps so fit.'
+	'Anya is sleeping face down on her bed, with her covers tossed aside, exposing her panty clad ass. You admit she has a really nice ass, but you never see her work out, leaving you wondering how she keeps so fit.'
 	if sisterLesb >= 7 or sisterLesb = -1:
-		'You want to touch her again but you keep from doing it, you agreed to not wake her up like this anymore. You sigh and then move away.'
+		'You want to touch her again, but you stop yourself from doing it. You agreed to not wake her up like this anymore. You sigh and then move away.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', -2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 	else
 		if sisterQW['lesbDay'] = daystart:
-			'You want to touch her again but you change your mind at the last minute. Doing this more than once a day could make her really angry. Better try again tomorrow.'
+			'You want to touch her again, but you change your mind at the last minute. Doing this more than once a day could make her really angry. Better try again tomorrow.'
 			act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 		else
 			act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
@@ -41,12 +41,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_1':
 	if sisterLesb <= 2:
 		sisterLesb += 1
 		'You dare to touch your sleeping sister''s perfect ass.'
-		'Touching such a soft butt with your hand, you feel a shock run through your body, the feeling is weird, you can''t seem to place it.'
-		'Her ass feels as good as it looks. You want to touch it more but when her breathing changes you panic a bit and pull away.'
+		'Touching such a soft butt with your hand, you feel a shock run through your body. The feeling is weird and you can''t seem to place it.'
+		'Her ass feels as good as it looks. You want to touch it more, but when her breathing changes you panic a bit and pull away.'
 		act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 	elseif sisterLesb = 3:
 		'You dare to touch your sleeping sister''s perfect ass.'
-		'Touching such a soft butt with your hand, you feel a shock run through your body, the feeling is weird, you can''t seem to place it.'
+		'Touching such a soft butt with your hand, you feel a shock run through your body. The feeling is weird and you can''t seem to place it.'
 		'Her ass feels as good as it looks.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -56,8 +56,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_1':
 		end
 	else
 		'You can not stop thinking about the feelings you experienced last time you touched your sister''s bare ass.'
-		'Convinced that Anya is fast asleep, you once more dare yourself to touch her soft butt.'
-		'This time you decide to caress those buns a little longer, enjoying the moment.'
+		'Convinced that Anya is fast asleep, you once more dare yourself to caress her ass.'
+		'This time you decide to caress her a little longer, enjoying the moment.'
 		'Anya''s whole body is seriously sexy and it is filling you with desire.'
 		act 'Proceed': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_sleep_2'
 	end
@@ -68,11 +68,11 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_2':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/touch2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You continue to explore your sister''s hot body, your frisky fingers accidentally slipping between her legs. Her panties are wet, you gently pull her panties aside, exposing her wet pussy. Sensations of heat and moisture overwhelm you, her pussy is oozing with desire. Apparently she is having a sexual dream, or is it her response to your touch?'
-	'You are caught up in a fantasy, you start to lower your face to her pussy with your tongue out, wanting to taste her. When suddenly Anya stirs. "Fuck...Fuck..!" She''s waking up.'
-	'Sleepily Anya rolls over, looking up and sees you on her bed, as you hastily remove your hand and hide it behind your back.'
-	'"What...what''s going on here? <<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing?" She says as she sleepily sits up.'
-	'You sit in front of your sister on her bed, excited, caught off guard, and not knowing what to do.'
+	'You continue to explore your sister''s hot body, your frisky fingers accidentally slipping between her legs. Her panties are wet. You gently pull her panties aside, exposing her wet pussy. Sensations of heat and moisture overwhelm you, her pussy is oozing with desire. She seems to be having a sexual dream, or is it her response to your touch?'
+	'You are caught up in a fantasy. You start to lower your face to her pussy with your tongue out, wanting to taste her, when she suddenly stirs. "Fuck...Fuck!" She''s waking up!'
+	'Anya sleepily rolls over, looks up and sees you on her bed as you hastily remove your hand and hide it behind your back.'
+	'"What...what''s going on here? <<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing?" she asks as she sleepily sits up.'
+	'You sit in front of your sister on her bed, excited, caught off guard and not knowing what to do.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Act innocent':
@@ -80,13 +80,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_2':
 		minut += 1
 		npc_rel['A33'] -= 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_20.jpg"></center>'
-		'You decide to do nothing and quietly move away from your sleepy sister, maybe she will forget it all for the morning'
+		'You decide to do nothing and quietly move away from your sleepy sister. Maybe she will forget it all in the morning...'
 		'As you step away from her bed she calls to you.'
 		if sisterLesb = 3:
 			sisterLesb = 4
-			'"I do not want to know what you did to me while I was asleep, but don''t do it again."'
+			'"I don''t want to know what you did to me while I was asleep, but don''t do it again."'
 		else
-			'"I told you last time I don''t want to do stuff with you, so please stop and don''t do it again." Then she rolls over angrily.'
+			'"I told you last time I don''t want to do stuff with you, so please stop and don''t do it again." she says and rolls over angrily.'
 		end
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -107,25 +107,25 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_2_kiss':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/touch3.jpg"></center>'
-	'With nothing to lose, you feel yourself filled with courage, and while Anya is still half asleep, you bring your face to hers and sensually kiss her on the lips.'
+	'With nothing to lose, you feel yourself fill with courage and while Anya is still half asleep, you bring your face to hers and sensually kiss her on the lips.'
 	'Anya is too aroused and sleepy to think or resist, her soft body easily giving into your touches as you bring her pleasure.'
-	'Your fingers again slip under your sister''s panties, but now your affection is bold and confident.'
+	'Your fingers again slip under your sister''s panties, but your affection is now bold and confident.'
 	'She starts fully waking and breaks the kiss and looks at you in a confused way. "What are you doing?"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Finger your sister':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You smile to her. "Shh... you looked stressed earlier and I thought I would help you out." You tell her as you slide your hand down her panties and then slip a finger inside of her soaking wet pussy. She grabs your wrist obviously intent on stopping you until her breath catches and you can see how turned on she is.'
-		'She slowly lets go of your wrist and just lays back spreading her legs and enjoying you fingering her. You pull her panties off and toss them aside and then go back to fingering her pussy as she starts to moan in pleasure.'
+		'You smile to her. "Shh... you looked stressed earlier and I thought I would help you out." you tell her as you slide your hand down her panties and then slip a finger inside of her soaking wet pussy. She grabs your wrist, obviously intent on stopping you until her breath catches and you can see how turned on she is.'
+		'She slowly lets go of your wrist and just lays back, spreading her legs and enjoying you fingering her. You pull her panties off and toss them aside before going back to fingering her pussy as she starts to moan in pleasure.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep fingering her':
 			*clr & cla
 			sisterLesb = 5
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les4.jpg"></center>'
-			'You slip another finger in her, now fingering her deeply with two fingers while your thumb rubs her clit. Anya lays all the way back and starts to moan louder, you lean forward and start kissing and sucking on her nipple as you keep finger banging her soaking wet pussy. Suddenly huddles in gentle convulsions and roughly orgasms, she looks at you with a gratefully, sleepy, but pleased look on her face and smiles.'
-			'"Well, aren''t you just the sweetest little sister. Now go to sleep." She says as she rolls over and nuzzles into her pillow, pulling her panties back up, as she goes back to sleep. You are really excited and even a little upset not to receive your own release, but you are satisfied for now.'
+			'You slip another finger in her, now fingering her deeply with two fingers while your thumb rubs her clit. Anya lies all the way back and starts to moan louder, so you lean forward and start kissing and sucking on her nipple as you keep finger banging her soaking wet pussy. Suddenly, her pussy gently convulses and she orgasms. Anya looks at you with a sleepy but pleased look on her face and smiles.'
+			'"Well, aren''t you just the sweetest little sister? Now go to sleep." she says as she grabs her panties, slides them back on and rolls over, nuzzling into her pillow and falling asleep. You are a little upset not to receive your own release, but you are satisfied for now.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -136,13 +136,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_2_kiss':
 		act 'Tell her you want to have sex':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les1.jpg"></center>'
-			'"I want to make you feel good, I want to make you orgasm." You tell her and then kiss her, she stiffens at the kiss but then relents and lets you kiss her, she is obviously turned on and trying to fight her desires.'
-			'Then she breaks the kiss and pulls her face a little ways away from yours. "No, it''s wrong, we''re sisters." She only sounds half convinced to you.'
+			'"I want to make you feel good, I want to make you orgasm." you tell her and then kiss her. She stiffens at the kiss, but then relents and lets you kiss her. She is obviously turned on and trying to fight her desires.'
+			'She breaks the kiss and pulls away from you. "No, it''s wrong, we''re sisters." She only sounds half convinced to you.'
 			act 'Say you''re sorry':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_20.jpg"></center>'
-				'You pull away from her. "Sorry, I didn''t think it was a big deal just comforting each other." You say softly.'
-				'She sighs. "It''s fine, just don''t do it again, ok. It is wrong and I''m into guys anyways." With that she rolls over and goes back to sleep.'
+				'You pull away from her. "Sorry, I didn''t think it was a big deal just comforting each other." you say softly.'
+				'She sighs. "It''s fine. Just don''t do it again, OK? It''s wrong and I''m into guys anyways." She rolls over and goes back to sleep.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
@@ -165,35 +165,35 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_3':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les2.jpg"></center>'
 	if sisterLesb = 5:
-		'"Why is it wrong? We love each other and just making each other feel good, how can that be wrong?" You ask her as you pull her panties down, she only half heartedly resists you.'
-		'"You know why, where sisters and I like guys even if that wasn''t true." She says, still not really putting up much of a fight.'
-		'You push her legs apart and you can see her pussy is wet from here. "If it is so wrong, why is your pussy so wet?"'
-		'"I... I was having a sex dream is all." She explains.'
+		'"Why is it wrong? We love each other and how can making each other feel good be wrong?" you ask her as you pull her panties down. She only half heartedly resists you.'
+		'"You know why! We''re sisters and even if that wasn''t the case, I like guys." she says, still not really putting up much of a fight.'
+		'You push her legs apart and you can see her pussy is wet. "If it is so wrong, why are you so wet?"'
+		'"I... I was having a...dream is all." she explains.'
 	else
-		'"Did it feel wrong last time? I think you enjoyed it enough to cum, tell me you didn''t enjoy it?" You ask her as you pull her panties down, she only half heartedly resists you.'
-		'"It doesn''t matter, you can enjoy things that are wrong, it doesn''t make them any less wrong." She says, still not really putting up much of a fight.'
-		'You push her legs apart and you can see her pussy is wet from here. "If it is so wrong, why is your pussy so wet?"'
-		'"I... shut up." She says with a blush, knowing why she is wet and knowing you know why as well.'
+		'"Did it feel wrong last time? I think you enjoyed it enough to cum! Tell me you didn''t enjoy it." you ask her as you pull her panties down. She only half heartedly resists you.'
+		'"It doesn''t matter. You can enjoy things that are wrong, but it doesn''t make them any less wrong!" she says, still not really putting up much of a fight.'
+		'You push her legs apart and you can see her pussy is wet. "If it is so wrong, why are you so wet?"'
+		'"I... shut up." she says with a blush, knowing why she is wet and knowing you know why as well.'
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Finger her':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You reach down and slide two fingers into her soaking wet pussy, they easily slide in by how turned on she is. You start rubbing her clit with your other hand. She moans softly obviously enjoying the sensations.'
+		'You reach down and slide two fingers into her soaking wet pussy. They easily slide in by how turned on she is. You start rubbing her clit with your other hand. She moans softly, obviously enjoying the sensations.'
 		'She moans out. "We should stop."'
 		'You keep fingering her and rubbing her clit. "Do you really want me to stop?"'
-		'She moans louder. "Yes... no..."'
+		'She moans louder. "Yes... No..."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Go down on her':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les5.jpg"></center>'
-			'With that you move around and lay down between her legs and start licking and sucking on her clit with your mouth and tongue, as your fingers keep plunging in and out of her pussy.'
+			'You move around, lie down between her legs and start licking and sucking on her clit as your fingers keep plunging in and out of her pussy.'
 			if sisterLesb = 5:
-				'She finally lays back and starts caress her breasts no longer resisting or even pretending to not enjoy it anymore.'
+				'She finally lays back and starts caressing her breasts, no longer resisting or even pretending to not enjoy it anymore.'
 			else
-				'She lays back and starts caress her breasts moaning passionately having fully given into your love making.'
+				'She lays back and starts caressing her breasts and moaning passionately, having fully given in to your love making.'
 			end
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', -5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
@@ -202,9 +202,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_3':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les6.jpg"></center>'
 				if sisterLesb = 5:
-					'You get up and strip down, you lay down near her head. She watches you with lust in her eyes, but you can still see a bit of resistance. Not wanting to give her time to recover, you reach over and pull her head between your legs. She resist for a moment and then stops, instead she starts to lick your pussy in return.'
+					'You get up and strip down and lie down near her head. She watches you with lust in her eyes, but you can still see a bit of resistance. Not wanting to give her time to recover, you reach over and pull her head between your legs. She resists for a moment and then stops. She starts to lick your pussy in return.'
 				else
-					'You get up and strip down, you lay down near her head. This time without even needing to prod her she rolls over and places her face between your legs and starts licking at your pussy and clit.'
+					'You get up and strip down and lie down near her head. This time, without even needing to prod her, she rolls over and places her face between your legs and starts licking at your pussy and clit.'
 				end
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				$orgasm_txt = '"Aaaaaaaaaaaa!!!" You catch a wave of pure bliss as you violently cum.'
@@ -213,9 +213,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_3':
 				act '69':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les7.jpg"></center>'
-					'Obviously still wanting more, Anya gets up and moves. She climbs on top of you and places her pussy above your face. You start licking her again, as she positions her face over your pussy and starts licking it again as well. The two of your lay there lapping at each others pussies in complete bliss. Until finally Anya''s body starts to convulse and she has a orgasm right on your face, as she grinds her pussy against you, riding out her orgasm.'
+					'Obviously still wanting more, Anya gets up and moves. She climbs on top of you and places her pussy above your face. You start licking her again as she positions her face over your pussy and starts licking it again as well. The two of you lay there lapping at each others pussies in complete bliss until Anya''s body starts to convulse and she has an orgasm right on your face. She grinds her pussy against you, riding out her orgasm.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
-					$orgasm_txt = '"Aaaaaaaaaaaa!!!" You catch a wave of pure bliss as you violently cum.'
+					$orgasm_txt = '"Aaaaaaaaahhh!!!" You catch a wave of pure bliss as you violently cum.'
 					$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -223,20 +223,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_3':
 					act 'Aftermath':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
-						'Once her orgasm has fully passed she climbs off you and gets up on her knees and blushes deeply. "Look I had fun but lets forget this ever happened ok?"'
+						'Once her orgasm has fully passed, she climbs off you, gets up on her knees and blushes deeply. "Look, I had fun but, let''s forget this ever happened OK?"'
 						if sisterLesb = 5:
 							sisterLesb = 6
-							'You respond by getting up on your knees and kissing her, she returns the kiss. Once you finish kissing her you tell her. "Sure sis, nothing happened." You tell her in a slightly teasing tone.'
+							'You respond by getting up on your knees and kissing her and she returns the kiss. Once you finish kissing her, you tell her "Sure sis, nothing happened." in a slightly teasing tone.'
 							*nl
-							'She shakes her head. "I need to get some sleep. You need to go back to your bed and go to sleep too." With that she lays back down and rolls over facing away from you and tries to go back to sleep.'
+							'She shakes her head. "I need to get some sleep. You need to go back to your bed and go to sleep too." She lays back down and rolls over, facing away from you, and tries to go back to sleep.'
 							act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 						else
-							'She gives you a stern look. "I''m serious we can''t do this anymore, do you hear me? This is the last time."'
+							'She gives you a stern look. "I''m serious! We can''t do this anymore! This is the last time."'
 							act 'Accept her decision':
 								*clr & cla
 								sisterLesb = -1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_20.jpg"></center>'					
-								'You put your best little sister pout on your face, but thinking she has already made her mind up, you shrug, and accept that you won''t be having any more private times with her.'
+								'You put your best little sister pout on your face, but thinking she has already made her mind up, you shrug and accept that you won''t be having any more private times with her.'
 								'She rolls over and goes to sleep.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -250,16 +250,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_sleep_3':
 								npc_rel['A33'] += 5
 								$orgasm_or = 'no'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Anya, you don''t have to be a lesbian to enjoy a special release that only another woman can know how to give you.", you say as you begin lightly caressing her thigh.'
-								'"What if we agreed that we''ll help each other out only when we REALLLLYYYYY need it, but depend on our normal boyfriends most of the time, hmmm?". Her breathing starts to get faster as your fingertips glide to the center of her legs.'
+								'"Anya, you don''t have to be a lesbian to enjoy a special release that only another woman knows how to give you." you say as you begin lightly caressing her thigh.'
+								'"What if we agreed that we''ll help each other out only when we REALLLLYYYYY need it, but depend on our boyfriends most of the time, hmmm?". Her breathing gets faster as your fingertips glide to the center of her legs.'
 								*nl
-								'"Well... since you put it that way, I''m still not a lesbian, but helping each other out when we.... REALLLLYYYYY....need....mmmmmhhmmmm... help might be okay ....mmmmm..", she sighed, as she leans in and kisses you.'
+								'"Well... when you put it that way. I''m still not a lesbian, but helping each other out when we.... REALLLLYYYYY....need....mmmmmhhmmmm... help might be okay ....mmmmm.." she sighs as she leans in and kisses you.'
 								*nl
-								'Once you break the kiss she adds. "Ok but seriously no more waking me up like this, we can ... when we really need it just tell the other one ok?" You nod and agree to not wake up her like this anymore, besides her into it from the start would be better anyways. Then she rolls over and tries to go to sleep. "Night" She tells you. You tell her good night as well and then go leave her to sleep.'
+								'Once you break the kiss she adds. "OK, but seriously. No more waking me up like this. We can ... when we really need it, just tell the other one OK?" You nod and agree to not wake up her anymore, besides her being into it from the start would be better anyways. She rolls over and tries to go to sleep. "Night." she tells you. You tell her good night as well and then go leave her to sleep.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'incest'
 								gs 'arousal', 'forplay', 3, 'incest'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'incest'
-								$orgasm_txt = 'You both start feeling the heat, and lay down, kissing, touching, licking each other into orgasm.'
+								$orgasm_txt = 'You both start feeling the heat and lay down, kissing, touching and licking each other into orgasm.'
 								$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 3, 'incest'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -293,7 +293,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_lesbian':
 	*clr & cla
 	npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les1.jpg"></center>'
-	'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other as you slowly undress each other, Anya lays back on the bed as you do. You hands roam each others bodies as you remove clothes from each other and passionately keep kissing.'
+	'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other as you slowly undress each other, Anya lays back on the bed as you do. Your hands roam each other''s bodies as you undress each other and passionately keep kissing.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Spread her legs ':
@@ -305,14 +305,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_lesbian':
 		act 'Finger her':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You slip one finger in her already wet pussy and start sliding it in and out of her, causing her to moan in pleasure. After a couple of minutes of this you add a second finger as well.'
+			'You slip one finger in her already wet pussy and start thrusting it in and out of her, causing her to moan in pleasure. After a couple of minutes, you add a second finger as well.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Go down on her': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_lesbian_cuni'
 			act 'Keep fingering her':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les4.jpg"></center>'
-				'She lays all the way back as you keep fingering her. You use one hand to kneed her breasts, before lowering your mouth to suck on her mipple. She moans and withers in pleasure as your fingers slide in and out of her and your mouth sucks on her nipple.'
+				'She lays all the way back as you keep fingering her. You use one hand to kneed her breasts, before lowering your mouth to suck on her nipple. She moans and withers in pleasure as your fingers slide in and out of her and you keep sucking on her nipple.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', -5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -325,30 +325,30 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_lesbian_cuni':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les5.jpg"></center>'
-	'You slide down the bed, as you finger your sister and crawl between her legs. You lower your mouth to her clit and start to suck and lick on it, as your fingers thrust in and out of her ever increasing twat, her moans getting steadily louder and louder.'
+	'You slide down the bed as you finger your sister and crawl between her legs. You lower your tongue to her clit and start to suck and lick on it as your fingers thrust in and out of her increasingly wet hole, her moans getting steadily louder and louder.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', -5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Have her return the favor':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les6.jpg"></center>'
-		'You stop licking and fingering her, she gives you a slightly confused look at first and then seems to realize why. You lay on your back and spread you legs, she rolls over and crawls up between your legs and then starts to lick and nuzzle at your pussy. For someone that keeps telling you she isn''t into girls, she really seems to know how to eat pussy as it feels amazing.'
+		'You stop licking and fingering her. She gives you a slightly confused look at first and then seems to realize why. You lay on your back and spread your legs as she rolls over, crawls up between your legs and then starts to lick and nuzzle at your pussy. For someone that keeps telling you she isn''t into girls, she really knows how to eat pussy.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act '69':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les7.jpg"></center>'
-			'After several minutes of her eating you out, she apparently isn''t content with just that. While still licking your pussy she slowly spins her body around and climbs on top of you, until her pussy is directly above your face. You start licking her twat as the two of your sixty nine each other. Several minutes pass until she cries out and her whole body quivers as a orgasm shoots through her body, her juices flow out of her pussy, coating your face.'
+			'After several minutes of her eating you out, she apparently isn''t content with just that. While still licking your pussy, she slowly spins her body around and climbs on top of you until her pussy is directly above your face. You start licking her as the two of you enter a sixty-nine. Several minutes pass until she cries out and her whole body quivers as an orgasm shoots through her body. Her juices flow out of her pussy, coating your face.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', -5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'With her orgasming above you and your face getting covered in her juices you feel your own orgasm wrack your body, you cry out as the waves of pleasure rock your body, until it slowly fades.'
+			$orgasm_txt = 'With her orgasming above you and your face getting covered in her juices, you feel your own orgasm wrack your body. You cry out as the waves of pleasure rock your body, until it slowly fades.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Aftermath':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
-				'Once the orgasm passes she rolls off you and the two of you lay side by side panting and basking in the afterglow of sex, finally she gets up onto her knees, you do the same. You share a brief kiss and butt grab with her before she breaks away from you pushing you slightly away. "That was fun, but we shouldn''t do that... at least not to often." She says with a slight blush.'
-				'You grin at her. "What ever you say sis." Then she starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
+				'Once the orgasm passes, she rolls off you and the two of you lay side by side, panting and basking in the afterglow of sex. Finally, she gets up onto her knees and you do the same. You share a brief kiss and squeeze her ass before she breaks away from you, pushing you slightly away. "That was fun, but we shouldn''t do that... at least not too often." she says with a slight blush.'
+				'You grin at her. "Whatever you say sis." She starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -363,11 +363,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon':
 	npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap1.jpg"></center>'
 	if sisterQW['strapon'] = 0:
-		'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other, but when you start to try and remove her clothes she stops you. "What? What''s wrong?" You ask her.'
-		'She smiles to you and you are not sure you like the way she is smiling. "Nothing I just wanted to do something different this time, something I have been wanting to actually try for a long time." With that she reaches over to her night stand drawer and opens it up. Spends a few moments fishing around for something as you watch her curiously. When she turns back she has a strapon harness with attached dildo in her hand.'
+		'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other, but when you start to try and remove her clothes she stops you. "What? What''s wrong?" you ask her.'
+		'She smiles at you and you are not sure you like the way she is smiling. "Nothing. I just wanted to do something different this time, something I have been wanting to actually try for a long time..." She reaches over to her nightstand drawer and opens it up. She spends a few moments fishing around for something as you watch her curiously. When she turns back, she has a strapon harness with attached dildo in her hand.'
 	else
-		'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other, but when you start to try and remove her clothes she stops you. "What? What''s wrong?" You ask her.'
-		'She smiles to you with a naughty glint in her eye. "Nothing I just wanted to fuck you again." With that she reaches over to her night stand drawer and opens it up. You smile a bit, knowing she is grabbing her strapon again.'
+		'The two of you start kissing and fondling each other, but when you start to try and remove her clothes she stops you. "What? What''s wrong?" you ask her.'
+		'She smiles to you with a naughty glint in her eye. "Nothing. I just wanted to fuck you again." She reaches over to her nightstand drawer and opens it up. You smile, knowing she is grabbing her strapon.'
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -376,15 +376,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon':
 		npc_rel['A33'] -= 3
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 		'You shake your head. "No way, I don''t want to get fucked, I just want to make love to you."'
-		'She frowns and drops the strapon back in the draw. "Well I don''t want to do that, I have told you before I am not into girls."'
-		'You put your hand on her hip. "Come on you know you love it."'
-		'She shoves your hand away. "No! I don''t want to do that and if you don''t want to do this, then we should just let it be." With that she lays down on her bed and gets out a book to read. Knowing you shouldn''t push it while she is in her mood right now, you back away.'
+		'She frowns and drops the strapon back in the drawer. "Well I don''t want to do that. I have told you before I am not into girls."'
+		'You put your hand on her hip. "Come on, you know you love it."'
+		'She shoves your hand away. "No! I don''t want to do that and if you don''t want to do this, then we should just let it be." She lays down on her bed and pulls a book out. Knowing you shouldn''t push it while she is in her mood right now, you back away.'
 		act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 	end
 	act 'Help her put it on':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap2.jpg"></center>'
-		'When you don''t disagree she takes it as consent and starts slipping the harness on, you help her getting it into place and pulling all the straps nice and tight so it doesn''t move around. While she is on her knees with the dildo pointing at you, you take it in your hand and stroke it a bit, just testing if the harness is securely in place of course. She gives you a look of what are you waiting for. "Well start sucking my dick."'
+		'When you don''t disagree, she takes it as consent and starts slipping the harness on. You help her get it into place and pull all the straps nice and tight. While she is on her knees with the dildo pointing at you, you take it in your hand and stroke it a bit, testing if the harness is securely in place. She gives you a look. "Well? Start sucking my dick."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck her dick':
@@ -392,18 +392,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap3.jpg"></center>'
 			if sisterQW['strapon'] = 0:
 				sisterQW['strapon'] = 1
-				'Anya monitors your actions and talks you through how to suck a cock. You lick the shaft from the base outwards, at the end, as you suck the head. It isn''t too big, a bit longer than a coke can and kinda thick maybe a bit above average size dick. Then Anya grabs you by the hair and abruptly shoves the dildo down your throat, you start suffocating and wave your arms in panic. Then she pulls it out of your mouth, leaving your mouth and eyes watering.'
+				'Anya monitors your actions and talks you through how to suck a cock. You lick the shaft from the base upwards and then suck the head. It isn''t too big, maybe a bit above average size. Anya then grabs you by the hair and abruptly shoves the dildo down your throat, causing you to choke and thrash your arms in panic. She quickly pulls it out of you, ropes of your drool sticking to the shaft from your mouth as your eyes water.'
 				*nl
-				'"Bitch, What are you doing? I''m suffocating here, you could have killed me." You tell her angrily.'
-				'"Don''t be so dramatic little sister, I would never hurt you. You see, guys like this, your big sister is helping you train your mouth and throat, so you are use to giving boys blowjobs."'
-				'Without another word she shoves the strap-on dildo back in your mouth and teaches you the finer arts of how to suck a cock, not to mention what to expect from the boys.'
+				'You cough and splutter as you speak. "What...are you...doing? You could...have killed me!"'
+				'"Don''t be so dramatic <<$pcs_nickname>>! I would never hurt you. You see, guys like this. It''s called ''deepthroating.'' I''m just helping you train your mouth and throat so you know how to give boys proper blowjobs."'
+				'Without another word, she shoves the dildo back in your mouth and teaches you the finer arts of how to suck a cock, not to mention what to expect from the boys.'
 				*nl
 			else
-				'Anya monitors your actions and talks you through how to suck a cock. You lick the shaft from the base outwards, at the end, as you suck the head. It isn''t too big, a bit longer than a coke can and kinda thick maybe a bit above average size dick. Then Anya grabs you by the hair and abruptly shoves the dildo down your throat, this time you expected it and are a bit more ready for it. Still you feel your mouth watering like crazy and your eyes watering as she fucks your throat, as she teaches you the finer arts of how to suck a cock, not to mention what to expect from the boys.'
+				'Anya monitors your actions and talks you through how to suck a cock. You lick the shaft from the base upwards and then suck the head. Anya then grabs you by the hair and abruptly shoves the dildo down your throat. This time, you expect it and are a bit more ready for it, but you still you feel your mouth filling with drool and your eyes watering as she fucks your throat. She continues to teach you how to give blowjobs.'
 				*nl
 			end
 			if pcs_vag = 0:
-				'After she fucks your mouth with the dildo for a bit she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you''re still a virgin. Mom will be happy, but luckily you have another hole I can use." She says as she pushes you down on the bed to lay on your side.'
+				'After she fucks your mouth for a bit, she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked, she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you''re still a virgin. Mom will be happy, but luckily you have another hole I can use." she says as she pushes you down on the bed to lay on your side. She slides in behind you and starts rubbing the head of the dildo against your anus.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Get butt fucked': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_strapon_anal'
@@ -412,18 +412,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon':
 					npc_rel['A33'] -= 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
 					'You shake your head. "No way, I don''t want to get fucked in the butt."'
-					'She frowns and backs away, pulling the strapon out of you. "Ok suit yourself but I''m not taking your virginity and I am tired of fucking your mouth." She starts taking the harness off, a bit disappointed you help her remove it. Once done she cleans it up and drops it back in her nightstand.'
-					'With that all taken care of you share a brief kiss and butt grab with her before she breaks away from you pushing you slightly away. "Ok time for bed." Then she starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
+					'She frowns and backs away from you. "OK suit yourself, but I''m not taking your virginity and I am tired of fucking your mouth." She starts taking the harness off and, feeling a bit disappointed, you help her remove it. Once done, she cleans it up and drops it back in her nightstand.'
+					'With that all taken care of you share a brief kiss and squeeze her ass before she breaks away from you. "OK, time for bed." She starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
 					act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 				end
 			elseif sisterQW['knownotvirgin'] = 0:
 				sisterQW['knownotvirgin'] = 1
-				'After she fucks your mouth with the dildo for a bit she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you are no longer a virgin, mom won''t be happy." She says as she lays down on her back with the dildo pointing straight up. "Mount up and show me what you have learned from the boys."'
+				'After she fucks your mouth with the dildo, she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked, she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you are no longer a virgin. Mom won''t be happy." she says as she liess down on her back with the dildo pointing straight up. "Mount up and show me what you have learned, cowgirl."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Get fucked': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_strapon_vaginal'
 			else
-				'After she fucks your mouth with the dildo for a bit she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you are already wet, good, that will make this more fun." She says as she ;lays down on her back with the dildo pointing straight up. "Mount up and show me what you have learned from the boys."'
+				'After she fucks your mouth with the dildo, she stops and starts stripping you. Once you are fully naked, she slips her hands between your legs and slides a finger inside of your vagina. "Oh I see you are already wet. Good, that will make this more fun." she says as she lies down on her back with the dildo pointing straight up. "Mount up and show me what you have learned, cowgirl."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Get fucked': gt 'sistersleep', 'sister_strapon_vaginal'
@@ -436,16 +436,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon_vaginal':
 	*clr & cla
 	pcs_vag += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You stand over the top of her, with her body between your legs. You slowly lower yourself down until you feel the tip of the dildo pressing against your slit. You reach between your legs and line up the dildo and lower yourself until you feel it party you vaginal lips and start to slide inside of you, causing you to moan softly. You lower yourself down on your knees and start to slowly fuck the dildo, as you do your sister takes off her top. You take the whole thing into you, it''s sightly longer and thicker than average size fills you up completely with out hurting at all.'
+	'You straddle your sister and slowly lower yourself down until you feel the tip of the dildo pressing against your slit. You reach between your legs, line up the dildo and lower yourself until you feel it part your lips and start to slide inside of you, causing you to moan softly. You lower yourself down further and start to slowly fuck the dildo, your sister taking off her top as you do. You take the whole thing inside you. It''s sightly longer and thicker than average and fills you up completely.'
 	*nl
-	'As it feels better and better you start riding the dildo faster and faster. Just as it really starts to feel good your sister slaps your ass. "Get up and face the wall, I want to do the fucking now."'
+	'As it feels better and better, you start riding the dildo faster and faster. Just as it really starts to feel good, Anya slaps your ass. "Get up and face the wall. I want to be in control now."'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Stand up':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You stand up and face the wall. Anya gets up and stands behind you, she grabs the dildo and lines it up, rubbing the tip against your wet slit a couple of times before sliding it in. She quickly slides it balls deep into your hole, completely filling you up. She quickly starts fucking you hard and fast, her hips bouncing against your butt, causing you to place your hands on the wall to keep your balance as your pounds your little pussy. After a few mins she starts to pant obviously starting to wear herself out. She slaps your ass cheek again. "Lay down, so I can fuck that little ass of yours."'
-		$orgasm_txt = 'You spasm and have an intense orgasm with the dildo buried deep in your pussy, you almost can''t keep yourself standing as your legs threaten to give out.'
+		'You stand up on the bed and face the wall. Anya gets up and stands behind you. She grabs the dildo and lines it up, rubbing the tip against your wet slit a couple of times before sliding it in. She quickly thrusts it balls deep into your hole, completely filling you up. She quickly starts fucking you hard and fast, her hips bouncing against your ass, causing you to place your hands on the wall to keep your balance as she pounds your little pussy. After a few minutes, she starts to pant, obviously starting to wear herself out. She slaps your ass again. "Lay down, so I can fuck that little ass of yours."'
+		$orgasm_txt = 'You spasm and have an intense orgasm with the dildo buried deep in your pussy. You almost can''t keep yourself upright as your legs threaten to give out.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -455,9 +455,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon_vaginal':
 			npc_rel['A33'] -= 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
 			'You shake your head. "No way, I don''t want to get fucked in the butt."'
-			'She frowns and backs away, pulling the strapon out of you. "Ok suit yourself but I am to tired to do anymore." She starts taking the harness off, a bit disappointed you help her remove it. Once done she cleans it up and drops it back in her nightstand.'
-			'With that all taken care of you share a brief kiss and butt grab with her before she breaks away from you pushing you slightly away. "That was fun, but we shouldn''t do that... at least not to often." She says with a slight blush.'
-			'You grin at her. "What ever you say sis." Then she starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
+			'She frowns and backs away, pulling the strapon out of you. "OK suit yourself, but I am to tired to do anymore." She starts taking the harness off and, feeling a bit disappointed, you help her remove it. Once done, she cleans it up and drops it back in her nightstand.'
+			'With that all taken care of you share a brief kiss and squeeze her ass before she breaks away from you. "That was fun, but we shouldn''t do that... at least not too often." she says with a slight blush.'
+			'You grin at her. "Whatever you say sis." She starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
 			act 'Move away': gt 'bedrPar'
 		end
 	end
@@ -466,13 +466,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon_anal':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap6.jpg"></center>'
-	'You do as she says and lay down on your side, Anya goes to her dresser and pulls out a small bottle of lube and then starts lubing the strapon up.'
-	'She lays down behind you and uses her fingers and hand to line the dildo up with your ass. Once she has it in place she pushes her hips forward, you can feel the pressure building up before the head of the dildo suddenly pops into your ass.'
+	'You do as she says and lie down on your side, Anya goes to her dresser, pulls out a small bottle of lube and generously applies it to the strap-on. She then rubs some on your anus.'
+	'She lays down behind you and lines the dildo up with your ass. Once she has it in place, she pushes forwards. You can feel the pressure building up before the head of the dildo suddenly pops into your ass.'
 	*nl
 	if pcs_ass = 0:
-		'Your first impression is unbearable pain, you want to get away, to jump, but her hands on your hips hold you in place and pull you further back, as she thrust her hips forward, impaling your ass on the dildo. You gradually stop resisting as it starts to feel nice, really nice. Once you stop resisting she lets go of your hip and lifts your leg up, with her hand.'
+		'Your first impression is unbearable pain. You want to get away, but her hands on your hips hold you in place and pull you further back as she thrusts her hips forward and the dildo goes deep into your ass. You gradually stop resisting as it starts to feel great, really great. Once you stop resisting, she lets go of your hip and lifts your leg up with her hand.'
 	else
-		'It hurts a little at first but then quickly it gives way to pleasure, as you start to moan she starts stroking the dildo deeper into your ass. Reading your actions well, she finds the right rhythm and depth that feels the best and starts butt fucking you to ecstasy.'
+		'It hurts a little at first, but the pain quickly gives way to pleasure. As you start to moan, she starts thrusting the dildo deeper into your ass. Reading your actions well, she finds the right rhythm and depth and starts butt fucking you to ecstasy.'
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -481,7 +481,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon_anal':
 		pcs_ass += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/strap7.jpg"></center>'
 		'With Anya lifting your leg as she thrusts the dildo deep into your ass, you start roughly rubbing your clit.'
-		'"aaa... yeah... mmmhmmm.... fuck me.... good.... yeah.... fuck me...." you cry out, as it starts to feel really good.'
+		'"Aaahh... Yeah... Mmmhmmm.... Fuck me... Yeah, fuck me good!" you cry out as it starts to feel really good.'
 		$orgasm_txt = 'You spasm and have an intense orgasm with the dildo in your ass and as you recover, Anya moves from under you to stand in front of you, the strap-on held to your lips.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'incest', 'lesbian'
@@ -489,8 +489,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_strapon_anal':
 		act 'Aftermath':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/les8.jpg"></center>'
-			'Finally she stops fucking your butt and rolls onto her back, causing the dildo to pop out of your ass. She is sweating slightly and panting obviously spent from fucking you. The two of you lay side by side panting and basking in the afterglow of sex, finally she gets up onto her knees, you do the same. She takes off the harness and you help her, once it is off, you share a brief kiss and butt grab with her before she breaks away from you pushing you slightly away. "Well that was a lot of fun, little sis. I think we are going to have to do that again sometime." She says with a slight blush.'
-			'You grin at her. "I enjoyed it as well." Then she starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
+			'Finally, she stops fucking you and rolls onto her back, causing the dildo to pop out of your ass. She is sweating slightly and panting, obviously spent from fucking you. The two of you lay side by side panting and basking in the afterglow of sex. She eventually gets up onto her knees and you do the same. You help her take off the harness. Once it is off, you share a brief kiss and squeeze her ass before she breaks away from you. "Well that was a lot of fun, little sis. I think we are going to have to do that again sometime." she says with a slight blush.'
+			'You grin at her. "I enjoyed it as well." She starts getting cleaned up and getting ready to go to sleep as you move away.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'

locations/start.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ $counter = 'counter'
 $usercom = 'inputProcessing'
 $fname = 'Tahoma'
 fsize = 12
-$version = '0.8 The family update (part 1).'
+$version = '0.8.1 The key people left and we had to wing it one.'
 
 opPRE = 1
 

locations/swamphouse.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # swamphouse
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 	*clr & cla
 	$location_type = 'indoors'
 	$loc = 'swamphouse'

locations/version.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,42 @@
 # version
 
 act 'Return': gt 'start'
+'0.8.1'
+'- Reminder for work at salon in stat window from hornguy6'
+'- Rework of the runner race structure from THX'
+'- Shower dildos! And new virginity lose to them with reactions thanks to hornguy6'
+'- add new events according to the THX''s storyline from rachels'
+'- new masseuse content and reorganization of the salon at the St. Petersburg mall by hornguy6'
+'- Some new surprises if you sleep on the park bench and small changes to existing event from Darcanlos'
+'- In game variable debugger from Philo'
+'- Phone can now receive SMS messages not that there are any yet thanks to Philo'
+'- Code optimizations by Philo'
+'- Computer available in cottage and more mod friendly thanks to netuttki'
+'- Buttons for new shops from Gwen'
+'- Added new shop for slutty swimwear removing it from the sports store by KS'
+'- Added new shop for lingerie, moved the boutique underwear to it by KS'
+'- Music Life by netuttki added to main game and various fixes/updates by them.'
+'- A bit more to the Niko story line plus fixes by Violet Kitten'
+'- Rework of gloryhole in women''s bathroom of the community centre by Iron Jack'
+'- Bella and Albina swapped cliques to more accurate ones thanks to Violet Kitten'
+'- File renaming to use English and more logical names to some hubs and common locations by netuttki and KS'
+'- Journal update for nerd game night and social changes from philo'
+'- Changes to women''s restroom in comunity centre and inner thought default style set by Iron Jack'
+'- Rework of the Kendra scenes by nutluck with code from Violet Kitten'
+'- Reworked Africans in uni dorm scenes by nutluck with code from Violet Kitten'
+'- Anushka photo modelling scenes from nutluck'
+'- Clique warnings added for when you are getting close to dropping out of them by nutluck'
+'- pav_slut scale adjusted so all nicknames and related checks require double the points'
+'- Clique system range extended and more subtly added by nutluck and Violet Kitten'
+'- Appearance code rebalanced by KS, Violet Kitten, nutluck and philo'
+'- Starting appearances and weights for school girl starts redone by nutluck, Violet Kitten and philo'
+'- Some new clothing items from hornguy6'
+'- New clothing items from Snegurochka with data by Gwen and formatted by KS'
+'- New clothing items from Gwen formatted by KS'
+'- Many changes and additions to photo studio including new fitness shoots from hornguy6'
+'- Text edits from Vengeance11, hornguy6, philo and Iron Jack'
+'- Bug fixes by hornguy6, Kevin Smarts, hornguy6, nutluck, sicaa, Vengeance11, pfffbft, Violet Kitten and rachels'
+
 
 '0.8'
 '- Niko story rewrites and added material from Violet Kitten'