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[text edit] clean up vipclub

Spackled Lanturn 3 years ago
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      locations/vipclub.qsrc

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locations/vipclub.qsrc

@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'rum'
 			pcs_horny += rand(10, 20)
 			*nl
-			'You enjoy a tasty cocktail, for some reason you also feel like it''s gotten hot in here.'
+			'You enjoy a tasty cocktail. For some reason, you also feel like it''s gotten hot in here.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'vipclub', 'start'
 		end
 
@@ -76,7 +76,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					gs 'dinSex', 'std_trigger_oral'
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You have a wonderful idea and a couple of minutes later find yourself in a room with two staff members, one man and one woman. You have them start on the couch, with the man stting while she knelt beside of him and gave him a blowjob. You raptly watched the two professional lovers, getting more and more excited by the display.'
+					'You have a wonderful idea and a couple of minutes later find yourself in a room with two staff members, one man and one woman. You have them start on the couch, with the man sitting while she kneels beside him and gives him a blowjob. You raptly watch the two professional lovers, getting more and more excited by the display.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip2.jpg"></center>'
-						'The guy turns the woman around and begins fucking her from behind. Deciding you''ve waited long enough you undress and slide your wet pussy in front of her face. She understands your unspoken commands, and immediately begins licking you in all the right places.'
+						'The guy turns the woman around and begins fucking her from behind. Deciding you''ve waited long enough, you undress and slide your wet pussy in front of her face. She understands your unspoken command and immediately begins licking you in all the right places.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'dom'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -114,13 +114,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip5.jpg"></center>'
-									'The man, feeling a bit left out at this point, turns her around again. This time however, he seems to think her ass is as lonely as he felt, and begins to fuck her there. He was apparently right, because she''s moaning louder than she had before.'
+									'The man, feeling a bit left out at this point, turns her around again. This time however, he seems to think her ass is as lonely as he felt, and he begins to fuck her there. He was apparently right because she''s moaning louder than she had before.'
 
 									act 'Further':
 										cla
 										*clr
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/nightclub/sex/vip6.jpg"></center>'
-										'Soon enough you see her convulsing slightly in orgasmic bliss, and the man grunts to let her know he''s cumming as well. You lick the drool off the side of your lips as you watch him cum all over her chest and into her mouth.'
+										'Soon enough, you see her convulsing slightly in orgasmic bliss, and the man grunts to let her know he''s cumming as well. You lick the drool off the side of your lips as you watch him cum all over her chest and into her mouth.'
 
 										act 'Finish':gt 'vipclub', 'start'