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[changed] a few text edits for consistency and better phrasing

hornguy6 3 years ago
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locations/gschool_lessons4.qsrc

@@ -1588,20 +1588,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 	$menu_arg = 'post_shower'
 	menu_off = 0
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/nudepic2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk from the showers back into the locker room and over to your locker, where you grab your towel and diligently dry off your body. With your hair still wet, you''re ready to put the blow dryer to use. Once you finish blow drying your hair, you look around and see several other girls have left the showers and are getting dried off or dressed as well.'
+	'You walk back to your locker, throwing your towel in a bin along the way, and start rifling through it, gathering your things and grabbing your clothes.'
 	act 'Get Dressed': gt 'gschool_lessons4', 'dress'
 	act 'Check out the other girls':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/peekdress.jpg"></center>'
-		'You let your eyes wander around the room, looking at the other girls in your class. Some are almost finished getting dressed, a few are in their underwear and a few are still naked. As you look, you can''t help but check out their nude bodies.'
+		'You let your eyes wander around the room, checking out the other girls in your class. Some are almost finished getting dressed, a few are in their underwear and a few are still naked. It''s a nice view, one thing you''ll always appreciate about gym class.'
 		gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get dressed':gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'gschool_lessons4', 'dress'
 		act 'Check out Anushka':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/nushpeek.jpg"></center>'
-			'You steal a glance at Anushka while she dries herself off. She has a petite build, a variety of tattoos large and small covering her body. Not too skinny, but just about right. Her breasts look to be a solid B or maybe a small C and very perky. Her pussy is completely smooth, you imagine she must have just shaved today or shaves every day for it to look like that.'
+			'You peek at Anushka, walking in from the shower, still drying herself off. She has a petite build, a variety of tattoos large and small covering her body. Not too skinny, but just about right. Her breasts look to be a solid B or maybe a small C and very perky. Her pussy is completely smooth, you imagine she must have just shaved today or shaves every day for it to look like that.'
 			*nl
 			'Suddenly Anushka turns towards you. She follows your gaze and realizes you''re looking at her body, your eyes flick up to make contact with hers. You freeze, realizing you''re caught. Your brain goes into a panic, trying to think of some kind of excuse but she just winks at you and goes back to pretending like nothing happened.'
 			gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3
@@ -1611,7 +1611,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 		act 'Check out Aylona':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/aylpeek.jpg"></center>'
-			'You steal a glance at Aylona while she finishes drying herself off. Her body is incredibly thin, all skin, bones, and tattoos, almost anorexic. But as a result she has a flat tummy and small but perky breasts. Between her legs is a neatly trimmed triangle of carpet that matches the drapes. '
+			'You take a peek at Aylona while she finishes drying herself off. Her body is incredibly thin, all skin, bones, and tattoos, almost anorexic. But as a result she has a flat tummy and small but perky breasts. Between her legs is a neatly trimmed triangle of carpet that matches the drapes. '
 			*nl
 			'After a few moments of observation, you let your gaze slip away and turn back to your own clothes.'
 			gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3
@@ -1623,11 +1623,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 			checkoutalbina = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/albpeek.jpg"></center>'
 			if tits < 2:
-				'You steal a glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re probably not even that small and they have a great supple shape to them. They''re certainly bigger than yours at any rate. But you''ve got one of the smallest busts in class. Maybe you''re not the best point of reference for what''s big and what''s not...'
+				'You glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re probably not even that small and they have a great supple shape to them. They''re certainly bigger than yours at any rate. But you''ve got one of the smallest busts in class. Maybe you''re not the best point of reference for what''s big and what''s not...'
 			elseif tits = 2:
-				'You steal a glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re not even that small, probably about the same size as your own. And they''ve got great shape too, just the right combination of firmness and softness. But compared to your classmates (who are a bit bigger on average) she''s still got one of the smaller busts in the class, so it''s only natural she''d stack up poorly in direct comparison.'
+				'You glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re not even that small, probably about the same size as your own. And they''ve got great shape too, just the right combination of firmness and softness. But compared to your classmates (who are a bit bigger on average) she''s still got one of the smaller busts in the class, so it''s only natural she''d stack up poorly in direct comparison.'
 			else
-				'You steal a glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re probably not even that small, still a solid B-cup. And they''re they''ve got great shape too, just the right combination of firmness and softness. But compared to you and your classmates who are a bit bigger on average, she''s still got one of the smaller busts in your grade, so it''s to be expected she''d stack up poorly in direct comparison.'
+				'You glance at Albina while she pulls her clothes out of her locker. Thin with well toned muscles, a very shapely set of thighs, and ass that''s the envy of every girl in school, she has a great body and you can see why so many guys consider her the prettiest girl in your class. Even her pussy is waxed clean, though obviously not every guy gets to know that. The only thing that seems to put it up for contest is her relatively small chest. Upon inspection, you realize they''re probably not even that small, still a solid B-cup. And they''re they''ve got great shape too, just the right combination of firmness and softness. But compared to you and your classmates who are a bit bigger on average, she''s still got one of the smaller busts in your grade, so it''s to be expected she''d stack up poorly in direct comparison.'
 			end
 			*nl
 			'After a few moments of observation, you let your gaze slip away and turn back to your own clothes.'
@@ -1638,7 +1638,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 		act 'Check out Christina':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/chrispeek.jpg"></center>'
-			'You glance at Christina walking around the room after tossing her towel in a bin. Her build is very athletic with a toned body. Every single part of her has great muscle definition, especially her legs which look to die for. In combination with her very busty chest and a neat landing strip between her legs, her figure is rather pleasing, if not conventionally attractive. You could easily imagine her on the cover of a sports magazine promoting some kind of new home workout.'
+			'You glance at Christina walking across the room after tossing her towel in a bin. Her build is very athletic with a toned body. Every single part of her has great muscle definition, especially her legs which look to die for. In combination with her very busty chest and a neat landing strip between her legs, her figure is rather pleasing, if not conventionally attractive. You could easily imagine her on the cover of a sports magazine promoting some kind of new home workout.'
 			*nl
 			if christinaQW['dompath'] >= 7:
 				'You''ve been keeping an eye on her since your little tussle, making sure she doesn''t cause any trouble. After a few moments, she feels your gaze on her and turns to face you. You give her a look and she reluctantly turns back to her locker, not saying anything.'
@@ -1652,7 +1652,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 		act 'Check out Lariska':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/larpeek.jpg"></center>'
-			'You glance at Lariska as she finishes drying herself off and wraps her towel around her head. Tall and lanky with narrow hips, plus small perky breasts that easily fit into a sports bra, she''s definitely got a classic runner''s build. Which is a little weird since you''re pretty sure she plays volleyball. You also can''t help but notice that she keeps her bush trimmed and tidy.'
+			'You glance at Lariska as she finishes drying herself off, wrapping her hair in a towel before bundling it around her head. Tall and lanky with narrow hips, plus small perky breasts that easily fit into a sports bra, she''s definitely got a classic runner''s build. Which is a little weird since you''re pretty sure she plays volleyball. You also can''t help but notice that she keeps her bush trimmed and tidy.'
 			*nl
 			'Letting your gaze wander past her, you turn back to your own locker before anybody catches you staring and reach for your clothes.'
 			gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3
@@ -1662,7 +1662,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 		act 'Check out Lina':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/linpeek.jpg"></center>'
-			'You glance at Lina as she starts to pull her thigh high''s on. Slightly more athletic looking than most girls, she has average sized breasts and a neatly trimmed triangle between her legs. She doesn''t stand out in any particular way, but you''d never call her ugly. In fact most boys in school think she''s pretty and you''re inclined to agree. Not sure you have any other adjectives to use for her though. Not for her body anyways...'
+			'You take a peek at Lina as she starts to pull her thigh high''s on. Slightly more athletic looking than most girls, she has average sized breasts and a neatly trimmed triangle between her legs. She doesn''t stand out in any particular way, but you''d never call her ugly. In fact most boys in school think she''s pretty and you''re inclined to agree. Not sure you have any other adjectives to use for her though. Not for her body anyways...'
 			*nl
 			'After a few moments, you look away, not wanting to get caught staring and sucked into an awkward conversation.'
 			gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3