[text edit] clean up shop

locations/shop.qsrc

@@ -36,8 +36,8 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	end
 
 	'In the hall stands an <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''ATM'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">ATM</a>, from which you can withdraw money from your bank account.'
-	'There is a branch of communication giants <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''megafon'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">MegaFon</a>.'
-	'On the other side is on the wall <a href="exec: gs ''noticeboard'',''start''">Public notice board</a>, where you can check various private and official advertisement.'
+	'There is a branch of communications giant <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''megafon'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">MegaFon</a>.'
+	'On the other side on the wall, there is a <a href="exec: gs ''noticeboard'',''start''">Public notice board</a>, where you can check various private and official advertisement.'
 	'<br>Most of the space in the supermarket is taken up by the <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''grocery'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">grocery department</a>, but the store has many smaller departments as well. <a href="exec:$shoplocation=''cosmetics'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">Cosmetics</a>, <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''hardware'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">hardware</a>, <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''clothing'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">clothing</a> and the department of <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''tech'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">household appliances</a>. Not far from the entrance is a <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''icecream'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">counter selling ice cream</a>.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
@@ -54,18 +54,18 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	if $loc = 'city_residential':
 		if rand(1, 20) = 20:
 			if dimaQW = 0:
-				'By the store entrance a man is looking at you appreciatively.'
+				'By the store entrance, a man is looking at you appreciatively.'
 				act 'Return the look':gt 'event', 'dima'
 			elseif dimaQW = 1:
-				'In the lobby of the store you notice Dima and you are frozen with fear, you want to run, but your legs won''t respond.'
-				'Your heart is thumping in your chest, your vision narrows, you feel faint.'
+				'In the lobby of the store, you notice Dima, and you are frozen with fear. You want to run, but your legs won''t respond.'
+				'Your heart thumps in your chest, your vision narrows, you feel faint.'
 				act 'Pass out':gt 'event', 'scoreslut1'
 			else
-				'You meet the same Dima who''s friend fucked and abused you. Dima grins confidently and says, "Hello."'
+				'You meet the same Dima whose friend fucked and abused you. Dima grins confidently and says, "Hello."'
 
 				act 'Hello':
 					cla
-					'"Come with me, My wife''s away", says Dima.'
+					'"Come with me. My wife''s away," says Dima.'
 					
 					gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -87,9 +87,9 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 							spafinloc = 12
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							swallow += 1
-							'Dima takes you to his house and orders you to lie across the sofa. You get on into position, he calls you a bitch and a starts fucking you in the mouth.'
+							'Dima takes you to his house and orders you to lie across the sofa. You get into position. He calls you a bitch and starts fucking you in the mouth.'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/street/sex/gostdt2.jpg"></center>'
-							'Dima finally finishes in your mouth, you obediently swallow and lick the remnants of sperm off his big cock.'
+							'Dima finally finishes in your mouth. You obediently swallow and lick the remnants of sperm off his big cock.'
 							
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'deepthroat', 'humiliation'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -102,10 +102,10 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 							spafinloc = 4
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							spank += 1
-							'Dima has brings you to his house and right in the corridor begins to kiss and undress you. When you are naked he takes you to the bathroom.'
-							'There he unscrews the shower-head and puts the hose in your ass. Quickly you feel the fullness and Dima sits you on the toilet. After the rough enema, he bends you over and puts his big dick in your ass.'
+							'Dima brings you to his house and, right in the corridor, begins to kiss and undress you. When you are naked, he takes you to the bathroom.'
+							'There, he unscrews the shower-head and puts the hose in your ass. Quickly, you feel the fullness and Dima sits you on the toilet. After the rough enema, he bends you over and puts his big dick in your ass.'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/street/sex/gostanal2.jpg"></center>'
-							'Dima fucks you in the ass whilst slapping your butt, at first it is painful, but gradually you get it and it feels amazing. Finally, your ass fills with hot liquid and Dima moans and grabs your buttocks.'
+							'Dima fucks you in the ass whilst slapping your butt. At first it is painful, but gradually, you get into it, and it feels amazing. Finally, your ass fills with hot liquid, and Dima moans and grabs your buttocks.'
 							
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'rough', 'humiliation'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	if TorgPredZ > 0:
 		!! the location of the shop hasn''t been done today
 		if ($loc = 'city_residential' and StreetShopTPday ! daystart) or ($loc = 'city_industrial' and nordShopTPday ! daystart) or ($loc = 'torgcentr' and downShopTPday ! daystart):
-			act 'Arrange products':
+			act 'Promote products':
 				*clr & cla
 				if $loc = 'city_residential':StreetShopTPday = daystart
 				if $loc = 'city_industrial':nordShopTPday = daystart
@@ -137,7 +137,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 				TorgPredZV += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/store/shop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You arranged the products for quite a while and when I finally managed, then went to the cashier and you check it struck.'
+				'You promote the products for quite a while, and when you finally finish, you go to the cashier and confirm they sold.'
 
 				act 'Exit':gt 'shop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -169,14 +169,14 @@ if $shoplocation = 'ATM':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 
-				kartaINATM = input ("How much money you want to deposit into the account? Note: A service charge of 100 <b>₽</b> will be deducted from the amount deposited.")
+				kartaINATM = input ("How much money do you want to deposit into the account? Note: A service charge of 100 <b>₽</b> will be deducted from the amount deposited.")
 				if kartaINATM < 100 or kartaINATM > money:
 					'This is not a valid input.'
 				else
 					atmDeposit += kartaINATM - 100
 					atmDepositDate = daystart + 2
 					money -= kartaINATM
-					'<br>You deposited <<kartaINATM>> <b>₽</b> into your account.'
+					'<br>You deposit <<kartaINATM>> <b>₽</b> into your account.'
 					'It will take 2 days for funds to be available. Your new balance will be <<karta+atmDeposit>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				end
 
@@ -192,7 +192,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'ATM':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 
-				kartaOUT = input ("How much money you want to withdraw?")
+				kartaOUT = input ("How much money do you want to withdraw?")
 				if kartaOUT <= 0 or kartaOUT > karta + bankDebtLimit:
 					'<br>Invalid operation.'
 				else
@@ -349,7 +349,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'clothing':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Department of Women''s Clothing</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/store/shop4.jpg"></center>'
-	'This department is mostly cheap underwear, they also have an ugly coat and one style of mumsy swimwwear.'
+	'This department is mostly cheap underwear. They also have an ugly coat and one style of mumsy swimwwear.'
 	'It is the only place you can buy ice-skates though.'
 
 	if hour < 8 or hour > 20:
@@ -517,7 +517,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'icecream':
 			pcs_breath = 0
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/food/icecreem.jpg"></center>'
-			'You bought ice cream and ate it not going far.'
+			'You buy ice cream and eat it not going far.'
 			act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'shop', 'start'
 		end
 	end