[text edit] Text edits of old machin translations to full English from Pocket

locations/Club2.qsrc

@@ -9,9 +9,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet1':
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You went into the booth and closed the door. The walls are covered with obscene graffiti in the walls and booths carved strange round holes. Sitting on the toilet you hear what that noise in the next stall. Through the hole in the wall you looked someone''s eyes.'
-	'In a hole in the wall squeezed fat cock. Lustful voice said, "here''s a yum yum, baby."'
-	'This is so not surprisingly, that you do not believe in the reality of what is happening to touch the finger member. It is hard and hot.'
+	'You went into the booth and closed the door. The walls are covered with obscene graffiti, and holes are carved in opposite walls. Sitting on the toilet you hear a noise coming from the next stall, and then someone''s eye appears at the hole.'
+	'The next thing you know, a cock is pushed through the hole. A lustful voice says, "here''s a treat for you, baby."'
+	'This is so unexpected, that you hardly believe any of this is real, as you tentatively touch their member. It is hard and hot.'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'club', 'inside'
 
@@ -24,7 +24,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet1':
 		pcs_throat += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory1.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You lean against a member, it''s so big, warm and solid, you licked it, then again and again.'
+		'This is so surreal, but you lean closer to their member and impulsively find yourself licking it, again and again.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -33,8 +33,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet1':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory2.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You bows member lips and start sucking it, trying to take it as deep as possible.'
-			'Suddenly, in your mouth and poured hot tart liquid.'
+			'You wrap your lips around the head and start sucking, trying to take it as deep as possible.'
+			'Suddenly, the reality of the situation comes flooding back into your head - and a warm liquid comes flooding into your mouth.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -47,8 +47,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet1':
 				money += 1000
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory3.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'You dial a mouthful of sperm, and then swallow it, sperm is not tasty, sticky and sharp taste.'
-				'A male voice telling you - excellent crumb, the money you deserve, a member of the hole and the hole disappears pushes 1,000 RUB.'
+				'You gather a mouthful of sperm, and then swallow it. Their sperm has a sticky and sharp taste which makes you grimace.'
+				'A man''s voice tells you - "That was fucking great, here, you deserve it." and then 1,000 RUB are pushed through the hole.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -63,8 +63,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet1':
 				money += 500
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory3.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'You dial a mouthful of sperm, the sperm is not tasty, sticky and sharp, you spit it on the floor.'
-				'A male voice telling you - excellent crumb, the money you deserve, a member of the hole and the hole disappears and is replaced by 500 RUB.'
+				'You gather a mouthful of sperm, but the sticky and sharp taste overwhelms you, and you spit it on the floor.'
+				'A man''s voice tells you - "Here, your money." and then 500 RUB are pushed through the hole.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You pee sitting on the toilet and began to wipe your vagina with toilet paper. Apparently you pressed too hard because you embraced the thrill of touching between the legs.'
+	'You pee sitting on the toilet and begin to wipe with toilet paper. Apparently you pressed too hard, as you feel a thrill coming from between the legs.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3 
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -93,9 +93,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/mast/tomas.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You caress his fingers swollen pussy until you orgasm does not cover.'
-		'After orgasm, you take it easy, but hear from the next stall pant, look at the wall you see that someone is peeking through the hole located in the wall.'
-		'The man behind the wall and realized that found giggled, great show. Eye of the holes in the wall and disappeared into it squeezed 500 RUB.'
+		'You caress swollen pussy with your fingers until you orgasm enthusiastically.'
+		'After orgasm, you catch your breath, but then notice someone is peeking at you through a hole in the wall.'
+		'The man behind the wall realises he has been caught, and giggles that you put on a great show. Suddenly the eye disappears, and 500 rubles are pushed through the hole.'
 
 		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5, 'exhibitionism'
@@ -108,8 +108,8 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 	*clr & cla
-	'You sit in a booth and hear someone come into the toilet after you and doors of adjacent booths closing. You realize there is two of them.'
-	'Voice from the next stall tells you - do not be afraid baby, we will not hurt you, on the contrary, we will give you some delicious candy with cream filling.'
+	'You sit in a booth and hear both adjacent doors closing as two others enter.'
+	'A voice from the next stall tells you - "Don''t be afraid baby, we won''t hurt you! On the contrary, we will give you some delicious candy with extra cream filling.'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'club', 'inside'
 
@@ -118,8 +118,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 		slutiness += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory4.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'On both sides of your booth through holes in the walls climbed members. Voice on the wall said, come on, baby, come on, we''re fed.'
-		'You took both members and began to caress them, then bent over to one of the members and took it into your mouth.'
+		'On both sides of your booth cocks poke through holes in the wall. The same voice says, "Come on, baby, come on, feeding time".'
+		'You take both members and begin to caress them, then bend over to one and take it into your mouth.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory6.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
 				'Finally one of the men finishes in your mouth.'
-				'You lick and start to finish processing the second in turn.'
+				'You lick it up and turn all your attention to the other.'
 				
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -149,16 +149,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/glory7.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'The second man also comes in your mouth.'
-					'You swallow a mouthful and wipe your face, but semen is smeared all over it.'
+					'Before long, the second man also comes in your mouth.'
+					'You swallow a mouthful and wipe your face, but find semen smeared all over it.'
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 					
 					if rand(1, 100) > pcs_horny:
-						pcs_horny += 10 & 'You were not satisfied.'
+						pcs_horny += 10 & 'You were not satisfied - after all, they were only in your mouth!'
 						$orgasm_or = 'no'
 					else
-						pcs_horny = 0 & 'Orgasm washes over you.'
+						pcs_horny = 0 & 'Even though they only fucked your mouth, you feel an orgasm wash over you from the sheer depravity of the situation.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 					end
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -167,8 +167,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 						cla
 						money += 2000
 						TQuest = 3
-						'Pleased voice says from behind the wall - "You''re a great pacifier, I think you''ve earned a reward."'
-						'2,000 RUB pokes through the hole in the wall.'
+						'A pleased voice says from behind the wall - "You were great, I think you''ve earned a reward."'
+						'2,000 RUB pokes through the hole.'
 
 						guy += 2
 						swallow += 2
@@ -186,7 +186,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 						if pornstudio = 0:
 							act 'Continue':
 								pornstudio = 2
-								'A male voice says - "Some work for you. Take the card, come if you want to have fun and make money."'
+								'A male voice says "I have some more work for you."'
+								'He pushes a card through the hole and says "Come find me at my studio if you want to have fun and make more money."'
 
 								act 'Leave':gt 'club', 'inside'
 							end
@@ -200,5 +201,4 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet2':
 	end
 end
 
---- Club2 ---------------------------------
-
+--- Club2 ---------------------------------

locations/Peterroom.qsrc

@@ -26,11 +26,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start_door':
 		if petersexday < 1:
 			petersexday += 1
 			'Peter opens the door.'
-			'"Come in and get changed."'
+			'Come in and get changed.'
 
 			act 'Enter the apartment':gt 'peterroom', 'start'
 		else
-			'You ring the doorbell, but no one answers.'
+			'You ring the doorbell but no one answers.'
 
 			act 'Leave':
 				cla
@@ -50,9 +50,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if peter > 0 :
 		peterrand = rand(1, 2)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/9.jpg"></center>'
-		'You get undressed and lock a collar around your neck. You hear Peter in the next room. "Who''s my whore?"'
+		'You get undressed and lock yourself in a collar. From the next room you hear the voice of Peter Vlasnyi saying: "Who is my whore?"'
 
-		act 'I am, Master.':
+		act 'I am, master...':
 			petersex = petersex + 1
 
 			if analplugin = 1 :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
@@ -63,42 +63,45 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		petersexday += 1
 		minut += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you start to undress, he puts a collar down in front of you. It''s a narrow strip of leather with space for a leash to be attached.'
+		'You start to undress. He puts a collar down in front of you. It''s a narrow strip of leather with space for a leash to be attached.'
 
 		act 'Put it on' :
 			*clr
 			cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You put the collar on and Peter strokes you gently on the cheek. Then, without warning, pulls his hand back and slaps you hard. "Lustful girl! Stand up and turn around - hands behind your back!"'
-			'You quickly do as he says, feeling cold metal closing around your wrists.'
+			'You put on the collar. Peter strokes you gently on the cheek, but then suddenly whips you.'
+			'"-Lustful girl! Stand up, turn around, hands behind your back!"'
+			'You do as he says and feel cold metal closing around your wrists.'
 
 			if analplugin = 1 :
 				analplugin = 0
-				'"What do we have here?" Peter grips the end of the butt plug sticking out of your ass, and eases it out.'
+				'"And what have we here?" Peter grips the tip of the butt plug sticking out of your ass, and eases it out.'
 			end
 
-			act 'Submit yourself':
+			act 'Smile':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/3.jpg"></center>'
-				'Peter pulls you by the collar, then shoves you to your knees in front of him. "Come on bitch, open your mouth." he orders.'
+				'Peter pulls you by the collar, pushes you to your knees in front of him and orders: "Come on bitch, open your mouth."'
 
-				act 'Please him':
+				act 'Submit':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/4.jpg"></center>'
-					'Peter unbuttons his pants and pulls out his 25cm cock. He grabs you by the hair and shoves the head in your mouth. You obediently wrap your lips around it, then begin to suck and caress it with your tongue, feeling it grow and strain inside your mouth.'
+					'Peter unbuttons his pants and pulls out his 25cm dick. He grabs you by the hair and shoves the head in your mouth. You obediently wrap your lips around it, sucking and caressing with your tongue, feeling as it grows and strains inside your mouth.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					
-					act 'Continue':
+					act 'Continue' :
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Peter pushes you onto the bed and pushes your legs up to your chest before tightly binding them and your hands together. He then inserts his member into your pussy and starts fucking you hard. After a few minutes, he stops and pulls his cock out of you, unties you and then shoves you to the floor. He walks across the room, turns and says "Crawl to me, bitch!"'
-                        gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
+						'Peter pushes you over and impatiently thrusts his member in your pussy, fucking you like a doll. A few minutes later, he stops, pulls his cock out, pushes you to the floor and orders:'
+						'"Crawl to me, bitch!"'
+
+						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
 					
 						act 'Crawl' :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
@@ -113,10 +116,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/4_1.jpg"></center>'
-						'"You need to be punished!" He rounds the table and forces you on your knees with your ass high in the air. You squeal when he shoves a butt plug deep into your ass before he starts delivering several stinging smacks to your ass cheeks, alternating cheeks with each strike. He counts the strikes aloud, ignoring your pained sobs.'
+						'"I will punish you!" With these words Peter crosses the table and shoves a plug into your ass. - He then starts whipping your ass, alternating cheeks. He counts the strikes aloud, ignoring your sobs...'
 						'"Beg me to fuck you, whore!"'
-                        'Please fuck me, Master! Please! Fuck me like the dirty little whore I am!'
-						act 'Continue' :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
+
+						act 'Yes! I''ll be your whore!' :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
 					end
 				else
 					act 'Refuse (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -133,8 +136,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'klap':
 	*clr
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/6.jpg"></center>'
-	'Peter puts you on a leash and leads you into the bedroom. He pushes you onto the huge bed and securely ties your hands and feet before fastening a ball gag into your mouth.'
-	'"I love you <<$pcs_nickname>>, especially when you moan, but when you''re allowed to talk, you start spouting nonsense. So I think you''re better off gagged.'
+	'Peter puts you on a leash and leads you into the bedroom. He pushes you onto the huge bed and ties your hands and feet.'
+	'Then he puts you into a mouth gag:- a ball on a strap, fastened at the back.'
+	'"I love you, <<$pcs_nickname>>, when you moan, but when you''re allowed to talk, you start talking nonsense. So it is better to be gagged, honey ...'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'bound'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -143,22 +147,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'klap':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/7.jpg"></center>'
-		'Peter spreads your legs and bears down on you from above. "Let''s see how well your sweet ass opens for me." he says'
+		'Peter bears down on you from above. "Let''s see how much your sweet ass opens up?" he says,'
 
 		if analplugin = 1 :
 			analplugin = 0
 			', pulls out your butt plug'
 		end
 
-		', and positions his huge erection against your asshole, half-entering with the first thrust. You gasp in pain, moaning into the gag. You can''t wait for him to bury himself in your ass completely. Peter sees your reaction and begins to fuck your ass, penetrating deeper with each stroke, until his dick is completely buried inside you and his balls slap hard against your buttocks. He fucks you so hard that your knees start to shake, and pussy juices trickle down your ass.'
-        gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
+		' and puts his huge erection to your anus, half-entering it. You gasp in pain, and moan into the gag. You can''t wait for him to get in your ass completely. Peter sees your reaction and begins to fuck your ass, with every stroke penetrating deeper and deeper, until his dick is completely inside you, and his balls slap hard on your buttocks. He fucks you so hard that your knees start to shake, and pussy juices leak onto your ass.'
+
+		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 					
 		act 'Moan again':
 			cla & *clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/8.jpg"></center>'
-			'He continues to fuck you hard and fast, then slows the rhythm, finishing with several sharp uneven thrusts that fill your insides with a hot stream of cum.'
-            gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
+			'He continues to penetrate you faster, then slows the rhythm, makes several deep movements and finishes by filling your insides with a hot stream of sperm ....'
+
+			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 		
 			if pcs_ass < 25:pcs_ass += 1
@@ -166,10 +172,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'klap':
 			if pcs_horny >= 100:
 				analorgasm += 1
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-				$orgasm_txt = 'A pleasant sensation surges within you and an orgasm washes over you, juices spraying from your pussy as you moan loudly into the gag.'
+				$orgasm_txt = 'heat surges in your ass and an orgasm washes over you.'
 			end
 
-			'Your ass makes a loud squelching noise when he pulls his dick out. Peter sits on the bed, breathing heavily while you remain bound, his cum slowly leaking from your ruined asshole.'
+			'Your ass makes squelching noise when he pulls his dick out. Peter sits on the bed, breathing heavily, and you remain lying bound, feeling sperm slowly leaking from your fucked ass.'
 			
 			act 'Relax' :gt 'peterroom', 'end'
 		end
@@ -182,7 +188,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	minut += 30
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/vanroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'"You were great." Peter says, smacking you on the ass. After a few minutes, he picks you up and carries you to the bathroom, where you shower together.'
+	'- You were great - said Peter and smacks you on the asscheek, picks up and carries you to the bathroom, where you shower together.'
 
 	act 'Leave' :
 		cla
@@ -190,13 +196,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 		peter += 1
 		minut += 20
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/mash.jpg"></center>'
-		'You walk down to the front yard together, and Peter starts the car. He kisses you on the lips and says "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you really brighten up my lonely, dull existence. For me, your presence is like a light in the darkness, or a breath of fresh air. I need to leave for now, but I truly hope to see you against soon." He starts the car. "Oh, do you need a lift?" he suddenly asks.'
+		'You walk down to the yard, and Peter starts the car. He kisses you on the lips and says:'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you really brighten up my lonely and gray existence. Your appearance is as the light in the dark, or a breath of fresh air ... I hope to see you again. But I need to leave for now. Want a lift?"'
 			
-		act 'To the city center':
+		act 'To the center':
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gt 'city_center'
 		end
-		act 'To your apartment':
+		act 'The house':
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gt 'city_residential'
 		end
@@ -208,45 +215,44 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd1':
 	*clr
 	if pcs_ass < 25:pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/d1-1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Peter ties your hands behind your back, then lifts you up by the hips, placing you on a hook.'
+	'Peter ties your hands behind your back. His hands take you by the hips and lift your ass, placing you on a hook.'
 
 	act 'Suck his fingers':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d1-2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Peter grabs your head and shoves all of his fingers into your mouth, forcing you to suck on them.'
-		'After a few seconds of you sucking and gagging on his fingers, he withdraws them and moves around behind you.'
+		'Peter grabs your hands and drives his cock in your ass. You gasp in pain, and moan into the gag. - "And I see you can''t wait for me to fill this ass completely" - Peter sees your reaction and begins to fuck your ass with every stroke penetrating deeper and deeper, until his penis is completely inside you, and his balls slap hard on your buttocks.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		
-		act 'Penetration':
+		act 'Moan':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d1-3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You think he is about to finger your ass, but squeal in surprise when he shoves his dick into you instead.'
-            'You moan in a mix of pleasure and pain as he starts thrusting, quickly picking up the pace.'
+			'He fucks you so intensely that you feel your knees start to shake, and pussy juices flow down your legs.'
+
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 		
-			act 'Submit yourself':
+			act 'Moan':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d1-4.jpg"></center>'
-				'He continues to fuck you hard and you submit yourself to the pleasure of your ass being hammered, your pussy juices running down your legs.'
+				'He continues to fuck you faster'
 
 				if pcs_horny >= 100:
 					analorgasm += 1
 					$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-					'He continues to fuck you hard and fast and you soon feel an intense orgasm washing over you, juices spraying from your pussy as his warm cum fills your ass.'
+					'. You feel a hot orgasm washing over you. Simultaneously, Peter pounds his dick deeper and deeper, filling your insides with a hot stream of sperm ....'
 					
 				elseif pcs_horny < 100:
 					$orgasm_or = 'no'
-					'He suddenly slows the rhythm, finishing with several sharp uneven thrusts that fill your ass with a hot load of cum.'
+					' and then slows the rhythm, makes several deep movements and finishes filling your insides with a hot stream of sperm ....'
 					
 				end
 
-				'Your ass makes a loud squelching noise when he pulls his dick out. Peter sits on the bed, breathing heavily while you remain kneeling with your ass in the air, his cum trickling down your leg.'
+				'Your ass makes a squelching noise as he takes out his dick. Peter sits on the bed, breathing heavily, and you remain kneeling with your ass up, and sperm dripping down your legs.'
 
 				act 'Further' :gt 'peterroom', 'end'
 			end
@@ -258,7 +264,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd2':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d2-1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Peter forces you on your knees, then lifts your head and thrusts his cock into your mouth. The head of his cock goes down your throat, but he continues to thrust, forcing more of its 25cm length inside.'
+	'Peter puts you on your knees, then lifts your head and pistons his cock into your mouth. The head goes down your throat, but he continues to press, and its full 25 centimeter length begins to enter into you further.'
+
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 		
@@ -266,29 +273,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd2':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d2-2.jpg"></center>'
-		'He thrusts mercilessly, fucking deeper into your mouth. Eventually, you feel his balls slap your chin, and realize that he''s bottomed out.'
-        gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
+		'- He pushes relentlessly, fucking your mouth deeper and deeper. After another push you feel your lips hit his balls, and realize that it is all inside.'
+
+		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 		gs 'stat'
 	
-		act 'Deepthroat':
+		act 'Moan':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d2-3.jpg"></center>'
-			'Tears stream from your eyes as he begins moving slowly. He takes his hands away from your head, and you desperately grab onto him while you let him use your throat. Trembling, you are lost in sensations - caught between the fire raging between your legs and your shameless awareness of the depravity of the situation.'
-            gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
+			'Tears stream from your eyes, and Peter begins slowly moving. He takes his hands away from your head, and now you hands grab onto his buttocks while you let him use your throat. Trembling, you are lost in sensation between the fire raging in your legs and the shameless awareness of the depravity of the situation.'
+
+			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'stat'
 		
-			act 'Continue':
+			act 'Moan':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/d2-4.jpg"></center>'
-				'Peter is nearing climax, his thrusts becoming ragged, when he suddenly stops and pushes in deep. His balls draw up, coated with your saliva, and you feel his sperm shooting down your throat.'
-                gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
+				'Peter begins to finish and stops to drive his member as far as possible, you feel his sperm flow deep inside you. And on his balls, your saliva...'
+
+				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'stat'
 		
 				if pcs_horny >= 100:
 					$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-					'Your orgasm suddenly hits you. Waves of pleasure ripple through your body, and you moan and shudder with release, but Peter holds you in place and refuses to allow his cock to slip out of your mouth.'
+					'Suddenly you start you finish yourself. Waves of pleasure cover your body, you moan and shudder with orgasm, but Peter grips you and does not allow his cock to slip out of your mouth ...'
 				end
 
 				act 'Swallow' :gt 'peterroom', 'end'

locations/pav_complexrolan.qsrc

@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ if month >=3 and month =< 11:
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h4>Rolan on the bench</h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/benchsr.jpg"></center>'
-		'Rolan stays on the bench reading something. You can talk to him...or investigate...'
+		'Rolan stays on the bench reading something. You can talk to him... or investigate...'
 
 		if money > 8000 and rolanblockhome = 1:
 			'You have some money with you, maybe Rolan wants his old bath back...'
@@ -40,13 +40,13 @@ if month >=3 and month =< 11:
 					end
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				elseif npc_rel['A133']>=20 and npc_rel['A133']<40:
-					!He doesn''t like you very much
-					'You try to have a conversation with Rolan, but he dislikes you too much to even pretend to be interested in what you have to say.'
-					act 'Chat anyway':
+					!He likes you a bit
+					'You have a nice chat with Rolan.'
+					act 'Continue':
 						cla
 						npc_rel['A133']+=(pcs_intel/10)+(pcs_apprnc/20)
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You can tell his attitude towards you is milder.'
+						'You can tell your friendship is growing.'
 						act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 					end
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if month >=3 and month =< 11:
 						cla
 						npc_rel['A133']+=(pcs_intel/10)+(pcs_apprnc/20)
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You can tell his croth is growing.'
+						'You can tell his crotch is growing.'
 						act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 					end
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
@@ -92,39 +92,40 @@ if month >=3 and month =< 11:
 			if rand(1,100) < 20:
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/starting.jpg"></center>'
-				'You hide after a tree to look what Rolan is doing. He seems in bad condition, he''s shaking in the whole body, maybe he needs help.'
-				act 'look':
+				'You hide behind a tree to see what Rolan is doing. He seems in bad condition, his whole body is shaking, maybe he needs help.'
+				act 'look closer':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 !!Image needed					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/done.jpg"></center>'
-					'he furiously move his hand under the coat..."mmmh...  no he doesn''t need help...." .'
+					'he furiously move his hand under the coat... "mmmh...  guess he doesn''t need help after all...." .'
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				end
 				act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 
 			elseif rand(1,100) > 70:
+			!!Without an image, none of this scene makes any sense.
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/looking.jpg"></center>'
-				'You hide after a tree to look what Rolan is doing. He''s looking around maybe he has caught something interesting.'
+				'You hide behind a tree to see what Rolan is doing. He''s looking around; maybe he has caught something interesting?'
 				act 'look what has caught his attention':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 !!Image needed 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat130.jpg"></center>'
-					'Looking better you see the reason of Rolan''s interest... well...that''s a good sight.'
+					'Looking better you see the reason for Rolan''s interest... well...that''s a good sight.'
 					act 'Look':gt 'pav_complexrolan', 'spy'
 				end
 				act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 			else
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/feeding.jpg"></center>'
-				'You hide after a tree to look what Rolan is doing. "oh crap, but how old he is that feeds little birds and post photos of himself feeding them"'
+				'You hide behind a tree to see what Rolan is doing. "Oh crap, how old is he? To feed little birds and post photos of himself feeding them?"'
 				act 'The good side of Rolan':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					if rolanpantyconfession ! 1:
 						'Well he''s a good man after all....'
 					else
-					'Well he''s a good man after all .... althought he''s a panties stealer....'
+					'Well maybe he''s a good man after all .... even though he steals panties....'
 					end
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				end
@@ -136,13 +137,13 @@ if month >=3 and month =< 11:
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/benchs.jpg"></center>'
-		'An old man sits in the bench. He''s feeding some birds...you wonder if this bench push everyone to feed birds.'
+		'An old man sits in the bench. He''s feeding some birds... you wonder if this bench makes everyone want to feed birds.'
 		act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 	else
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/benchsrainy.jpg"></center>'
-		'The large bench where Rolan usually sits. He spend time here to catch butterflies and look around when he can, in the late afternoons and evenings. Due to the rain Rolan isn''t here.'
+		'The large bench where Rolan usually sits. He spend time here to catch butterflies and appreciate nature when he can, in the late afternoons and evenings. However, due to the rain Rolan isn''t here right now.'
 		act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 	end
 else
@@ -150,7 +151,7 @@ else
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/benchw.jpg"></center>'
-		'It''s too cold for Rolan to meet him there. There''s snow everywhere but someone should have cleaned the bench to sit.'
+		'It''s too cold to meet Rolan here. There''s snow everywhere - someone should have cleaned the bench to sit on.'
 		act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 	else
 		cla & *clr
@@ -165,65 +166,65 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'spy':
 
 	len_rol_ler = rand (0,8)
 	if len_rol_ler = 0:
-		$court_texta = 'You notice two girls looking at each other; one is speaking at the phone.'
-		$court_textb = 'Suddenly the girl without the phone pull dow the panty of her friend while she continues the call and start eating the pussy...it seems they don''t mind to play in the courtyard.'
-		$court_textc = 'The girl on the phone continues her calling as she wants the listener on the other side to know she''s busy; her friend furiously rub the pussy that she start to loose control and suddenly cum. You think you have some more reason to visit often the courtyard...'
+		$court_texta = 'You notice two girls looking at each other; one is on the phone.'
+		$court_textb = 'Suddenly the girl without the phone pulls down the panties of her friend and starts eating her pussy while she continues the call... it seems they don''t mind to play in the courtyard.'
+		$court_textc = 'The girl on the phone continues her call as she wants the listener on the other side to know she''s busy. Her friend furiously rubs her pussy; causing her to lose control and suddenly cum. You think you have a reason to visit the courtyard more often...'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat00.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat01.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat02.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 1:
-		$court_texta = 'Lena and lera are walking in the park hand in hand.'
-		$court_textb = 'Suddenly they stop and start groping each other butt...'
-		$court_textc = 'Both of them pull down their short flashing their asses and turn their face...ooops they seems aware of Rolan...'
+		$court_texta = 'Lena and Lera are walking in the park hand in hand.'
+		$court_textb = 'Suddenly they stop and start groping each other''s butts...'
+		$court_textc = 'Both of them pull down their shorts, flashing their asses, and turn their heads... ooops, they seem to have noticed Rolan...'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat10.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat11.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat12.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 2:
 		$court_texta = 'Two girls passionately kiss each other.'
-		$court_textb = 'They move on a nearby wall, one of the girl sits spreading her legs the other reach her panties and put them apart...she start to explore her friend.'
-		$court_textc = 'Soon they both ends without skirt and start to make out, the blond girl go down on her knees using her skirt on the floor, and starts fingerfucking her friend.'
+		$court_textb = 'They move onto a nearby wall, one of the girls sits spreading her legs. The other reacher for her panties and pulls them aside... she start to ''explore'' her friend.'
+		$court_textc = 'Soon they are both naked from the waist down and they start to make out. The blond girl kneels on her skirt and starts fingerfucking her friend.'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat20.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat21.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat22.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 3:
 		$court_texta = 'Lena and Lera kiss each other on a nearby bench...'
-		$court_textb = 'It seems it''s  not enough, because the immediately move few step away and in they both start undressing...'
-		$court_textc = 'Only their panties remain...when you hear the police sirens. "Move move" Lera drags Lena away...'
+		$court_textb = 'It seems it''s  not enough, because they immediately move a few steps away and both start undressing...'
+		$court_textc = 'Only their panties remain... when you hear the police sirens. Lera drags Lena away...'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat30.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat31.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat32.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 4:
-		$court_texta = 'Two girls are flashing pussy and tits on the weed, it seems really daring...'
-		$court_textb = 'They move on a bench, they must be really in heat...one lift on a wall near the bench and spread her legs offering an easy access to the pussy; her friend start licking and pull out a dildo that she stick in the pussy while eating the brunette''s pussy.'
-		$court_textc = 'The brunette wants to give pleasure to her friend and move down to take lead, she start fucking her friend pussy as if nobody was there...'
+		$court_texta = 'Two stoned girls are flashing their pussy and tits, it seems really daring...'
+		$court_textb = 'They move on a bench, they must be in heat... one lifts herself onto a wall near the bench and spreads her legs, offering an easy access to the pussy; her friend starts licking and pulls out a dildo. She starts attacking the brunette with both her tongue and dildo...'
+		$court_textc = 'The brunette wants to return the favour and moves down to take lead, she starts fucking her friend''s pussy as if nobody was there...'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat40.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat41.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat42.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 5:
-		$court_texta = 'You see miss Sokoloff coming, and you decide to move away...you don''t want to listen a lesson outside the school. You move away and turn to see if she''s gone, but she''s in there speaking with Rolan...wait... "Who''s there?"...You see Lena and Lera exposing their body a few step from Rolan and miss Sokoloff...'
-		$court_textb = 'Soon they move, you decide to follow them and hide behind a wall. Lera pull out a dildo and start to lube it, while Lena go down and spread Lera''s lip...'
-		$court_textc = 'It seems too much daring, and soon they move on a secluded spot to proceed unnoticed. You follow them and find a three to stay behind...Lena push the dildo inside Lera and start to fuck her. This spot pass as unoticed and they continue to fuck free from uwanted sight...well at least they think so... .'
+		$court_texta = 'You see Miss Sokoloff coming, and you decide to move away... you don''t want to listen to a lesson outside of school. You move away and turn to see if she''s gone, but she''s still there speaking with Rolan...wait... "Who''s there?" you think...You see Lena and Lera exposing their bodies a few steps from Rolan and Miss Sokoloff...'
+		$court_textb = 'Soon they move, you decide to follow them and hide behind a wall. Lera pulls out a dildo and start to lube it up, while Lena goes down and spreads Lera''s lips...'
+		$court_textc = 'It seems much too daring, and soon they move on to a secluded spot to proceed unnoticed. You follow them and find a tree to crouch behind...Lena pushes the dildo further inside Lera and starts to fuck her. This spot passes as ''hidden'' and they continue to fuck free from unwanted viewers... at least they think so... .'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat50.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat51.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat52.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 6:
-		$court_texta = 'Two girls sit on a nearby bench. They look around as if they were worried about something. Ooops you can see what they are worried about. One of the girl stick a dildo up her ass...no way she''s worry...'
-		$court_textb = 'Suddenly a man comes to the bench behind them. The girls turn a little to hide their action, they clearly do not want to stop and stay hid as possible. The man take a newspaper he probably forgot and go away...'
-		$court_textc = 'Once the man was out of their sight the girl who were fucking her friend''s ass turn her doggy on the bench to continue in this position...soon you leave, you don''t want to be caught... '
+		$court_texta = 'Two girls sit on a nearby bench. They look around as if they were worried about something. Then you see one of the girls stick a dildo up her ass... guess she wasn''t worried after all...'
+		$court_textb = 'Suddenly a man comes to the bench behind them. The girls turn a little to hide their actions, they clearly do not want to stop and stay as hidden as possible. The man picks up a newspaper he probably left behind and goes away...'
+		$court_textc = 'Once the man was out of their sight the girl who was fucking her friend''s ass turns her doggy on the bench to continue in that position... soon you leave, you don''t want to be caught... '
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat60.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat61.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat62.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 7:
-		$court_texta = 'You see two girls in a dress without underware exposing their body...it seems they want to make a show...'
-		$court_textb = 'The courtyard is crowded today and they constantly change position using a three as a blindspot.'
-		$court_textc = 'They kiss and touch each other, but they are obviously ashemed to go further...soon the move away, leaving you with a wetting thought.'
+		$court_texta = 'You see two girls in a dress without underwear exposing their bodies...it seems they want to make a show...'
+		$court_textb = 'The courtyard is crowded today and they constantly change position using a tree as a blindspot.'
+		$court_textc = 'They kiss and touch one another, but they are obviously ashamed to go any further... soon they move away, leaving you with a wetness in your crotch.'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat70.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat71.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat72.jpg"></center>'
 	elseif len_rol_ler = 8:
-		$court_texta = 'Rolan is pointing to the slipway...you wonder what''s there...Wow Lena and Lera are putting a show. They are completely naked on the slipway with their clothes nearby.'
-		$court_textb = 'Suddenly miss Sokoloff walk nearby the slipway with her bag on her hand but she seems to not notice what''s going on. Lena and Lera seems to find the situation funny and they continue trying to stay hide from her sight'
-		$court_textc = 'Unbelievable....miss Sokoloff pass the slipway totally unaware. Lena and Lera start kiss each other...it seems they want to party for their achievment...'
+		$court_texta = 'Rolan is pointing to the slipway... you wonder what''s there... Wow Lena and Lera are putting on a show. They are completely naked on the slipway with their clothes nearby.'
+		$court_textb = 'Suddenly Miss Sokoloff walks past, but she seems not to notice what''s going on. Lena and Lera seem to find the situation funny and they continue trying to stay hidden from her.'
+		$court_textc = 'Unbelievable... Miss Sokoloff passes the slipway totally unaware. Lena and Lera start to kiss each other...it seems they want to party for their achievement...'
 !!Image needed		$court_imga = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat80.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgb = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat81.jpg"></center>'
 !!Image needed		$court_imgc = '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/bathchat/rolchat82.jpg"></center>'
@@ -258,32 +259,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 		rolanapol = 3
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturn1.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Rolan I''m sorry if I''ve done something wrong...it''s only that I don''t know what i''ve done, if only you will explain me what happend I can try to smooth things up...."'
-		'But Rolan turn back his shoulder too...'
+		'"Rolan I''m sorry if I''ve done something wrong... but I don''t know what I''ve done, please help me to understand so I can smooth things up..."'
+		'But Rolan turns his back on you...'
 		act 'Please':
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturncry.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Mphhhf...I cannot believe you don''t know what you have done. You snoop around in my house and take what you want...and me ....I even allow you to wander around. You really don''t know what have you done? Well I''ll tell you: you have stolen my Babushka and used her to repair my bath. Happy....what else do you want to take from me. You have taken what was the most important thing to me and throw it away..."'
+			'"Mphhhf...I cannot believe you don''t know what you''ve done. You snoop around in my house and take whatever you want... and me ... I allow you to wander around freely. You really don''t know what you''ve done? Well I''ll tell you: you used my Babushka''s ashes to repair the bath! Happy now? What else do you want to take from me? You have taken what was the most important thing to me and thrown it away..."'
 			*nl
-			'"I-I...I can''t believe it, if only I could have know something like this I could never be able to use the powder...you have to believe me..."'
+			'"I-I...I can''t believe it, if only I knew... I never would have used them...you have to believe me..."'
 			*nl
-			'"...I''m orthodox and cremation is not allowed. But I haven''t money to afford burial too and I couldn''t leave Babushka to be throwed away. This is why I can believe you, but that''s not the point...you shouldn''t snoop around someone else house. That''s not polite for a woman. And...and...Oh Babushka what have I done...why didn''t I take care of you...you were everything to me....". Rolan start crying in agony....'
+			'"...I''m orthodox and cremation is not allowed. But I didn''t have the money for a burial, and I couldn''t just leave Babushka to be throwed away. I believe you, it was an accident... but that''s not the point...you shouldn''t snoop around someone else''s house. That''s not polite. And...and...Oh Babushka what have I done... why didn''t I take care of you? You were everything to me...". Rolan starts crying in agony....'
 			act 'Cheer him up':
 				cla & *clr
 				money -= 8000
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'panties', 'dispose'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapolgift.jpg"></center>'
-				'"....Rolan here...take this to dry your tears...I know you like them, and I don''t have some wipes, you can have them...I have a bunch...."'
+				'"...Rolan here... take this to dry your tears... I know you like them, and I don''t have any wipes, you can have them...I''ve got a bunch...."'
 				*nl
-				'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...I think it''s time for me to make my apologize. I was extremely rude to kick you out from my house in that way...."'
+				'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>... I think it''s time for me to make my apologies. I was extremely rude to kick you out of my house in that way...."'
 				*nl
-				'"Oh Rolan there''s no need...probably I would have done the same if I was you"'
+				'"Oh Rolan there''s no need... I would have done the same if I were in your position"'
 				*nl
-				'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...please, let me finish. It''s not from everybody to understand peoples habits and to not judge them, that''s the reason why my door will be open again for you. Please miss <<$pcs_lastname>> wolud you be so kind to accept my apologize?"'
+				'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>... please, let me finish. It''s not for everybody to understand people''s habits and to not judge them, but you can. That''s the reason why my door will always be open for you. Please Miss <<$pcs_lastname>> wolud you be so kind as to accept my apologies?"'
 				*nl
-				'"Oh Rolan I''m the one who have to apologise, I''m very happy to spend some time again with you like in the past time. Just...here take those, it cannot give you back babushka as nothing happened but you can recruit some worker to restore the vessel..."'
+				'"Oh Rolan I''m the one who has to apologise, I''m very happy to spend some time with you like before. Just... take these. I can''t give you back Babushka however I try, but you can recruit some workers to restore the vessel..."'
 				*nl
 				'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...'
 				act 'Say goodbye':
@@ -291,7 +292,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					gs 'stat'
 					rolanblockhome = 0
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/goodbyerolan.jpg"></center>'
-					'You kiss Rolan in the forehead, and feel like something in him finally rest in peace.'
+					'You kiss Rolan in the forehead, and feel something in him finally rest in peace.'
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				end
 			end
@@ -301,26 +302,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturn1.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Rolan I''m sorry if i''ve done something wrong...it''s only that I don''t know what i''ve done, if only you will explain me what happend I can try to smooth things up...."'
-			'But Rolan turn back his shoulder too...'
+			'"Rolan I''m sorry if I''ve done something wrong... but I don''t know what I''ve done, please help me to understand so I can smooth things up..."'
+			'But Rolan turns his back on you...'
 			act 'Cheer him up':
 				cla & *clr
 				money -= 8000
 				rolanapol = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturncry.jpg"></center>'
-				'...Rolan, broken from inside, speaks: ..."Witch...you have stolen my Babushka and used her to repair my bath."'
+				'...Rolan, broken inside, says: "Witch...you have stolen my Babushka and put her ashes into my bath."'
 				*nl
-				'You cannot believe what you have heard."...but...but.."'
+				'You can''t believe what you have heard. "...but...but.."'
 				*nl
-				'"...Before you ask your stupid question, I''m orthodox and cremation is not allowed. But I haven''t money to afford burial too and I couldn''t leave Babushka to be throwed away..."'
+				'"...Before you ask your stupid question, I''m orthodox and cremation is not allowed. But I haven''t got enough money for a burial and I couldn''t just leave Babushka to be throwed away..."'
 				*nl
-				'"...I''m sorry Rolan ... I could never imagined...I''m so sorry Rolan, I don''t know what to do...here take those money, they cannot give you back babushka as nothing happened but you can recruit some worker to restore the vessel...if only I could have know something like this I could never be able to use the powder...you have to believe me..."'
+				'"...I''m sorry Rolan ... I never could have imagined...I''m so sorry Rolan, I don''t know what to do...here take this money, it won''t give you back babushka but you can recruit some workers to restore the vessel... if only I knew I never would have used the powder...you have to believe me..."'
 				*nl
-				'"I appreciate your effort, but that doesn''t changes things. You could have asked, and you didn''t do it. You should learn what''s yours and what''s not. Give me your panty."'
+				'"I appreciate your effort, but that doesn''t change things. You could have asked, and you didn''t do it. You should learn what''s yours and what''s not." He turns and fixes you with a hard stare. "Give me your panties."'
 				*nl
 				'...'
-				act 'Give him':
+				act 'Give them':
 					cla & *clr
 					rolanapol = 2
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -328,7 +329,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol0.jpg"></center>'
 					'"...o-ok...I think I''ve learned the lesson"'
 					*nl
-					'"No you didn''t....that''s because you should''n snoop around to take things that aren''t yours, and you know nothing about. Than we have to fix this, so you should really be able to remember the lesson. Now bend over."'
+					'"No you didn''t....you should''nt snoop around to take things that aren''t yours, and that you know nothing about. You need to learn a harder lesson than this. Now bend over."'
 					'...'
 					act 'Bend':
 						cla & *clr
@@ -336,28 +337,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol1.jpg"></center>'
 						'You bend and give Rolan access to your bare ass...'
-						'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, hold your teeth... .'
+						'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, clench your teeth... .'
 						act 'Ouch':
 							cla & *clr
 							gs 'pain', 5, 'asscheeks', 'spank'
 							gs 'stat'
 							pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol2.jpg"></center>'
-							'Rolan start beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you cannot say the same about angry....'
+							'Rolan starts beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you can''t say the same about anger....'
 							act 'It hurts!':
 								cla & *clr
 								gs 'pain', 5, 'asscheeks', 'spank'
 								gs 'stat'
 								pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol3.jpg"></center>'
-								'Your ass is red and painful, you are near to cry'
-								'"...i''m sorry Rolan...i''ve learned the lesson..."'
+								'Your ass is red and painful, you are close to crying'
+								'"...I''m sorry Rolan... I''ve learned my lesson..."'
 								act 'Continue':
 									cla & *clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									rolanblockhome = 0
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturncry.jpg"></center>'
-									'"I''m sorry too miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...I would like this thing was not necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
+									'"I''m sorry too Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>... I wish this wasn''t necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
 									act 'leave':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 								end
 							end
@@ -367,7 +368,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 						cla & *clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-						'"There aren''t other ways."'
+						'"There''s no other way."'
 						act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 					end
 				end
@@ -375,7 +376,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-					'"There aren''t other ways."'
+					'"There''s no other way."'
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				end
 			end
@@ -383,19 +384,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-			'"...o-ok...I think I''ve learned the lesson"'
+			'"...O-ok...I think I''ve learned my lesson"'
 			*nl
-			'"No you didn''t....we have to fix this. Now give it to me."'
+			'"No you haven''t.... We have to fix this. Now give them to me."'
 			'...'
-			act 'Give him':
+			act 'Give him your panties':
 				cla & *clr
 				rolanapol = 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'panties', 'dispose'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol0.jpg"></center>'
-				'"...o-ok...I think I''ve learned the lesson"'
+				'"...O-ok...I think I''ve learned my lesson"'
 				*nl
-				'"No you didn''t....that''s because you should''n snoop around to take things that aren''t yours, and you know nothing about. Than we have to fix this, so you should really be able to remember the lesson. Now bend over."'
+				'"No you didn''t....you should''nt snoop around to take things that aren''t yours, and that you know nothing about. You need to learn a harder lesson than this. Now bend over."'
 				'...'
 				act 'Bend':
 					cla & *clr
@@ -403,28 +404,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol1.jpg"></center>'
 					'You bend and give Rolan access to your bare ass...'
-					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, hold your teeth... .'
+					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, clench your teeth... .'
 					act 'ouch':
 						cla & *clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol2.jpg"></center>'
-						'Rolan start beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you cannot say the same about angry....'
+						'Rolan start beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you can''t say the same about anger....'
 						act 'It hurts!':
 							cla & *clr
 							gs 'pain', 5, 'asscheeks', 'spank'
 							gs 'stat'
 							pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol3.jpg"></center>'
-							'Your ass is red and painful, you are near to cry'
-							'"...i''m sorry Rolan...i''ve learned the lesson..."'
+							'Your ass is red and painful, you are close to crying'
+							'"...I''m sorry Rolan... I''ve learned my lesson..."'
 							act 'Continue':
 								cla & *clr
 								gs 'pain', 5, 'asscheeks', 'spank'
 								gs 'stat'
 								rolanblockhome = 0
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturncry.jpg"></center>'
-								'"I''m sorry too miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...I would like this thing was not necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
+								'"I''m sorry too Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>... I wish this wasn''t necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
 								act 'leave':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 							end
 						end
@@ -434,7 +435,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-					'"There aren''t other ways."'
+					'"There''s no other way."'
 					act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 				end
 			end
@@ -442,14 +443,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 				cla & *clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-				'"There aren''t other ways."'
+				'"There''s no other way."'
 				act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 			end
 		elseif rolanapol = 2:
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-			'"...o-ok...i think I''ve learned the lesson"'
+			'"...O-ok... I think I''ve learned my lesson"'
 			*nl
 			'"No you didn''t....we have to fix this. Now bend over."'
 			'...'
@@ -460,10 +461,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol1.jpg"></center>'
 				if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 					'You bend and Rolan lift your skirt, then he pull down your panties to have full access to your bare ass...'
-					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, hold your teeth... .'
+					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, clench your teeth... .'
 				else
 					'You bend and give Rolan access to your bare ass...'
-					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, bite your teeth... .'
+					'It will hurt <<$pcs_lastname>>, clench your teeth... .'
 				end
 				act 'Ouch':
 					cla & *clr
@@ -471,21 +472,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 					gs 'stat'
 					pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol2.jpg"></center>'
-					'Rolan start beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you cannot say the same about angry....'
+					'Rolan start beating your bare butt. There''s no lust in his beating, but you can''t say the same about anger...'
 					act 'It hurts!':
 						cla & *clr
 						gs 'pain', 5, 'asscheeks', 'spank'
 						gs 'stat'
 						pain['asscheeks'] += 30
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanapol3.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your ass is red and painful, you are near to cry'
-						'"...i''m sorry Rolan...i''ve learned the lesson..."'
+						'Your ass is red and painful, you are close to crying.'
+						'"...I''m sorry Rolan... I''ve learned my lesson..."'
 						act 'Continue':
 							cla & *clr
 							gs 'stat'
 							rolanblockhome = 0
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolanturncry.jpg"></center>'
-							'"I''m sorry too miss <<$pcs_lastname>>...I would like this thing was not necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
+							'"I''m sorry too Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>... I wish this wasn''t necessary. I''m sure you have learned your lesson. '
 							act 'leave':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 						end
 					end
@@ -495,7 +496,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 				cla & *clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/aptrolan/rolangiveme.jpg"></center>'
-				'"There aren''t other ways."'
+				'"There''s no other way."'
 				act 'Move away':gt 'pav_complex', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -503,4 +504,3 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends':
 end
 
 --- pav_complexrolan ---------------------------------
-