[text edit] clean up dibodi. also change the line from Marinka to say she does know where the art studio is instead of her saying that she doesn't since having this conversation with her is how the player unlocks the art studio (or is how the player would unlock the art studio if the earlier events in the chain leading to accessing the art studio were actually triggerable)

locations/dibodi.qsrc

@@ -6,11 +6,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'os1':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs'stat'
     '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artstudio/downud1.jpg"></center>'
-    'You are taken back by all the naked people, with their bodies only covered by body paint.'
-    'One of the painted naked girls approaches you. "Hello, sorry, for being so forward but we could really use your participation right now and perhaps if you like it, we could even take you to participate in some of our other shows."'
-    '"Huozhnik Moses Kruzhinsky, is a very talented artist. As you can see it''s not just us girls participating, there are guys here too." She said pointing out some of the naked guys covered in body paint.'
+    'You are taken aback by all the naked people, with their bodies only covered by body paint.'
+    'One of the painted naked girls approaches you. "Hello, sorry for being so forward, but we could really use your participation right now, and perhaps if you like it, we could even take you to participate in some of our other shows."'
+    '"Huozhnik Moses Kruzhinsky is a very talented artist. As you can see, it''s not just us girls participating. There are guys here too," she says pointing some of them out.'
     '"So what do you say? Would you like to join us?"'
-	if pcs_inhib < 50:'You are considering it, having your naked body painted and then walking around in public, sounds a little shameful, but it''d be really interesting too.'
+	if pcs_inhib < 50:'You consider it. Having your naked body painted and then walking around in public sounds a little shameful, but it''d be really interesting too.'
 	act 'Decline':gt'ugol' & bodimodel1 = 1
 	act 'Doubt':gt 'dibodi', 'bodiart1'
 	if pcs_inhib > 30: act 'Agree':gt 'dibodi', 'bodiart'
@@ -21,11 +21,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodiart':
 	gs'stat'
 	bodimodel = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artstudio/downud1.jpg"></center>'
-    '"I''m so glad, you agreed. Moses Kruzhinsky is the artist, everyone just calls him Masya." She pointed at a man painting a girl. "My name is Galina."'
-    'Then she turned back to the artist waving her arms and cried. "Masya, there is a new girl here that would be perfect for your work." The artist looked up and then stared at you with an appraising look, after a moment he nodded and went back to his current work.'
-    if lesbian > 0:'She chatted about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often, which caused her breasts to move in pleasant ways, you barely pay attention to what she says as you find yourself staring at her chest.'
-    'After a few minutes, perhaps noticing you paying more attention to her body than to what she is saying she falls silent.'
-    'Several minutes of silence pass before she speaks again. "Our place is in the old town, you can come anytime, it was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
+    '"I''m so glad, you agreed. That''s Moses Kruzhinsky over there, though everyone just calls him Masya," she says, pointing at a man painting a girl. "My name is Galina."'
+    'She turns back to the artist waving her arms and cries, "Masya, there is a new girl here that would be perfect for your work." The artist looks up and then stares at you with an appraising look. After a moment, he nods and goes back to his current work.'
+    if lesbian > 0:
+    	'Galina chats about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often, which causes her breasts to move in pleasant ways. You barely pay attention to what she says as you find yourself staring at her chest.'
+    	'After a few minutes, perhaps noticing you paying more attention to her body than to what she is saying she falls silent.'
+ 	   'Several minutes of silence pass before she speaks again. "Our place is in the Old Town. You can come visit anytime. It was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
+ 	else
+ 		'Galina chats about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often. However after a few minutes, she tells you, "Our place is in the Old Town. You can come visit anytime. It was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
+    end
 	act 'Leave': gt'ugol'
 end
 
@@ -34,20 +38,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodiart1':
 	gs'stat'
 	bodimodel = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artstudio/downud1.jpg"></center>'
-    '"I understand your reluctance, but you shouldn''t be worried. Moses Kruzhinsky is a great artist, everyone just calls him Masya." She pointed at a man painting a girl. "My name is Galina."'
-    'You listen to her and tell her. "I have done photo shoots before, but this." Indicating the other models. "This is a bit different being naked in public in a crowd of people."'
-    '"Don''t worry about it." said Galina "Even if we are completely naked, you don''t have to worry about rape or anything like that happening to you. We all watch out for one another and we will make sure no one bothers you, we all make sure no one bothers anyone, we are we almost like one big family."'
-    'Then she turned back to the artist waving her arms and cried. "Masya, there is a new girl for your work, who in my opinion would be perfect." The artist looked up and then stared at you with an appraising look, after a moment he nodded and went back to his work.'
+    '"I understand your reluctance, but you shouldn''t be worried. Moses Kruzhinsky is a great artist,"
+     she says, pointing to a man painting a girl. "Everyone just calls him Masya though. My name is Galina."'
+    'You listen to her and tell her, "I have done photo shoots before, but this," you gesture at the other models, "this is a bit different. I''m not sure I''m ok being naked in public in a crowd of people."'
+    '"Don''t worry about it," says Galina, "even if we are completely naked, you don''t have to worry about rape or anything like that happening to you. We all watch out for one another, and we will make sure no one bothers you. We all make sure no one bothers anyone. We are we almost like one big family."'
+    'Then she turns back to the artist waving her arms and cries, "Masya, there is a new girl for your work who in my opinion would be perfect." The artist looks up and then stares at you with an appraising look. After a moment, he nods and goes back to his work.'
     if lesbian > 0:
-        'She chatted about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often, which caused her breasts to move in pleasant ways, you barely pay attention to her as you find yourself starting at her chest.'
-        'After a bit, perhaps noticing you watching her body more than paying attention to her she falls silent.'
-        'Several minutes of silence pass before she speaks up again. "Our place is in the old town, you can come visit anytime, it was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
-		act 'Refuse':gt'ugol' & bodimodel1 = 1
-	    act 'I''ll think about it':gt'ugol' & bodimodel2 = 1
-	     if pcs_inhib > 30: act 'Agree':gt'ugol'
+        'She chats about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often, which causes her breasts to move in pleasant ways. You barely pay attention to her as you find yourself staring at her chest.'
+        'After a bit, perhaps noticing you watching her body more than paying attention to her, she falls silent.'
+        'Several minutes of silence pass before she speaks up again. "Our place is in the Old Town. You can come visit anytime. It was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
 	else
-		act 'Continue': gt'liames'
+ 		'Galina chats about a variety of things, using her hands to gesture often. However after a few minutes, she tells you, "Our place is in the Old Town. You can come visit anytime. It was nice meeting you, but I need to get back to work."'
 	end
+	act 'Refuse':gt'ugol' & bodimodel1 = 1
+    act 'I''ll think about it':gt'ugol' & bodimodel2 = 1
+    if pcs_inhib > 30: act 'Agree':gt'ugol'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sgtusa':
@@ -55,8 +60,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sgtusa':
 	gs'stat'
 	tusa = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/photo.jpg"></center>'
-    'You walked over to a group of girls and boys talking and introduced yourself.'
-    'You were surprisingly well received.'
+    'You walk over to a group of girls and boys talking and introduce yourself.'
+    'You are surprisingly well received.'
 	act 'Continue': gt'liames'
 end
 
@@ -66,7 +71,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sotusa':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/photo.jpg"></center>'
 	if sttan = 0 and $pantyworntype = 'none':
 	    sttan = 1
-	    '"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>> what''s with the no panties?" The crowd laughed out loud, noticing your lack of panties.'
+	    '"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, what''s with the no panties?" The crowd laughs out loud, noticing your lack of underwear.'
 	    act 'Continue':gt'liames'
 	end
 end
@@ -77,7 +82,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sptusa':
 	minut += 5
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/oldtown/marinka/marinka.jpg"></center>'
-	'You asked Marinka whether Masya''s studio was around here. In response Marinka shook her head, "I don''t know."'
+	'You ask Marinka whether Masya''s studio is around here. In response, Marinka nods her head, "Yes, it''s in the courtyard at the other end of that passage over there."'
 	act 'You live around here?':
 		cla
 		'"Yes," Marinka says.'