[text edit] clean up trainBimbo (mostly spelling/grammar/word choice issues, but also in a couple cases where there was text saying a man got dressed and left 2-3 times I removed all but 1 of the times)

locations/trainBimbo.qsrc

@@ -10,39 +10,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos1':
 
 	if spdirty = 0 and (cumloc[6] = 0 or cumloc[7] = 0):
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are now standing in the middle of the stations men''s room in a rather revealing outfit. What are you thinking, or are you even thinking?'
+		'You are now standing in the middle of the station''s men''s room in a rather revealing outfit. What are you thinking, or are you even thinking?'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo11.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are standing in the middle of the stations mens room naked and covered in sperm.'
+		'You are standing in the middle of the stations men''s room naked and covered in sperm.'
 	end
 	bimbo_temp = rand(1, 10)
 	bimbo_rand1 = rand(0,100)
 	
 	if bimbo_temp > 8:
-		'The restroom door opens and a young man comes in. He is taken aback by surprise, when he see''s you in the men''s room.'
-		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
+		'The restroom door opens, and a young man comes in. He is taken aback when he see''s you in the men''s room.'
+		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
 		if pcs_horny > 50:
-			act 'You look at him and smile.':
+			act 'Look at him and smile':
 				gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'young man', rand(18,25)
 				gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 				gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos2'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif bimbo_temp < 3:
-		'The restroom door opens and an older man in his fifties comes in. He is taken aback by surprise, when he see''s you in the men''s room.'
-		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
+		'The restroom door opens, and an older man in his fifties comes in. He is taken aback when he see''s you in the men''s room.'
+		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
 		if pcs_horny > 50:
-			act 'You look at him and smile.':
+			act 'Look at him and smile':
 				gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'fifty year old man', rand(50,59)
 				gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 				gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos3'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif bimbo_temp = 5:
-		'The restroom door opens and a group of drunk guys come in. They are taken aback by surprise, when they see you in the men''s room.'
-		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
+		'The restroom door opens, and a group of drunk guys come in. They are taken aback when they see you in the men''s room.'
+		act 'Pretend to straighten your hair':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos4'
 		if pcs_horny > 70:
-			act 'You look at them and smile.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos6'
+			act 'Look at them and smile':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos6'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Wait for men':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos1'
@@ -56,8 +56,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos2':
 	pcs_horny += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo2.jpg"></center>'
-	'An unfamiliar man blushed and went into a stall.'
-	act 'Follow him into the stall.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos22'
+	'An unfamiliar man blushes and goes into a stall.'
+	act 'Follow him into the stall':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos22'
 	act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_hall', 'male'
 end
 
@@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos22':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if bimbo_rand1 < 40:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/bimbo.boy0.jpg"></center>'
 	if bimbo_rand1 >= 40:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/bimbo.knees'+rand(0,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You burst into the stall without knocking. The man is standing there with his pants unbuttoned, dick hanging out and looking at you with surprise. You get down on your knees and wrap your lips around his cock.'
+	'You burst into the stall without knocking. The man is standing there with his pants unbuttoned, dick hanging out, and looking at you with surprise. You get down on your knees and wrap your lips around his cock.'
 
 	act'Suck':
 		cla
@@ -81,7 +81,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos22':
 		if bimbo_rand1 < 10:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/vokbimbo22.jpg"></center>'
 		if bimbo_rand1 >= 10 and bimbo_rand1 < 40:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/bimbo.boy0,'+rand(0,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		if bimbo_rand1 >= 40:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/bimbo0,'+rand(0,13)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you are sucking his dick, it quickly gets hard, as you work his shaft with your lips and boobing head, you fondles his balls with your hand. It doesn''t take to long until he starts moaning and places his hands on your head.'
+		'As you are sucking his dick, it quickly gets hard. Work his shaft with your lips and bobbing head, you fondle his balls with your hand. It doesn''t take too long before he starts moaning and places his hands on your head.'
 
 		act 'Swallow':
 			cls
@@ -90,8 +90,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos22':
 			minut += 1
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/cum1,'+rand(0,10)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You keep sucking his dick and you are rewarded with hots spurts of cum shooting into your mouth and filling it. There was some much sperm that some of it leaks from the corner of your lips as you keep sucking his cock as he cums.'
-			'Once he finally stops spurting sperm in your mouth, you stand up swallowing his cum. You wipe the cum off the corners of your lips and sucks your fingers clean, as you smile at him.'
+			'You keep sucking his dick, and you are rewarded with hot spurts of cum shooting into your mouth and filling it. There is so much sperm that some of it leaks from the corners of your lips.'
+			'Once he finally stops spurting sperm in your mouth, you stand up, swallowing his cum. You wipe the cum off your lips and suck your fingers clean as you smile at him.'
 
 			act 'Leave the stall':gt'trainbimbo','pos1'
 		end
@@ -104,10 +104,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos22':
 			minut += 1
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial0,'+rand(0,8)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pull your mouth off his cock and sit back with your face tilted up, he gets the idea and starts jerking off.'
-			'Soon hot spurt of cum is splashing across your face and into your hair. You squeezed her eyes shut to keep the sperm out of your eyes, as feel as another jet of hot cum landed on your face.'
+			'You pull your mouth off his cock and sit back with your face tilted up. He gets the idea and starts jerking off.'
+			'Soon, hot spurts of cum are splashing across your face and into your hair. You squeeze your eyes shut to keep the sperm out of your eyes as you feel another jet of hot cum land on your face.'
 
-			act 'leave the stall':gt'trainbimbo','pos1'
+			act 'Leave the stall':gt'trainbimbo','pos1'
 		end
 
 	end
@@ -131,7 +131,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos22':
 			pcs_horny = 0 & orgasm += 1 & 'When you feel him cumming, your own orgasm sweeps through you.'
 		end
 
-		act 'Leave the stall.':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos1'
+		act 'Leave the stall':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos1'
 	end
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_hall', 'male'
@@ -147,12 +147,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo2.jpg"></center>'
 	'The guy smiles to you and walks over to you, unbuttoning his pants. You make a rude gesture with your tongue.'
 	act 'Kneel down':
-	*clr
-	cla
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/bimbo.knees'+rand(0,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You get down on your knees and open your mouth to suck his cock.'
+		*clr
+		cla
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/bimbo.knees'+rand(0,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
+		'You get down on your knees and open your mouth to suck his cock.'
 		act'Suck':gt'trainbimbo','pos33'
-		act 'Run out of the bathroom.':gt'pav_train_hall'
+		act 'Run out of the bathroom':gt'pav_train_hall'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -164,9 +164,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos33':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if bimbo_rand1 < 10:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/vokbimbo33.jpg"></center>'
 	if bimbo_rand1 >= 10:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/bimbo0,'+rand(0,13)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'As you open your mouth to start sucking the guy, he grabs the you by your hair and before you can react he shoves his dick into your mouth and down your throat.'
-	'You start gagging and struggling to breath, after a bit he stops forcing himself so deep in your mouth, giving you time to recover.'
-	'He repeats these actions several times,while you start taking off your clothes.'
+	'As you open your mouth to start sucking the guy, he grabs you by your hair, and before you can react, he shoves his dick into your mouth and down your throat.'
+	'You start gagging and struggling to breath. After a bit, he stops forcing himself so deep in your mouth, giving you time to recover.'
+	'He repeats these actions several times, while you start taking off your clothes.'
 
 	act 'Pull your panties off and masturbate':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos333'
 end
@@ -181,7 +181,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos333':
 	stat['bj'] += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/bimbo.strip'+rand(0,6)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You start rubbing your clit as the guy fucks your mouth and throat. After a bit you are completely naked. He pulls you up and pushes you down on the floor where you sprawl before him, your clothes lying around you.'
+	'You start rubbing your clit as the guy fucks your mouth and throat. After a bit, you are completely naked. He pulls you up and pushes you down on the floor where you sprawl before him, your clothes lying around you.'
 	if rand(0,1) = 0:
 		'"You''re hot and give great head, but I think I want to try that tight little ass of yours."'
 		act 'Next':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos3333'
@@ -203,9 +203,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos3333':
 	horand = rand (1, 100)
 
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/bimbo3,'+rand(0,7)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He turns your face to the wall and enters your ass from behind. You are not prepared for this, with no lubrication on your ass and only your slavia on his dick the pain is sharp, you wince and tear up. You try to pull away, but strong hands hold you firm, as you struggle more he pushes you tight up against the wall leaving you no where to go.'
-	'He pounds your ass furiously, balls deep with out mercy, the more you whimper the harder he pounds you. He seems to have a supernatural stamina as he ravishes your ass, you completely lose track of time, as tears start to stream down your face.'
-	'"Like that girl? Yeah I know a little slut like you, loves having your ass tore up, you can be my ass whore anytime, ha ha!" With these words began to twitch and you can feel his spurts of hot sperm shooting deep into your ass. Once he has finished cumming in your ass, he pushes your head against the wall while he pulls his dick out of you and wipes it off on your butt cheeks, with a final laugh he lets you go and leaves.'
+	'He turns your face to the wall and enters your ass from behind. You are not prepared for this. With no lubrication on your ass and only your saliva on his dick, the pain is sharp. You wince and tear up. You try to pull away, but strong hands hold you firm. As you struggle more, he pushes you tight up against the wall, leaving you nowhere to go.'
+	'He pounds your ass furiously, balls deep with out mercy. The more you whimper the harder he pounds you. He seems to have supernatural stamina as he ravishes your ass. You completely lose track of time as tears start to stream down your face.'
+	'"Like that girl? Yeah I know a little slut like you loves having your ass tore up. You can be my ass whore anytime, ha ha!" With these words, his cock begins to twitch, and you feel spurts of hot sperm shooting deep into your ass. Once he has finished cumming, he pushes your head against the wall while he pulls his dick out of you and wipes it off on your butt cheeks.'
 	if horand > pcs_horny:
 		pcs_horny += 10 & 'You have not managed to cum.'
 	else
@@ -228,15 +228,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos3334':
 !!random two imagestoiletvag1 and toiletvag2
 	if bimbo_rand1 < 10:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/toiletvag1.jpg"></center>'
 	if bimbo_rand1 >= 10:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/toiletvag3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He turns your face to the wall and enters your pussy from behind. You are not prepared for this, it hurts as he forces himself into you. You try to pull away but his quite strong hands hold you in place. Unable to pull away you start rubbing your clit and getting yourself wet.'
-	'He abuses your poor vagina while he lets loose variable vulgar comments to you. He uses use for a long time, and to your surprise once you get yourself wet the pain gradually starts to recede, you begin to enjoy his rough handling of your body, and you begin to moan softly.'
-	'"So, you actually like it slut? If you visit here again, you can be a my toilet whore any time, ha ha!" With these words began to twitch and you can feel his spurts of hot sperm shooting deep into your ass. Once he has finished cumming in your ass, he pushes your head against the wall while he pulls his dick out of you and wipes it off on your butt cheeks, with a final laugh he lets you go and leaves.'
+	'He turns your face to the wall and enters your pussy from behind. You are not prepared for this. It hurts as he forces himself into you. You try to pull away, but his quite strong hands hold you in place. Unable to pull away, you start rubbing your clit and getting yourself wet.'
+	'He abuses your poor vagina while he lets loose various vulgar comments at you. He uses you for a long time, and to your surprise, once you get yourself wet, the pain gradually starts to recede. You begin to enjoy his rough handling of your body, and you begin to moan softly.'
+	'"So, you actually like it slut? If you visit here again, you can be a my toilet whore any time, ha ha!" With these words, his cock begins to twitch, and you can feel spurts of hot sperm shooting deep into your pussy. Once he has finished cumming, he pushes your head against the wall while he pulls his dick out of you and wipes it off on your butt cheeks.'
 	if horand > pcs_horny:
 		pcs_horny += 10 & 'You have not managed to cum.'
 	else
 		pcs_horny = 0 & orgasm += 1 & 'When you feel him cumming, your own orgasm sweeps through you.'
 	end
-	'After he finishing inside you he lets you go, and begins to make himself presentable.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Next':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos33333'
@@ -249,7 +248,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos33333':
 	body_write = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/bimbo.cum.body0.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He pulls out a marker and writes on your chest Pussy Whore. "This way it will be clear to everyone what you really are, ha ha ha!" He pulled up his pants and left you there lying on the floor covered in cum.'
+	'He pulls out a marker and writes on your chest Pussy Whore. "This way it will be clear to everyone what you really are, ha ha ha!" He pulls up his pants and leaves you there, lying on the floor covered in cum.'
 
 	act 'Dress': gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos1'
 end
@@ -260,7 +259,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos4':
 	minut += 50
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You pretend not to notice anything. Maybe they will just think you are so stupid, that you mixed up the women''s room with the mens room.'
+	'You pretend not to notice anything. Maybe they will just think you are so stupid that you mixed up the women''s room with the mens room.'
 
 	act 'Wait':gt 'trainbimbo', 'pos1'
 	act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_hall', 'male'
@@ -273,9 +272,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos5':
 	minut += 50
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You ran into a toilet stall and closed the door. You feel shame at the thought of anyone catching you in here. Your heart was pounding in your chest.'
+	'You run into a toilet stall and close the door. You feel shame at the thought of anyone catching you in here. Your heart pounds in your chest.'
 
-	act 'Run out of toilet':gt 'pav_train_hall', 'male'
+	act 'Leave the stall':gt 'pav_train_hall', 'male'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pos6':
@@ -285,7 +284,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos6':
 	pcs_horny += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/vokbimbo2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Come on, who is in here with us!" You hear a drunken guy shout.'
+	'"Come on, who is in here with us?" You hear a drunken guy shout.'
 	act 'Undress':
 		cla
 		*clr
@@ -293,7 +292,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos6':
 		'You strip out of your clothes.'
 		act 'Further':gt'trainbimbo','pos66'
 	end
-	act 'Ran out of toilet':gt'pav_train_hall'
+	act 'Run out of the bathroom':gt'pav_train_hall'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pos66':
@@ -352,18 +351,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos66':
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/trainstation/sex/vokbimbo66.jpg"></center>'
-	'The group of local drunks fuck you in all of your holes, while commenting about you with vulgar jokes. They pinch and poke your anus, nipples, clit and vagina with their dirty hands.'
+	'The group of local drunks fuck you in all of your holes while commenting about you with vulgar jokes. They pinch and poke your anus, nipples, clit and vagina with their dirty hands.'
 	'One of them says, "I haven''t fucked a girl as hot as this one in ages!"'
-	'Another one says "Oooh, I''m so going to fuck her pussy, the last time I got to fuck anything was almost five years ago and that was some guys ass!"'
-	'Yet another says laughing, "Not me boys, I am going to rip her pretty little ass up, when I am done she won''t be able to sit for a week."'
-	'The crowd around and before long start using all of your holes. Sometimes one at a time and sometimes all of them at once. As some men leave it seems more enter and stand in line to wait their turn to fuck you, after awhile you completely lose count of the number of men that have used your body.'
-	'Finally, the last one finishes and no new ones come in, you have no idea how long has passed or how many men have fucked your holes. All you know is every hole you have is sore and leaking cum, your face, hair and covered in sperm and there is splatters of drying cum all over you body.'
+	'Another one says, "Oooh, I''m so going to fuck her pussy. The last time I got to fuck anything was almost five years ago, and that was some guys ass!"'
+	'Yet another says laughing, "Not me boys. I am going to rip her pretty little ass up. When I am done, she won''t be able to sit for a week."'
+	'They crowd around and before long start using all of your holes, sometimes one at a time and sometimes all of them at once. As some men leave, it seems more enter and stand in line to wait their turn to fuck you. After a while, you completely lose count of the number of men that have used your body.'
+	'Finally, the last one finishes, and no new ones come in. You have no idea how much time has passed or how many men have fucked your holes. All you know is every hole you have is sore and leaking cum, your face and hair are covered in sperm, and there are splatters of drying cum all over you body.'
 	if orgasmcounter > 0:
 		if orgasmcounter = 1:'You had an orgasm.'
 		if orgasmcounter >= 2 and orgasmcounter < 4:'You had a few orgasms.'
 		if orgasmcounter >= 4 and orgasmcounter < 6:'You had quite a few orgasms.'
 		if orgasmcounter >= 6 and orgasmcounter < 8:'You had numerous orgasms.'
-		if orgasmcounter >= 8:'You either had countless orgasms, or one, that never ended. All the same, it took you some time to orient yourself afterwards.' & minut += 10
+		if orgasmcounter >= 8:'You either had countless orgasms or one that never ended. All the same, it takes you some time to orient yourself afterwards.' & minut += 10
 	end
 	' '
 	if iscumvag > 0: