Merge remote-tracking branch 'Anya/master'

locations/gad_church.qsrc

@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Sermon':
 	church_moral += 1
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'The candles dim as the sermon begins. You listen intently to the priest as he preaches the word of god. You study his teachings, feeling enlightened, until you reach the end of the sermon.'
+	'The candles are dimmed as the sermon begins. You listen intently to the priest as he preaches the word of God. You study His teachings, feeling enlightened until you reach the end of the sermon.'
 	act 'Stand up':gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vigil':
 	church_moral += 1
 	PLAY 'sound/church/Blessing.mp3',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You attend the vigil and reflect on the recent events in your life. The harmonies as the hymns and psalms are sung sweep aside some of the worries in your heart, although you know they will return once you leave this holy place, you still enjoy the rest. The sweet scent of incense tickles your nose.'
+	'You attend the vigil and reflect on the recent events in your life. The harmonies as the hymns and psalms are sung sweep aside some of the worries in your heart; although you know they will return once you leave this holy place, you still enjoy the rest. The sweet scent of incense tickles your nose.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 	act 'Stay for the Rite of Mutual Forgiveness':
@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'liturgy':
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 	PLAY 'sound/church/t' + rand(1,19) + '.mp3',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,8) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You join the congregation for the Divine Liturgy. You see mostly older people around, but there are some people around your age present as well. You participate in the singing, but that''s about it. Your presence seems to go largely unnoticed and you have the chance to rest. You feel a lot better.'
+	'You join the congregation for the Divine Liturgy. You see mostly older people around, but some people around your age are also present. You participate in the singing, but that''s about it. Your presence seems to go largely unnoticed, and you have the chance to rest. You feel a lot better.'
     vokal_exp += rand(0,3)
     gs 'stat'
 	act 'Leave the church': gt 'gad_church' , 'start'
@@ -128,7 +128,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Narthex':
 	PLAY 'sound/church/76139__dkustic__090227-01-people-church-concert.wav',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/enterchurch.jpg"></center>'
 	'You enter the church and the scent of incense and beeswax fills your lungs. Your eyes are drawn past the Narthex into the Nave with its walls covered in lovingly painted icons while a thousand points of light dance in joy throughout God''s house from the magnificent chandelier that hangs from the ceiling.'
-	'To your left is a counter with many candles, icons and prayer books, a small jar rest next to it with a few rubels in it, donations for taking a candle.'
+	'To your left is a counter with many candles, icons and prayer books, a small jar resting next to it with a few rubels and donations for taking a candle.'
 	act 'Leave the church': gt 'gad_church' , 'start'
 	!!if ((week <= 5 and hour >= 7 and hour < 9) or (hour >= 16 and hour < 18)) and confessday ! daystart: act 'Go to confession': confessday = daystart & gt 'gad_church2', 'confession'
 	act 'Light a candle':gt 'gad_church', 'candle'
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'candle':
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'gad_church', 'reducevillagerep', 25, -1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/ch_candle.jpg"></center>'
-	'You approach the counter and take one of the candles, lighting it, with out giving a donation.'
+	'You approach the counter and take one of the candles, lighting it without giving a donation.'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -160,7 +160,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'candle1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'gad_church', 'reducevillagerep', 25, -1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/ch_candle.jpg"></center>'
-	'You approach the counter and put 10 <b>₽</b> in the jar for a candle. You take one of the candles and light it.'
+	'You approach the counter and put 10 <b>₽</b> in the jar for a candle. Then, you take one of the candles and light it.'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -189,33 +189,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pray':
 			pcs_mood += 30
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += 15
-			'You decide to pray for a while. While you don''t consider yourself to be deeply religious, you do feel a strong connection to God when you look at the icons around you. You allow yourself to look deeply into your soul as you contemplate the direction your life is going.'
+			'You decide to pray for a while. While you don''t consider yourself deeply religious, you feel a solid connection to God when you look at the icons around you. You allow yourself to look deeply into your soul as you contemplate your life''s direction.'
 		elseif hour >6 and hour < 20 and church_moral >= 60:
 			pcs_horny -= 30
 			pcs_mood += 40
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
-			'You decide to pray. The beauty and glory of being in the body of God overwhelms you and you lose yourself in prayer. You''re unsure how much time has passed when you finally become aware of your surroundings again, but it doesn''t matter as you are at peace with God and the world.'
+			'You decide to pray. The beauty and glory of being in the body of God overwhelm you, and you lose yourself in prayer. When you finally become aware of your surroundings again, you''re unsure how much time has passed, but it doesn''t matter as you are at peace with God and the world.'
 		elseif (hour >= 20 or hour <= 6) and church_moral < 30:
 			pcs_horny -= 40
 			pcs_mood += 50
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
-			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness. You start to get a strange vibe, one you can''t quite shake. You suddenly get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, an hour has passed and you feel reborn.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness. You start to get a strange vibe you can''t quite shake. You suddenly get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, an hour has passed, and you feel reborn.'
 		elseif (hour >= 20 or hour <= 6) and church_moral >= 30 and church_moral < 60:
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			pcs_mood += 50
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
 			if nark > 1: nark = nark/2
-			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness, but you find it comforting. You get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, an hour has passed and you feel cleansed.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness, but you find it comforting. You get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, an hour has passed, and you feel cleansed.'
 		else
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			pcs_mood = 100
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += 60
 			if nark > 1: nark = ((nark/4)*3)
-			'The Nave is lit only with candles and small presence lights and the darkness feels very comforting, like being in the womb. You get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, more than an hour has passed and you feel reborn and cleansed.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with candles and small presence lights, and the darkness feels very comforting, like being in the womb. You get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, more than an hour has passed, and you feel reborn and cleansed.'
 		end
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'

locations/gadbana.qsrc

@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ if mira_guest = 0:
 			inhib_exp += rand(0,2)
 			grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,2)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>'
-			'It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+			'It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 			!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 			gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 			killvar 'banya_underwear'
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ if mira_guest = 0:
 			inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 			grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,1)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>'
-			'It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside in your underwear, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+			'It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 			!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 			gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 			killvar 'banya_underwear'
@@ -105,16 +105,16 @@ if mira_guest = 0:
 					gs 'stat'
 
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/par.jpg"></center>'
-					'You strip, sit down and relax. After a proper banya session, you pick up a bucket filled with cold water and pour it over yourself and head over to the shower. You feel like a completely new person.'
+					'You strip, sit down and relax. After a proper banya session, you pick up a bucket filled with cold water, pour it over yourself, and head over to the shower. You feel like a completely new person.'
 					if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the water.'
 					act 'Finish': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
 		else
-			'The banya is not in use at this time, it is available between 19:00 and 22:00 during the weekend.'
+			'The banya is not in use at this time. It is available between 19:00 and 22:00 during the weekend.'
 		end
 	elseif week < 6:
-		'The banya is not used during the week, it is usually ready to use from 19:00 during the weekend.'
+		'The banya is not used during the week. It is usually ready to use from 19:00 during the weekend.'
 	end
 	*nl
 
@@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ if mira_guest = 0:
 			gs 'clothing', 'strip_all'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/mit.jpg"></center>'
-			'You lather up your washcloth and start scrubbing your body. You rinse off the soap and start to lather your hair with shampoo. After rinsing off the shampoo you feel completely clean.'
+			'You lather up your washcloth and start scrubbing your body. Next, you rinse off the soap and begin to lather your hair with shampoo. After rinsing off the shampoo, you feel completely clean.'
 			if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the water.'
 
 			act 'Finish':gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -269,7 +269,7 @@ else
 			minut += 1
 			inhib_exp += rand(0,2)
 			grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,2)
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 			!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 			gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 			killvar 'banya_underwear'
@@ -283,7 +283,7 @@ else
 			minut += 1
 			inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 			grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,1)
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside in your underwear, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 			!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 			gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 			killvar 'banya_underwear'
@@ -298,7 +298,7 @@ else
 		gs 'clothing', 'strip_all'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/gadukino/mira/miraban.jpg"></center>'
-			'While you undress, through the corner of your eye you notice Mira removing her panties.'
+			'While you undress, you notice Mira removing her panties from the corner of your eye.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -324,7 +324,7 @@ else
 
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/gadukino/mira/miraban2.jpg"></center>'
-				'Mira finally finishes lathering herself, you take the loofah and lather yourself from head to toe. You enjoy yourselves in the warm bath, relaxing in each other''s company, occasionally exchanging meaningless anecdotes...'
+				'Mira finally finishes lathering herself; you take the loofah and lather yourself from head to toe. You enjoy yourselves in the warm bath, relaxing in each other''s company, occasionally exchanging meaningless anecdotes...'
 				if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the water.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 25
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -351,7 +351,7 @@ else
 						minut += 1
 						inhib_exp += rand(0,2)
 						grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,2)
-						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone but Mira saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone, but Mira saw you go outside naked, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 						!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 						gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 						killvar 'banya_underwear'
@@ -365,7 +365,7 @@ else
 						minut += 1
 						inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 						grandmaQW['nudity_trouble'] += rand(0,1)
-						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s certainly risky leaving the bathhouse like this, and while it''s unlikely anyone but Mira saw you go outside in your underwear, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
+						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/grandparents/gaddvor_nude.jpg"></center>''It''s undoubtedly risky leaving the bathhouse like this. But, while it''s unlikely anyone but Mira saw you go outside in your underwear, there''s a thrill in potentially getting caught.'
 						!!gs 'clothing', 'recover_lost_clothes', 'gadbana'
 						gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 						killvar 'banya_underwear'

locations/gadfield.qsrc

@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'field':
 			if npc_rel['A60'] >= 15:
 				npc_rel['A60'] += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/gadukino/mira/haying_time_mira.jpg"></center>'
-				'Most of the village has shown up to help out with the hay. Mira is there too, and you both partake in the activities. You are really enjoying yourself, and working alongside Mira makes the day fly by. By the end of the day, you are both exhausted, but smiling.'
+				'Most of the village has shown up to help out with the hay. Mira is there too, and you both partake in the activities. You enjoy yourself, and working alongside Mira makes the day fly by. By the end of the day, you are both exhausted but smiling.'
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/haying_time.jpg"></center>'
 				'Almost all of the villagers have shown up to help out with the fresh cut hay. You spend most of the day working hard and sweating as you help gather the fresh-cut hay. It is difficult, but you get a great workout and end the day feeling exhausted, but quite satisfied.'
@@ -92,7 +92,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'horse':
 	gs'stat'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/horse.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your grandfather''s horse Desperado.'
+	'Your grandfather''s horse, Desperado.'
 
 	act 'Go back to the field':gt'gadfield','field'
 
@@ -101,7 +101,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'horse':
 			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/horse_field.jpg"></center>'
-			'You spot your grandfather''s horse wandering loose in the field and decide to help out by taking Desperado home. Reaching for the bridle, you start leading Desperado towards the village.'
+			'You spot your grandfather''s horse wandering loose in the field and decide to help by taking Desperado home. Reaching for the harness, you start leading Desperado towards the village.'
 			minut += 60
 			grandmaQW['help_amount'] += rand(0,1)
 			hndiwrk_exp += rand(0,3)
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 	temp = rand(1,5)
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/cow.jpg"></center>'
-	'The cattle herd is standing in the middle of the field. Some of the cows are munching on grass, others are just staring idly around.'
+	'The cattle herd is standing in the middle of the field. Some cows are munching on grass, and others just stare idly around.'
 	if mira = 1: MiraLoc = 41 & '<a href="exec: gt ''miroslava'', ''Start''">Mira</a> is standing next to you.'
 
 	if grandpaQW['chore_herd_cattle'] = 0:act 'Leave them be':gt'gadfield','field'
@@ -166,7 +166,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow'+rand(1,4)+'.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching out for any stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
+				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching for stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Then, instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
 
 				minut += 60
 				if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
@@ -191,7 +191,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_run.jpg"></center>'
-					'Since the cows are all behaving, you decide to spend some time jogging around the field.'
+					'Since the cows are all behaving, you spend some time jogging around the field.'
 
 					frost = 0
 					minut += 60
@@ -246,7 +246,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_flowers.jpg"></center>'
-					'Keeping one eyes on the cattle, you spend an hour wandering the field, picking flowers.'
+					'Keeping one eye on the cattle, you spend an hour wandering the field, picking flowers.'
 					minut += 60
 					pcs_mood += 20
 					pcs_stam -= 4
@@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 				act 'Read a book (1:00)':
 					if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1:
 						glassqw = 1
-						msg'	The text blurs across the page, it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologists.'&gt 'gadfield','cow'
+						msg'	The text blurs across the page; it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologist.'&gt 'gadfield','cow'
 					end
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
@@ -284,7 +284,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 					else
 						blizoruk += 1
 						pcs_mood += 10
-						'While reading the book, time flies by cause you are really engaged in the books'' plot.'
+						'While reading the book, time flies by because you are really engaged in the plot.'
 					end
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -296,7 +296,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow':
 			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/cow_go.jpg"></center>'
-			'Looking at his watch, Grandpa turns to you and says, "It''s about lunchtime, which means it''s time to take the herd to the watering hole." You begin to gather the cows and lead them to the river.'
+			'Looking at his watch, Grandpa turns to you and says, "It''s about lunchtime, which means it''s time to take the herd to the watering hole." So you begin to gather the cows and lead them to the river.'
 
 			if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
 				pcs_hydra -= 12
@@ -332,7 +332,7 @@ if grandpaQW['chore_herd_cattle'] = 1 and npc_rel['A60'] >= 15 and mira = 0 and
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/gadukino/mira/mira2.jpg"></center>'
 	'While keeping an eye on the cow herd, you see Mira in the distance, approaching. You happily wave to her.'
-	'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I wanted to visit you and brought water with me," she says nearing you. "Have you missed me?"'
+	'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I wanted to visit you, and I''ve brought some water with me," she says, nearing you. "Have you missed me?"'
 	minut += 5
 	npc_rel['A60'] += 1
 	mira = 1
@@ -356,7 +356,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 	'<center><H4>River</H4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/cow_river.jpg"></center>'
 
-	'The cattle herd is near the river. Some of the cows are munching on grass, some are drinking from the river, and some are just standing or lying around.'
+	'The cattle herd is near the river. Some cows are munching on grass, some drink from the river, and some just stand or lie around.'
 
 	if mira = 1: MiraLoc = 42 & '<a href="exec: gt ''miroslava'', ''Start''">Mira</a> is sitting next to you.'
 	if temper >= 15 and sunWeather = 1:'"You can go for a swim if you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''ll keep an eye on the herd," says your grandfather.'
@@ -367,7 +367,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow'+rand(1,4)+'.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching out for any stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
+				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching for stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Then, instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
 
 				minut += 60
 				if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
@@ -391,7 +391,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_river.jpg"></center>'
-					'You spend a few minutes spashing around in the river, which feels cool and refreshing.'
+					'You spend a few minutes splashing around in the river, which feels cool and refreshing.'
 					if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the water.'
 					minut += 15
 					cumspclnt = 4 & gs 'cum_cleanup'
@@ -407,7 +407,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_sun.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lie down to sunbathe by the river, while Grandpa looks after the herd.'
+					'You lie down to sunbathe by the river while Grandpa looks after the herd.'
 					minut += 30
 					gs 'sweat', 'add', 10
 					pcs_mood += 5
@@ -419,7 +419,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 				act 'Read a book (1:00)':
 					if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1:
 						glassqw = 1
-						msg'	The text blurs across the page, it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologists.'&gt 'gadfield','cow2'
+						msg'	The text blurs across the page; it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologist.'&gt 'gadfield','cow2'
 					end
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
@@ -438,7 +438,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 					else
 						blizoruk += 1
 						pcs_mood += 10
-						'While reading the book, time flies by cause you are really engaged in the books'' plot.'
+						'While reading the book, time flies by because you are really engaged in the plot.'
 					end
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -450,7 +450,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow2':
 			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/cow_go.jpg"></center>'
-			'Looking at his watch, Grandpa says that it''s time to drive the herd over near the forest. The two of you begin to gather the herd and drive them toward the forest.'
+			'Grandpa looks at his watch and says it''s time to drive the herd over near the forest. So the two of you begin to gather the herd and guide them toward the forest.'
 			
 			minut += 60
 			if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
@@ -496,7 +496,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow'+rand(1,4)+'.jpg"></center>'
-				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching out for any stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
+				'You spend an hour herding the cows, watching for stragglers and driving them back to the herd. Then, instead of letting your grandfather do all the work, you roll up the sleeves and try to do most of the work yourself.'
 
 				minut += 60
 				if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
@@ -520,7 +520,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_run.jpg"></center>'
-					'Since the cows are all behaving, you decide to spend some time jogging around the field.'
+					'Since the cows are all behaving, you spend some time jogging around the field.'
 
 					frost = 0
 					minut += 60
@@ -575,7 +575,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_flowers.jpg"></center>'
-					'Keeping one eyes on the cattle, you spend an hour wandering the field, picking flowers.'
+					'Keeping one eye on the cattle, you spend an hour wandering the field, picking flowers.'
 					minut += 60
 					pcs_mood += 20
 					pcs_stam -= 4
@@ -597,7 +597,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/graze_cow_book'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					if blizoruk = 500 or glassqw = 1:
 						glassqw = 1
-						msg'	The text blurs across the page, it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologists.'&gt 'gadfield','cow3'
+						msg'	The text blurs across the page; it seems you have poor eyesight. Maybe you should visit an ophthalmologist.'&gt 'gadfield','cow3'
 					end
 					minut += 60
 					if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:pcs_hydra -= 6
@@ -613,7 +613,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 					else
 						blizoruk += 1
 						pcs_mood += 10
-						'While reading the book, time flies by cause you are really engaged in the books'' plot.'
+						'While reading the book, time flies by because you are really engaged in the plot.'
 					end
 					gs 'stat'
 
@@ -626,7 +626,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cow3':
 			menu_off = 1
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/cow_go_home.jpg"></center>'
-			'As sunset approaches, Grandpa says that it is late and time to drive the herd home. You hurry and gather up the cows and drive them back towards the village.'
+			'As sunset approaches, Grandpa says that it is late and time to drive the herd home. So you hurry, gather the cows, and guide them back towards the village.'
 
 			if temper >= 25 and sunWeather = 1:
 				pcs_hydra -= 12

locations/gschool_lessons4.qsrc

@@ -1004,7 +1004,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'jumping_jacks':
 			'Jumping jacks is a surprisingly good workout. You do very well and beat most of your classmates. While you never win any of the competitions, you don''t embarrass yourself either. You''re tired by the time you''re done. You have no doubt why the boys are watching - you can feel your breasts bouncing with every jump, despite the help of the sports bra.'
 		else
 			grupvalue[2] += 2
-			'The other girls in your group are surprised at just how many jumping jacks you can do. You manage to go the longest in a few of the rounds and could actually go for quite a bit longer, but notice that the longer the class goes on, the more boys have found their way over to watch you. Some of the girls you were competing with make snide remarks about just which particular parts of you they are so keen on watching.'
+			'The other girls in your group are surprised at just how many jumping jacks you can do. You manage to go the longest in a few of the rounds and could actually go for quite a bit longer. However, you notice that the longer the class goes on, the more boys walk over to watch you. Some of the girls you were competing with make snide remarks about just which particular parts of you they are so keen on watching.'
 		end
 		gs 'gschool_lessonsev1', 'fiz_rand'
 		act 'End of lesson':gt 'gschool_lessons4', 'postphys'
@@ -1015,7 +1015,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'jumping_jacks':
 			'You''re barely able to do more than a few before you''re too tired to continue. You did the fewest in your class and most of the jocks snicker or make snide remarks. The teacher wants to make sure you get enough exercise though, so you''re made to give it a few more tries. There''s outright jeering from some of the boys whenever you screw up. "Come on already! We want to see them bounce!" Vasily shouts.'
 		elseif pcs_vital <= 40:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/jumpr.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You do about average among the girls before you stopping. The teacher wants to make sure you get enough exercise though, so you''re made to give it a couple tries. There''s outright jeering from some of the boys whenever you screw up. Vasily shouts, "Come on, get those titties bouncing!" Dan shouts.'
+			'You do about average among the girls before stopping. The teacher wants to make sure you get enough exercise though, so you''re made to give it a couple of tries. There''s outright jeering from some of the boys whenever you screw up. Vasily starts shouting "Come on, get those titties bouncing!"'
 		elseif pcs_vital <= 60:
 			grupvalue[2] += 1
 			'Jumping jacks is a complete misery. You can''t manage it for very long; although your coordination and endurance are there, the pain from your breasts slapping around builds up fast, despite the help of the sports bra. The girls you''re competing with are sympathetic at first, but that slowly changes as some of the boys wander over to cheer you on. It''s completely apparent what their eyes are focused on each time a round begins.'