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Merge remote-tracking branch 'Spackled_Lanturn/minor-fixes'

KevinSmarts 3 years ago
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  1. 66 66
      locations/Snpc.qsrc
  2. 13 13
      locations/sitrPar.qsrc
  3. 37 46
      locations/sny.qsrc
  4. 151 147
      locations/street_event.qsrc
  5. 95 95
      locations/street_walker.qsrc

+ 66 - 66
locations/Snpc.qsrc

@@ -8,23 +8,23 @@ $static_num = 'A<<numnpc>>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
 '<<$npc_notes[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>'
 
-if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 5:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is an outcast in school, and often gets picked on at school.'
+if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 5:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is an outcast in school and often gets picked on at school.'
 if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 6:''
-if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 3:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is a nerd, and is often found around the rest of the nerds doing homework or a their game night.'
+if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 3:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is a nerd and is often found around the rest of the nerds doing homework or at their game night.'
 if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 2:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is part of the athletic clique in your school.'
-if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 1:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is popular, and spends time with the other popular kids usually.'
-if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 4:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is a Gopnik, and spends a lot of time doing what Gopniks usually do: be loud, and drink beer.'
+if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 1:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is popular and spends time with the other popular kids usually.'
+if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 4:'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is a Gopnik and spends a lot of time doing what Gopniks usually do: be loud and drink beer.'
 if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 20:'They really don''t like you.'
 if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 20 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 40:'They are fairly indifferent to you.'
-if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 40 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 60:'The two of you get along together fairly well together, more of casual friends.'
-if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 60 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 80:'You get along great with them, they are one of your friends.'
+if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 40 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 60:'The two of you get along together fairly well, more of casual friends.'
+if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 60 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] < 80:'You get along great with them. They are one of your friends.'
 if npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] >= 80:'They are one of your best friends.'
 
 if numnpc = 14 and KatjaOTN > 0:
 	if KatjaHorny < 20:'Katja looks calm and stoic.'
 	if KatjaHorny >= 20 and KatjaHorny < 40:'You see a naughty twinkle in Katja''s eyes.'
-	if KatjaHorny >= 40 and KatjaHorny < 60:'Katja has a faint blush on her cheeks and she looks at you mischievously.'
-	if KatjaHorny >= 60 and KatjaHorny < 80:'Katja is blushing fairly obviously, and looks at you longingly.'
+	if KatjaHorny >= 40 and KatjaHorny < 60:'Katja has a faint blush on her cheeks, and she looks at you mischievously.'
+	if KatjaHorny >= 60 and KatjaHorny < 80:'Katja is blushing fairly obviously and looks at you longingly.'
 	if KatjaHorny >= 80:'Katja is as red as a lobster, and her chest is heaving from her heavy breaths. She''s idly rubbing her thighs against one another while you talk.'
 end
 ''
@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@ if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 5 and grupTipe ! 5:
 				menu_off = 1
 				npc_rel[$static_num] -= 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You mocked the school outcast, as the other students laugh at them.'
+				'You mock the school outcast as the other students laugh at them.'
 
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				if $loc = 'gdkin':act 'Move away':gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 5 and grupTipe ! 5:
 				cls
 				menu_off = 1
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You began to mock them, but <<$npc_firstname[$static_num]>> answered you. "You''re one to talk cocksucker, everyone knows your the easiest fuck in town." Everyone started laughing at you. You were shocked and confused by everyone turning on you, you hurry away as the others start to talk about you.'
+				'You begin to mock them, but <<$npc_firstname[$static_num]>> answers you. "You''re one to talk cocksucker, everyone knows you''re the easiest fuck in town." Everyone starts laughing at you. You are shocked and confused by everyone turning on you, and you hurry away as the others start to talk about you.'
 
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				if $loc = 'gdkin':act 'Move away':gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -111,16 +111,16 @@ if npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 4:
 					npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] += 5
 					gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'beer', 1
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You happily take the beer, and drink it in <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>''s company.'
+					'You happily take the beer and drink it in <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>''s company.'
 
 					act 'Move away':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
 		elseif pav_slut >= 300:
 			if npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
-				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> looks at you wearily: "What do you want? Looking for a dick to suck on or something?"'
+				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> looks at you warily. "What do you want? Looking for a dick to suck on or something?"'
 			else
-				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> wrinkles her nose as she looks at you: "Hey cocksucker, get away from me! I don''t want to be seen talking to you."'
+				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> wrinkles her nose as she looks at you. "Hey cocksucker, get away from me! I don''t want to be seen talking to you."'
 			end
 
 			act 'Move away':npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] -= 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -136,23 +136,23 @@ if numnpc = 144:
 			*clr & cla
 			if Anush_lunch = 0:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Hey Anush you feeling ok? You kinda look flush, is something wrong? Would you like to talk about it?"'
+				'"Hey Anush, you feeling ok? You kinda look flush, is something wrong? Would you like to talk about it?"'
 				'She leans in close and tries to kiss you, while one hand reaches down and squeezes your butt. You turn your head and pull away. "What are you doing? I was only seeing if you were ok."'
 				'She crowds you a bit and leans in close. "You talk too much, I can think of better things you can do with that tongue of yours."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'exhibitionism'
 				minut -= 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Um that''s not what I meant': gt 'Snpc', 'anushnottoday'
-				act 'Kiss her back.': gt 'Snpc', 'kissback'
+				act 'Kiss her back': gt 'Snpc', 'kissback'
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/makeout.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Noticing she is looking fairly turned on today, well more so than usual, you say to her. "You ok? You are looking pretty flush again today."'
-				'You barely even have time to get the words out when she is leaning in and kissing you, her hands reach around to squeeze your butt.'
+				'Noticing she is looking fairly turned on today, well more so than usual, you say to her, "You ok? You are looking pretty flush again today."'
+				'You barely even have time to get the words out when she is leaning in and kissing you, her hands reaching around to squeeze your butt.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'exhibitionism'
 				minut -= 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Not today': gt 'Snpc', 'anushnottoday'
-				act 'Kiss her back.': gt 'Snpc', 'kissback'
+				act 'Kiss her back': gt 'Snpc', 'kissback'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kissback':
 	pav_sex +=1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/makeout.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You kiss her back. Your hands are roaming each others bodies, several of the other gopniks are checking the two of you out, especially the guys. Several of them starting hooting, hollering or whistling as the two of you make out hard right in front of them. After a couple of minutes she grabs you by the hands and says "Come on lets go some place more private to continue this.'
+	'You kiss her back. Your hands roam over each other''s bodies. Several of the other gopniks check the two of you out, especially the guys. Several of them start hooting, hollering or whistling as the two of you make out hard right in front of them. After a couple of minutes, she grabs you by the hands and says, "Come on, let''s go someplace more private to continue this."'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'exhibitionism'
 	minut -= 5
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -179,8 +179,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kissback':
 		pav_sex +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/makeout.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You breath heavily feeling yourself turned on. "Ok, where?"'
-		'Her hand slides up your skirt and rubs your clit. "Come with me, I know just the place." With that she takes you by the hand and the two of your head off, with the whistles and cat calls of the other gopniks behind you.'
+		'You breath heavily, feeling yourself turned on. "Ok, where?"'
+		'Her hand slides up your skirt and rubs your clit. "Come with me, I know just the place." With that, she takes you by the hand, and the two of you head off, with the whistles and catcalls of the other gopniks behind you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'exhibitionism'
 		minut -= 5
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -192,8 +192,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushnottoday':
 	*clr & cla
 	npc_rel['A144'] -= 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/nomake.jpg"></center>'
-	'You place your hand on her shoulders and gentle push her away. "No I don''t want to."'
-	'She rolls her eyes. "Fine what ever, if you don''t want to have a little fun, I will find someone that does." With that she turns and walks off, leaving you unsure what just happened.'
+	'You place your hand on her shoulders and gently push her away. "No, I don''t want to."'
+	'She rolls her eyes. "Fine whatever, if you don''t want to have a little fun, I will find someone that does." With that, she turns and walks off, leaving you unsure what just happened.'
 	act 'Continue': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 end
 
@@ -203,7 +203,7 @@ end
 
 if numnpc = 23:
 	if AlbinaQW['StarletsJoined'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['StarletsShutDown'] = 0:
-		'Albina offers you a friendly smile and says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re progressing very well in your training. Don''t forget to keep attending!"'
+		'Albina offers you a friendly smile and says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re progressing very well in your training. Don''t forget to keep attending!"'
 
 		if pav_slut >= 250:'By the way, some people are telling some pretty disgusting rumours about you.'
 	end
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if numnpc = 23:
 		act 'Ask about a tiny camera':
 			minut += 5
 			artemIzdev = 2
-			'You ask Albina if she knows where you could get a tiny camera, saying it''s for a prank you''re pulling on your parents. Albina smiles and nods: "There''s a photo studio in the city, they''ll have that you need!"'
+			'You ask Albina if she knows where you could get a tiny camera, saying it''s for a prank you''re pulling on your parents. Albina smiles and nods. "There''s a photo studio in the city, they''ll have that you need!"'
 			'You thank her for the help. Maybe now you''ll finally be able to get out of this hell.'
 
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
@@ -236,11 +236,11 @@ end
 
 !!Chat
 if narkoman = 1 and numnpc = 1 and npc_rel['A1'] >= 100:
-	'You don''t want to but the you feel miserable and everything hurts, you crave the rush that you''ve come to enjoy so much'
+	'You don''t want to, but you feel miserable and everything hurts. You crave the rush that you''ve come to enjoy so much.'
 	'"Please Dimka, can I have some pale lady?"'
 	if dimaRevenge = 0:
-		'Dimka grins. Sure, why don''t we go somewhere queieter...'
-		'Resolved to do anything to make the pain go away and feel happy again, you mentally sigh and follow him'
+		'Dimka grins. Sure, why don''t we go somewhere quieter...'
+		'Resolved to do anything to make the pain go away and feel happy again, you mentally sigh and follow him.'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -262,7 +262,7 @@ act 'Chat':
 
 	if numnpc = 1 and npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
 		cla
-		'Dimka doesn''t try to hide his disdain for you: "Get away from me, you pimply pig."'
+		'Dimka doesn''t try to hide his disdain for you. "Get away from me, you pimply pig."'
 
 		if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 			act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -288,7 +288,7 @@ end
 
 !!Lariska
 if numnpc = 13 and lariskaHelp = -1:
-	'She looks at you rejectedly, and softly says: "Leave me alone, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I want nothing to do with you any more."'
+	'She looks at you rejectingly and softly says, "Leave me alone, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I want nothing to do with you any more."'
 
 	if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 		act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -313,8 +313,8 @@ if numnpc = 2:
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Artem and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. Artem is a bit surprised: "What... you want my help? Well, okay I guess. Come meet me at my place if you want to do homework together."'
-			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Artem and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. Artem is outraged: "Bah... the school whore needs my help? I don''t think so."'
+			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Artem and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. Artem is a bit surprised. "What... you want my help? Well, okay I guess. Come meet me at my place if you want to do homework together."'
+			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Artem and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. Artem is outraged. "Bah... the school whore needs my help? I don''t think so."'
 
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -352,8 +352,8 @@ if numnpc = 12:
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Julia and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. She thinks it over for a second, but happily agrees: "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, that could be fun!"'
-			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Julia and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use his help studying. She makes some comments about your lousy reputation in school, but at the same time doesn''t seem to care too much about it and agrees to help you anyway. As long as you don''t tell anyone.'
+			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Julia and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She thinks it over for a second, but happily agrees. "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, that could be fun!"'
+			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Julia and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She makes some comments about your lousy reputation in school, but at the same time doesn''t seem to care too much about it and agrees to help you anyway as long as you don''t tell anyone.'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				act' Leave': xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else
@@ -376,7 +376,7 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk, the other night. Katja gives you a knowing smile and says: "Don''t mention it, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk at the disco though, that could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..."'
+			'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk the other night. Katja gives you a knowing smile and says, "Don''t mention it, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk at the disco though, that could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..."'
 
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
@@ -400,7 +400,7 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 		'Katja slowly leans in towards you, almost closing her eyes and slowly opening her mouth. Unable to resist, you lean in and meet her with a kiss.'
 		gs 'katjaEv', 'kiss_events'
 	elseif meynoldQW > 1 and pcs_makeup <= 1:
-		'Katja looks at you with a smile: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I bet you would look great with a little make-up on you! What do you say?"'
+		'Katja looks at you with a smile. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I bet you would look great with a little make-up on you! What do you say?"'
 
 		act 'Let her put makeup on you':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -411,14 +411,14 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'Katja happily grins as she quickly straightens your hair: "What do you want? A light touch-up, some normal make-up or shall I just shovel it on?"'
+			'Katja happily grins as she quickly straightens your hair. "What do you want? A light touch-up, some normal make-up or shall I just shovel it on?"'
 
 			act 'Light touch-up':
 				cla
 				pcs_makeup = 2
 				'Katja subtly applies some neutral tones, with a light application of makeup to bring out your natural beauty.'
 
-				if KatjaOTN > 0:KatjaHorny += 10 & 'Katja suddenly becomes aware that she is staring into your eyes, and blushes.'
+				if KatjaOTN > 0:KatjaHorny += 10 & 'Katja suddenly becomes aware that she is staring into your eyes and blushes.'
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 					xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 				else
@@ -429,9 +429,9 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 			act 'Normal make-up':
 				cla
 				pcs_makeup = 3
-				'Katja applies some mildly vibrate tones and colors of makeup to cover your minor imperfections and enhance your best features.'
+				'Katja applies some mildly vibrant tones and colors of makeup to cover your minor imperfections and enhance your best features.'
 
-				if KatjaOTN > 0:KatjaHorny += 10 & 'Katja suddenly becomes aware that she is staring into your eyes, and blushes.'
+				if KatjaOTN > 0:KatjaHorny += 10 & 'Katja suddenly becomes aware that she is staring into your eyes and blushes.'
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 					xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 				else
@@ -467,7 +467,7 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 			gs'stat'
 			'You lean in to kiss Katja'
 			if Katjahorny < 30:
-				'She pulls away from you as you try and kiss her, she looks around to see if anyone seen. "Not here and not now."'
+				'She pulls away from you as you try to kiss her. She looks around to see if anyone saw. "Not here and not now."'
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 					xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 				else
@@ -493,8 +493,8 @@ if numnpc = 14:
 
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'You make sure no one else is paying attention, and tell Katja about what Artem and Petka are doing to you on Mondays. At first she doesn''t believe you. After a while, all of the nasty details you''re sharing convince her that there is no way you''re making this up. Katja is shocked!'
-			'You tell her that the only way you have thought of to get rid of their blackmailing, is to get blackmailing material of your own. Katja nods and says: "That makes sense, actually... if you could somehow make it look violent, I bet it would work even better! I don''t know where you would be able to find a tiny camera though... maybe Albina can help you?"'
+			'You make sure no one else is paying attention and tell Katja about what Artem and Petka are doing to you on Mondays. At first, she doesn''t believe you. After a while, all of the nasty details you''re sharing convince her that there is no way you''re making this up. Katja is shocked!'
+			'You tell her that the only way you have thought of to get rid of their blackmailing is to get blackmailing material of your own. Katja nods and says, "That makes sense, actually... if you could somehow make it look violent, I bet it would work even better! I don''t know where you would be able to find a tiny camera though... maybe Albina can help you?"'
 
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
@@ -533,8 +533,8 @@ if numnpc = 16:
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Natasha and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She thinks it over for a second, but happily agrees: "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, that could be fun!"'
-			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Natasha and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She makes some comments about your lousy reputation in school, but at the same time doesn''t seem to care too much about it and agrees to help you anyway. As long as you don''t tell anyone.'
+			if pav_slut < 250:'You approach Natasha and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She thinks it over for a second, but happily agrees. "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, that could be fun!"'
+			if pav_slut >= 250:'You approach Natasha and explain how you''re struggling in school and could really use her help studying. She makes some comments about your lousy reputation in school, but at the same time doesn''t seem to care too much about it and agrees to help you anyway as long as you don''t tell anyone.'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else
@@ -549,8 +549,8 @@ if numnpc = 16:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon">Girls Bathroom</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/bathroom/girlsbathroom.jpg"></center>'
-			'You grab Natasha by the hand and pull her along with you as you tell her. "Come to the bathroom with me."'
-			'She looks at you questioningly but doesn''t protest, as you pull her into the bathroom, past a few girls using the mirrors. You take her into a stall with you. You sit down on the toilet and pull down your panties, then spread you legs and tell her. "Down on your knees, time to pay off a little debt."'
+			'You grab Natasha by the hand and pull her along with you as you tell her, "Come to the bathroom with me."'
+			'She looks at you questioningly but doesn''t protest as you pull her into the bathroom past a few girls using the mirrors. You take her into a stall with you. You sit down on the toilet and pull down your panties, then spread you legs and tell her, "Down on your knees, time to pay off a little debt."'
 			'She looks a little shocked at first but then gets down on her knees and lowers her face to your crotch.'
 			act 'Further':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -563,9 +563,9 @@ if numnpc = 16:
 				orgasm += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natasha/sex/school/natschoolowe.jpg"></center>'
-				'Her tongue starts to lick your clit, you bite your lip to try and keep from moaning to loudly. You lean back and relax, as you let Natasha pleasure you with her tongue. She is getting a lot better at this and if you''re not mistaken she is starting to like it a lot.'
-				'She starts using her fingers on you as well and is really getting into it, you start to pant and moan. Clamping a hand over your own mouth to keep yourself from crying out, it doesn''t her long to bring you to a climax.'
-				'Your whole body shudders as the orgasm rocks your body, you grind your pussy against her face as it does. Once the sensation has passed you look down and see Natasha smiling up at you, obviously pleased with herself. You lean down and give her a long slow passionate kiss, tasting your own pussy juices. A few moments later the bell rings and you both hurry to class.'
+				'Her tongue starts to lick your clit. You bite your lip to try and keep from moaning too loudly. You lean back and relax as you let Natasha pleasure you with her tongue. She is getting a lot better at this, and if you''re not mistaken, she is starting to like it a lot.'
+				'She starts using her fingers on you as well and is really getting into it. You start to pant and moan, clamping a hand over your own mouth to keep yourself from crying out. It doesn''t take her long to bring you to a climax.'
+				'Your whole body shudders as the orgasm rocks your body. You grind your pussy against her face as it does. Once the sensation has passed, you look down and see Natasha smiling up at you, obviously pleased with herself. You lean down and give her a long, slow, passionate kiss, tasting your own pussy juices. A few moments later, the bell rings, and you both hurry to class.'
 				if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 					xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 				else
@@ -583,8 +583,8 @@ if numnpc = 31:
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'"So Lizaveta hear any good gossip of late?"'
-		'As you ask that her face lights up and she leans in close like she has the best secret in the world to share with you. "Oh my god yes! I was... well it doesn''t matter what I was doing but I overheard some others talking and they said..."'
+		'"So Lizaveta, hear any good gossip of late?"'
+		'As you ask that, her face lights up, and she leans in close like she has the best secret in the world to share with you. "Oh my god yes! I was... well it doesn''t matter what I was doing, but I overheard some others talking, and they said..."'
 		gs 'gschool_gossip', 'Lizaveta'
 		if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 			xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
@@ -604,10 +604,10 @@ if numnpc = 231:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Hi <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>! I just finished my last book at home and I''m not sure what I should read next. Can I join you at the library this afternoon so that you can help me find another good one to read?"'
-			'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>''s face quickly shifts from a smile to confusion. You can tell she''s not sure how to respond and there is a long pause as a result. Finally after about 30 seconds of thought she responds "Sure, that should be alright. Do you mind going home with me first so that I can change out of our uniform?"'
-			'"That is no problem at all" you reply. "I''ll meet you outside of school after our last period, and then we can head to your house together."'
-			'"Sounds good <<$pcs_nickname>>. See you then" <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies as she heads off.'
+			'"Hi <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>! I just finished my last book at home, and I''m not sure what I should read next. Can I join you at the library this afternoon so that you can help me find another good one to read?"'
+			'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>''s face quickly shifts from a smile to confusion. You can tell she''s not sure how to respond, and there is a long pause as a result. Finally after about 30 seconds of thought, she responds, "Sure, that should be alright. Do you mind going home with me first so that I can change out of our uniform?"'
+			'"That is no problem at all," you reply. "I''ll meet you outside of school after our last period, and then we can head to your house together."'
+			'"Sounds good <<$pcs_nickname>>. See you then," <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies as she heads off.'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else
@@ -623,9 +623,9 @@ if numnpc = 231:
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
 			'"Hi <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>! I ended up missing school the other day because I was sick. Would it be alright with you if we went to your house after school so that you can help me catch up?"'
-			'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, just as long as you aren''t sick anymore. I don''t want to get sick with whatever you had and miss school as well."'
-			'You giggle a little bit and reply "Nah, I got over my sickness so you should be fine. I''ll meet you outside of school after our last period, and then we can head to your house together."'
-			'"Sounds good <<$pcs_nickname>>. See you then" <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies as she heads off.'
+			'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies, "Sure <<$pcs_nickname>>, just as long as you aren''t sick anymore. I don''t want to get whatever you had and miss school as well."'
+			'You giggle a little bit and reply, "Nah, I got over my sickness, so you should be fine. I''ll meet you outside of school after our last period, and then we can head to your house together."'
+			'"Sounds good <<$pcs_nickname>>. See you then," <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> replies as she heads off.'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else
@@ -640,14 +640,14 @@ if numnpc = 231:
 			npc_QW['A231'] = 5
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big<<numnpc>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you walk to up <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, you feel your stomach drop to the floor due to how awkward the situation is. However you''re not about to let what happened end your friendship without at least clearing the air.'
+			'As you walk up to <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, you feel your stomach drop to the floor due to how awkward the situation is. However, you''re not about to let what happened end your friendship without at least clearing the air.'
 			'After about a minute or so of eye contact, you finally develop enough courage to speak first.'
-			'"Hi <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>..." You say in a nervous and defeated voice.'
+			'"Hi <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>..." you say in a nervous and defeated voice.'
 			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she replies in an equally nervous voice.'
-			'After taking a couple more seconds to fully collect your thoughs, you say "Look, I think we need to talk about what happened last time at your house. Given the subject, it would be best to do so privately. Can we meet after school to talk about it?"'
-			'<<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> doesn''t respond, and almost looks like she''s about to start crying. She finally wimpers "Are you mad at me or are you sickened by me?"'
+			'After taking a couple more seconds to fully collect your thoughts, you say, "Look, I think we need to talk about what happened last time at your house. Given the subject, it would be best to do so privately. Can we meet after school to talk about it?"'
+			'<<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> doesn''t respond and almost looks like she''s about to start crying. She finally whimpers, "Are you mad at me, or are you sickened by me?"'
 			'Not completely surprised by what she said, you hold firm in making sure to wait until the two of you are alone. "I don''t wan''t to discuss things here. Meet me after school so we can talk about this more. I promise I''m not going to hurt you if that is what you''re afraid of."'
-			'Looking a little releaved, <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> nods her head in a slow manner and sheds a couple of tears. You walk away without either of you saying another word."'
+			'Looking a little relieved, <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> nods her head in a slow manner and sheds a couple of tears. You walk away without either of you saying another word."'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else
@@ -679,8 +679,8 @@ if numnpc = 231:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>></font></b></center>'
 !!Image needed			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/aleksandra/school_kiss.jpg"></center>'
-			'You lean in to kiss <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> and you both close your eyes as your lips meet. You don''t really care what anyone else thinks, you both just enjoy the moment.' 
-			'You eventually break off the kiss and say "See you later cutie" and head on your way.'
+			'You lean in to kiss <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, and you both close your eyes as your lips meet. You don''t really care what anyone else thinks. You both just enjoy the moment.' 
+			'You eventually break off the kiss and say, "See you later cutie," and head on your way.'
 			if $loc ! 'gdkin':
 				xgt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break', 'nopict'
 			else

+ 13 - 13
locations/sitrPar.qsrc

@@ -42,7 +42,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			wipo += 1000
 			gs 'food', 'l_meal'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You sit at the festive table laid in front of the TV and celebrate the New Year with your family, the TV providing some background noise. At the table people strike up a conversation and common problems are forgotten for a while, everyone is having fun talking to each other. At midnight, everyone wishes one another a happy New Year and enjoys the champagne and fireworks outside. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gives you an envelope with a greeting card and 5000 <b>₽</b>. For a while you continue to watch TV, enjoying the champagne and company of your family, but after a while everyone is kind of tired and one by one they go to bed.'
+			'You sit at the festive table laid in front of the TV and celebrate the New Year with your family, the TV providing some background noise. At the table, people strike up a conversation and common problems are forgotten for a while, everyone is having fun talking to each other. At midnight, everyone wishes one another a happy New Year and enjoys the champagne and fireworks outside. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gives you an envelope with a greeting card and 5000 <b>₽</b>. For a while, you continue to watch TV, enjoying the champagne and company of your family, but eventually, everyone is kind of tired and one by one they go to bed.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/food/leftovers.jpg"></center>'
-			'You have finished the leftovers remaining on the table from the holidays.'
+			'You finish the leftovers remaining on the table from the holidays.'
 
 		act 'Get up from the table':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 
@@ -72,22 +72,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/uborka1.jpg"></center>'
 		if kanikuli = 0 and StoryLine = 1 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0 and week < 6:
 			if CloStyle2 = 4:
-				'As you walk into the living room you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up at and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Go to school, now!" With that she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does she adds ones more. "Go to school."' 
+				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Go to school, now!" With that, she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does, she adds once more, "Go to school."' 
 				act 'Continue': gt'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
 			else
 				gs 'wardrobe', 'school_outfit'
-				'As you walk into the living room you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up at and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Why are you not wearing your unifrom? Go get changed and go to school, now!" She follows you back to your room and watches as you change into your uniform, after that she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does she adds ones more. "Go to school."' 
+				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Why are you not wearing your uniform? Go get changed and go to school, now!" She follows you back to your room and watches as you change into your uniform. After that, she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does, she adds once more, "Go to school."' 
 				act 'Continue':  gt'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
 			end
 		else
-			'As you walk into the living room you see your mother sweeping the floor. She hasn''t noticed you, she is intent on cleaning.'
+			'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She hasn''t noticed you, she is intent on cleaning.'
 			act 'leave': gt 'korrPar'
 		end
 		exit
 	elseif momloc = 19:
 		!! Watches TV with Vladimir
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/momvladtv.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk into the living room you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir sitting on the couch watching tv, while Kolka sits in the armchair watching tv.'
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/momvladTV.jpg"></center>'
+		'As you walk into the living room, you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir sitting on the couch watching TV, while Kolka sits in the armchair doing the same.'
 		act 'leave':gt 'korrPar'
 		
 		act 'Join them':
@@ -98,8 +98,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			npc_rel['A29'] += 1
 			npc_rel['A34'] += 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-			'You move over to join them and your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> scoots away from Vladmir and pat the spot between her and him. You take a seat between them, Vlad barely even glances as you with a brief smile before he goes back to watching tv. Kolka never even looks up, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> pats you on the shoulder before returning her attention to the tv, apparently happy the family is spending time together.'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familyTV.jpg"></center>'
+			'You move over to join them, and your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> scoots away from Vladimir and pats the spot between her and him. You take a seat between them. Vlad barely even glances at you with a brief smile before he goes back to watching TV, and Kolka never even looks up. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> pats you on the shoulder before returning her attention to the TV, apparently happy the family is spending time together.'
 			act 'leave':gt 'korrPar'
 			
 			act 'Keep watching':gt 'sitrPar', 'TVmom'
@@ -125,8 +125,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'TVmom':
 	minut += 30
 	gs 'family_schedule'
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-	'You continue to watch tv with the family, everyone seems very engrossed in the program and almost never says much. Though Kolka occasional makes a crack about what is happening, often getting shushed by Vlad or <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>.'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familyTV.jpg"></center>'
+	'You continue to watch TV with the family. Everyone seems very engrossed in the program and almost never says anything, though Kolka occasionally makes a crack about what is happening, often getting shushed by Vlad or <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>.'
 	if momloc = 19: act'Keep watching TV with your family': gt 'sitrPar', 'TVmom'
 	act 'Finish watching':gt 'sitrPar', 'TVend'
 end
@@ -134,8 +134,8 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'TVend':
 	cla & *clr
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once the show is over Vladimir picks up the remote and turns the tv off, he gets up. Then he stretches, before he turns and walks out of the room, likely heading to bed. <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gets up and says to you. "You should go to bed or at least go to your room so your brother can get his rest." She then turns to Kolka and says to him. "Don''t stay up, go to bed." With that she also leaves, after making sure you leave as well. As you walk out, you see Kolka putting his pillow and sheet on the couch.'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familyTV.jpg"></center>'
+	'Once the show is over, Vladimir picks up the remote and turns the TV off. He gets up then stretches before he turns and walks out of the room, likely heading to bed. <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gets up and says to you, "You should go to bed or at least go to your room so your brother can get his rest." She then turns to Kolka and says to him, "Don''t stay up, go to bed." With that, she also leaves after making sure you leave as well. As you walk out, you see Kolka putting his pillow and sheet on the couch.'
 	act 'leave':gt 'korrPar'
 end
 

+ 37 - 46
locations/sny.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	end
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa3.jpg"></center>'
-	'The whole class went to Dimka home. He house had music playing and lots of alcohol to drink, you go up to a table with a couple of the other girls and get a glass of vodka. Soon everyone is drinking and celebrating the new year.'
+	'The whole class went to Dimka''s home. He has house music playing and lots of alcohol to drink. You go up to a table with a couple of the other girls and get a glass of vodka. Soon, everyone is drinking and celebrating the new year.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'drink', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Boys and girls start to relax and break up into groups to talk. Someone poured more vodka into a glass and handed you another glass of vodka.'
+	'Boys and girls start to relax and break up into groups to talk. Someone pours more vodka into a glass and hands it to you.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'drink', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 		gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'vodka', 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'You down the glass of vodka'
+		'You down the glass of vodka.'
 
 		act 'Nostrovia!': minut += 5 & gt 'sny', '5'
 	end
@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa5.jpg"></center>'
-	'Albina went into the center of the room and began to dance, she is a very talented dancer and knows how to move her body. She was quickly joined by Katja and her sister Vicky. While you are watching the girls, someone hands you another glass of vodka.'
+	'Albina goes into the center of the room and begins to dance. She is a very talented dancer and knows how to move her body. She is quickly joined by Katja and her sister Vicky. While you are watching the girls, someone hands you another glass of vodka.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'drink', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 		gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'vodka', 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'You drink down the shoot of vodka and feel it burn all the way down.'
+		'You drink down the shot of vodka and feel it burn all the way down.'
 
 		act 'Nostrovia!': minut += 5 & gt 'sny', '6'
 	end
@@ -118,7 +118,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '6':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa6.jpg"></center>'
-	'Albina and Katja are dancing face to face in the middle of the room. Suddenly Albina kisses Katja on the lips. The room erupts into howling kids encouraging them to continuing. Someone hands you another glass of vodka.'
+	'Albina and Katja are dancing face to face in the middle of the room. Suddenly, Albina kisses Katja on the lips. The room erupts into howling kids encouraging them to continuing. Someone hands you another glass of vodka.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'drink', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '6':
 		gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'vodka', 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'You drink down the shoot of vodka and feel it burn all the way down.'
+		'You drink down the shot of vodka and feel it burn all the way down.'
 
 		act 'Nostrovia!': minut += 5 & gt 'sny', '7'
 	end
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if alko >= 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/vomit.jpg"></center>'
-		'You start feeling dizzy and sick to your stomach, you mutter something about throwing up and Dale helps you rush to the toilet.'
+		'You start feeling dizzy and sick to your stomach. You mutter something about throwing up, and Dimka helps you rush to the toilet.'
 
 		act 'Barf':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -168,34 +168,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/vom.jpg"></center>'
-				'You wake up on the bed in Dimka''s room. Your head hurts, your whole body aches and you feel a wet spot on your panties. Turning your head you see some sort of white mucus. You poke a finger in the mucus and hold the finger to your nose, the pungent smell of sperm hits you. At this moment Dimka enters the room. Seeing your panties smeared with sperm he begins to laugh "Dammit. I thought no one else would get you before I got back, but hell, it looks like someone already fucked you."'
+				'You wake up on the bed in Dimka''s room. Your head hurts, your whole body aches and you feel a wet spot on your panties. Turning your head, you see some sort of white mucus. You poke a finger in the mucus and hold the finger to your nose. The pungent smell of sperm hits you. At this moment, Dimka enters the room. Seeing your panties smeared with sperm, he begins to laugh "Dammit. I thought no one else would get you before I got back, but hell, it looks like someone already fucked you."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 			elseif NosovRevenge = 1:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/tattoos/pubic/tatvag6.jpg"></center>'
-				'You wake up lying on a chair that is fully reclined, with difficulty you raise your head and look around at the place, you are unfamiliar with it. You feel a burning sensation in your bikini pubic area. Looking down you see your panties have been pulled down to expose your pussy. Just above it is a tattoo.'
+				'You wake up lying on a chair that is fully reclined. With difficulty, you raise your head and look around at the place. You are unfamiliar with it. You feel a burning sensation in your pubic area. Looking down, you see your panties have been pulled down to expose your pussy. Just above it is a tattoo.'
 
 				if tatvag ! 0:'It looks like your old tattoo has been covered up with a new one.'
 
 				tatvag = 6
 				pcs_pubes = 0
 				gs 'stat'
-				'Looking closer you read the word SLUT, on the letters lay tattooed girl in stockings. You finally notice the man cleaning his tattoo station up and you demand. "What the hell? Why did you tattoo me?" The man rolled his eyes "Oh God, you came in drunk and then wonder why. Here is a sketch of the tattoo and your signature on the release form." You looked at the signature, indeed it is yours.'
+				'Looking closer, you read the word SLUT. On top of the letters lies a tattooed girl in stockings. You finally notice the man cleaning his tattoo station up, and you demand, "What the hell? Why did you tattoo me?" The man rolls his eyes. "Oh God, you came in drunk and then wonder why. Here is a sketch of the tattoo and your signature on the release form." You looks at the signature. Indeed, it is yours.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif alko >= 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tit.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are quite drunk and not thinking straight. Someone''s hand pulls you into the center of the room with the dancing boys and girls. Nosov suddenly pulls your top down, exposing your breasts to everyone in the room. You sluggish pull your top back up. Dimka takes you by the hand and drags you out of the room.'
+		'You are quite drunk and not thinking straight. Someone''s hand pulls you into the center of the room with the dancing boys and girls. Dimka suddenly pulls your top down, exposing your breasts to everyone in the room. You sluggishly pull your top back up. Dimka takes you by the hand and drags you out of the room.'
 
 		act 'Hey! Where are you dragging me?': minut += 5 & gt 'sny', '10'
 	elseif alko > 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/alb.jpg"></center>'
 		if fedorKozlovQW = 0:
-			'You are a little drunk, but having fun. When you notice, Albina sitting on the couch and kissing Ivan, while Fedor paws at her breasts. Looking around you some more you notice that Katja nowhere to be seen.'
+			'You are a little drunk but having fun when you notice Albina sitting on the couch and kissing Ivan while Fedor paws at her breasts. Looking around you some more, you notice that Katja is nowhere to be seen.'
 		else	
-			'You are a little drunk, but having fun. When you notice, Albina sitting on the couch and kissing Ivan. Looking around you some more you notice that Katja nowhere to be seen.'
+			'You are a little drunk but having fun when you notice Albina sitting on the couch and kissing Ivan. Looking around you some more, you notice that Katja is nowhere to be seen.'
 		end
 		
 		act 'Search for Katja':
@@ -205,7 +205,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 			KatjaSlut += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/sex/kat.jpg"></center>'
-			'You began to walk around the apartment looking for Katja, behind one of the doors you hear woman moaning and creaking of a bed. You open the door just a little to peek inside. On the edge of the bed Katja is on her knees with her head against the mattress, Slavik stands behind her and is hammering her. His cock going balls deep in her, with the slapping of flesh, barely heard over Katja''s moaning. Slavik finally growled and pumps his sperm inside of her, as he finished he leaned over her and whispered. "Katja, I''ve been in love with you for a long time, do not think I am just using you." Katja muttered something and seems completely out of it.'
+			'You begin to walk around the apartment looking for Katja. Behind one of the doors, you hear a woman moaning and the creaking of a bed. You open the door just a little to peek inside. On the edge of the bed, Katja is on her knees with her head against the mattress. Slavik stands behind her and is hammering her, his cock going balls deep in her, with the slapping of flesh barely heard over Katja''s moaning. Slavik finally growls and pumps his sperm inside of her. As he finishes, he leans over her and whispers, "Katja, I''ve been in love with you for a long time, do not think I am just using you." Katja mutters something and seems completely out of it.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -213,7 +213,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 		end
 	elseif alko > 0:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/idi.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are a bit tipsy and feel fairly relaxed at the party. There''s some vodka shots lined up so you could have another drink or maybe it''s time to head home?'
+		'You are a bit tipsy and feel fairly relaxed at the party. There''s some vodka shots lined up, so you could have another drink, or maybe it''s time to head home?'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'drink', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -231,7 +231,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 			gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'vodka', 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You down the shoot of vodka and feel its warmth in your chest.'
+			'You down the shot of vodka and feel its warmth in your chest.'
 
 			act 'Nostrovia!': minut += 5 & gt 'sny', '7'
 		end
@@ -247,17 +247,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '8':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa8.jpg"></center>'
-	'Back in the main room, you saw, that most continue to drink and dance. Albina, Ivan and Fedor are no where to be seen anymore. Some of the girls are getting wild in the middle of the room Christina even pulls down her pants showing off her bare ass.'
+	'Back in the main room, you see that most continue to drink and dance. Albina, Ivan and Fedor are nowhere to be seen anymore. Some of the girls are getting wild in the middle of the room. Christina even pulls down her pants, showing off her bare ass.'
 
-	act 'Search Albina':
+	act 'Search for Albina':
 		*clr & cla
 		seeAlbinaFuck = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/alb.jpg"></center>'
 		if fedorKozlovQW = 0:
-			'You began to walk around the apartment in search of Albina, behind one of the doors you hear woman moaning and a creaking bed. Peeking in the door you see Fedor and Ivan fucking Albina hard. Albina is covered in sweat, with smeared makeup on her face, muffled moans or groans it is hard to tell come from Albina. Fedor has his cock stuffed in her mouth, while Ivan is taking her from behind. Judging by the height and angle it looks like he is fucking her in the ass and just tearing it up.'
+			'You begin to walk around the apartment in search of Albina. Behind one of the doors, you hear a woman moaning and a creaking bed. Peeking in the door, you see Fedor and Ivan fucking Albina hard. Albina is covered in sweat with smeared makeup on her face and is letting out muffled moans or groans - it is hard to tell which. Fedor has his cock stuffed in her mouth, while Ivan is taking her from behind. Judging by the height and angle, it looks like he is fucking her in the ass and just tearing it up.'
 		else
-			'You began to walk around the apartment in search of Albina, behind one of the doors you hear woman moaning and a creaking bed. Peeking in the door you see Lazar and Ivan fucking Albina hard. Albina is covered in sweat, with smeared makeup on her face, muffled moans or groans it is hard to tell come from Albina. Lazar has his cock stuffed in her mouth, while Ivan is taking her from behind. Judging by the height and angle it looks like he is fucking her in the ass and just tearing it up.'
+			'You begin to walk around the apartment in search of Albina. Behind one of the doors, you hear a woman moaning and a creaking bed. Peeking in the door, you see Lazar and Ivan fucking Albina hard. Albina is covered in sweat with smeared makeup on her face and is letting out muffled moans or groans - it is hard to tell which. Lazar has his cock stuffed in her mouth, while Ivan is taking her from behind. Judging by the height and angle, it looks like he is fucking her in the ass and just tearing it up.'
 		end
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -270,7 +270,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '9':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/tusa9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Virtually everyone is passed on the floor, some in varies stats of undress. Dimka comes over to you "And you''re still on your feet? Good for you, the others have already left or passed out, let''s go, I need you to help me with something."'
+	'Virtually everyone is passed out on the floor, some in various states of undress. Dimka comes over to you. "And you''re still on your feet? Good for you, the others have already left or passed out, let''s go, I need you to help me with something."'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -279,7 +279,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '9':
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You tell Dimka, you had to leave.'
+			'You tell Dimka, you have to leave.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 		end
@@ -294,24 +294,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '10':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/kiss/kiss1.jpg"></center>'
-	'He takes you into another room, one the two of you are alone. Dimka began to paw at your chest and gave you a long slobbery kiss.'
+	'He takes you into another room. Once the two of you are alone, Dimka begins to paw at your chest and gives you a long, slobbery kiss.'
 
+	act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
 	if fedorKozlovQW >= 10:
-		act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
 		act 'Push him away':gt 'FedorMisc', 'Dimka Party'
 	elseif fedorKozlovQW = -15:
-		act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
 		act 'Push him away':gt'FedorMisc', 'Dimka Party 2'		
-	elseif NosovRevenge = 1:
-		act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
+	elseif NosovRevenge = 1 or dimaFilm ! 1:
 		act 'Push him away':gs 'sny', 'no'
-	else
-		if dimaFilm = 1:
-			act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
-		else
-			act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
-			act 'Push him away':gs 'sny', 'no'
-		end
 	end
 end
 
@@ -319,7 +310,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/sex/pett.jpg"></center>'
-	'You kiss Dimka and he slowly undresses you down to your underwear. He gently wraps his hands around you, he sits down on the arm of the couch and pulls you down till you are leaning back against him. His hand reaches around and starts rubbing your clit with his fingers.'
+	'You kiss Dimka, and he slowly undresses you down to your underwear. He gently wraps his hands around you, then sits down on the arm of the couch and pulls you down till you are leaning back against him. His hand reaches around, and he starts rubbing your clit with his fingers.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 	minut -= 5
@@ -330,7 +321,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A1'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/sex/pett2.jpg"></center>'
-		'After he rubs your clits, you start moaning. You feel your pussy getting wet and he can feel your wetness through your panties after several minutes of this. He gets up and pulls you around to the front of the couch, he turns you to face the couch with your back to him. He pulls down your panties and pushes you down on your knees and bends you over till your body is resting on the couch. He slips his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your wet pussy and starts fucking you slow and gentle.'
+		'After he rubs your clit, you start moaning. You feel your pussy getting wet, and he can feel your wetness through your panties after several minutes of this. He gets up and pulls you around to the front of the couch, turning you to face the couch with your back to him. He pulls down your panties and pushes you down on your knees, bending you over till your body is resting on the couch. He slips his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your wet pussy and starts fucking you slow and gentle.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 		minut -= 5
@@ -345,7 +336,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 			gs 'dinSex', 'wear_condom'
 			gs 'dinsex','vaginal_sex',10
 			!gs 'dinsex','sexcum'
-			'Suddenly, Dimka''s friend Gosha comes into the room and sits down next to you on the couch, he pulls out his dick and starts jerking off while he is watching Dimka fuck you.'
+			'Suddenly, Dimka''s friend Gosha comes into the room and sits down next to you on the couch. He pulls out his dick and starts jerking off while he watches Dimka fuck you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Suck him':
@@ -370,7 +361,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 					facial += 1
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/fa2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You suck on Gosha''s dick while Dimka fucks your pussy from behind, after awhile Gosha takes his dick out of your mouth and a jet of sperm hits you in the face, several more spurts join the first, splattering your face with his cum.'
+					'You suck on Gosha''s dick while Dimka fucks your pussy from behind. After a while, Gosha takes his dick out of your mouth, and a jet of sperm hits you in the face. Several more spurts join the first, splattering your face with his cum.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group'
 					minut -= 5
@@ -383,7 +374,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/dimkahome/newyear/sex/cond.jpg"></center>'
-							'A few moments later Dimka pulls out of you, takes off his condom and squeezes out the cum on your face.'
+							'A few moments later, Dimka pulls out of you, takes off his condom and squeezes out his cum on your face.'
 						
 							act 'Wipe your eyes':gt 'sny', 'end'
 						end
@@ -395,7 +386,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kiss':
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial22.jpg"></center>'
-							'A few moments later Dimka pulls out of you, walks around to your face. He jerks his dick a couple of times and then it starts spewing sperm all over your face, mixing with Gosha''s sperm, coving most of your face between the two of them.'
+							'A few moments later, Dimka pulls out of you and walks around to your face. He jerks his dick a couple of times, and then it starts spewing sperm all over your face, mixing with Gosha''s, covering most of your face between the two of them.'
 				
 							act 'Wipe your eyes':gt 'sny', 'end'
 						end
@@ -418,7 +409,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'no':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You pushed yourself from Dimka "hey! Beat it! Are you, crazy or something?"'
+				'You push yourself from Dimka. "Hey! Beat it! Are you crazy or something?"'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 			end
 		else
@@ -426,11 +417,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'no':
 		end	
 		act 'Give in':
 			*clr & cla
-			'You want to push Dimka away, but soaking wet pussy, burning desire to get fucked, makes you give in. Despite your better judgment.'
+			'You want to push Dimka away, but your soaking wet pussy and burning desire to get fucked make you give in despite your better judgment.'
 			act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
 		end
 	else
-		'In your drunken state you mutter something unintelligible.'
+		'In your drunken state, you mutter something unintelligible.'
 		act 'Kiss him':gt 'sny', 'kiss'
 	end
 end
@@ -441,13 +432,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	SNYnoseGang += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial'+rand(1,23)+'.jpg"></center>'
-	'Having wiped cum from your eyes you see Dimka walk over to the table and take out a hidden camera. He stopped the recording and looked at his friend, "Hey Gosha, the vid came out perfect."'
+	'Having wiped cum from your eyes, you see Dimka walk over to the table and take out a hidden camera. He stops the recording and looks at his friend, "Hey Gosha, the vid came out perfect."'
 	if DimaRudeQW = 0: DimaRudeQW += 1
 	if dimafilm = 0: dimaFilm = 1
 	if NosovRevenge = 1:
 		NosovRevenge = 2
 		daynosovrevenge = daystart
-		'Dimka turned to you, "Well, slut, you sure fucked up this time."'
+		'Dimka turns to you, "Well, slut, you sure fucked up this time."'
 	end
 
 	act 'Leave':

File diff suppressed because it is too large
+ 151 - 147
locations/street_event.qsrc


+ 95 - 95
locations/street_walker.qsrc

@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'work':
 		prst_loc = 2
 	end
 	gs 'street_walker', 'start'
-	'You do a last minute check of your outfit and makeup in a reflection in the window of a store. Yep, you look good and like you are open for business. With a final look you turn and make your way down the sidewalk looking for a customer.'
+	'You do a last minute check of your outfit and makeup in a reflection in the window of a store. Yep, you look good and like you are open for business. With a final look, you turn and make your way down the sidewalk looking for a customer.'
 	act 'Work the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	act 'Leave (don''t work)': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 end
@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if hour > 5 and hour < 20:
 		gs 'street_walker', 'start'
-		'It''s gone 05:00 and much too late to find any work now, maybe try again tonight there should be demand from 20:00.'
+		'It''s past 05:00, and much too late to find any work now. Maybe try again tonight. There should be demand from 20:00.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 	else
 		inhib_exp += rand(3,6)
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck. You spot some other girls working the streets as well, it doesn''t look like they are having any better luck than you are.'
+	'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you spot some other girls working the streets as well. It doesn''t look like they are having any better luck than you are.'
 	act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 	act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	act 'Walk over and talk to them':
@@ -158,19 +158,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			end
-			'You walk over smiling to the other girls, but all you are meet with is dark and dangerous looks. Then one of them speaks up. "What the fuck do you want bitch?"'
-			'Taken a bit aback by the anger you say "I was just coming over to talk and see how the night is going for you guys, been kinda slow for me." Trying to be friendly.'
-			'One of them snarls as the others move to partial circle you. "Listen bitch, this is our street, so get the fuck off it before you get hurt!"'
+			'You walk over smiling to the other girls, but all you are met with is dark and dangerous looks. Then one of them speaks up. "What the fuck do you want bitch?"'
+			'Taken a bit aback by the anger, you say "I was just coming over to talk and see how the night is going for you guys, been kinda slow for me," trying to be friendly.'
+			'One of them snarls as the others move to partially circle you. "Listen bitch, this is our street, so get the fuck off it before you get hurt!"'
 			act 'Leave and stop working for the night':
 				cla
 				*nl
-				'You turn and walk away, you can hear the other girls behind you, calling you all sorts of names'
+				'You turn and walk away. You can hear the other girls behind you, calling you all sorts of names.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 			end
 			act 'Leave to work a new street':
 				cla
 				*nl
-				'You turn and walk away, you can hear the other girls behind you, calling you all sorts of names'
+				'You turn and walk away. You can hear the other girls behind you, calling you all sorts of names.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 			end
 			!!act 'Tell her to fuck off':
@@ -184,14 +184,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			end
 			if ruslan_pimp = 2:
-				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls, one of them starts off kinda bitchy but the other one tells her you work for Ruslan too, which quickly calms her down. You make small talk with them for a bit, the more experienced girls share tips for the newer girls. Ways to help encourage guys stop and the type of guys to avoid. Occasionally a car stops and picks up one of the other girls, other times one stops and drops a girl off. After a bit you know you need to get back to work and earn money for Ruslan.'
+				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. One of them starts off kinda bitchy, but the other one tells her you work for Ruslan too, which quickly calms her down. You make small talk with them for a bit. The more experienced girls share tips for the newer girls, ways to help encourage guys to stop and the type of guys to avoid. Occasionally, a car stops and picks up one of the other girls. Other times, one stops and drops a girl off. After a bit, you know you need to get back to work and earn money for Ruslan.'
 				act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 			else
 				ruslan_pimp = 1
-				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls, one of them asks "You one of Ruslan''s new girls?"'
-				'You shake your head no. "No I work only for myself"'
-				'The other girls exchange an uneasy look, then one of them tells you. "You should really change your mind, if you work for Ruslan most of the guys know to pay up and the gopniks know to leave you alone, otherwise you can find yourself in a bad spot."'
-				'You smile to her. "Thanks for the advice, I will think about it." With that they make an excuse that then need to get back to work, you can tell they really don''t want to be seen hanging out with you.'
+				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. One of them asks, "You one of Ruslan''s new girls?"'
+				'You shake your head no. "No, I work only for myself."'
+				'The other girls exchange an uneasy look, then one of them tells you, "You should really change your mind. If you work for Ruslan, most of the guys know to pay up, and the gopniks know to leave you alone. Otherwise, you can find yourself in a bad spot."'
+				'You smile at her. "Thanks for the advice, I will think about it." With that, they excuse themselves, saying that they need to get back to work. You can tell they really don''t want to be seen hanging out with you.'
 				act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 				act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 			end
@@ -207,18 +207,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/street/mugger.jpg"></center>'
 	if ruslan_meet = 0:
 		ruslan_meet = 1
-		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck. As the next car passes you turn and nearly run into a man who walked directly in front of you. You stop and give him your best smile. "You looking to party handsome?"'
-		'He looks you over like a side of beef, then finally looks into your eyes which most guys never do. "It''s dangerous for a young thing like you to be out walking the streets this time of night. I can protect you and make sure no one bothers you, just ask any of my other girls, how good Ruslan protects them."'
+		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you turn and nearly run into a man who walked directly in front of you. You stop and give him your best smile. "You looking to party handsome?"'
+		'He looks you over like a side of beef, then finally looks into your eyes, which most guys never do. "It''s dangerous for a young thing like you to be out walking the streets this time of night. I can protect you and make sure no one bothers you, just ask any of my other girls how good Ruslan protects them."'
 	else
-		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck. As the next car passes you turn and see Ruslan your wouldbe pimp blocking your path.'
-		'You stop as he looks you over. "You come to your sense yet?"'
+		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you turn and see Ruslan, your would-be pimp, blocking your path.'
+		'You stop as he looks you over. "You come to your senses yet?"'
 	end
 	act 'Accept his deal':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		ruslan_pimp = 2
 		'You nod your head in agreement. "Yeah you''re right, having some protection would be a good thing."'
-		'When you say that he is all smiles suddenly and pulls you up beside him as he wraps his arm around you."Good good, I knew you were a smart girl. Now every Friday I will come by and collect my half of what you make. You better not hold out on me, the other girls will tell me if you do. Now here is my number, if anyone refuses to pay or you have problems you call." Once you add his number to your contact list, he slaps you on the ass. "Now get to work!" With that he turns and walks off leaving you to wonder if this was a good idea.'
+		'When you say that, he is all smiles suddenly and pulls you up beside him as he wraps his arm around you. "Good good, I knew you were a smart girl. Now every Friday I will come by and collect my half of what you make. You better not hold out on me, the other girls will tell me if you do. Now here is my number. If anyone refuses to pay or you have problems, you call." Once you add his number to your contact list, he slaps you on the ass. "Now get to work!" With that, he turns and walks off, leaving you to wonder if this was a good idea.'
 		act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 		act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	end
@@ -229,8 +229,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
 			minut += 5
-			'You shake your head no. "Thank you but I am doing ok."'
-			'He frowns and his eyes take on a hard glint, for a moment you think he might do something, but finally he just nods. "Very well have it your way, but don''t say I didn''t warn you. I will check back on you some other time and see if you came to your senses yet."'
+			'You shake your head no. "Thank you, but I am doing ok."'
+			'He frowns, and his eyes take on a hard glint. For a moment, you think he might do something, but finally, he just nods. "Very well have it your way, but don''t say I didn''t warn you. I will check back on you some other time and see if you came to your senses yet."'
 			act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 			act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 		end
@@ -263,8 +263,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event4':
 	if prst_caught = 0:
 		prst_caught = 1
 		'"What''s your price?" a man asks from behind you.'
-		'"The price is-" you stop in your tracks as you turn to notice a man dressed in all black. You stare for a moment, he''s giving you a weird vibe, looking at you with a cold and calculating gaze. Something tells you to play it cool so you change your answer. "Uh, I''m sorry, sir, can you repeat that? I don''t think I heard you clearly..." You try to lie.'
-		'The man''s eyes narrow dangerously, and as he moves you catch a glimpse of a police badge clipped to his hip. He''s a cop! "Don''t play dumb, girl. Go on, finish what you were going to say before!"'
+		'"The price is-" you stop in your tracks as you turn to notice a man dressed in all black. You stare for a moment. He''s giving you a weird vibe, looking at you with a cold and calculating gaze. Something tells you to play it cool, so you change your answer. "Uh, I''m sorry, sir, can you repeat that? I don''t think I heard you clearly..." you try to lie.'
+		'The man''s eyes narrow dangerously, and as he moves, you catch a glimpse of a police badge clipped to his hip. He''s a cop! "Don''t play dumb, girl. Go on, finish what you were going to say before!"'
 
 		act 'Keep on lying': gt 'street_walker', 'policelie'
 		act 'Offer him a bribe': gt 'street_walker', 'policebribe'
@@ -296,15 +296,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/bargin' + rand(1,3) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'A car slows down and pulls up the curb where you are walking, he is obviously look at you. So you walk over to him, as you do he rolls down his window. You bend over and practically lean into his window. "You looking to party handsome?"'
+	'A car slows down and pulls up to the curb where you are walking. He is obviously looking at you, so you walk over to him. As you do, he rolls down his window. You bend over and practically lean into his window. "You looking to party handsome?"'
 	'He looks you over as best he can and licks his lips. "How much?"'
-	'You smile to him. "That depends on what you want to do." You take a little time listening to his wants and telling him the price before he decides.'
+	'You smile at him. "That depends on what you want to do." You take a little time listening to his wants and telling him the price before he decides.'
 	if rand(0,1) = 0:
 		'He decides he wants a blowjob.'
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided you get into the car.'
+			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'blowjob'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -313,7 +313,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided you get into the car.'
+			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'vaginal'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -322,7 +322,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided you get into the car.'
+			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'anal'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -335,23 +335,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/ridefront.jpg"></center>'
-	'With the price settled, you walk around and open the passenger door and slide into the car. You are barely have time to close the door, when he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does he looks over at you and says. "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body and he leans back in his seat.'
+	'With the price settled, you walk around and open the passenger door and slide into the car. You barely have time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you and says, "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body, and he leans back in his seat.'
 	act 'Unbutton his pants':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him, he starts to moan softly almost at once.'
+		'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge, and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him. He starts to moan softly almost at once.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck his dick':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-			'He starts to get antsy obviously wanting more, you can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his precum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, you start sucking his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and being pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
+			'He starts to get antsy, obviously wanting more. You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his precum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and begin pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep sucking':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-				'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
+				'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly, you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish him':
@@ -359,8 +359,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 					money += 500
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a prostitution client', 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue, as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he sperm fills your mouth, you keep sucking until there is no more hot spurts. You raise up showing him his own cum and then swallow it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants. Sliding the seat back forward he pulls out a wad of cash and hands it to you.'
-					'You spend a few moments straighten up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on, he pulled up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that he quickly pulls away.'
+					'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants. Sliding the seat back forward, he pulls out a wad of cash and hands it to you.'
+					'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that he quickly pulls away.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -377,21 +377,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vaginal':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/rideback.jpg"></center>'
-	'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. Once you close the door, he pulls away from the curb. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car and says. "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door, you slide over giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
+	'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. Once you close the door, he pulls away from the curb. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area. Stopping the car, he says, "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
 	act 'Wait':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You wait to let him take control of the situation, you know most guys like that. After a few moments of him looking around to make sure no one is around he starts to unbutton his pants, pulling them down. He reaches over and grabs you by the hair and pulls your head down to his dick, you open your mouth and take his still mostly flaccid cock in your mouth, while your hand strokes the shaft.'
+		'You wait to let him take control of the situation, you know most guys like that. After a few moments of him looking around to make sure no one is there, he starts to unbutton his pants, pulling them down. He reaches over, grabs you by the hair and pulls your head down to his dick. You open your mouth and take his still mostly flaccid cock in your mouth, while your hand strokes the shaft.'
 		act 'Suck his dick':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Between your mouth and hand it doesn''t take you to long to get him hard. He starts to moan a bit, "Yeah that''s it suck my cock you dirty whore." He seems to enjoy talking to you, you don''t mind it pays all the same. You keep sucking as he continues you verbally degrade you.'
+			'Between your mouth and hand, it doesn''t take you to long to get him hard. He starts to moan a bit, "Yeah that''s it suck my cock you dirty whore." He seems to enjoy talking to you. You don''t mind, it pays all the same. You keep sucking as he continues to verbally degrade you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Let him fuck you':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck3.jpg"></center>'
-				'He pulls your head off his dick and says "Get undressed and lay back." You quickly undress and lay on the seat on your back, spreading your legs. As you do you see him sliding a condom on, with both the condom and you in place he moves over and slides on top of you. He quickly and roughly shoves his dick inside of your pussy, the lubrication from the condom helps. Then he starts fucking you, as hard and fast as he can, grunting the whole time, occasionally banging your head or shoulder against the arm rest on the door. Not the most comfortable of places to have sex, but then comfort isn''t why you are here.'
+				'He pulls your head off his dick and says, "Get undressed and lie back." You quickly undress and lie on the seat on your back, spreading your legs. As you do, you see him sliding a condom on. With both the condom and you in place, he moves over and slides on top of you. He quickly and roughly shoves his dick inside of your pussy, the lubrication from the condom helps. Then he starts fucking you as hard and fast as he can, grunting the whole time, occasionally banging your head or shoulder against the arm rest on the door. Not the most comfortable of places to have sex, but then comfort isn''t why you are here.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish him':
@@ -399,8 +399,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vaginal':
 					money += 1200
 					gs 'cum_call', 'breasts', 'a prostitution client', 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck4.jpg"></center>'
-					'He suddenly pulls out of you and tears the condom off. Followed him by him climbing further on you, as he starts jerking off. With in seconds his hot cum starts flying landing all over your breasts, as he moans loudly. Once finally finished he climbs off you and starts to get dressed, stopping briefly to hand you a wad of cash.'
-					'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed, as you do he gets out and gets back into the drivers seat and drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on, he pulled up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that he quickly pulls away.'
+					'He suddenly pulls out of you and tears the condom off. This is followed by him climbing further on you as he starts jerking off. Within seconds, his hot cum starts flying, landing all over your breasts as he moans loudly. Once finally finished, he climbs off you and starts to get dressed, stopping briefly to hand you a wad of cash.'
+					'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets out, gets back into the driver''s seat and drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. Pulling up to the curb and stopping, he now seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that, he quickly pulls away.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -420,34 +420,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo1.jpg"></center>'
-		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind the older guy, he is easily old enough to be your father. Once you close the door, he looks at you in the review mirror. "Put on your seat belt. Safty first."'
+		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind the older guy, he is easily old enough to be your father. Once you close the door, he looks at you in the rearview mirror. "Put on your seat belt. Safety first."'
 		act 'Go for a ride':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/rideback.jpg"></center>'
-			'Then pulls away from the curb and drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car and says. "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door, you slide over giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
-			act 'Get Undressed':
+			'He pulls away from the curb and drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area. Stopping the car, he says, "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
+			act 'Get undressed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He looks you over a moment. "Can you undress" When you start to he quickly adds. "Slowly" You smile to him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him, you can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
+				'He looks you over a moment. "Can you undress." When you start to, he quickly adds, "Slowly." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. You can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck his dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo3.jpg"></center>'
-					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take his dick into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly obviously enjoying what you are doing.'
+					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take it into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly, obviously enjoying what you are doing.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo4.jpg"></center>'
-						'After a time he speaks up. "Lay back, I want to fuck you." You raise up and then lay back in the seat spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs, he rubs your clit a bit to get you wetter, once he feels you are wet enough he slides his dick inside of you and starts to slowly fuck you. The wetter you get the faster he starts to fuck you.'
+						'After a time, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You rise up and then lie back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs and rubs your clit a bit to get you wetter. Once he feels you are wet enough, he slides his dick inside of you and starts to slowly fuck you. The wetter you get the faster he starts to fuck you.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Take it in the ass':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo5.jpg"></center>'
-							'When he pulls out he starts to use his hands to help you roll over as he says "Roll over and get on your knee''s I want to fuck that pretty little ass of yours now." With his help you quickly roll over and get on your elbows and knees, with your ass up for him. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he slides it in. When you tense up a bit, he stops to give you a moment to get us to it before he slides it the rest of the way in.'
-							'He slowly works his way balls deep into your ass, taking his time. It is sweet of him but not really necessary, you are used to being fucked and you are here for the money. Moaning loudly, like you are loving it, you know guys like that. He picks up the pace and starts fucking your ass harder.'
+							'When he pulls out, he starts to use his hands to help reposition you as he says, "Roll over and get on your knees. I want to fuck that pretty little ass of yours now." With his help, you quickly do as he says and get on your elbows and knees, with your ass up for him. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he slides it in. When you tense up a bit, he stops to give you a moment to get used to it before he slides it the rest of the way in.'
+							'He slowly works his way balls deep into your ass, taking his time. It is sweet of him but not really necessary, you are used to being fucked and you are here for the money. You moan loudly like you are loving it, you know guys like that. He picks up the pace and starts fucking your ass harder.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'prostitution'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Finish him':
@@ -455,8 +455,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 								money += 1500
 								gs 'cum_call','face', 'a prostitution client', 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo6.jpg"></center>'
-								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum" As he pulls out of your ass, you turn around and start jerking him off with your hand, aiming his cock right at your face. Within moment hot sprays of cum start splattering against your face, you keep jerking him until you have milked him of every last drop.'
-								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed, as you do he gets out of the back and gets back into the drivers seat. He waits for you to finish getting dressed, cleaned up and put your seat belt back on before he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on, he pulled up to the curb and stops. Once stopped he passes you back a wad of cash, as you get out of the car he opens his window and says. "I had a great time, maybe I will see you again." With that he rolls up his window and drives off.'
+								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum." As he pulls out of your ass, you turn around and start jerking him off with your hand, aiming his cock right at your face. Within moment, hot sprays of cum start splattering against your face. You keep jerking him until you have milked him of every last drop.'
+								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets out of the back and gets back into the drivers seat. He waits for you to finish getting dressed, cleaning up and putting your seat belt back on before he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Once stopped, he passes you a wad of cash. As you get out of the car, he opens his window and says, "I had a great time, maybe I will see you again." With that, he rolls up his window and drives off.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -473,36 +473,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. He looks at you in the review mirror and eyes you up and down. You smile to him and lean back to give him a good look.'
+		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. He looks at you in the rearview mirror and eyes you up and down. You smile at him and lean back to give him a good look.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'unknown'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Go for a ride':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/rideback.jpg"></center>'
-			'Then pulls away from the curb and drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car and says. "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door, you slide over giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
-			act 'Get Undressed':
+			'He pulls away from the curb and drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area. Stopping the car, he says, "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
+			act 'Get undressed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He looks you over a moment. "Get undressed I want to see what I am paying for." You smile to him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him, you can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
+				'He looks you over a moment. "Get undressed, I want to see what I am paying for." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. You can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck his dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy3.jpg"></center>'
-					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take his dick into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly obviously enjoying what you are doing. You feel his hand slap you on the ass a few times, before he slides a finger into your pussy to get it nice and wet, then slides his finger into your ass and finders your ass as you blow him.'
+					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take it into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly, obviously enjoying what you are doing. You feel his hand slap you on the ass a few times, before he slides a finger into your pussy to get it nice and wet, then slides it into your ass and fingers you as you blow him.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy4.jpg"></center>'
-						'After a time he speaks up. "Lay back, I want to fuck you." You raise up and then lay back in the seat spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs and his dick inside of you and starts to fuck you. He slowly picks up his pace fucking you faster, then he pulls out and slaps you on the hip. "Roll over bitch, I want to fuck your ass."'
+						'After a time, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You rise up and then lie back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs, slides his dick inside of you and starts to fuck you. He slowly picks up his pace, fucking you faster, then he pulls out and slaps you on the hip. "Roll over bitch, I want to fuck your ass."'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Take it in the ass':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy5.jpg"></center>'
 							'You roll over and get on your elbows and knees, with your ass up for him. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he shoves it in. When you tense up a bit, he grabs ahold of your hips so you can''t pull away and shoves it the rest of the way into your ass...'
-							'He pounds his way balls deep into your ass, he picks up the pace and starts fucking your ass harder. He starts slapping your ass, as he pounds it as hard and fast as he can.'
+							'He pounds his way balls deep into your ass, picking up the pace and starting to fuck your ass harder. He starts slapping your ass as he pounds it as hard and fast as he can.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'prostitution'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Finish him':
@@ -510,8 +510,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 								money += 1500
 								gs 'cum_call','breasts', 'a prostitution client', 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy6.jpg"></center>'
-								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum" As he pulls out of your ass, he roughly flips you over and straddles you, as he starts jerking off. Soon his cum is flying landing all over you breasts.'
-								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed, as you do he gets out of the back and gets back into the drivers seat. He doesn''t even wait for you to finish getting cleaned up and dressed. During the drive back he tosses a wad of cash back, most of it ending up on the floor. You quickly gather it all up as he stops at the same curb he picked you up from. You barely even close the door after you get out before he pulls away.'
+								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum." As he pulls out of your ass, he roughly flips you over and straddles you as he starts jerking off. Soon his cum is flying, landing all over you breasts.'
+								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. Not even waiting for you to finish, he gets out of the back and gets back into the driver''s seat. During the drive back, he tosses a wad of cash back, most of it ending up on the floor. You quickly gather it all up as he stops at the same curb he picked you up from. You barely even close the door after you get out before he pulls away.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -531,27 +531,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-	'You desperately look around and try to come up with an excuse, "Well girl?" the police officer asks.'
-	'You clear your throat, "Yes, sir you''ve caught me, I''ve been prostituting. But how about I show you a good time and you let me go?" you divert your eyes towards his genitalia while licking your lips.'
+	'You desperately look around and try to come up with an excuse. "Well girl?" the police officer asks.'
+	'You clear your throat, "Yes, sir you''ve caught me, I''ve been prostituting. But how about I show you a good time and you let me go?" You divert your eyes towards his genitalia while licking your lips.'
 
 	if rand(0,5) = 0:
-		'The police officer grunts and points towards his car, you walk around and open the passenger door and slide into the car. You are barely have time to close the door, when he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does he looks over at you and says. "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body and he leans back in his seat.'
+		'The police officer grunts and points towards his car. You walk around, open the passenger door and slide inside. You barely have time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you and says, "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body, and he leans back in his seat.'
 		act 'Unbutton his pants':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him, he starts to moan softly almost at once.'
+			'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge, and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him. He starts to moan softly almost at once.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Suck his dick':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He starts to get antsy obviously wanting more, you can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his pre-cum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, you start sucking his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and being pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
+				'He starts to get antsy, obviously wanting more. You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his pre-cum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and being pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Keep sucking':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-					'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
+					'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly, you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					if rand(1,10) > 2:
@@ -559,8 +559,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a police officer', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue, as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he sperm fills your mouth, you keep sucking until there is no more hot spurts. You raise up showing him his own cum and then swallow it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
-							'You spend a few moments straighten up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on, he pulled up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that he quickly pulls away.'
+							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
+							'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that, he quickly pulls away.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -571,9 +571,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 							prst_bribe = 2
 							gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a police officer', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue, as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he sperm fills your mouth, you keep sucking until there is no more hot spurts. You raise up showing him his own cum and then swallow it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
-							'You spend a few moments straighten up your clothes and checking your makeup as he continues driving on, "Where are you taking me?" you ask.'
-							'"What girl? You thought this was enough? No, no, no... I''ll be taking you to the police station, where you belong." He mockingly answers as he quickly speeds towards the police station.'
+							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
+							'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he continues driving on. "Where are you taking me?" you ask.'
+							'"What girl? You thought this was enough? No, no, no... I''ll be taking you to the police station where you belong," he mockingly answers as he quickly speeds towards the police station.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 
@@ -587,9 +587,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 		prst_bribe = 2
 		*nl
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What is wrong with you girl? Are you trying to solicitate a member of the law?" the police office angrily responds.'
+		'"What is wrong with you girl? Are you trying to solicit a member of the law?" the police office angrily responds.'
 		'"N-No officer. I was just thinking the two of us could have a good time..." you try once again, maybe he misunderstood you.'
-		'"That''s it! You''re coming with me, whore!" he turns you around, cuffs you and leads you to the police car. He shoves you in the back and quickly drives off towards the police station.'
+		'"That''s it! You''re coming with me, whore!" He turns you around, cuffs you and leads you to the police car. He shoves you in the back and quickly drives off towards the police station.'
 
 		act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
 	end
@@ -601,12 +601,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policelie':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
 	'You swallow hard and let slip a worried chuckle. "R-right... well, to answer your question, the time is..."'
-	'"The <i>time</i>?" The officer interrupts, his lips twisting into a deeper scowl. He takes a step closer and you catch a whiff of stale coffee and cigarettes.'
-	'"Yeah, isn''t that what you asked?" You ask innocently.'
+	'"The <i>time</i>?" the officer interrupts, his lips twisting into a deeper scowl. He takes a step closer and you catch a whiff of stale coffee and cigarettes.'
+	'"Yeah, isn''t that what you asked?" you ask innocently.'
 	'Unamused, the officer crosses his arms over his chest. "I know what you''re doing out here, lying won''t get you anywhere except a visit to the police station."'
 	'Your eyes immediately drop to the ground at the mention of being arrested. Heart racing, palms sweaty, you take a deep breath before nodding slowly. "I''m sorry, sir... you''re right, I was out here working..."'
 	'He scoffs. "What, suddenly you''re shy about it? Let me hear you <i>say</i> it," he orders coldly, and all you can do is nod again.'
-	'"I was... I''m a prostitute, sir..." You say quietly.'
+	'"I was... I''m a prostitute, sir..." you say quietly.'
 
 	act 'Beg him to let you go':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -633,21 +633,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeexp':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You wrack your brain for a good answer but come up with nothing. "No... I was just... on my way home." You look up and bat your eyelashes innocently but he seems unfazed.'
-	'His expression darkens. "You think I''m stupid, girl?" he barks back so suddenly and loudly that it makes you jump slightly. You quickly shake your head and try to apologize, but he cuts you off. "I''ve been watching you for awhile now and all you''ve been doing is slinking up and down the streets looking for customers!"'
+	'You wrack your brain for a good answer but come up with nothing. "No... I was just... on my way home." You look up and bat your eyelashes innocently, but he seems unfazed.'
+	'His expression darkens. "You think I''m stupid, girl?" he barks back so suddenly and loudly that it makes you jump slightly. You quickly shake your head and try to apologize, but he cuts you off. "I''ve been watching you for a while now, and all you''ve been doing is slinking up and down the streets looking for customers!"'
 	'You swallow hard as your eyes look everywhere except at him. "I... I think you might have me confused with someone else..." You start to take a step back, but the officer grabs your upper arm with an iron grip and pulls you back close.'
-	'"You really wanna keep lying to me?! You''re just making this a lot worse for yourself..." He tightens his grip even more and you wince softly. It''s not enough to really hurt you but it gets his point across.'
-	'"Alright, alright, I was! I was whoring!" You admit with a huff. "Please... please just give me a break! I don''t want to go to jail... I can''t!" Before the last words are out your mouth, you start to sniffle and soon tears are rolling down your cheeks.'
+	'"You really wanna keep lying to me?! You''re just making this a lot worse for yourself..." He tightens his grip even more, and you wince softly. It''s not enough to really hurt you, but it gets his point across.'
+	'"Alright, alright, I was! I was whoring!" you admit with a huff. "Please... please just give me a break! I don''t want to go to jail... I can''t!" Before the last words are out your mouth, you start to sniffle and soon tears are rolling down your cheeks.'
 
 	act 'Beg him to let you go':
 		*clr & cla
 		if rand(1,10) > 4:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'"...Alright, stop your crying..." The officer says, but you''re barely able to hear him between your sobbing.'
-			'"Wh... what?" You ask when you feel him release his grip on your arm. Through blurry eyes, you see the officer is giving you a pitiful yet uncomfortable look. "You''re letting me go?"'
+			'"...Alright, stop your crying..." the officer says, but you''re barely able to hear him between your sobbing.'
+			'"Wh... what?" you ask when you feel him release his grip on your arm. Through blurry eyes, you see the officer is giving you a pitying yet uncomfortable look. "You''re letting me go?"'
 			'He clears his throat awkwardly. "Yeah, I am... but you better head straight home. I don''t want to see you out here again, understand?"'
-			'You quickly nod, wiping away the tears as you compose yourself. "Thank you!" You say, but he just responds with a grunt before waving you away.'
+			'You quickly nod, wiping away the tears as you compose yourself. "Thank you!" you say, but he just responds with a grunt before waving you away.'
 
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 		else
@@ -666,9 +666,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policebribe':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/bribe.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Your heart skips a beat as you think of what to do! He must already know you''re out here whoring so lying would definitely get you into more trouble. You heard that some girls offer sexual favors to avoid trouble, but it feels like too much of a risk. As you stand there squirming, you suddenly get an idea and hope it''ll get you out of this.'
+	'Your heart skips a beat as you think of what to do! He must already know you''re out here whoring, so lying would definitely get you into more trouble. You heard that some girls offer sexual favors to avoid trouble, but it feels like too much of a risk. As you stand there squirming, you suddenly get an idea and hope it''ll get you out of this.'
 	*nl
-	'"Listen... I have some money... y''know, that I earned tonight?" You start to reach for your pocket, but the cop tenses, obviously weary of what you might be grabbing for. "No, no! It''s just money, I promise!" You reassure him as you slowly pull out a handful of crumpled bills. "This is all I have, and you can have it if... you let me go," You say quietly, your hand held out to him. He looks at you then at the money with an unreadable expression. The silence seems to stretch on forever until you speak up again, trying to further convince him. "Please, sir... I really don''t want to go to jail..."'
+	'"Listen... I have some money... y''know, that I earned tonight?" You start to reach for your pocket, but the cop tenses, obviously wary of what you might be grabbing for. "No, no! It''s just money, I promise!" you reassure him as you slowly pull out a handful of crumpled bills. "This is all I have, and you can have it if... you let me go," you say quietly, your hand held out to him. He looks at you then at the money with an unreadable expression. The silence seems to stretch on forever until you speak up again, trying to further convince him. "Please, sir... I really don''t want to go to jail..."'
 
 	act 'Wait for his reaction': gt 'street_walker', 'briberyreaction'
 end
@@ -695,7 +695,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'briberyreaction':
 		*nl
 		'His lips turn up into a disgusted sneer. Before you can react, he slaps your hand away, the money exploding out into the air and onto the ground. "You think I can be paid off, whore?!" he snarls as you stand there holding your red and stinging hand. You knew there was a chance this could happen, but you didn''t expect him to get physical.'
 		*nl
-		'"I''m sorry! Please, let me--" You try to plead with him but he makes a sudden move towards you that causes you to flinch, fearing he''s going to hit you.'
+		'"I''m sorry! Please, let me--" You try to plead with him, but he makes a sudden move towards you that causes you to flinch, fearing he''s going to hit you.'
 		*nl
 		'"Shut the hell up, slut!" He grabs your arm and twists it behind you, forcing you to turn your back to him or potentially suffer a broken limb. He slaps the cuffs around your wrists, making sure they''re extra tight before shoving you into the back of his unmarked police car to drive you to the station.'
 
@@ -720,7 +720,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'briberyreaction':
 		'He chuckles and shakes his head. "C''mon, you have something better to offer me, don''t you?" His eyes roam over your body slowly, taking in every curve and exposed bit of skin with a hungry look.'
 		*nl
 		'You know exactly what he wants, but you hesitate. There''s horror stories among other prostitutes about girls who have given sexual favors to an officer to get out of being arrested, only to end up being the plaything for every cop in the district. Passed around, treated like their personal cum dump. When it''s the cops hurting you, who can you turn to for help?'
-		'"Please, isn''t this enough?" You ask weakly, but the officer scoffs.'
+		'"Please, isn''t this enough?" you ask weakly, but the officer scoffs.'
 		*nl
 		'"Listen, I can either take you to jail or I can fuck you and let you go. Those are your only two options, so take it or leave it," he tells you. As you stand there, his hand moves to the front of his jeans to squeeze his growing erection with a grin.'
 
@@ -730,7 +730,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'briberyreaction':
 			prst_bribe = 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-			'"No... no, I can''t do that..." You tell him as you pull your hand back and pocket your money again. The officer looks disappointed but doesn''t seem to dwell on it. He probably has another girl like you he''s forced into fucking him...'
+			'"No... no, I can''t do that..." you tell him as you pull your hand back and pocket your money again. The officer looks disappointed but doesn''t seem to dwell on it. He probably has another girl like you he''s forced into fucking him...'
 			'"Fine by me, slut. Hands behind your back," he orders and you comply. In a matter of seconds, you''re cuffed and in the back of his unmarked car being driven to the station to be booked.'
 			act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
 		end
@@ -745,21 +745,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policesub1':
 	gs 'pain', 4, 'nipples', 'pinch'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/policesub.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Alright... if that''s what it takes," You say reluctantly. You''re barely given a chance to put away the money before he''s pulling you to a dark, secluded area between two buildings. In the darkness, you can''t make out anything he''s doing. "Um, lets make this qui-" Your words are cut off as you''re shoved against the cold, hard brick wall of one of the buildings. You can only whimper as the officer presses his body against you.'
+	'"Alright... if that''s what it takes," you say reluctantly. You''re barely given a chance to put away the money before he''s pulling you to a dark, secluded area between two buildings. In the darkness, you can''t make out anything he''s doing. "Um, lets make this qui-" Your words are cut off as you''re shoved against the cold, hard brick wall of one of the buildings. You can only whimper as the officer presses his body against you.'
 	*nl
-	'"Shut up, slut," he breathes into your ear. "I''ll do what I want with you." Using one arm, he hooks it under both of yours and forces them behind your back while his free hand roughly kneads your breast. Violently, he yanks down your top to expose your breasts to the cool air and naturally your nipples begin to stiffen, something he takes as a sign that you''re enjoying yourself. "Such a dirty little whore..." He punctuates his sentence by taking your nipple between his fingers and pinching down hard.'
+	'"Shut up, slut," he breathes into your ear. "I''ll do what I want with you." Using one arm, he hooks it under both of yours and forces them behind your back while his free hand roughly kneads your breast. Violently, he yanks down your top to expose your breasts to the cool air, and naturally your nipples begin to stiffen, something he takes as a sign that you''re enjoying yourself. "Such a dirty little whore..." He punctuates his sentence by taking your nipples between his fingers and pinching down hard.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Beg him to be gentler':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'pain', 5, 'vaginal', 'tear'
-		'"Ah! Please, not so rough..." You beg but it goes unheard. He continues to pinch and twist your nipple until they''re left red and tender. When he releases your arms, you collapse against the wall with a sigh of relief. You can''t see it, but you definitely hear the crinkle of a condom wrapper. At least he''s using protection.'
-		'Tugging and pulling at your clothes until your pussy is exposed, he plunges two fingers inside and spreads them a few times before removing them. "Bend over, slut," he orders and you obey quickly. You feel the tip of his rubbered cock for only a moment before he thrusts forward, the entire length of his member driven into you in one go. It''s uncomfortable to say the least, but you bite your lip to stifle a pained whimper. He drives his dick into you without pause or care for you over and over.'
+		'"Ah! Please, not so rough..." you beg, but it goes unheard. He continues to pinch and twist your nipples until they''re left red and tender. When he releases your arms, you collapse against the wall with a sigh of relief. You can''t see it, but you definitely hear the crinkle of a condom wrapper. At least he''s using protection.'
+		'Tugging and pulling at your clothes until your pussy is exposed, he plunges two fingers inside and spreads them a few times before removing them. "Bend over, slut," he orders, and you obey quickly. You feel the tip of his rubbered cock for only a moment before he thrusts forward, the entire length of his member driven into you in one go. It''s uncomfortable to say the least, but you bite your lip to stifle a pained whimper. He drives his dick into you without pause or care for you over and over.'
 		*nl
-		'"I''m about to cum...!" You hear him groan and soon after he''s pressing balls deep inside you, his cock twitching as he fills the condom. He pulls out slow and you''re left feeling raw and numb.'
+		'"I''m about to cum...!" You hear him groan, and soon after, he''s pressing balls deep inside you, his cock twitching as he fills the condom. He pulls out slow, and you''re left feeling raw and numb.'
 		*nl
-		'As you readjust your clothes, you see him tie up the used condom but rather than toss it, he puts it back in the wrapper. He''s not stupid, he he''s not going to leave any DNA evidence behind. "Alright, a deal''s a deal. You''re free to go," he tells you as he zips up his pants. As you make your way back to the street, you think you hear him say the boys will enjoy playing with you...'
+		'As you readjust your clothes, you see him tie up the used condom, but rather than toss it, he puts it back in the wrapper. He''s not stupid, he''s not going to leave any DNA evidence behind. "Alright, a deal''s a deal. You''re free to go," he tells you as he zips up his pants. As you make your way back to the street, you think you hear him say the boys will enjoy playing with you...'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'
@@ -777,11 +777,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policesub2':
 	gs 'pain', 2, 'twist', 'pinch'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/policesub2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Right... I understand..." You answer weakly as his grin widens. Leading him to quiet and secluded area, he wastes no time hiking your dress up and shoving his knee between your legs to spread them. Careless and rough, his fingers dig into the soft flesh of your breasts as he gropes them. You don''t do much except stand there, absently looking upward to the sky as you try your best to focus your attention on anything but this.'
+	'"Right... I understand..." you answer weakly as his grin widens. Leading you to a quiet and secluded area, he wastes no time hiking your dress up and shoving his knee between your legs to spread them. Careless and rough, his fingers dig into the soft flesh of your breasts as he gropes them. You don''t do much except stand there, absently looking upward to the sky as you try your best to focus your attention on anything but this.'
 	*nl
-	'"Turn around," he orders and you obey without a word. You stick your ass out for him and he pulls your panties down to your thighs. You hear him spit, using it as improvised lube as he smears it along his condom covered dick. In one violent thrust, he''s buried deep inside your pussy, stretching your walls and filling you completely. You wince and grit your teeth as he fucks you fast and hard. His labored breathing picks up and with a grunt, you feel his cock throb as the condom is filled with his hot load. You stand there, bent over with him panting over you as you wait for his dick to stop twitching. Finally, he pulls out and you''re left with a dull pain between your legs.'
+	'"Turn around," he orders, and you obey without a word. You stick your ass out for him, and he pulls your panties down to your thighs. You hear him spit, using it as improvised lube as he smears it along his condom covered dick. In one violent thrust, he''s buried deep inside your pussy, stretching your walls and filling you completely. You wince and grit your teeth as he fucks you fast and hard. His labored breathing picks up, and with a grunt, you feel his cock throb as the condom is filled with his hot load. You stand there, bent over with him panting over you as you wait for his dick to stop twitching. Finally, he pulls out and you''re left with a dull pain between your legs.'
 	*nl
-	'"Alright," he begins while pulling the used condom off with a rubbery snap before tying it up neatly. "You can go now, whore." He snickers as he watches you pull your panties back up and readjust your clothes. Sore and humiliated, you stagger back to the streets.'
+	'"Alright," he begins while pulling the used condom off with a rubbery snap before tying it up neatly, "you can go now, whore." He snickers as he watches you pull your panties back up and readjust your clothes. Sore and humiliated, you stagger back to the streets.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'prostitution', 'rough', 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'

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