Proofreading and small content update

locations/pav_park.qsrc

@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	gs 'Zvereva_schedule'
 
 	if sound = 0:
-		if month >=11 and month <= 12 or month >=1 and month <=3:
+		if month >= 11 and month <= 12 or month >= 1 and month <= 3:
 			if hour >= 8 and hour <= 23: PLAY 'sound/street2.mp3',30 & PLAY 'sound/zima.mp3',30
 			if hour >= 0 and hour <= 7: PLAY 'sound/street_night.mp3',30 & PLAY 'sound/zima.mp3',30
 		else
@@ -26,14 +26,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		end
 	end
 
-	if month=3 or month=4 or month=5:
+	if month = 3 or month = 4 or month = 5:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.spring.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Spring has come, melting the worst of the snow. As a result, the trees are sprouting new leaves.'
-			'There are puddles everywhere, all the remains from the melted snow. Many people in the park are having fun with them, trying to jump over them and mocking those that fail. They''re not particularly deep, though; plenty of others just walk through without giving them a second thought.'
-			'The park is not particularly crowded this time of year. However, many people think it''s too cold to spend much time outdoors.'
+			'There are puddles everywhere, all the remains from the melted snow. Many people in the park are having fun with them, trying to jump over them and mocking those that fail. They''re not particularly deep though; plenty of others just walk through without giving them a second thought.'
+			'The park isn''t particularly crowded this time of year. However, many people think it''s too cold to spend much time outdoors.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=6 or month=7 or month=8:
+	if month = 6 or month = 7 or month = 8:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/skver.jpg"></center>'
@@ -69,9 +69,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. Why the fuck is it snowing in the middle of summer? You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. Why is it snowing in the middle of summer?! You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
 				else
-					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. Yes, it is raining, but the warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
+					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. The warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
 				end
 			end
 		else
@@ -84,24 +84,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing this evening. Why the fuck is it snowing in the middle of summer? You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing this evening. Why is it snowing in the middle of summer?! You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
 				else
-					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. Yes, it is raining, but the warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
+					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. The warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=9 or month=10 or month=11:
+	if month = 9 or month = 10 or month = 11:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some trees are already shedding their leaves. The leaves still on the trees have changed colour and are a beautiful mix of red and brown.'
-			'Everywhere in the park, people enjoy nature. Some take photos of the fallen leaves, kids play around, and couples walk hand-in-hand, simply enjoying each other''s company.'
+			'Everywhere in the park, people enjoy nature. Some take photos of the fallen leaves, kids play around and couples walk hand-in-hand, simply enjoying each other''s company.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this is not a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this isn''t a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, it would be a nice day to spend in the park.'
 				end
@@ -111,24 +111,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some trees are already shedding their leaves.'
-			'It gets pretty cold at night, and you try to stay active to keep yourself warm. The lone soul you see running across the park is probably trying to get home faster to warm up with some nice cocoa.'
+			'It gets pretty cold at night, and you try to stay active to keep yourself warm. The lone soul you see running across the park is probably trying to get home faster and out of the cold.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this is not a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this isn''t a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, it would be a lovely evening to spend in the park.'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=1 or month=2 or month=12:
+	if month = 1 or month = 2 or month = 12:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the park is busy with locals and tourists alike.'
-			'There''s snow everywhere, and kids from the whole town have gathered to make snowmen and enjoy snowball fights. Some adults are joining them, happy to play like kids again for a moment.'
+			'There''s snow everywhere, and kids have gathered to make snowmen and enjoy snowball fights. Some adults are joining them, happy to play like kids again for a moment.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the nights in Pavlovsk are freezing.'
-			'As you expected, the park is mostly deserted at night. However, you occasionally see a wild animal scrounging for food.'
+			'As you expected, the park is mostly deserted. However, you occasionally see a wild animal scrounging for food.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
@@ -159,7 +159,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	act 'Go further into the park':minut += 2 & gt 'pav_park', 'deeper_park'
 
 	if hour > 8 and hour < 19:'There''s a small <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''gskino''">movie theatre</a> in the park.'
-	'The newly opened cafe <a href="exec:gt''cafe_parco'',''start''">"Del Parco"</a>, with an eye-catching facade, lots of tables and a summer terrace. Two paths lead out of the park. One brings you to the <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''pav_commercial''">commercial</a>, the other to the <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''pav_residential''">residential</a> area.'
+	'The newly opened cafe <a href="exec:gt''cafe_parco'',''start''">"Del Parco"</a>, with an eye-catching facade, lots of tables and a summer terrace. Two paths lead out of the park. One brings you to the <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''pav_commercial''">commercial</a> area, the other to the <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''pav_residential''">residential</a> area.'
 	if ((month = 8 and day > 20) or (month = 9 and day < 16)) and week > 5 and hour > 8 and hour < 20 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] = 0:
 		'<br>You overhear someone speaking in front of a crowd. The crowd is quite rowdy, yelling and clapping throughout the <a href="exec: minut += 2 & gt ''pav_park'', ''alb_father_meeting_1''">meeting</a>.'
 	elseif ((month = 9 and day > 20) or (month = 10 and day < 16)) and week > 5 and hour > 8 and hour < 20 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] = 1 and AlbinaQW['StarletsShutDown'] = 0:
@@ -169,9 +169,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	*nl
-	if PCloInhibit >= 40: pcs_mood -= 15 & 'You notice passers-by in the park pointing at you as you walk and overhear one older lady telling her friend: "Look at her... it''s that <<$pcs_lastname>> girl. Youth these days, they have no shame at all!"'
+	if PCloInhibit >= 40: pcs_mood -= 15 & 'You notice passers-by in the park pointing at you as you walk and overhear one older lady telling her friend: "There''s that <<$pcs_lastname>> girl. Youth these days, they have no shame at all!"'
 
-	if GvstreBoy = 1:'You see <a href="exec:numnpc = SkverBoy & gt ''Gnpc''"><<$nameBoyfrend[SkverBoy]>></a> walking across the main square of Pavlovsk Park. He doesn''t look like he''s going anywhere in particular, and seems to just be enjoying his walk.'
+	if GvstreBoy = 1:'You see <a href="exec:numnpc = SkverBoy & gt ''Gnpc''"><<$nameBoyfrend[SkverBoy]>></a> walking across the main square of the park. He doesn''t look like he''s going anywhere in particular, and seems to just be enjoying his walk.'
 
 	if week <= 5 and hour >= 16 and hour < 20 and strelaQW = -2 and fedorKozlovQW <= -10 and FedorOutcast = 0:
 		'You can see the <a href="exec:gt ''FedorMisc'', ''Outcast Intro''">train tracks</a> from here.'
@@ -238,7 +238,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] > 0 and mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] < 27 and mey_vika['qw_day'] ! daystart:
 		if locat['Vicky'] ! 11:
-			'<br>Vicky and Vanya never are in the park at this time.'
+			'<br>Vicky and Vanya are never in the park at this time.'
 		else
 			act 'Look for Vicky and Vanya (0:05)':
 				cla
@@ -293,7 +293,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif ($clothingworntype ! 'danilovich_outfits' or $shoeworntype ! 'danilovich') and hour > 5 and hour < 23 and daybegskver ! daystart:
 		'You could jog around the park if you were wearing sports clothes and shoes.'
 	end
-	act 'Sit down on the bench': gt 'pav_park', 'sitting_park_bench'
+	act 'Sit on the bench': gt 'pav_park', 'sitting_park_bench'
 
 	if joint > 0 and jointhigh = 0: act 'Smoke a joint': gs 'drugs', 'joint' & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 
@@ -311,8 +311,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alb_father_meeting_1':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/event/meeting/meeting1.jpg"></center>'
-	'"First of all, we need to take care of the corruption originating from the police force!" A speech is ringing out to a cheering crowd.'
-	'You take a closer look and see that it is Albina''s father. He''s going hard on the authorities while the crowd gets rowdier.'
+	'A speech is ringing out to a cheering crowd.'
+	*nl
+	'"We need to take care of the corruption in our police force! How many of our daughters must be raped because our petty excuses for officers allow crime to run rampant in our streets for a handful of rubles from the very criminals they''re supposed to fight?"'
+	*nl
+	'You take a closer look and see that it''s Albina''s father speaking. He''s going hard on the authorities while the crowd gets rowdier.'
 	'"Calm down, everyone! Don''t take out your anger now! Instead, show them at the ballots how upset you truly are!" Albina''s father finishes to cheers from the crowd.'
 
 	act 'Go on with your day': gt 'pav_park', 'start'
@@ -324,9 +327,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alb_father_meeting_2':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/event/meeting/meeting2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Don''t believe the ridiculous accusations thrown against me! They''re just trying to smear me!" He slams the podium as he passionately speaks.'
-	'The crowd keeps calm, except for his most die-hard supporters, who yell profanities against the current administration.'
-	'Albina''s father continues on. "I''m just a regular guy, just like the rest of you! My opponents are jealous of my self-made fortune! Why would I be corrupt if I''m already well-off?! No one can pay me off!" He slams the podium again.'
+	'"Don''t believe the ridiculous accusations thrown against me! They''re fake news!" He slams the podium as he passionately speaks.'
+	'The crowd keeps calm, except for his most die-hard supporters, who yell profanities and accusations against the current administration as Albina''s father continues.' 
+	'"My opponents are desperate, desperate because I''m about to unravel their web of lies, corruption and bribes that let them laugh at you from up in their ivory towers while you fight for scraps down in the dirt!" He slams the podium again.'
 
 	act 'Go on with your day': gt 'pav_park', 'start'
 end
@@ -337,9 +340,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alb_father_meeting_3':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/event/meeting/meeting3.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk over to see the commotion, and you see Albina''s father speaking to the crowd as usual. This time, however, he seems very nervous and stutters while speaking to the masses. He continues for a couple more minutes, and he''s sweating profoundly by the end of the speech.'
-	'He clears his throat a few times. "And now for some entertainment from my daughter and her dance group. If you look to the right, there are some refreshments available." He awkwardly steps away from the podium.'
-	'The music starts, and the girls reluctantly step out. They''re all wearing skintight, skimpy leotards that leave nothing to the imagination. The men whistle and holler while the women look on in disgust, whispering that they can''t believe that young girls would wear such revealing outfits.'
+	'You walk over to see the commotion, and you see Albina''s father speaking to the crowd as usual. This time, however, he seems very nervous and stutters while speaking to the masses. He continues for a few more minutes, and is sweating profoundly by the end of the speech as some of the crowd call him out on his hypocrisy.'
+	'He clears his throat a few times. "And now for some entertainment from my daughter and her dance group. If you look to the right, there are some refreshments available."'
+	'He awkwardly steps away from the podium as the music starts, and the girls reluctantly step out. They''re all wearing skintight, skimpy leotards that leave nothing to the imagination. Some men whistle and holler while others and most of the women look on in disgust, whispering that they can''t believe that young girls would wear such revealing outfits.'
 	'You stay and watch the performance. The girls are clearly uncomfortable with the situation, and you see Albina glare at her father a few times. Finally, the girls finish their performance and quickly run from the stage as Albina''s father desperately tries to appease his diminishing crowd as everyone leaves, yourself included.'
 
 	act 'Leave': gt 'pav_park', 'start'
@@ -356,11 +359,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'run':
 	daybegskver = daystart
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/parkbeg.jpg"></center>'
-	'You prepare for a nice jog through the beautiful park, pacing yourself, so you last for a full hour.'
+	'You prepare for a nice jog through the beautiful park, pacing yourself so you last for a full hour.'
 	act 'Finish your run':
 		cla
 		*nl
-		'You feel great after your jogging session. You are a bit sweaty, but you''ve also improved your stamina. You even feel a bit slimmer.'
+		'You feel great after your jogging session. You''re a bit sweaty, but you''ve also improved your stamina. You even feel a bit slimmer.'
 		act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 !!did I do the gt loc above correct?
 	end
@@ -397,8 +400,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'run_reactions':
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
 		else
-			'You come across a group of Gopnik''s loitering in a circle, empty beer bottles scattered around them. They''re loudly talking among themselves, but as you near the group, one of them notices you and quickly interrupts his friends to point you out to everyone.'
-			'You can''t help but smile slightly as you watch them rush to stand and then fight over getting to the front so they can see you better. Then, as you run by, some start to clap and whistle while a few shout at you.'
+			'You come across a group of gopniks loitering in a circle, empty beer bottles scattered around them. They''re loudly talking among themselves, but as you near the group, one of them notices you and quickly interrupts his friends to point you out to everyone.'
+			'You can''t help but smile slightly as you watch them rush to stand and then fight over getting at the front so they can see you better. As you run by, some start to clap and whistle while a few shout at you.'
 			*nl
 			'"Is this real, or am I fucking dreaming?!"'
 			*nl
@@ -413,7 +416,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'run_reactions':
 		end
 	end
 	*nl
-	'You feel great after your jogging session. Of course, you are a bit sweaty, but you''ve also improved your stamina as you feel slimmer.'
+	'You feel great after your jogging session. Of course, you''re a bit sweaty, but you''ve also improved your stamina as you feel slimmer.'
 	act 'Finish your run': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
@@ -436,7 +439,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleeping_park_bench':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/sleeping_park_jeans.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 
-	if pcs_makeup > 1:pcs_makeup = 0 & vidageday -= 1 & 'Makeup smeared in the face, you think, that is harmful to the appearance of sleep with makeup, skin ages faster from this.'
+	if pcs_makeup > 1:pcs_makeup = 0 & vidageday -= 1 & 'Your makeup smears across your face as you sleep, which is harmful to your appearance. Your skin ages faster from this.'
 
 	'You''re feeling tired and decide to try and get some sleep on the park bench.'
 	if alko >= 7 and hotcat >= 6:
@@ -450,13 +453,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleeping_park_bench':
 		elseif PCloSkirt > 0 and rand(1,10) <= 9:
 			gs 'underwear', 'dispose'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/sleeping_park.jpg"></center>'
-			'You wake up with a smile, stretching your arms and legs. You realize your panties are missing and quickly close your legs. You fearfully think to yourself: "I hope that whoever took my panties did not take advantage of me while I was out".'
+			'You wake up with a smile, stretching your arms and legs. You realize your panties are missing and quickly close your legs as you fearfully hope that whoever took your panties didn''t take advantage of you while you were out.'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/sleeping_park2.jpg"></center>'
 			'You wake up with a smile, stretching your arms and legs.'
 		end
 		act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
-		if rand(1,10) <= 6 and money ! 0: *nl & 'You now realize someone stole your money while you were sleeping!' & money = 0
+		if rand(1,10) <= 6 and money ! 0: *nl & 'You realize that someone stole your money while you were sleeping!' & money = 0
 	end
 !!is this correct I removed the waking up to having had sex, I had to remove it. No girl would sleep through someone having sex with them, unless she is passed out drunk which is handled by one of the other spots already. Which meant tweaking the code so make sure this still works.
 		!act 'Continue': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -488,17 +491,17 @@ if (hour >= 20 or hour < 6) and (pcs_sleep <= 30 or cheatNoSleep ! 0):
 	if pavlovsk_home = 0 and workPTU <= 2 and HotelRoom < 1:
 		!nowhere to live in town
 		if money >= 500 or karta+bankDebtLimit >= 500:
-			'It''s pretty dark now, maybe you could try to get a room in the hotel.'
+			'It''s pretty dark now. Maybe you could get a room in the hotel?'
 		else	
-			'It''s pretty dark now, and you have nowhere to stay nearby. Maybe you should try to sleep on a bench?'
+			'It''s pretty dark now and you have nowhere to stay nearby. Maybe you should try to sleep on a bench?'
 		end
-		if mid($start_type,1,2) = 'sg': 'Or try your luck and go to Uncle Shulgin''s Apartment?'
+		if mid($start_type,1,2) = 'sg': 'You could also try your luck at Uncle Shulgin''s apartment?'
 	elseif pavlovsk_home = 1 and (hour >= 22 or hour < 6):
-		'It''s pretty dark outside, and you feel tired. Maybe you should head home.'
+		'It''s pretty dark outside and you feel tired. Maybe you should head home?'
 	elseif hotelRoom['pav_hotel'] > 0:
-		'It''s pretty dark outside, and you feel tired. Maybe you should head back to the hotel.'
+		'It''s pretty dark outside and you feel tired. Maybe you should head back to the hotel?'
 	else
-		'It''s pretty dark now, and you feel tired. Maybe you should try sleeping on a bench?'
+		'It''s pretty dark now and you feel tired. Maybe you should try sleeping on a bench?'
 	end
 	act 'Sleep on a bench': gt 'pav_park','sleeping_park_bench'
 	killvar 'pavlovsk_home'
@@ -534,7 +537,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. With winter over that, you had hoped the snow was done for the year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing today. With winter over, you had hoped the snow was done for the year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, spending time in the park would be a lovely day.'
 				end
@@ -544,29 +547,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.spring.night.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'As you go deeper into the park, in the distance, you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they are the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. But you are well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets.'
+			'As you go deeper into the park, you see someone running through the park in the distance, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they''re the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. However, you''re well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing tonight. With winter over, you had hoped that the snow was done for the year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing tonight. With winter over, you had hoped that the snow was done for the year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, spending time in the park would be such a lovely evening.'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=6 or month=7 or month=8:
+	if month = 6 or month = 7 or month = 8:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/skver.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'As you go deeper into the park, you see fewer and fewer people, occasional groups hanging out together or families having a picnic. There are some excellent trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at.'
+			'As you go deeper into the park, you see fewer and fewer people, only occasional groups hanging out together or families having a picnic. There are some excellent trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. Why the fuck is it snowing in the middle of summer? You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing today. Why is it snowing in the middle of summer?! You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
 				else
-					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. Yes, it is raining, but the warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
+					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. The warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
 				end
 			end
 		else
@@ -574,18 +577,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.summer.night.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'As you go deeper into the park, in the distance, you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they are the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. But you are well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets.'
+			'As you go deeper into the park, you see one person running through the park in the distance, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they''re the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. However, you''re well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing this evening. Why the fuck is it snowing in the middle of summer? You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing this evening. Why is it snowing in the middle of summer?! You look up at the heavens and get no response.'
 				else
-					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. Yes, it is raining, but the warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
+					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body, but your frown gives way to a smile. The warm rain feels good on your exposed skin.'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=9 or month=10 or month=11:
+	if month = 9 or month = 10 or month = 11:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
@@ -594,7 +597,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this is not a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing today. You hope this isn''t a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, spending time in the park would be a lovely day.'
 				end
@@ -603,18 +606,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'As you go deeper into the park, in the distance, you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they are the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. But you are well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets, and the chill in the air doesn''t help make your surroundings seem inviting.'
+			'As you go deeper into the park, you see one person running through the park in the distance, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster. Unfortunately, they''re the only person you see at the moment. There are some nice trails to walk along deeper in the park, plus some nice secluded areas that some kids like to hang out at. However, you''re well aware it can get dangerous in the park the darker it gets, and the chill in the air doesn''t help make your surroundings seem inviting.'
 			*nl
 			if sunWeather = 0:
 				if temper < 5:
-					'You can''t believe it, but it is snowing today. You hope this is not a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
+					'You can''t believe it, but it''s snowing today. You hope this isn''t a sign that winter is coming early this year.'
 				else
 					'You frown as you feel the rain pelting your body. Otherwise, spending time in the park would be such a lovely evening.'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	if month=1 or month=2 or month=12:
+	if month = 1 or month = 2 or month = 12:
 		if daystage = 2 or daystage = 3:
 			'<center><h2>Pavlovsk Park</h2></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
@@ -644,7 +647,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	!!if kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 18 and hour < 20 and week < 6 or week >= 6 and kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20:'You see <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''kotovEv''">Vitek Kotov</a> sitting on a bench in the park, drinking beer by himself. Judging from the empty bottles near the bench, he''s already had a few.'
+	!!if kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 18 and hour < 20 and week < 6 or week >= 6 and kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20:'You see <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''kotovEv''">Vitek</a> sitting on a bench in the park, drinking beer by himself. Judging from the empty bottles near the bench, he''s already had a few.'
 !!I am not sure why this is commented out but I left it that way.
 	if (sunWeather = 1 and temper > 0):
 		temprand = rand(1,5)
@@ -652,13 +655,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deeper_park':
 
 		if temprand = 1 and (week >= 6 and hour >= 12 and hour < 18)  or (week < 6 and hour >= 16 and hour < 18) and gopniksev['gopgirls'] ! daystart:
 			gopniksev['gopgirls'] = daystart
-			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopgirls''">Lena, Lera, Anushka, and Alyona</a> sitting at a park picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
+			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopgirls''">Lena, Lera, Anushka and Alyona</a> sitting at a picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
 		elseif temprand = 2 and (week >= 6 and hour >= 12 and hour < 18)  or (week < 6 and hour >= 16 and hour < 18) and gopniksev['gopboys'] ! daystart :
 			gopniksev['gopboys'] = daystart
-			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopboys''">Vitek, Dan, Lavrenti, Roman, Arkadi, Vasily, and Paulina</a> sitting at a park picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
+			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopboys''">Vitek, Dan, Lavrenti, Roman, Arkadi, Vasily and Pauline</a> sitting at a picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
 		elseif temprand = 3 and (week >= 6 and hour >= 12 and hour < 18)  or (week < 6 and hour >= 16 and hour < 18) and gopniksev['gopniks'] ! daystart:
 			gopniksev['gopniks'] = daystart
-			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopniks''">Vitek, Dan, Lavrenti, Roman, Arkadi, Valentin, Radomir, Vasily, Paulina, Lena, Lera, Anushka, and Alyona</a> sitting at a park picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
+			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''pav_parkev'', ''gopniks''">Vitek, Dan, Lavrenti, Roman, Arkadi, Valentin, Radomir, Vasily, Pauline, Lena, Lera, Anushka and Alyona</a> sitting at a picnic table, drinking beer and hanging out.'
 		elseif temprand = 4 and (week >= 6 and (hour >= 9 and hour < 12) or (hour >= 16 and hour < 20)) or (week < 6 and hour >= 18 and hour < 20) and gopniksev['gopskver'] ! daystart:
 			gopniksev['gopskver'] = daystart
 			'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''gopskver''">Vitek, Dan and Vasily</a> sitting on a park bench, drinking beer.'