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Vengeance11 1 year ago
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      locations/albina_house_events.qsrc

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locations/albina_house_events.qsrc

@@ -21,8 +21,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_visit':
 	AlbinaQW['albride'] = 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/livingroom.jpg"></center>'
 	'Albina leads you to the rather well furnished and decorated sitting room. "You''ll have to excuse the mess. The maid was... loyal to my father, so she had to go." She then disappears into the kitchen. While she is gone, her phone vibrates on the table. You look and see that "Mama" is trying to call her.'
-	'<i>Strange. She''s never mentioned her mother. Hell, she barely talks about her father,</i> you think to yourself.'
-	'The phone rings out as Albina returns with a bottle of wine and two glasses. She places them on the table and notices her missed call. She quickly picks her phone up and types a message before stuffing it in her pocket.'
+	'<i>"Strange. She''s never mentioned her mother. Hell, she barely talks about her father,"</i> you think to yourself.'
+	'The phone rings out as Albina returns with a bottle of wine and two glasses and places them on the table. Noticing her missed call, she quickly picks her phone up and types a message before stuffing it in her pocket.'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 15
@@ -95,9 +95,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_visit2':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort.jpg"></center>'
 	'Eventually Albina''s body stops shuddering and she pulls back. Her eyes are bloodshot and the fierce sobs that coursed through her have been reduced to small hiccuping gasps.'
-	'"My mama is coming home you know," she whispers with a small smile. She glances up at you with eyes that look like they could burst in to tears again at any moment, but this time with joy. "All these years after he chased her away... She''s going to come home. She''s going to come back to me! <i>For</i> me!" She is practically beaming.'
+	'"My mama is coming home you know," she whispers with a small smile. She glances up at you with eyes that look like they could burst into tears again at any moment, but this time with joy. "All these years after he chased her away... She''s going to come home. She''s going to come back to me! <i>For</i> me!" She is practically beaming.'
 	'"You really miss her, don''t you?"'
-	'Instead of answering you, she lunges forward and presses her lips against yours, forcing her tongue between them.'
+	'Instead of answering you, she leans forward and presses her lips against yours, forcing her tongue between them.'
 	gs 'willpower', 'kiss', 'resist', 'medium'
 	gs 'arousal', 'kiss', -5
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -123,7 +123,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_visit2':
 				'"No, it''s okay," you shake your head. "I was just... surprised. I didn''t mean to react that way."'
 				'"You should go..." she says again, her voice flat.'
 				'"No, I''m not leaving you like this. If you want, I could just sit here and we could chat for a while?"'
-				'Raising her head, Albina looks at you with a sad smile. "I''d like that."'
+				'Raising her head, she looks at you with a sad smile. "I''d like that."'
 				*nl
 				act 'Continue':
 					cla & *clr
@@ -950,7 +950,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'night_stand':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/anushroom/nushdrawer.jpg"></center>'
 			'You jump on the spot and slam the drawer closed before turning to face a rather annoyed looking Albina.'
-            '"Do you mind <i>not</i> going through my personal things when I''m not here? I wouldn''t do it to you, so I don''t appeciate you doing it to me."'
+            '"Do you mind <i>not</i> going through my personal things when I''m not here? I wouldn''t do it to you, so I don''t appreciate you doing it to me."'
             'You gingerly nod your head at her in reply.'
 			act 'Close the drawer':gt 'albinahome','bedroom'
 		end
@@ -960,7 +960,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'night_stand':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/anushroom/nushdrawer.jpg"></center>'
-		'Albina excuses herself and leaves the room. You grow bored waiting and decide to have a quick snoop around before she returns, opening the drawer of her nightstand to have a peek. You find a hairbrush, various skin care products, contraceptive pills, bottles of lube, a vibrator, dildos of various sizes and a large butt plug all tossed inside, seemingly without any care. A piece of folded paper hiding underneath the pile catches your eye.' 
+		'Albina excuses herself and leaves the room. You soon grow bored waiting and decide to have a quick snoop around before she returns, opening the drawer of her nightstand to have a peek. You find a hairbrush, various skin care products, contraceptive pills, bottles of lube, a vibrator, dildos of various sizes and a large butt plug all tossed inside, seemingly without any care. A piece of folded paper hiding underneath the pile catches your eye.' 
 		'You glance around, but it looks like Albina is still busy elsewhere, so you fish out the paper and unfold it to find that it''s actually a crumpled photo of a young Albina dancing as her mother proudly watches. You can see why it has sentimental value to Albina, but decide that you''ve invaded her privacy enough, so you carefully place the photo back inside and close the drawer just before Albina returns and smiles at you.'
 		act 'Close the drawer':gt 'albinahome','bedroom'
 	end
@@ -974,7 +974,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'computer':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>>src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/laptop.jpg"></center>'
 		'You point towards the laptop sitting at the foot of her bed. "I should''ve guessed that you would have something like that."'
-		'"Yeah, I honestly don''t know why I bought it. I sometimes look up workout techniques and sex tips, but I mostly just use it to watch porn when I feel like rubbing one out."'
+		'"Yeah, I honestly don''t know why I bought it. I sometimes look up workout techniques and look at clothes, but I mostly just use it to watch porn when I feel like rubbing one out."'
         'You''re a little surprised that she would admit such a thing to you given how private and guarded she is about herself.'
 	
 		act 'Do something else':gt 'albinahome','bedroom'